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|DIVERSITY CAN BENEFIT ORGANIZATIONS IN MANY WAYS
2 - Minh, your essay requires more than simple grammar editing. The content is also poor and lacking in substance. Aside...
Writing Feedbackylnl5051 - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|Air pollution and emission - Writing- Ielts- task 1- line graph
Writing Feedbacklethithuhuong - Jan 6, 2019 / lethithuhuong - Jan 8, 2019
|Products price fluctuation - fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks
5 - Nguyen, you have to complete your prompt overview when presenting your report otherwise your TA score will be low....
Writing Feedbackbnm123 - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE IMPACT OF ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE - LIMITLESS POTENTIAL
3 - You should include more research on the impact of AI / technology in schools (for example there was research...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jan 6, 2019 / Rich Monte - Jan 8, 2019
|Punishing murderers with death penalty vs life in prison - IELTS Task 2
4 - Hi. As two people have cited out your primary mistakes in this essay, so I'm going to just remind...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Jan 6, 2019 / sillyman2000 - Jan 7, 2019
|IETLS Writing Task2: It is more important to teach the literature and history of their own country
3 - Sorry if I offend you but some parts in your essay are so confusing that I cannot understand anything....
Writing FeedbackJean Lin - Jan 6, 2019 / Red Moon - Jan 6, 2019
|The given figure shows the birth rates during the period from 1920 to 2000 in China and the USA.
2 - For the third paragraph, did you mean to put rates instead of percent? Also, I feel that it's...
Writing FeedbackSherk - Jan 6, 2019 / iahamed - Jan 6, 2019
|Finding safe replacement powers which have less side-effects on environment are vital in the world.
Writing FeedbackMosi - Jan 6, 2019 / Mosi - Jan 10, 2019
|In this era, people are facing major issue relating to the rising temperatures of the earth
3 - Muhammad, kindly familiarize yourself with English grammar writing rules. You need to learn about how to construct sentences properly...
Writing Feedbacktabe_success - Jan 5, 2019 / Holt - Jan 6, 2019
|What is it that excites me the most about a college.
4 - Unfortunately, still millions of ... I want to be become an engineer who can could connect to...
Writing Feedbackhellstein - Jan 5, 2019 / Sherk - Jan 6, 2019
|IELTS II : Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
4 - 1. You're absolutely not writing an exactly the topic sentences in your essay, you have to substitute your idea,...
Writing Feedbackvikedarliyasi - Jan 4, 2019 / Sherk - Jan 6, 2019
|Speaking topic: Describe a memorable period or event from your childhood
3 - Hoa, when you write a conjunction, always remember to add a comma as in the case of "... some...
Writing FeedbackRoseHana - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|Causes and solutions of anti-social behaviors and disrespectful attitudes towards others.
Writing Feedbackhnmai - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|Taxes that support universal education taken in the case of attending to government-financed schools
4 - Annatha, your inability clearly express yourself in English is causing problems for you in the essay presentation. When it...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|People make differentiation on skills and ability between women and men; IELTS2
2 - Tias, your essay will be considered in deviation of the prompt requirements because you created a new discussion point...
Writing Feedbacktiassubiasti - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: Women and Men Commonly Having Different Strengths and Weakness
3 - Dini, let's start with the grammatical problems in your essay. You have made a grammatical error regarding word usage...
Writing Feedbackdinimaulana - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|The human activities on our earth make some animal species becoming extinct
3 - The human activities on ... instead of this I would say The human reckless activities on land in sea...
Writing FeedbackVayaIelts9 - Jan 3, 2019 / cezar_matreniuc - Jan 4, 2019
|People activities in sea as well as on land lead to the damaging environment; Ielts 2
2 - Agro, you definitely have a problem when it comes to sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary. However, these weaknesses do...
Writing FeedbackAgro Wisudawan - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Human activities and industrial waste become the main reasons regarding extinctions of animal life
3 - Herdi, contrary to the advice given to you above, it is not possible to write 500 words during this...
Writing Feedbackherdiladchi - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Essay on Construction Regulation in Cities
2 - Pham, be consistent in your presentation. When you count out the reasons for a discussion such as your reference...
Writing Feedbackphamleminh - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|TOEFL task 2 writing - adolescents must focus primarily on their major subjects
2 - I think you should not use contractions due to the academic characteristic of the test. "In summation, yes," may...
Writing FeedbackStevenSameh1512 - Jan 2, 2019 / naly92 - Jan 4, 2019
|Many people are treating pets as their own family member.
Writing Feedbackvipentul - Jan 1, 2019 / cutiewen - Jan 4, 2019
|In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder?
2 - The essay is really great. One thing I might add is probably one more example and I would add...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jan 1, 2019 / cezar_matreniuc - Jan 4, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: every funds for education are needed - also those in the form of tax
2 - This is a good essay and well-organized one. You deliverd your message clearly and with good range of vocabulary....
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 2, 2019
|Percentage of monthly household income spent on various items [IELTS -Pie chart 186words]
2 - This is well-designed essay. You illustrated the holistic information in the graph. I noticed such one grammer mistake which...
Writing Feedbacknchi0987 - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 1, 2019
|IETLS TASK 2 - Houses should follow style of the old houses in the area?
3 - Hi, let's talk about the good things of your essay first. The vocabulary range you used in your essay...
Writing Feedbackkenmoony - Jan 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|Should governments set a limitation on dangerous sports or not?
3 - the modern society opinions toward about take part in to get an injury extreme sports game extremely high...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 30, 2018 / thiancut - Dec 30, 2018
|Working from home and studying at home are on trend. Do you think it is a positive development ?
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 29, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 31, 2018
|In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
4 - Hi, your understanding about the topic is good, however, the way you organize the ideas is your main problem....
Writing Feedbackthaonghiem - Dec 29, 2018 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|Budget allocation for children's sports and the number of children playing sports
2 - You need to consider using the appropriate transition words at the start of each paragraph. Phrases like "moving to...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 28, 2018 / Alao0702 - Dec 28, 2018
|The figure of travelling abroad by Japanese tourists and how many of them are coming to Australia
3 - The summary overview of your presentation should be at least 3 lines since there are several information points that...
Writing Feedbackonkileung1124 - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Dec 29, 2018
|Some people claim that financing the costs of health care and education should be government's duty
3 - @vietduccan - give public a great chance to enjoy give the public access to better health care services ...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Dec 28, 2018 / MichelleA - Dec 28, 2018
|FINANCIAL AID VS PRACTICAL AID AND SERVICE
3 - Thank you for your advice. I will avoid using long and complex sentences and pay attention to the conclusion...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 28, 2018 / LizLee - Dec 28, 2018
|[Task 1] The following tables show the average age of students at a college.
Writing FeedbackSherk - Dec 27, 2018 / Sherk - Dec 28, 2018
|GLOBAL HYBRID VEHICLE SALES during 4 years (from 2006 until 2009)
Writing FeedbackLily Potter - Dec 27, 2018 / Lily Potter - Dec 28, 2018
|TOEFL - task 2 writing - the independent one - foreign language.
4 - This is not IELTS task. This is TOEFL, which has different writing rubrics. I appreciate your response, but can...
Writing FeedbackStevenSameh1512 - Dec 27, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 28, 2018
|PROTECTION WILDLIFE POPULATION - What can we do to help?
3 - Han, the essay is asking you to discuss about wildlife. That does not include flora. Therefore, you should not...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 27, 2018 / Holt - Dec 28, 2018
|Keep healthy by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than a healthy lifestyle
NEW - to be fit or to have health issues? These days, too many people maintain their health by relying...
Writing FeedbackLily Potter - Dec 26, 2018 / — -
|Asking citizens to do military service or some social work - is it a good idea? Essay for Toefl exam
3 - Sara, this essay will automatically receive a failing score due to its inability to respond to the prompt requirements....
Writing Feedbacksou1978 - Dec 26, 2018 / Holt - Dec 27, 2018
|Should gay marriage be allowed? The controversial topic.
2 - Your arguments are well supported and answer the question clearly. I would just make a couple edits. 1....
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 24, 2018 / Junghakkyo - Dec 26, 2018
|IELTS Writting _ Task 1_ The bricks manufacturing process in the construction sector.
2 - As I can't see the flow chart, I can revise your grammer. ......dug from these ground will be....... The...
Writing Feedbackxichvan - Dec 24, 2018 / StevenSameh1512 - Dec 24, 2018
|Dangerous sports. People are free to select which activities make them feel happy.
2 - Overall the essay concept is good, but I believe that you should try to find synonyms to some of...
Writing Feedbackjenn2001 - Dec 24, 2018 / Leihn - Dec 25, 2018
|IELTS task 1: Describe the trend of three diffrent type of domestic access to modern technology
Writing Feedbacknxuanloc - Dec 24, 2018 / nxuanloc - Dec 28, 2018
|It is becoming increasingly popular among students to have a year off between finishing school
2 - Hi. Your essay is quite good in term of lexical resources and reasons provided. However, you were over discussing...
Writing FeedbackGingerlove - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 25, 2018
|Vehicle-free days in an urban center : do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? - IELTS task 2
4 - Hi. Your essay is well-written with clear reasons and sentences. As the Contributor said, I want to emphasize for...
Writing Feedbackdhuyen135 - Dec 24, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 27, 2018
|TOPIC: what can be done to encourage young people to become responsible members of society
2 - Chin, for starters, it would be best if you learn how to paraphrase the original prompt rather than simply...
Writing FeedbackChu - Dec 24, 2018 / Holt - Dec 26, 2018
|Admission essay. The topic is - You have 650 words. Take a risk.
3 - Andrey, when the essay prompt asked you to take a risk, what the instruction meant was for you to...
Writing FeedbackLeihn - Dec 23, 2018 / Holt - Dec 24, 2018
|Some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education.
3 - Dewa, your essay could use stronger adjectives in its presentation. Rather than using the term "strong arguments", try to...
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 22, 2018 / Holt - Dec 23, 2018
|The quantity of requests received by the Tourist Information Office in an urban area
2 - Linh, for starters, you should not use an apostrophe after the S in "customers'". Use the term "customer's" to...
Writing Feedbacklinhhlinhh - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Underground Station passenger numbers in London! The line graph.
3 - KD, you have shown a very good understanding of the chart. However, your presentation is not always at its...
Writing FeedbackKDHo - Dec 21, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Computers will replace teachers in the future?
3 - ..., particularly in education. ... the opinion that one day teachers will be obsolete in the classroom computer will...
Writing Feedbackthuduong19 - Dec 21, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|Distance-learning progammes cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. True?
4 - It woul be better to replace "My view is that self-study ..." with "l totally (or somewhat) agree with...
Writing FeedbackKiritokun - Dec 20, 2018 / topswijaya - Dec 24, 2018
|In graph the tendency of three categories of fast food consumed (hamburger, fish & chips and pizza)
2 - I feel like your essay is a little scattered, because you keep jumping from one unit to the other,...
Writing FeedbackCrystal Pham - Dec 20, 2018 / ch15hann - Dec 21, 2018
|The range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich and poor. Is it true?
4 - In most instances, that could be done. However, since you changed the prompt discussion requirements, your essay cannot be...
Writing FeedbackJusRandom - Dec 20, 2018 / Holt - Dec 22, 2018
|Essay: Parents often give children everything they ask for and do what they like. Is it good or not?
3 - Tran, your opening paraphrase was almost completely correct. You did well by paraphrasing the topic for discussion. You also...
Writing Feedbackthinhtri - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|The world has become more advanced than in the past. The family structure and capacity has altered.
3 - Annantha, you have a noun phrase problem in this essay. The term "negative changes" should have been written as...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|Should pictures replace words on TV news and in newspapers?
3 - Han, your opening paragraph is very confusing to read. You have to remember that there is a difference between...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|The authority is expected to allocate more budget to railroads instead of motorways
Writing Feedbackyuu483 - Dec 19, 2018 / Holt - Dec 20, 2018
|Parents have a responsibility to both care for and prepare their children as they approach adulthood
Writing FeedbackTHI - Dec 19, 2018 / THI - Dec 20, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays people concentrated on their job decide to delay owning a child
3 - The problem related to word count has already mentioned above so I won't discuss further. There are other problems...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Dec 19, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 28, 2018
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