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|Building a large gym facility on the company's premises, or to pay employees to sign up elsewhere?
5 - Han, this is still an opinion essay. That means you need to take only one stand and defend it....
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|Task 2:Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject or not
3 - Nguyen, you have a TA response problem in your prompt paraphrase. The question is not whether the university should...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 16, 2018
|Some think that students should study mainly science and math in order to prepare them to job market
Writing FeedbackRana Alhawbani - Sep 15, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|[Writing task2] Punishment to recognize the right/wrong distinction by kids
Writing FeedbackMinh Luong - Sep 14, 2018 / Minh Luong - Sep 16, 2018
|Contribution to societies through taxes or by there should be other responsibilities
2 - Hi there, I think your essay is quite good with an organized structure. However, It seems that there are...
Writing FeedbackMTALY - Sep 14, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Tourists visiting rough condition places ( IELTS task 2)
4 - Hi @amal_yaddy, I agree completely with what @Holt has said. In my honest opinion, I believe your level...
Writing Feedbackamal_yaddy - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Discussion on giving financial or practical aid to developing countries
3 - I think you should give your opinion in the opening like : While people think.... I personally believe.... Remember...
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 14, 2018
|Task 2: Opinion about video games - more problems than benefits
7 - For your conclusion, it needs to be a paragraph not just a one sentence. Also, you may need to...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|My topic is choosing subjects to study university, subjects what they like or related to future job.
2 - Some of your sentence makes me confused as: Choosing fields suitable for each ... ( I think it should...
Writing Feedbacknhumai1307 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 13, 2018
|What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solutions can you suggest?
2 - Lee, your presentation is way off base when considering the required discussion presentation. You did an introduction to the...
Writing FeedbackJameslee - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 14, 2018
|Taking a gap year before entering university is the choice of many high school graduates
3 - Hi Khanh, I think your essay is good when you presented a full structure of a paragraph. However, I...
Writing FeedbackKhanh2901 - Sep 12, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Governments should focus its budget more on environmental protection than on economic developments
2 - Carol, when you are asked to respond to a question, you must do so within the first paragraph of...
Writing Feedbackgilgameshauo - Sep 12, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|The bar chart reveals the change of the proportion of USA citizens (all ages) living alone
2 - Ngo, while you did write 180 plus words in this essay, the analysis and presentation of facts for your...
Writing Feedbacknhatlamielts - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|I don't believe that students can acquire more knowledge from schools than during online education
2 - Zhou, you have automatically failed this essay test due to your misunderstanding of the topic for discussion and how...
Writing FeedbackKaren_Karen - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|Does a free society requires having freedom of speech and express their word? IELTS
2 - Noura, rather than presenting question after question in this essay, which creates redundancies, you should instead be responding directly...
Writing Feedbacknoura1993 - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2-Discuss Main Aim For University Educaiton
3 - Ryan, I'm also preparing IELTS test. I also made the mistake of not discussing both views in this kind...
Writing FeedbackRyan C - Sep 11, 2018 / stacy422 - Sep 13, 2018
|You left a bag of equipment at the gym last night. Write a letter to the manager - task 1
4 - Hi Han, although you did cover the prompt requirement in this letter, there are mistakes that would cause you...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 10, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Sep 11, 2018
|ART VS SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY - How can art make a difference in our society?
Writing Feedbackjalp - Sep 10, 2018 / kalyn - Sep 13, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 : the table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries 1930-1980
4 - Hi Asih, since many advice have been given regarding your cohesion and logical overview, I would just focus on...
Writing FeedbackAsih Mustikasari - Sep 9, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Sep 11, 2018
|Blood Diamonds, The Bad and The Ugly
2 - McKelvey, you may want to revise this essay a bit. You mention the Kimberly Process a few times in...
Writing Feedbackmcmfoster1 - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
|'Experiences, moments, and events all have an impact on our life' - Defining Moment: Paragraph
5 - Sujana, one of the points for correction in this essay is your reference to the idea that you could...
Writing FeedbackSuj - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
|A laptop market share table in 2006-2007.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Sep 9, 2018 / Asih Mustikasari - Sep 10, 2018
|The scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments, not private firms
3 - Actually, I myself am still studying, so let's study together. ... limited because they must share for all...
Writing Feedbacktit992 - Sep 9, 2018 / Asih Mustikasari - Sep 10, 2018
|Although more and more people read news online, newspapers remain the most important source of news
Writing FeedbackTranTuan - Sep 9, 2018 / TranTuan - Sep 17, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - opinions on transportation improvements
3 - Shi, your essay falls short in terms of Task Accuracy and cannot get a passing score due to discussion...
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|These days many families move abroad for work.
3 - Vivek, you turned this essay into a single point of view discussion when it should have been a 3...
Writing Feedbackvdhiman23 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: ANIMAL SHOULD BE "EMPLOYED" OR THEY SHOULD HAVE THE RIGHT AS HUMANS ?
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Sep 8, 2018 / stacy422 - Sep 9, 2018
|APPLICATION FOR THE MOOT CLUB - THE BANNING OF WEARING HIJAB IN EUROPE COUNTRIES
2 - Linh, I believe that you should be arguing this case from the point of view of the separation of...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: describe a table about forest land
3 - Emma, you need to be precise when it comes to describing the image that is presented to you for...
Writing Feedbackhjy1994 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|Task 2:Supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture - Discuss
4 - Pham, This is a 5 paragraph essay. The body of paragraphs need to cover 3 represented topics as per...
Writing Feedbacknobuta54 - Sep 8, 2018 / Holt - Sep 9, 2018
|Unknown charge - CELPIP TEST - email to the credit card company
3 - Thanks Holt for your detailed feedback. I'm still working hard on improving vocabulary usage and grammar....
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 7, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 8, 2018
|Task 2 - Some individuals believe that studying at university or college is the best route
4 - Hoa, why are you discussing pros and cons in an essay that is asking you to discuss "both points...
Writing Feedbackhoa123 - Sep 7, 2018 / Holt - Sep 8, 2018
|IELTS Taks 1: Some college has agreed to check your house and pet while you are on vacations
5 - thanks you very much. I really appreciate your cooperation. i will take care for these mistake next time....
Writing Feedbackaimal - Sep 7, 2018 / aimal - Sep 8, 2018
|Theoretical knowledge and qualifications should never be underestimated - crucial in the job market
2 - Mai, you need to address this essay with a clear response to the extent question that was provided in...
Writing Feedbackmailong25 - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|It is true that most people are likely to choose high-paying jobs - IELTS TASK 2
3 - Shao, this is an "extent" essay so you cannot simply dis/agree with a given statement. You need to show...
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|Some people think that the students should have a gap year?
3 - @Ahnne This particular prompt asks you to discuss the advantages or disadvantages of a student taking a gap year...
Writing FeedbackAhnne - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|Cbest essay topic - Is individual effort necessary to combat pollution and global warming?
Writing FeedbackAnita Paul - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 6, 2018
|Hi! I'm currently preparing for IELTS. This is one of my writings for describing a map
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 5, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 5, 2018
|The reality of Traffic jams in my city
4 - Nguyen, since you did not tell us what this writing assignment is all about, it is really hard for...
Writing Feedbackducminhnhue - Sep 5, 2018 / Holt - Sep 6, 2018
|With the higher use of TV and computers we are under some threats posed by a range of violent scenes
2 - @annyht the last sentence in your closing statement should have been the thesis statement for your opening paraphrase. That...
Writing Feedbackannyht - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|Essay : some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution
2 - @langtieubich your work cannot be scored due to the missing prompt requirement. The instructions for the discussion are required...
Writing Feedbacklangtieubich - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|In the days and ages, the world has been witched by the explosion of migration in big cities
2 - @nhiphuong since this is a direct question essay, you should be presenting at least one difficulty in the prompt...
Writing Feedbacknhiphuong - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - THE AGE AT WHICH PEOPLE RETIRE FROM WORK SHOULD BE RAISED CONSIDERABLY. TRUE OR NOT?
3 - Danka, excellent work. You stayed on track from beginning to end with the strongest justifications for your point of...
Writing Feedbacktkd980219 - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|Physical education should be an vital part of the school curriculum
3 - Trinh, you have not written the essay as per the prompt requirements. Based on the instructions you were provided,...
Writing Feedbacktrinhthi - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 4, 2018
|IELTS essay question about vegetarian issue
2 - Alex, this is an acceptable dual point of view discussion essay. You have a pretty clear presentation in terms...
Writing Feedbackpopojk - Sep 3, 2018 / Holt - Sep 4, 2018
|Besides generate money, business also have duty on doing many activities which do wonder for society
3 - Trinh, you misunderstood how to approach the prompt question and succeeding discussion. Since this is only a simple agree...
Writing Feedbackpinktnhg - Sep 3, 2018 / Holt - Sep 4, 2018
|IELTS 2: Children must be given the same sentences as adults if they violate the law. True or not?
3 - Hi, this essay was a little confusing because in your first body paragraph you said that juveniles and adults...
Writing Feedbackphuongvo - Sep 2, 2018 / TJLuschen - Sep 3, 2018
|Certain prisoners should be made to do an unpaid community work instead of being put to jail
Writing Feedbackvudinhhieu - Sep 2, 2018 / Red Moon - Sep 2, 2018
|CBEST: Mixed-gender schools vs. same-gender schools
2 - Jane, I do believe that you have written a level 3 essay here. While there are imperfections with your...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Sep 1, 2018 / Holt - Sep 2, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: taxes for the public education system promotion?
3 - Hi. You abused using the words "we, our" in this essay, in which mitigate the academicness in your writing....
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Sep 1, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Sep 2, 2018
|The number of customers in Mama's Café, Good Eats and Tom's Diner.
2 - Good afternoon, First of all, it is "customers', not "costumer." Watch out for the spelling errors. Further, I...
Writing FeedbackShao Yu Sung - Sep 1, 2018 / naegajjasae - Sep 1, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - who should be awarded, good teacher or a good student?
4 - Good afternoon, For each paragraph, there are only 2-3 sentences. Due to the lack of the amount of...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 31, 2018 / naegajjasae - Sep 1, 2018
|Many people try to look younger than they really are. What are the reasons for that?
2 - Le, while your approach to the essay is acceptable, your opening paragraph is not accurate paraphrase of the original...
Writing Feedbackgianglt98 - Aug 31, 2018 / Holt - Sep 1, 2018
|Online sexually explicit content possession and passing should be put under control.
NEW - don't lose your mind when accessing social networking Exhaustedly spending my quality time at the end of the...
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|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: In many countries, students attend private 'cram schools'...
2 - Good essay. Small corrections: -instead of receive receiving -learn study hard , study ... Your weakness point in...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 31, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018
|School funding in a particular UK school. IELTS writing task 1.
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 5, 2018
|Language barrier is one of the major hurdles, which is usually encountered by people overseas
3 - Actually, I have read in Pauline book it is best to give your point of view, whether you agree...
Writing FeedbackEram01 - Aug 31, 2018 / Eram01 - Sep 3, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Waste disposal in an European country
Writing Feedbackhoa123 - Aug 31, 2018 / Rogerscup - Sep 6, 2018
|Prevalance of supermarket leads to the death of smaller bussinesses? IELTS writing task 2
3 - prevalence these businesses in your first paragraph may refer to the small businesses, but you'd better to replace...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018 / bxddxst - Aug 31, 2018
|Some believe that taking a year off between school and college is a top-notch decision
5 - Alif, had it not been for the run on sentence in the first presentation of your prompt paraphrase, it...
Writing Feedbackbxddxst - Aug 31, 2018 / Holt - Sep 1, 2018
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