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|'disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning' - Agreement or disagreement? GRE Issue Essay
NEW - The Issue statement is : We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from...
Writing FeedbackComcop - Aug 11, 2014 / — -
|Government should take the responsibility to make appropriate regulation about the dangerous sports
3 - Actually, people engage in a wide range of sports. So, I like if you change this sentence to;...
Writing Feedbackheylie - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 11, 2014
|Not only governments and big companies are responsible for environment but also the whole community
2 - For me your introduction is bit unclear, I have rephrased your introduction. However i am a learner too,...
Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014 / latkhan - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS : Lately more and more work has to be done by machines.
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 10, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 11, 2014
|TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects
3 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|TOEFL: new factory will enhance the quality of life and our town's image promotion
4 - Some people who disagree with the idea of building of the factory argued argue (keep it in present tense...
Writing FeedbackMckenzie - Aug 10, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|'remarkable rise with slight fluctuations' - Japanese tourists on the trip
2 - If I were you, I prefer writing overview paragraph rather than conclusion. Based on IELTS writing task 1 band...
Writing FeedbackAngel Lolla - Aug 10, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 11, 2014
|IELTS: Gender distribution of teachers in different educational institutions
6 - Please allow me to give a try for the introduction and overview: The bar chart illustrates the proportion...
Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014 / eddies - Sep 7, 2014
|Ambition motivate people - without it life would be mechanical or meaningless
3 - you can use others listing points to show new ideas; Also, Moreover, Furthermore, etc. Even though...
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 9, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS: Athletes are very magnificent and important role models for people in their young ages.
4 - This is a poor beggining :( You should begin your essay with a catchy sentence that is meaningful...
Writing Feedbacksoon_Ielts - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't.
NEW - [QUESTION] Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't. Do you think ambition is important to succeed in...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Aug 9, 2014 / — -
|Ielts writing task1 - percentages of population and wealth in world
5 - Well, if this is for IELTS TASK1, you should have uploaded your graphs to enable us providing you with...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Ielts: it is necessary that parents should be obliged to protect their offspring by vaccination
6 - This sentence has several issues that include clarity issues and grammar issues. Let's take this part ; ...
Writing Feedbackthu van nguyen - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS: It is necessary for people to choose the appropriate working mode in career growth
2 - Well, I see a difference in what you say by "permanently in the same company" and "not changing...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: High stress job paid a lot of money or low stress job with just enough to live on?
3 - Thank you for your useful advice, Aichen. I clearly see your point and try to improve them in further...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Aug 8, 2014 / Audi - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people
8 - In recent years, Majormajor cities have seen unprecedented growth (of what? you need to specify! ) and have become...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|Those who are aware of where to go, customs and life are likely to experience satisfactory journey
4 - These days the number of visitors who are travel to foreign countries hashave been markedlysignificantly increased. Culture awareness lead...
Writing Feedbackali1 - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: A/D? In modern times, parents will learn more from their children
3 - Some people agree with that statement; other people disagree. this sentence can be deleted you can just say"I have...
Writing FeedbackAichen - Aug 8, 2014 / DearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014
|IELTS: Charity among UK people between 1990-2010 in five age groups
4 - The bar chart showpresents data about the proportion of UK people giving money to charity by age range between...
Writing Feedbacklinusyu0313 - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: the figure reflect equally in subjects related to service community; foreign and UK students
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Aug 7, 2014 / nguoi_co_doc - Aug 29, 2014
|"Situation after Reunification of Korean peninsula" - prediction essay
2 - Do not capNot capitalize a word that comes after a,. Only capitalize the first letter of the sentence....
Writing Feedbacksamuela - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled
2 - For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts Where ? I am new...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 7, 2014 / latkhan - Aug 8, 2014
|We always like to make progress in our life and it gives us a good sense - Toefl Essay
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 7, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 9, 2014
|TOEFL - Finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for study
4 - First of all, people want to enter to theattend university to improve their knowledge. These people want to...
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Aug 7, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'disaster situations' - todays individuals are becoming more dependent on each other
4 - It seems that people have heavy reliance on othersone another because they have to collaborate with each other(sounds repetitive...
Writing Feedbackswfchn - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The tax reduction of state school for parents who have children studying in private system
2 - On the whole, I do believe that taxes paying for state schools are necessary to be compulsory for all...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014 / mvettri - Aug 7, 2014
|How did you get over your fear to speak in English? - Learning From Mistakes
2 - As a non-native speaker it was really hard to say even few sentences out loud, when I didn't really...
Writing Feedbackflorszi - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|toefl: multiple short breaks are good for children to do well in their school life
Writing Feedbacksayes - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Computer skills reassure the future work-life - is it good to use computers from primary school age?
3 - In modern world, the knowledge and skills in computer science is an indispensable requirement. I think...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Celebrities are more famous for the look and wealth than for talents and contribution to their field
2 - I think the crossed phrase is redundant. In addition, I suppose you need to develop or explain more...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 6, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: CELEBRITY'S ROLE - influence of celebrities to the youth is as well positive as negative
7 - In fact, "Effort" can be both countable and uncountable word. Look at this example from macmilandictionary: Despite someone's efforts:...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014 / ningo - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources
3 - This is a good intro, especially in terms of introducing the background of your issue topic. However, since your...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Self Introduction For UN Young Professional Programme
7 - Dear all of advisers. I try to make a revision. Particularly, the recruiter wants to know the candidate based...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 22, 2014
|Efficient presentation saves time, makes the points clear, satisfies its audience
2 - Exactly, one thing more i would like to add is that put many pictures in your presentation so that...
Writing Feedbackahsam - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|"WE FIND COMFORT AMONG THOSE WHO AGREE WITH US - GROWTH AMONG THOSE WHO DON'T"; PPST Writing TOPIC
Writing Feedbackeperry1 - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|Independent TOEFL essay , Judging people on their appereance
Writing FeedbackBasilMostafa - Aug 5, 2014 / florszi - Aug 7, 2014
|To me studying alone is more useful - students choice
Writing Feedbackahmadaz - Aug 5, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014
|Mixed education provide added opportunity for either sex to develop interpersonal skills
NEW - Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Other, however, believe that...
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|Movies, television - entertainment and hobby that we can learn a lot from
2 - to the new modern television, which can be installed (i guess you mean the application or softwares for viewing...
Writing Feedbackafaghfarhadi - Aug 5, 2014 / izhar - Aug 5, 2014
|Money as a reward can be beneficial, but compliments and comfortable working environment are better
NEW - Topic: Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money....
Writing Feedbackmanh - Aug 5, 2014 / — -
|Advertising has too much influence on what people buy?
4 - Hence, the effect of advertising on the type of goods which people buy is undeniable => I thought this...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 5, 2014 / parand - Aug 7, 2014
|'I'm happy when I can solve difficult problems myself' - Studying alone or in groups?
2 - "All of those are a general purpose of student that they want to get success in their study. According...
Writing Feedbackwonnguyen - Aug 4, 2014 / cpuissant - Aug 4, 2014
|Ielts: why and how parents teach their kids the importance of money?
10 - Is this college essay? If it is, then you shouldn't set (4-paragraphs) structures for it because it will limit...
Writing Feedbackningo - Aug 4, 2014 / huyenluv - Aug 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Some people prefer to play team sports, while others prefer to play individual sports.
3 - In my opinion team sports give more benefits to a person in terms of personal development than individual kinds...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 4, 2014 / alberic - Nov 16, 2014
|IELTS Competitiveness is a positive quality for people to have among most societies.
2 - Here is some general advice. Hope this helps; If you look at people taking GRE exams, then mostly...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Aug 4, 2014 / eddies - Aug 4, 2014
|'Globalization is like elephant' - how it affects the world?
Writing Feedbackizhar - Aug 4, 2014 / izhar - Aug 5, 2014
|Having a factory in the region is bad and good news
Writing FeedbackEyadBosy - Aug 3, 2014 / sayes - Aug 6, 2014
|Internet will help student only if he has a desire to study
Writing Feedbackrassul - Aug 3, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|[IELTS] 'advertising manipulates people' - Positives and Negatives of Ad's
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 3, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 5, 2014
|Technology has both advantage and disadvantage for creativity of children
5 - Same meaning, both words means less, I just wanna add (es) to the verb which is unfamiliar to me...
Writing Feedbackhosseinshafiee - Aug 3, 2014 / EyadBosy - Aug 3, 2014
|Prunty County must undertake the same kind of road improvement as the Butler County; GRE Argument
NEW - [b]Q. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain...
Writing FeedbackAmal098 - Aug 3, 2014 / — -
|GRE: Highway Safety in Prunty and Butler County - Argument Topic
NEW - Argument topic In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit form 55Mph...
Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 3, 2014 / — -
|IELTS: Intelligent students should be educated separately. Do the benefits outweigh the problems?
4 - This introductory paragraph is too simple. You need some major changes. For this prompt, let's give a try; ...
Writing FeedbackSummer_J - Aug 3, 2014 / eddies - Aug 5, 2014
|[TOEFL] Every experience always gives us something to learn and keep for life
2 - I think you need to fine tune your approach on the introduction. You should have introduced the issue to...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Aug 2, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|TOEFL: 'new building construction hold the right to gain more money from government'
2 - If the price of housing growsincreases(more appropriate in the context) continuously, a comfortable place to live in will be...
Writing FeedbackStevenKuang - Aug 2, 2014 / niesaysi - Aug 2, 2014
|IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent
6 - Is it fine to mention immigration and having to learn new life/culture as an advantage? Or is it a...
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 1, 2014 / Monloi - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS:Parents sending their kids abroad to acquire good education. Good or bad trend?
2 - I noticed that you change very often time scale of the ideas, which describe a person who studies abroad...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Aug 1, 2014 / VadimKlimenko - Aug 2, 2014
|Business is an right investment for future despite of the economic crisis
Writing Feedbackwonnguyen - Aug 1, 2014 / wonnguyen - Aug 1, 2014
|TOEFL: It is more important to use available land for farmland, housing, and industry.
2 - Well, we are not great experts, however, with our experience for all these years we can certainly help...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 1, 2014
|The wide-spread use of labor-saving devices has only made our life much more hectic.
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