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|IELTS: Global music has more positive impacts on humans than traditional music
4 - I think you're confused because both of them are right. After "help", the verb can be V-infinitive/ to-V/...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 21, 2014 / MiaCuthbert - Jun 21, 2014
|The importance of utilizing advisement globally continues to increase each year
Writing Feedbackdondon26 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|Spending more money in public transportation should be improved early
4 - Therefore, I would argue that governments should categorize issues by putting them in orders, and public transportation should...
Writing Feedbackpe5167 - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|CAUSES OF LOW PASS RATE OF PROFICIENCY EXAM
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 20, 2014 / lovemylife - Jun 24, 2014
|[TOEFL]People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful
3 - the criticism enables youpeople to be aware of others' opinion | other opinions. I prefer using the world...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|[IELTS] proportion of watching television and videos (Australian children)
4 - Everything was tackled appropriately and relevant contrast/comparison was made. However, a conclusion regarding the whole trend would have made...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 20, 2014 / hillard214james - Jun 23, 2014
|IELTS: The private motor vehicle improved individual freedom; but it's expensive
6 - Hi, Thanks to Everyone, With your help i understand the structure of the Essay and hook of the...
Writing FeedbackShineStarJoti - Jun 20, 2014 / ShineStarJoti - Jun 21, 2014
|College graduates find hard to get good jobs
5 - This contains 452 words. Did you finish it into 30 minutes? this intro carries bulky words. you don't...
Writing Feedbackbagusprabowoaji - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Distance learning as a new trend in education
NEW - In today's advanced technology world, students have option to choose whether they want learning in distance by using computer...
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|Does money go along with happiness?
3 - the complete prompt must be written to help us when we review your essay. I just guess this task...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Jun 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. MARRIAGES AND DIVORCE IN THE USA & ADULT AMERICANS' MARITAL STATUS
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS; all towns and cities to have public spaces
5 - As I suggest to other students to pay attention to "example' they wrote, some students fail to present...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Grandparents are significant source of experiences; childrens education big role
2 - Well you should combine sentences two make complicated one. For example, you should combine sentence 2 and...
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - Jun 19, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|[IELTS] Should parents be obliged to immunize their vulnerable children?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 20, 2014
|IELTS Essay: Work or study from home - advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Writing Feedbackrims - Jun 18, 2014 / fikri - Jun 19, 2014
|Own encouragement, own motivation to get you to the point of graduation.
2 - Going back to college was a difficult decision for me to make. For almost six years I went back...
Writing Feedbacksunserimelissa - Jun 18, 2014 / dumi - Jun 22, 2014
|TOEFL: Would you choose your own roommate?
2 - I think you should rewrite these 2 sentences :) They are simple and not quite clear, and maybe...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS: As an international tourist, whether adhere to the local custom or not?
Writing Feedbacklynn11 - Jun 18, 2014 / lynn11 - Jun 19, 2014
|[TOEFL] People were more satisfied in the past in comparison to today's people/
2 - First of all, you should have included the essay prompt in the post for us to understand what it...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Jun 18, 2014 / dumi - Jun 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Prisons have various purposes
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 18, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Where Talent Comes From
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 18, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|[IELTS] We should opt for customary music rather than worldwide one
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 22, 2014
|Government should spend national budget for roads, highways and public transport
NEW - Transportation is an important living factor, and also influences to country's economy. Both quality of route for any vehicle...
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|[TOEFL] 'friends talk' - telephone is more influential than the television
2 - I have a question about TOEFL preparing process. How should I reinforce my grammar? Is there any good way...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 17, 2014 / peyman_np - Jun 18, 2014
|Ielts: letter and gift to a friend who has just had a baby recently
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 17, 2014 / aklochkova1 - Jun 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Classmates' impacts on children's performance at school
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 17, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 23, 2014
|Schools should teach skills? What about values? The purpose of education.
4 - Write first the main TOPIC. I think you better change the structure of your essay. Remove the use of...
Writing Feedbackforouzan - Jun 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Jun 20, 2014
|It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional culture must be lost.
2 - Although lots of people claim that technology and traditions are not compatable,compatible with each other many experts believe that...
Writing Feedbackangelinawang - Jun 16, 2014 / dumi - Jun 22, 2014
|IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation?
8 - When writing a conclusion for task 2, I always start with the words "In conclusion". There's no reason...
Writing Feedbacklynn11 - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|International aid is a must but also it is required to operate in the right way
4 - not only is the international aid is indispensable but also it is required to be operated in the rightappropriate...
Writing Feedbackgunyes - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 21, 2014
|GRE ISSUE - People who make decisions based on emotion
2 - This issue revolvingthat people who make decisions based on emotions is quite an interesting one. Furthering to that we...
Writing Feedbackmkunaparaju - Jun 15, 2014 / dumi - Jun 16, 2014
|Topic: Describe learning something from a friend.
4 - Hi dumi, Thank you for sharing your comments. I edit the paragraphs that you wrote and it becomes:...
Writing Feedbackokdeerpass - Jun 15, 2014 / okdeerpass - Jun 22, 2014
|New shopping centre in your neighborhood - do you agree or not?
4 - Thank you very much! Precious suggestions! I was a little bit nervous when i wrote this essay because my...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Jun 15, 2014 / AngelaB - Jun 16, 2014
|[IELTS] Do guns can really increase the level of violence?
7 - According to Cambridge dictionary, "while" means compared with the fact that; but. So, I think you use this...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 15, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014
|Topic: If i had 3 days to live; 'hypnosis for memory'
Writing FeedbackFionaP - Jun 15, 2014 / eddies - Jun 28, 2014
|[IELTS] Keeping pets is good or not? Discuss both views? Personal opinion?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 15, 2014 / thanhphongct1 - Jun 17, 2014
|"broken chopsticks" - letter to the shop manager; writing task in IELTS 8
Writing Feedbacksam4 - Jun 15, 2014 / sam4 - Jun 17, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - taking jobs with high salary but risks or low salary but secure?
2 - Well, I like if this sentence has been a bit shorter. Ideally, you should start the essay with...
Writing Feedbackjessiebaojie - Jun 15, 2014 / dumi - Jun 16, 2014
|IELTS : Could Fame Be All Good?
Writing Feedbackeva_lim - Jun 15, 2014 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2014
|In many countries there has been increase in social problems involving teens
6 - It is always good to mention the purpose of writing your essay in the title itself. I guess this...
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jun 14, 2014 / dumi - Jun 19, 2014
|Puppy love should be agreed or not?
2 - Love is a lifelong word, directly or indirectly, reminding us of each milestone we have suffered from no matter...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Jun 14, 2014 / eva_lim - Jun 15, 2014
|IELTS: do animals have the same rights as humans?
6 - The question has asked you to discuss on both the sides. And it seems that you have only included...
Writing FeedbackPrisarthur - Jun 14, 2014 / Sharma_63 - Jul 3, 2014
|'human beings are far from perfect' - Essay about an ideal wife
Writing FeedbackAkatsuki - Jun 14, 2014 / Akatsuki - Jun 15, 2014
|my best friend - Champ ; Descriptive paragraph about person who I feel admirable
Writing Feedbacklittle_shimmery - Jun 14, 2014 / little_shimmery - Jun 15, 2014
|IELTS: 'The apple never falls far from the tree' - Parents should teach children
10 - For this essay, I think one body paragraph is not enough to cover all the question from the prompt....
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS argument essay large amount of violence in television programs
6 - to make your essay more specific, you can take some examples from your experiences or your daily life. it...
Writing Feedbackwzncx8879 - Jun 14, 2014 / fikri - Jun 15, 2014
|Toefl : Begin learning a foreign language as soon as starting school
5 - This sentence is too long and contains much vague information when it comes to an opening paragraph. according...
Writing Feedbackitspueng - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|Ielts: The gap between poor and rich countries has been large from longtime ago
NEW - The inequality between rich and poor nations is wider than it has ever been before. What do you think...
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 13, 2014 / — -
|IELTS Essay - Well qualified graduates without employement
5 - This is not a very clearly presented idea :( You need to have a more interesting statement to...
Writing FeedbackAxed - Jun 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|GRE Issue Topic: Understanding a society by studying the major cities
NEW - Issue topic: To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Major...
Writing Feedbackoargaruna - Jun 13, 2014 / — -
|IELTS : negative effects of technological process ( agree or disagree )
5 - This is not a clear example, I think. Have journalistic questions to build a clear example. Let's say:...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 13, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|'bored of being a social nobody' - more money for student's social activities?
4 - thanks for your help! can you give me some suggestions of how to solve this problem? i have already...
Writing Feedbackzcb56123 - Jun 13, 2014 / zcb56123 - Jun 14, 2014
|[IELTS] Problems and solutions for regional unbalance?
14 - Well... this is your hook which attracts your reader and provides a great entrance to your essay. So,...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|IELTS writing 2 : Solutions to low-cost airlines' enviromental damage
3 - In recent times, travelling by plane , air has become more affordable thanks to the dramatical decrease in airlines...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Jun 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 2, 2014
|'follow the rules of the nature' - changes are essential for improving our lives
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - Jun 12, 2014 / fikri - Jun 13, 2014
|Extended Definition Descriptive Essay for English Course (Subject - Family)
Writing FeedbackAutorock - Jun 12, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 12, 2014
|Advantages of Having a Part-Time Job While Studying at the University
Writing FeedbackCa2014 - Jun 12, 2014 / Ca2014 - Jun 13, 2014
|Why arranged marriage is bad idea? Descriptive paragraph
2 - arrangedArranged marriage is a bad idea simply because it does not gain the acceptance from both parties who are...
Writing Feedbacksonyta - Jun 12, 2014 / dumi - Jun 18, 2014
|Cheerleading Is a Sport - 7th grade essay worth 20% of my grade
2 - Ayeshah, when you write a debate paper, you cannot just write the reasons that justify your claim. You must...
Writing Feedbackcassiecat - Jun 12, 2014 / Holt - Apr 2, 2017
|Toefl: 'our useful friends' - pets deserve to be treated like family members
3 - Thank you very much dumi! Regarding the introduction, I am trying to follow your precious suggestions.. that's why I...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Jun 12, 2014 / AngelaB - Jun 12, 2014
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