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|TOEFL: "what you should believe finally is not others, not any book, but only you" knowledge gained
Writing Feedbackyocoambush - Sep 10, 2014 / yocoambush - Sep 10, 2014
|People care more about public recognition than about money
Writing Feedbackkarenchen - Sep 9, 2014 / dumi - Sep 10, 2014
|The colours and sounds of Rain - imaginative writing
2 - Rain is not unusual weather. The prompt is asking you to write about an extreme weather experience. Most likely...
Writing FeedbackAlleo - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|We are bombarded with news every day, ranging from the frivolous to the catastrophic - serious issue
3 - Thank you! :-) I understood that I have to show direct answers to the prompt, and I am thinking...
Writing Feedbackuic - Sep 9, 2014 / uic - Sep 9, 2014
|TOEFL - There are many parents that invest more and more money to prosper their children
2 - You presented a good but somewhat unclear discussion about the topic so I tried to clean it up for...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|Eating at home is far better than to dine in a restaurants - IELTS writing task 2
Writing Feedbackgela07 - Sep 9, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 9, 2014
|GRE It is hard task to find the best way of exploring and understanding characteristics of a society
4 - Thank you for your kind comments. As for your inquiry about the language you used in the essay, I...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 8, 2014
|Ielts: gender equality - behavior of people become different from past to present
Writing Feedbackgela07 - Sep 8, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|Toefl: work for themselves vs work for employer
5 - A hundred people will have a hundred ways of answering any essay. Each of them believing that their...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 8, 2014
|Smokers jeopardize also the people nearby them - it's clear that banning of smoking will be prudence
5 - Thank you so much for sharing your opinions with me guys! I will try to rectify some flaws in...
Writing FeedbackJustinong - Sep 7, 2014 / Justinong - Sep 7, 2014
|Going to other countries to work or study is a optimistic indicator about globalization.
2 - I would like to suggest that you mention globalization at the start of the essay as one of the...
Writing Feedbackthuylinh08 - Sep 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 7, 2014
|IELTS : 'We should have choice to play' - dangerous sports should be banned? I disagree.
6 - Singular and plural forms are commonly misused in this essay, for example: some other minor comments:...
Writing FeedbackerikaJP - Sep 7, 2014 / zjxhz - Sep 10, 2014
|GRE Issue: Governments should focus to solve today problems rather future ones
5 - Obviously, human is still working to combat the increasingly forecast number of other lethal diseases like cancers. -...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 6, 2014 / patriot1776 - Sep 6, 2014
|IELTS: "the best teacher in children's live is their parents"; how to be a good member of society
2 - ...school is best spot to learn everything either social life or other about life's fields. ..school only the place...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Sep 6, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 6, 2014
|IELTS: 'appropriate infrastructure to spur growth and prevent the damage caused to environment'
4 - it will seem more interesting if you separate it into two sentences, this is too long for only...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Sep 5, 2014 / fikri - Sep 10, 2014
|TOEFL: In modern world, everyone should learn to be polite to others under any circumstance
4 - Hi, Ryan! Thank you for the constructive comments. I myself feel that my sentence is choppy too. But I...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 5, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014
|[TOEFL] Children are rather free from most of regulations and obligations in this society
5 - Thanks guys. Btw can someone change my title of post? I never wrote 'Children are rather free from...
Writing Feedbackchilly1363 - Sep 5, 2014 / chilly1363 - Sep 5, 2014
|"My Father" - Teachers day
Writing Feedbackksingh - Sep 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 6, 2014
|Which is a more powerful force of social change: Power of patience?
3 - Hi, well that's just it. Religion is a very explosive thing to discuss as every religion has a specific...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Sep 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 5, 2014
|Issue Essay Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 5, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|Liberty or Rules- Which is better?
3 - @BachChaconne2 Yes u were quite helpful.. This is the first discussive essay i have written so i was already...
Writing FeedbackAva_21 - Sep 4, 2014 / Ava_21 - Sep 5, 2014
|Ielts - Colleges are definitely the doors opening to new areas of knowledge
NEW - Please give me your feedbacks. Thanks so much! Topic: People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why...
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|Opportunities to learn more about various aspects of life encourage people to watch movies
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 4, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS - Education should be considered as the most important factor in a country's success
10 - I think your argument here is weak. It seems that you are talking about people, rather than the success...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Sep 4, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014
|Ielts task II : Vegetarianism vs meat-containing diets.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 4, 2014 / eddies - Sep 11, 2014
|[IELTS Task 1] The line chart shows popularity of fast food among Australian young people
2 - The line chart below illustrates the kinds of fast food that Australian teenagers consume every year. ...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014 / BachChaconne2 - Sep 4, 2014
|IELTS: Should we ban combat sports which depend on violence for their entertainment
4 - 322 words is too long. A shorter introduction would leave more time for the body. people have...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 4, 2014 / phuoc - Sep 4, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing.
6 - People's activities change the atmosphere and environmental condition. Many people (1) regard that in a non-globalized country, (2) a...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014 / eddies - Sep 5, 2014
|[GRE] ARGUE, changing radio station - memorandum from the manager of WWAC
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 4, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|Writing Task 1 - Ticket buying Chart Comparison
4 - First, this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you should present details in...
Writing FeedbackRomeD - Sep 3, 2014 / dumi - Sep 3, 2014
|Awareness among people about a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for a specific food
2 - I like that you use transitional words such as "in addition", "in conclusion" to emphasize the structure of your...
Writing Feedbackpriskeith - Sep 3, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 3, 2014
|Ielts - Advertisements have become part of our life and it is impossible to ban them
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Sep 3, 2014 / dumi - Sep 3, 2014
|IELTS: What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?
3 - Essay is clear and coherent. There are few grammatical errors which you might need to work on. Some of...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 3, 2014 / swathi_12345 - Sep 3, 2014
|"leader is like the captain in a boat"; what is the most important qualities of a person who guides?
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Sep 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 3, 2014
|"Transportation in Surabaya - my hometown" - essay for replacement test of IALF
Writing Feedbackbe juang - Sep 3, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 26, 2014
|ielts: private citizens, businesses and governments play equally roles in protecting the environment
2 - First and foremost, you must lengthen your introductory statement. It is too short and does not totally inform the...
Writing Feedbackfunny_sun89 - Sep 2, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 3, 2014
|TOEFL: Type of temper and advantages of individual work as best arguments in favor of studying alone
8 - Agood TOEFL Writing essay need that you responded well to the task, relating the lecture to the reading including...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 2, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 3, 2014
|Experiences make people prepared for the future problems - valuable lessons
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 2, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|IELTS: Media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 2, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 4, 2014
|All kinds of medical health expenditures should be borne by the government; do you agree or not .
Writing FeedbackAshikk - Sep 2, 2014 / Ashikk - Sep 4, 2014
|Internet is just a tool based on different inventions such as the computer, electricity and language
5 - You begin your essay with expressing your opinion on the issue. It is better if you first introduced...
Writing Feedbackcamilourac - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 2, 2014
|Increasing Crime And Solutions For Governments - IELTS task 2
3 - For one,First,unemployment is one of the reasons that can drive people to commit a range of both violent and...
Writing Feedbackjoe9 - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 1, 2014
|IELTS: Strict regulations can effectively reduce the problem of overfishing by large corporations
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Sep 1, 2014 / Pahan - Sep 1, 2014
|IELTS: New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming to the lives of consumers.
2 - Security and quality are described as the large problems when using new latest (redundant) gadgets. Online crimesshoppers take...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 1, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 1, 2014
|In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money..
3 - This sounds a bit stereotype beginning. You should make it more interesting for the reader :) It is...
Writing FeedbackEric0511 - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 2, 2014
|"One more stab to the heart, one more reason to hate, one less reason to live"|