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|Topic: Modern agriculture. Toefl exam！
4 - Apart from gramatical and construction errors, I think that this is a consistent piece of writing espicially for a...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 21, 2014 / RevtZ_hh - Sep 22, 2014
|Describe a scene at a school canteen during recess.
2 - I believe in the first paragraph instead of some of the dots (like the last one), you can use...
Writing FeedbackPamelyn Q - Sep 21, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 21, 2014
|Line graph; percentage of radio and television spectators around the clock in UK in year 1992
Writing FeedbackKsangha - Sep 21, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 21, 2014
|IELTS- celebrities set a bad example to young people?
2 - Sam, while your paper does have grammar errors, we can't begin to fix those until you have perfected the...
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Sep 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 21, 2014
|Increase in flights - IELTS WRITING TASK 2.
2 - My tips: 1. popular transports - popular ways of transportation 2. caused various concerns that will be...
Writing FeedbackRakhmat - Sep 20, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 21, 2014
|GRE: The replacement of any leader should be considered individually
NEW - Claim: In any field-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 20, 2014 / — -
|"A little love, a little pain, a little work then it's all over" - DEATH
Writing Feedbackylarial - Sep 20, 2014 / SAM2014 - Sep 21, 2014
|IELTS: Writing Task 2- Crime in The World
4 - To sum up, crime still occurs almost in all parts of the globe. The crime happens with same cases...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 20, 2014 / SAM2014 - Sep 21, 2014
|TOEFL: The reasons of keeping our old friends
3 - Thank you for your suggestions. I wondered how the title has been changed to that sentence. The correct question...
Writing Feedbackbeginner1010 - Sep 20, 2014 / beginner1010 - Sep 20, 2014
|The factor of sense of fulfillment is more important than the factor of salary; Mother Teresa
2 - Many people prefer a job with high salary. Although the salary is one of the important factors to a...
Writing Feedbackwahdee489 - Sep 20, 2014 / beginner1010 - Sep 20, 2014
|TOEFL: People benefit more from coming computers into their lives; pros outweigh cons
3 - Of course it is better to include some negative information too. However you should concentrate on your position...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 20, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 21, 2014
|Ielts: Just like different types of foods, different measures are required to improve public health
5 - Hi SAM2014.. Explanation about thesis statement, you can search via youtube.. Search Intorduction IELTS writing Task 2..:) Youtube...
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Sep 20, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 21, 2014
|TOEFL: excellent knowledge is better than ability to adopt oneself.
4 - Well, the structure of your essay is quite interesting . However, try to paraphrase ,,excellent knowledge'';D and do not...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 1, 2014
|"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most
Writing Feedbacknguyentuandhmdc - Sep 20, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014
|IELTS - young people's challenges in major cities
Writing Feedbackcy20070324 - Sep 20, 2014 / dev311 - Oct 21, 2014
|'I argue that children's behavior does not rely on by television' - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
3 - In introduction paragraph, I suggest you to write 2 sentence. - 1 sentence to paraphrase the issues/ the...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 20, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 28, 2014
|GRE issue- Should society try to save every plant and animal species regardless of needed resources?
2 - Hi Dunguyen, your essay is pretty good. Your position and reasoning are clear and logical. adapt to...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 19, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 20, 2014
|IELTS: Without communication technology and transport, the foundation of modern life will crumple
2 - - Solid introduction with a good thesis statement. This essay is off to a very good start. However,...
Writing Feedbackcy20070324 - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|'The argument draws conclusion based on poor and insufficient information'; "Woven baskets"
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 19, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014
|Learning Economics? It's not only useful for high school students but also for all educated persons.
Writing Feedbacknmshafie - Sep 19, 2014 / nmshafie - Sep 21, 2014
|IELTS: Balance Diet; people should pay attention to other aspects for their health
4 - My promt is "Eating a balance diet is the most important factor for a health life" To what extent...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 19, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 20, 2014
|Ielts: key factors for being successful.
9 - I am very grateful that you have provided me with a very meaningful feedback:) For sure, it helps me...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 19, 2014 / Abdurasul - Sep 26, 2014
|IELTS: Climate change is a threat for the earth regardless of people's actions.
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 20, 2014
|Life is easier? Positive view about everything always help us for having a good life in every times.
3 - To write an introductory paragraph, you have to show background information and thesis. For this moment, you did. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 19, 2014 / eddies - Sep 20, 2014
|If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field
3 - I would change more things, however beyond your scripture and grammatical errors, you used India and GRE to develop...
Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014 / Elith - Jan 27, 2015
|Keeping dogs and cats as companion. How it influences ownership and the community?
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014 / Anfalia - Sep 20, 2014
|What life would be like without the internet?
4 - Truc, while you presented a good discussion. I believe that in order to answer this essay, you should merely...
Writing FeedbackTrucMai - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|'Modern time makes all people busy with their job' - how to solve traffic problem?
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|Working for the same or different company for all life. Discuss both view and give opinion (IELTS)
3 - kttrung, the essay is asking you compare the advantages and disadvantages of working with the same company for life,...
Writing Feedbackkttrung - Sep 18, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2014
|With the humble attitude, we can earn the respect from others and relieve ourselves.; Toefl exam!
7 - Dear Pen. Thank you again.Reading your issue is more than improving the skill of using English,but also challenging my...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 18, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 21, 2014
|IELTS: Arts are crucial to government to gain successful incomes by some events
3 - how many 'government' that you already used here? try to use another word such as administration, or they or...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 18, 2014 / fikri - Sep 18, 2014
|IELTS: government should focus on investment both of arts and public service; equally important
3 - Thank you so much for reading my essay and correcting it... That is very useful for me to improve...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 18, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 18, 2014
|It is vital for arts to have prolific conditions to thrive and be accessible for people
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 18, 2014 / Anfalia - Sep 20, 2014
|Once I was; now I am
Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014
|I helped Tony - this event marked my transition to the adulthood
2 - Mantoes, you must be commended on the way that you developed your story. From the first paragraph onwards, I...
Writing FeedbackMantoes - Sep 18, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2014
|Theme : about alternative medicine treatment and dangerous risk from it
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 17, 2014 / YULIS - Sep 19, 2014
|"Yes Scotland" - The Scottish Referendum
4 - Thanks a lot....
Writing Feedbackbora99 - Sep 17, 2014 / bora99 - Sep 23, 2014
|The best gift for a child? Books help to learn more skills such as pronouncing and reading
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 17, 2014 / fikri - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL essay: A good shopping center can decrease our effort for shopping.
NEW - I would be grateful if someone could help me to correct my writing. It has been announced that a...
Writing Feedbackamirtaghavi - Sep 17, 2014 / — -
|Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?
3 - Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL: "My shy girlfriend" - people should be honest
3 - I, too, do agree. You have to clearly present the prompt in the introduction. I think that sort...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2014
|Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.
3 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. ...
Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|IELTS - Happiness is one of the most vital factors for a worth-living life
4 - Additional comment: I think this part is not related to the topic. We are talking about factors of happiness,...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Sep 17, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014
|The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS
2 - The pie chart reports main causes of worldwide agricultural land degradation and while the table shows main reasons...
Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014 / Kian1378 - Sep 17, 2014
|I went to Thailand this summer for a school service trip - Narrative Essay
6 - For the first sentence, instead of directly restating the question, try to change it so that you are answering...
Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Sep 16, 2014 / m924 - Sep 20, 2014
|A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.
12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 18, 2014
|John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task
5 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence...
Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS practice - Families are a group of people bonded by blood relations
5 - Although vangiespen has revised this part, I would like to give additional comments. Firstly, it is a fragment....
Writing Feedbacknareshkrp - Sep 16, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014
|GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities
3 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty
5 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some words...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014
|Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities
8 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some...
Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2
2 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment
3 - When it comes to an introductory statement, you are asked to introduce the topic. Most students simply paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|Grandmother, the inspiration of my life (her pictures, love, and sacrifice)
5 - 1. who loves me and sacrifice (sacrifices) for me and my father most (not needed- or: more than...
Writing Feedbackvietanhphan - Sep 15, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 29, 2014
|'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries
Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014 / masghar - Sep 15, 2014
|Drugs, alcohol and messy sex lives - Celebrities news has negative impacts on children; [IELTS]
7 - Thanks for your comment. Yes recently I have realized that maybe it is better to develop one idea further,...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Sep 15, 2014 / zjxhz - Oct 6, 2014
|What should kids do when parents are too busy to accompany their child? TOEFL EXAM
8 - Focus on your beginning and conclusion. Your beginning was not abrupt which is good. But the conclusion is not...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 15, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Sep 19, 2014
|My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition
2 - When e ating and drinking, we need use money. Similarly, it is also necessary when giving an fancy gift...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 15, 2014
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