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|I've written 3 paragraphs of urban life - an introduction, central paragraph and conclusion
2 - Sahar, these are not 3 paragraphs. A paragraph is composed of 3 sentences minimum with a specific topic discussed...
Writing Feedbackmissytender - Dec 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 26, 2014
|There is no future for public transport because travelling by car is so much more convenient.
2 - This is just my opinion, but if you don't have a word limit I would elaborate each paragraph. Also...
Writing FeedbackDieuHuong - Dec 26, 2014 / freedl21 - Dec 26, 2014
|Fame should be a surprise, not a goal.
2 - Im assuming this is suppose to 5 Paragraph essay style? If so, you need to indicate your thesis -...
Writing Feedbacknikkisia - Dec 24, 2014 / Pereirar23 - Dec 24, 2014
|I believe we can have some measure in place to help tackle the environmental woes. IELTS TASK2
Writing FeedbackSummer LIN - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Personal saving as a percentage of personal income
Writing Feedbackmidorimido - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|Misconceptions about volunteer work and see their work in the right perspective
Writing Feedbackshtpcks - Dec 23, 2014 / jaark3927 - Dec 23, 2014
|It is clear that the amount of acid rain emissions in the four given sectors declined considerably
Writing Feedbacklinh_bui - Dec 22, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 23, 2014
|The Starry Night and city life NYU supplement essay
5 - Love the Van Gogh quote. Beautifully written.This is under the wordcount so you can write about 50 words more....
Writing Feedbackmelissae - Dec 21, 2014 / zeeconomist - Dec 29, 2014
|Meat: Mystery and History - Pomona College Supplemental Essay
6 - Thank you for taking my suggestions into consideration. I can see the marked difference in the two essay versions...
Writing FeedbackMaxbradley - Dec 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 22, 2014
|My personal preference is do not have pets at all; it's not good idea to treat them as family member
2 - I did some rewrites, see if this sounds better! great ideas though Pets should be treated like family...
Writing FeedbackBlackS12 - Dec 21, 2014 / Maxbradley - Dec 21, 2014
|It is not easy to describe what happiness is. IELTS essay topic.
3 - Happiness is considered important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important for achieving happiness?...
Writing FeedbackAzeez - Dec 21, 2014 / Azeez - Dec 21, 2014
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - The Unemployment Rate in 2 Advanced Countries
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / kamikazexoxo - Jan 8, 2015
|Transporting food by air now provides market opportunities both exporting and importing countries.
3 - Air transport has experienced the fastest growth. For this reason, some people prefer selecting this as the main...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / eddies - Dec 21, 2014
|Questions 1-6 - openings and finales only
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 2, 2015
|Children can lead a better life if they gain the ability of both competition and cooperation
3 - Thank you very much, SHanafi. It's so nice of you. I think it's better than before and I'll follow...
Writing Feedbacktcyy - Dec 18, 2014 / tcyy - Dec 21, 2014
|Some views and opinion about learning methods for children - IELTS
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 18, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 19, 2014
|IELTS - the number of young people perpetrating a crime has risen significantly.
5 - The sharp increase of juvenile delinquentcy has been happened due to several causes In my view your conclusion...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 18, 2014 / Azeez - Dec 21, 2014
|Dramatical increase of crimes among teenagers - looking for solutions. IELTS
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 18, 2014 / PJmustbebetter - Dec 18, 2014
|First impression is an essential appear in workplace - employees should dress smartly - IELTS TASK 2
2 - Appearance enables to influence people and potentially impact of how a business performs effectively. A well-groomed appearance can...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 17, 2014 / Remansou - Dec 17, 2014
|Ielts - Nowadays space exploration gain more attention and money than health and education sectors.
Writing FeedbackMissao - Dec 17, 2014 / moonvlin - Dec 18, 2014
|Replies for different essay questions - Introduction and Conclusion
2 - In my personal view, study in group and self study provide some beneficial advantages for schoolchildren. Let...
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 17, 2014 / tiaDS - Dec 18, 2014
|Number of people has increased since 1800 and will increase continuously and then will decrease
5 - 1. Quantity is not appropriate to alter people, use "number" instead. 2. You make a circumstance. If...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 18, 2014
|International student's change in share who graduate from university in different Canadian provinces
2 - Let me try to rewrite this paragraph: The bar chart compares the number of alumni of Canadian University in...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 17, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 17, 2014
|Working habits are significantly changed - people can work from home using modern technology
3 - hi somasalim thanks for correction which is covered by your question. I just have realized that I used double...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Dec 17, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 21, 2014
|Six prompts; Introduction and Conclusion only - IELTS Writing Task 2
5 - ALL THINGS CONSIDERED, TO SUM UP, IN SUMMARY, TO SUMMARIZE, IN SHORT, IN A NUTSHELL,TO PUT IT IN A...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 17, 2014 / mkthanh - Dec 18, 2014
|Both - public services and impressive buildings obtain income for a city. IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 16, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 17, 2014
|Chocolate bar is made by Theobroma cacao. The first step in making chocolate is grinding. [IELTS]
3 - Let me rewrite this sentence In manufacturing cocoa butter and cocoa powder, the cocoa liquor is pressed...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Dec 16, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 17, 2014
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - The Process of Making Chocolate Bar and its Changes in the Price
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 16, 2014 / ayulia - Dec 16, 2014
|Considerations and factors influence the universities budget allocation to meet students' demand
2 - Try to type as much as possible within thirty minutes, maybe 700 words and avoid using one word twice...
Writing Feedbackkid09321 - Dec 16, 2014 / Zyy242 - Dec 16, 2014
|'it reached a peak of 34.7% in 2011' - National Recycling Rates, 1960 to 2011
2 - There are some missing punctuation such as '.' and ',' There are also incomplete sentences. Try again,...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 16, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 16, 2014
|'Overall, there are two type of cocoa after pressed.' - IELTS Writing Task 1 : Chocolate Bar
7 - Separate your intro and overview some issues : plural singular, punctuation and subject-verb agreement. This is a "petite"...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 18, 2014
|The diagram ilustrates how to make chocolates and the pie chart describes the price of chocolate bar
2 - it should be illustrates you should use present participle for the word 'produce' because the sentence...
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 15, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 16, 2014
|Critique about the article "Land, Territory and Identity"
2 - Here is an idea for making the first sentence easier to read: The article named "Land, Territory and Identity"...
Writing FeedbackMahaliyev - Dec 15, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2014
|How chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up - [IELTS Writing Task 1]
3 - Hi PJ Maybe you should replace the percentage (37%,34%,15%,10%,4% ) with other words to avoid repetitions....
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 15, 2014 / ayulia - Dec 16, 2014
|'it is rather a common phenomenon for people to have debts' - causes of debts and prevention
Writing Feedbackmoonvlin - Dec 15, 2014 / moonvlin - Dec 18, 2014
|'the most dramatic change was Japan' - Member of Travellers; IELTS
4 - The table illustrates the total of tourists from Japan, Australia and Canada from 1985 to 1995, a 10-year period...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 15, 2014 / tiaDS - Dec 17, 2014
|Which of my qualities would add value to community of scholars?
Writing Feedbackc_brooks1 - Dec 14, 2014 / c_brooks1 - Dec 14, 2014
|The best day of my life (so far) was. tell a story that allows us to experience your best day
2 - This is a truly creative story that relates your immigration experience. The problem is the lack of emotional connection...
Writing Feedbacksiyuan12345 - Dec 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2014
|'wrongly convicted, jailed or fined' - Capital Punishment research paper topic.
2 - Cristian, we aren't an essay writing service. Posting the prompt for your essay here will not get the essay...
Writing Feedbackpoly5 - Dec 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2014
|[IELTS Task 1] The Number of Travellers Using Three Major Airports In New York City
3 - The bar chart gives the information about the visitors at three airports in New York City and is...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Dec 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Dec 15, 2014
|The table describes the number of cinema viewers for four type films in four different nationalities
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 14, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 15, 2014
|Effect of the Social Media on Adolescents (Argumentative Essay)
Writing Feedbackchinnycl - Dec 14, 2014 / redfoxspl33 - Dec 14, 2014
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - Average Band Point of IELTS General Test for Some Different Participants
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 14, 2014 / Anfalia - Dec 16, 2014
|Business Vs House - what to buy? Give necessary reason and example
Writing Feedbackgautam007 - Dec 14, 2014 / gautam007 - Dec 20, 2014
|(INTERESTING) The bar chart reveals the mean growth of GDP of three types of countries; IELTS
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 14, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 14, 2014
|To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal and study in a comfortable atmosphere
2 - Let me try to correct the last paragraph, I think the conclusion is not clear. It should revert to...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 13, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 16, 2014
|Teaching as a Professional Career
2 - Hanan, you need to learn to proof read your essay before submitting it. I see that you started the...
Writing Feedbackhanan attia - Dec 13, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|To speak a foreign language well, you need to adopt some of their traditions. - IELTS
2 - Your task is to simply introduce the background information retrieved from the prompt. Also, make sure that you...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Dec 13, 2014 / eddies - Dec 13, 2014
|Logging of the rainforests is a serious problem and it may lead to very serious problems on Earth
2 - You need to check some of your grammar Today's environmental issues from logging of rainforest affect animal and human...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Dec 13, 2014 / melissae - Dec 18, 2014
|School is the one of my important things on my life.
NEW - School is the one of my important things on my life. Many people learn about many subject, sport, art,...
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|There has been an immense increase in some immoral traits of human beings in modern societies.
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Dec 11, 2014 / Anfalia - Dec 19, 2014
|Advertising - there are many advantages side of it which is changing our lives to positive side
3 - There are grammatical errors that can be corrected within the essay. However, it has always been my policy to...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Dec 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 21, 2014
|If you could uninvent one of a major inventions, what would it be? Brandeis Supplemental Essay
2 - Excellent essay! I do not see any need to add anything to this discussion nor correct any content within...
Writing Feedbackdh132 - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|School subjects are equally beneficial to students' future career success IELTS
NEW - Hi guys, can you guys do me a favor and review my IELTS Writing Test Part 2, really appreciated,...
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|Exploration of Alternate Realities In My Final Graphic Texts Project
NEW - There were almost no requirements to this essay. It is supposed to be about a piece I created and...
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|Proud to be Americans - cause, event, consequences essay about the American Revolution
Writing FeedbackJesussaves - Dec 10, 2014 / Jesussaves - Dec 16, 2014
|Ethical obligation forces our conscious to live to be worthy of trust. IELTS
3 - I really appreciate you taking your time out and looking into it. Thanks a lot for the feedback,...
Writing Feedbackhoffman_j - Dec 10, 2014 / hoffman_j - Dec 18, 2014
|Imposing stricter punishment is likely to lead reducing the number of crimes
NEW - Some people think the best way of reducing crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there...
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|Schools should continue to focus on teaching students but not eliminating music and sports subjects
NEW - Task 2# Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future career....
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|Will Artificial Intelligence Mark the End of Humanity?
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