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|TOEFL: 11 month study period for a better, more efficient education
2 - You need to improve your approach for introduction. This introduction fails to introduce your prompt to the reader....
Writing Feedbackkurosusu - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|Ielts: apology letter - 'evenings noise'
4 - I am writing to apologize for the noise that spoilsdisturbed your evenings and causescaused you some distress.inconvenience. As you...
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 2: entertaining and educational functions of Museums
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) a country benefits from more and more university students
5 - However, the publicsome people has doubt about the beneficial effect of college education and they believe these policies will...
Writing Feedbackpatdr - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Why is happiness difficult to define? Important factors to happiness?
6 - this is beautifully written. you have mentioned some important elements of happiness like living with a happy family or...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 25, 2014 / shreyansh13 - Jun 27, 2014
|IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences
4 - Recently, abortionsincreaseshave increased rapidly and becomesthe issue has become a controversial topic. Some people supposebelieve that abortions should...
Writing Feedbackthanhmai - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) Studying abroad is a trend among university students in Turkey
5 - It is always good to include your prompt in the post so that we can have a better understanding...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Education plays an important role in the socioeconomic status of a country
3 - Well... you write very well. Good grammar, vocabulary , flow etc. However, I believe you need to pay a...
Writing Feedbacktink3r - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|Ielts: The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business
5 - I think the reasons for both sides are not very good. And I think you should expand the ideas....
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 24, 2014 / stephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014
|TOEFL Essay- People should master on skill only or many different skills.
2 - I think the last examples "one more friend, one more way to go" cannot support your view very well....
Writing FeedbackJiazigao - Jun 24, 2014 / DearbhailS - Jul 31, 2014
|essay: following the host country's culture for visitors
5 - even this essay opens for discussion/ both views, it is always nicer if you state your opinion in...
Writing Feedbacklovemylife - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 1] A report about consumption of energy in the USA
6 - The line graph compares(I don't really agree if you use the verb 'compares'. This chart uses the appropriate language...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jun 26, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Several languages die out in the world
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS: Advertising makes people buy products that they really do not need
8 - You have written this very clearly. However, it does not follow the most appropriate approach for the intro....
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|IELTS Essay: Animal Testing - positive and negative aspects
3 - I appreciate your suggestion :) any way I think there are many different ways to write this kind of...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 23, 2014 / MiaCuthbert - Jun 24, 2014
|Unpaid community service - "great stepping stone for high school institutions"
6 - It is ok if you put many paragraphs here and there. However, a layout takes an important role...
Writing Feedbackhillard214james - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Ielts: Analysis of shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand
2 - Hello friend, In writing task 1 is not important to write a conclusion paragraph, but an overview paragraph is...
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 22, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 23, 2014
|'healthy diet and adequate exercises' - Methods to improve public health
Writing Feedbackhillard214james - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Person can only be happy if he has got a job which he enjoy
4 - It is always good to include the purpose of writing , e.g. IELTS, TOEFL etc., in your title for...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|ielts essay about water shortage
12 - You should have included the full prompt of your essay for us to understand what it really requires from...
Writing FeedbackShajiang - Jun 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|Charts on adult education and costs shared
2 - I found that you forget to attach you graphs. As I am recently practicing IELTS I think you have...
Writing Feedbackkoolsudha - Jun 22, 2014 / Inkjet - Jun 22, 2014
|What you do and what you do not like about your city?
Writing Feedbackrbinods - Jun 22, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 23, 2014
|[IELTS] The new fashion in having careers
3 - Hi salMon, It is indeed quite tricky on how to attack the question since it did not ask anything...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 22, 2014 / hillard214james - Jun 22, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK - 2 Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS - GUN CONTROL & INCREASING VIOLENCE
13 - All in all, it is obvious thatObviously,there isa poorthis proves that there is no valid relationship between polices carrying...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 2: 'Television / Children' Topic
8 - Hi MiaCuthbert, I think it would be better if you try to refrain from repeating the same words. For...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 22, 2014 / hillard214james - Jun 22, 2014
|IELTS - Life in Big Cities Vs People's health
4 - Your essay is quite hard to review because there is no space among paragraphs. In my opinion, this essay...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 21, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 22, 2014
|Ielts: Mobile phones facilitate our work and also simplify our lives
Writing Feedbackzizi1107 - Jun 21, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|How the Vietnamese invasion of Cambodia affected the United States-feedback
5 - The Vietnamese invasion of Cambodia also affected people's actionsperceptions on war and their behavior (actions and behavior more or...
Writing Feedbackyodelkid4 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS: Global music has more positive impacts on humans than traditional music
4 - I think you're confused because both of them are right. After "help", the verb can be V-infinitive/ to-V/...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 21, 2014 / MiaCuthbert - Jun 21, 2014
|The importance of utilizing advisement globally continues to increase each year
Writing Feedbackdondon26 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|Spending more money in public transportation should be improved early
4 - Therefore, I would argue that governments should categorize issues by putting them in orders, and public transportation should...
Writing Feedbackpe5167 - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|CAUSES OF LOW PASS RATE OF PROFICIENCY EXAM
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 20, 2014 / lovemylife - Jun 24, 2014
|[TOEFL]People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful
3 - the criticism enables youpeople to be aware of others' opinion | other opinions. I prefer using the world...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|[IELTS] proportion of watching television and videos (Australian children)
4 - Everything was tackled appropriately and relevant contrast/comparison was made. However, a conclusion regarding the whole trend would have made...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 20, 2014 / hillard214james - Jun 23, 2014
|IELTS: The private motor vehicle improved individual freedom; but it's expensive
6 - Hi, Thanks to Everyone, With your help i understand the structure of the Essay and hook of the...
Writing FeedbackShineStarJoti - Jun 20, 2014 / ShineStarJoti - Jun 21, 2014
|College graduates find hard to get good jobs
5 - This contains 452 words. Did you finish it into 30 minutes? this intro carries bulky words. you don't...
Writing Feedbackbagusprabowoaji - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Distance learning as a new trend in education
NEW - In today's advanced technology world, students have option to choose whether they want learning in distance by using computer...
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|Does money go along with happiness?
3 - the complete prompt must be written to help us when we review your essay. I just guess this task...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Jun 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. MARRIAGES AND DIVORCE IN THE USA & ADULT AMERICANS' MARITAL STATUS
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS; all towns and cities to have public spaces
5 - As I suggest to other students to pay attention to "example' they wrote, some students fail to present...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Grandparents are significant source of experiences; childrens education big role
2 - Well you should combine sentences two make complicated one. For example, you should combine sentence 2 and...
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - Jun 19, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|[IELTS] Should parents be obliged to immunize their vulnerable children?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 20, 2014
|IELTS Essay: Work or study from home - advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Writing Feedbackrims - Jun 18, 2014 / fikri - Jun 19, 2014
|Own encouragement, own motivation to get you to the point of graduation.
2 - Going back to college was a difficult decision for me to make. For almost six years I went back...
Writing Feedbacksunserimelissa - Jun 18, 2014 / dumi - Jun 22, 2014
|TOEFL: Would you choose your own roommate?
2 - I think you should rewrite these 2 sentences :) They are simple and not quite clear, and maybe...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS: As an international tourist, whether adhere to the local custom or not?
Writing Feedbacklynn11 - Jun 18, 2014 / lynn11 - Jun 19, 2014
|[TOEFL] People were more satisfied in the past in comparison to today's people/
2 - First of all, you should have included the essay prompt in the post for us to understand what it...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Jun 18, 2014 / dumi - Jun 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Prisons have various purposes
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 18, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Where Talent Comes From
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 18, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|[IELTS] We should opt for customary music rather than worldwide one
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 22, 2014
|Government should spend national budget for roads, highways and public transport
NEW - Transportation is an important living factor, and also influences to country's economy. Both quality of route for any vehicle...
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|[TOEFL] 'friends talk' - telephone is more influential than the television
2 - I have a question about TOEFL preparing process. How should I reinforce my grammar? Is there any good way...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 17, 2014 / peyman_np - Jun 18, 2014
|Ielts: letter and gift to a friend who has just had a baby recently
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 17, 2014 / aklochkova1 - Jun 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Classmates' impacts on children's performance at school
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 17, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 23, 2014
|Schools should teach skills? What about values? The purpose of education.
4 - Write first the main TOPIC. I think you better change the structure of your essay. Remove the use of...
Writing Feedbackforouzan - Jun 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Jun 20, 2014
|It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional culture must be lost.
2 - Although lots of people claim that technology and traditions are not compatable,compatible with each other many experts believe that...
Writing Feedbackangelinawang - Jun 16, 2014 / dumi - Jun 22, 2014
|IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation?
8 - When writing a conclusion for task 2, I always start with the words "In conclusion". There's no reason...
Writing Feedbacklynn11 - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|International aid is a must but also it is required to operate in the right way
4 - not only is the international aid is indispensable but also it is required to be operated in the rightappropriate...
Writing Feedbackgunyes - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 21, 2014
|GRE ISSUE - People who make decisions based on emotion
2 - This issue revolvingthat people who make decisions based on emotions is quite an interesting one. Furthering to that we...
Writing Feedbackmkunaparaju - Jun 15, 2014 / dumi - Jun 16, 2014
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