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|SAT : Is the world changing for the better ?
2 - I think you should try to arrange the thoughts on your paragraph. Try writing 1 thought per paragraph. The...
Writing Feedbackamanyeid - Jul 14, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Chocolate production sequences
3 - Where is the diagram? It is important to upload the diagram if you wish to earn more meaningful comments....
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 14, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|[IELTS] The two main materials of making cement are limestone and clay
3 - in my opinion there are 2 kinds of template: the first one is as you mentioned; the 2nd contain...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014 / xizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014
|Short Description on Myself
Writing FeedbackLuqman Nul Haki - Jul 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Tax on Private Schools Should Not Be Paid
NEW - Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state...
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|GRE Issue "The best way to understand the character of a society..."
2 - Hi! I think you should make your stand clearer on the introduction and most importantly in conclusion. Instead of...
Writing FeedbackTila Tequila - Jul 13, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: permit of women to run career in army must be supported
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Old home Cares: Who should be responsible ? family or Governmnet
3 - Thank you eddies and dummy . I have made changes according to you suggestions . Kindly take a look...
Writing Feedbackharis86 - Jul 12, 2014 / haris86 - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Less Homework Means Less Stress for Children
3 - Halo Friends, In my personal point of view, no need to worry too much concerning this particular task...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014 / andial - Jul 13, 2014
|People should be aware of health risks - dramatic increase in fast food consuming
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is it for IELTS, TOEFL? Mention the purpose in the title...
Writing FeedbackHaiha - Jul 12, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Two bars: motivations to study and workers' support
4 - I like the approach you have followed for this task - Intro, Overview, Detailed paras. Let's look at the...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 11, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|[IELTS task2] Job for a few years between school and university
7 - If you look at all the prompts of IELTS task 2 more closely in Cambridge IELTS Student's Book,...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 14, 2014
|Success in life is a product of one's constant effort and dedication
3 - success is really within us, if we'll persevere in doing something and we are passionate, the success is just...
Writing Feedbackjjsteven - Jul 11, 2014 / charlene1699 - Jul 12, 2014
|[IELTS task2]: some people argue that fashion items cost too much money.
6 - I suggest you to have a more meaningful sentence to open your essay. This should hook your reader...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS] Competition or co-operation? - 'shaking hands or being up in arms'
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jul 10, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|"Another First Date" - my narrative essay
2 - I am in the bathroom getting ready for, yet another "first date." At this point, I do not have...
Writing FeedbackLuna2014 - Jul 9, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 19, 2014
|It is important to respect authority but only if it not violate your own freedom
Writing Feedbacknpuri11 - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|SAT - "happiness is not something that happens to us after we get what we want"
4 - Impressive start :) It seems to be something close at hand yetor sometimes far away from our grasp....
Writing Feedbacklittleting - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|Bar chart - what difficulties people face when they live in other countries?
Writing Feedbackphucth92 - Jul 9, 2014 / xizon7777 - Jul 9, 2014
|Toefl essay - We all work or will work in our jobs with many different people
2 - 1-It is better to use synonyms of "co-worker" such as "colleague" for avoiding repetition of the word. 2- For...
Writing Feedbackyashaswinisrini - Jul 9, 2014 / masih65 - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS Governments and people both should help lower traffic growth and pollution
4 - According to Cambridge Dictionary, measurement means "the act or process of measuring". Don't you mean "measuring instrument" here?...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 8, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jul 11, 2014
|IELTS writing - statistics research of population aged 65 and more
3 - If i were you, I prefer writing a overall rather than conclusion paragraph. So, I suggest you to read...
Writing Feedbacksara88fte - Jul 8, 2014 / tiaDS - Jul 10, 2014
|task 2 for ielts: the wealth sharing among countries always have two sides
4 - Thus, the support should stop at providing food, education and health care. --> So the needy country should...
Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 8, 2014 / devabe2005 - Aug 9, 2014
|[TOEFL essay] Internship prepare students better for their careers
6 - Also doing internship programmes in the university also helpS students have some soft skills, such as team working, colleague...
Writing Feedbackeragon26050 - Jul 8, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Increasing fuel cost is just a band aid for solving environmental issues
3 - No one can deny that consumption of fuel has contributed largely to the environmental issues we face nowadays....
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 8, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|COMPARE AND CONTRAST TECHNOLOGY NOW AND BEFORE
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 8, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Jul 9, 2014
|Some Certain jobs are suitable for men/women because of their capabilities
4 - when you present an example, make sure you write specifically. This ca be done by asking these points:...
Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Jul 7, 2014 / eddies - Jul 8, 2014
|Children should learn to compete rather than be cooperative. What's your opinion
4 - Child-rearing has always been a topical issues over a long period of time, which is the result of parent's...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Dressing in school uniforms indeed prompt students to learn well
2 - Hi memory9711, First of all, you need to pay attention to your punctuation. After period [.], you need to...
Writing Feedbackmemory9711 - Jul 7, 2014 / Ulaai - Jul 13, 2014
|Long period of studying will make students feel bored and limit their self-study
Writing Feedbackwulishiyanzl - Jul 7, 2014 / wulishiyanzl - Jul 22, 2014
|The line graph: Migration Statistics in UK
3 - Well, this is a task that aims at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you need to...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Text messages or phone calls; I prefer talking on the phone
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jul 7, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Event letter in ielts exam - "International Day"
3 - I am so pleased to hear thatabout this wonderful event "International Day" whichwillis going to be held next week....
Writing FeedbackGood2690108411 - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.
Writing FeedbackMuza - Jul 6, 2014 / Vihuynh - Jul 7, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1 - Reject a company offer - letter
3 - Begin your letter with a positive note although it is to inform something negative; I am very thankful...
Writing Feedback12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Parents should have much time for their children which are lonely sometimes
5 - It is sometimes hard to share writing feedback if you don't include a complete hook. Secondly, when you open...
Writing Feedbackanthonypasha - Jul 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Ielts exam; letter - item of clothing was left in the hotel
Writing FeedbackMy2690108411 - Jul 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 6, 2014
|GRE essay-As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems,
3 - You have a great start and some very interesting information! Generally, the order in which you present your information...
Writing Feedbacktito - Jul 5, 2014 / EF_Stacey - Feb 20, 2015
|IELTS General Training - Letter Writing - job at a football club
5 - I am posting my essay here, instead of the picture. I highly appreciate your valuable comments and suggestions to...
Writing Feedback12thaugust2005 - Jul 4, 2014 / 12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014
|IELTS: Music makes our lifes magical and meaningful
7 - I hope you pay more attention to eddies comments. You need to change your approach for this task if...
Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 4, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Some people say that the Internet is making the world
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jul 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and non-OPEC
5 - Actually, I always try to write follow your structure your mentioned. In this essay, the first sentence,...
Writing Feedbackhungtho - Jul 4, 2014 / hungtho - Jul 8, 2014
|Young people should spend time on traveling before beginning their studies
Writing Feedbackwinnietseng - Jul 3, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|ielts: the chart gives information about UK travel between 1979 and 1999
3 - Good advice by tiaDS. This is the approach I too suggest to everybody who prepare for this task....
Writing Feedbacksara88fte - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|Ielts taks1: the diagram show how rainwater is reused
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jul 3, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS: procedure of making cement / traffic congestion & air pollution
4 - Have two different threads for each task. By having both in one thread, you would lose your chances of...
Writing Feedbackhoho8453 - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Home is good place to learn a lot, however school is the best place to learn.
Writing Feedbackapanwar01 - Jul 2, 2014 / msarkar - Jul 29, 2014
|Oil discovery has been most beneficial for people in Iran
6 - We are very grateful to an abundant oil supply given by the almighty. It effects the future nation...
Writing Feedbacksomi - Jul 2, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 25, 2014
|Payment is very vital factor to consider while choose employer
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|"Bangla" - workers from Bangladesh in Malaysia
3 - 'Bangla' is one of the common descriptions we use to describe foreign construction workers in Malaysia, irrespective if they...
Writing FeedbackCycy - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|IELTS essay on video games - pros and cons
2 - n recent years, video games hashave increased itstheir popularity around the world. This has aroused considerable controversy in society...
Writing Feedbackloxm - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|Today's charity - support made by wealthy nations must be voluntary
4 - Money flow to the poorest nations in African and Asian continents riseshas risen magnificently during the last decade. ...
Writing FeedbackLazira - Jul 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 15, 2014
|TOEFL -advices from senior people are more valuable than from people at our age
5 - I feel you have uploaded a wrong topic for this essay .... I cannot find any relevance between...
Writing Feedbackjamie3160003 - Jul 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS 2- insufficient respect is shown to older people
Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 30, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Imprisonment trend among five different countries - bar graph
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 30, 2014 / eddies - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS - Talent is one of the awesome things in the world
6 - grammar mistakes also, don't forget to put space between each paragraph to make the readers easier to...
Writing FeedbackFlower777 - Jun 30, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Some sectors request many well-qualified people - career choices for young generation
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 30, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|[IELTS] Equivalent number of two genders in terms of university's learning
2 - This sentence is too very long. Longer the sentence, less its clarity would be. Also, the reader is...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 30, 2014 / dumi - Jul 1, 2014
|GRE ESSAY - detailed analysis of a society
2 - Few comments, 1. Couple of sentences are too long. It is good to use them with appropriate conjunctions....
Writing Feedbackhsaxena - Jun 30, 2014 / 12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014
|IELTS - mobile phones: faster communication vs social problems
6 - Furthermore, the growing number of mobilesmobile games will impact theirthe mental development of children negatively. For instance, there are...
Writing FeedbackMy2983189867 - Jun 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
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