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|IELTS: traffic problems - some people in the world have a car for themselves
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|'good to be realized for government' - The tax of private car owners
5 - Don't open your essay with complicated sentences :( Here you leave the reader with so many questions -...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of sports in the UK in 2010
3 - Overall, it is clearlyclear that the biggesthighest percentage of boys in both age groups were involved insport was football...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: Sport in UK - boys interested to play football
2 - The table provides information about the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|WRITING TASK 2 - VIOLENT MOVIES can cause serious social problems
8 - To begin with , there are three factors bringing about thenegative consequencesofcaused by violent films . First of all...
Writing Feedbackkamikazexoxo - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 5, 2014
|IELTS_News media is important in our society.
4 - Let's do this intro as per the structure Pahan provides :) Media plays a very dominant role in...
Writing Feedbackitsmonica - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Computer ownership - From 2002 to 2010
6 - Single graphs Introduction: Here you sould state what the graph shows short body paragraph: state the most improtant piece...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|[IELTS] schools should only teach children the academic subject
6 - Let me give you simple advice as to how your writing could be marked higher: When you deal with...
Writing FeedbackKelly219 - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS: Government should be considered to budget more for preventing programs
3 - after this sentence, it will seem more interesting if you add some supporting sentences in the next which...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 30, 2014 / fikri - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history.
8 - Secondly, some people think they should not change their buildings . For example, in my country there is a...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS 1: Computer ownership among educated people
5 - Double graphs Introduction: Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g "This first bart chart shows..., and the...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings = history --> it is very important to protect them
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graphs above give information about computer ownership
8 - Generally, percentage of people who haveowned a computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same astrend with...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Planning new supermarket in Pellington (by upinipin)
7 - In Task 1 of the IELTS test, you ARE NOT required to give your personal opinion. So you should...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / zztrieuman - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: limited resources, infrastructure; traditional house vs modern apartment?
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|Mindfulness Reflection - Communications course essay
3 - Thank you for your immediate response. You brought many points to my attention that I had overlooked. ...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014 / brandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Animals should not be exploited by people
6 - In my opinion, I think that animals should have the same rights as human beings because animals are also...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: should all offenders be sent to prisons? 'alternative punishment'
7 - You have very good writing skills. Improve on the essay structure as Pahan suggested to you because this task...
Writing FeedbackYvonne_lulu - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Planning a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington.
8 - In this diagram, there is no reference to governments. So, you should not touch on anything that is...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Proposed sites for a new hypermarket in the city of Pellington.
5 - A key point in the writing task 1 is the differences and similarities. Personally, i prefer to explain the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|It is better to use money for improving our planet than space exploration
4 - There is lots of redundancy in the first part of this sentence. Keep your writing more clear and...
Writing Feedbackmrsoup90 - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|Ielts take 2 Young people attitude towards parents and grand parents
4 - Actually, both are interchangeable. Meaning, both are correct. However, in writing, it is more appropriate to use "with...
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts: invite letter: for Tom - coming for a visit in Beijing
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: People attend collage or university especially for career preparation
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|'monster if we cannot manage it well' - Movies or tv influence people's behavior
7 - Television is one of the most popular media used by any household. It has also becomingbecome an important...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine
5 - The picture depicts the hydroelectric dam process which is used for electricity. Grammar issue it's...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: paying taxes is enough contribution from citizens
8 - Hi alexwater... in this sentence, I look 2 verb through conjunction. If in the sentence use two verb,...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014
|Learn more about another country by watching tv programmes and films about it
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Water cycles - process showing how water evaporates, condenses and precipitates
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 28, 2014 / brandymhunter - May 1, 2014
|The charts: reasons why adults decide to study / shared costs of adult education
4 - The charts give information about results of a survey of adult education i will write The chart gives...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 28, 2014 / Mattgang - Apr 29, 2014
|ielts - Every year several languages die cut; Language as pride of every nation
13 - Thanks alot dumi :) now I will write another essay and will try to do like you have suggested...
Writing Feedbackmrs rafey - Apr 28, 2014 / mrs rafey - May 2, 2014
|The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999
4 - between 1996 and 1999. wrong noun phrase ; a significant increase or significantly (adv) increase (verb)...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 28, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS:The stages and equipment used in the cement-making process
6 - The diagram shows how cement is producedthe stages of cement and concrete productionand how is way of using cement...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 28, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By 2020 may be as many as 29 million vehicles.
3 - Here is the sample (page 77) retrieved from IELTS official website: ielts.org/PDF/Vol4_Report2.pdf Perhaps you may start analyzing...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 28, 2014
|Tim Hortons vs Starbucks // gr9 personal
4 - As a consumer, you'd want to buy from the company that sells products which best suits your needs as...
Writing FeedbackBananaMilk - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : People move to cities is increasing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|TOEFL: Famous people are bothered by the media
7 - One reason isthatwhy television and newspapers focus on famous peoples' lives isin order to increase their audience or readership....
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|Watching movies vs. reading the original books
4 - Second of allSecondly , are nearlythe movie can take about maximumtwo hours and the film director cannot possibly accommodate...
Writing Feedbackr1996mm - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IES: the state pay all students tuition fees, or students should pay themselves?
7 - College education is a business- and any good business knows to offer good incentives to its clients. And I...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Apr 27, 2014 / tdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014
|GRE: Development of technology and the way people rely on it too much.
2 - Hey, this essay is so good considering its your first. You almost have no mistakes however, I think you...
Writing Feedbackkarltran3s - Apr 27, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014
|SAT: Learning from mistakes or from our successful actions?
Writing FeedbackItsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Ielts: complaint letter - dissatisfaction with the T-shirt
4 - First, give them some reference to trace your purchase and then tell the reason for writing the letter....
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 8, 2014
|IELTS TASK I : Britons weekly expenditure on fast food (two charts)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 27, 2014 / SHanafi - May 8, 2014
|IELTS: Children are working for money, therefore they learn the value of money
4 - Children at work raise long-standing debates. While some people argue that this is good to teach new skills and...
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: How greenhouse gases
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 26, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 27, 2014
|SAT Essay: Do we value only what we struggle for? Kindly grade.
6 - "That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly. It is dearness only which gives everything its value."...
Writing Feedbackmaheenatiq - Apr 26, 2014 / maheenatiq - May 11, 2014
|IELTS: advertising impact on people's choice of consumption
4 - This intro is too big. You need to organize better otherwise you would run out of allowed time. This...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 26, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|SAT essay: 'Taking a bad decision is way better than the terror of indecision'
3 - Thanks man!...
Writing Feedbackofficialseif - Apr 26, 2014 / officialseif - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS: problem of obesity and how to solve it; parents & school all have a role
Writing Feedbackhbzezo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS task 2: A successful person is one who has earned a lot of money...
3 - in agree disagree task, you should mention both sides whether you agree or disagree for example, when...
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|TOEFL: Technology impact on children's creativity.
7 - Yes, your essay looks pretty lengthy and you need to worry about that if you were not able to...
Writing FeedbackVince1992 - Apr 26, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IETLS task 2: Is it necessary to restict Long working hours in workplace?
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Apr 26, 2014 / Arun0506 - May 5, 2014
|college or university; Success or a good life in future through knowledge
Writing Feedbackthaontt1408 - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS: Greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun
9 - Greenhouse give affects to atmosphere and earth. Your detailed body paras are not adequately informing the details of what...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 25, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|Germany and France electricity generation 2009
7 - The piespie charts present details ofshowGermany and France electricity generation in 2009 in Germany and France.The power of electricity...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IELTS: production of electricity in Germany and France from all sources
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 25, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 28, 2014
|SAT: Are we free to make our decisions or are we limited by circumstances?
4 - It is better if you included your prompt also in the essay. It helps us understanding the topic better...
Writing FeedbackItsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|TOEFL: if you had money, which one do you prefer. buying a car or going vacation
3 - Well, these two sentences mean almost the same :( One is enough because one makes the other redundant....
Writing Feedbacksevan_777 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - Technology makes people's lives simpler rather than complicated
Writing FeedbackAlbatross1993 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 28, 2014
|broad knowledge vs many academic subjects; various subjects in order to be wise
4 - Thank you very much! And do you mean that my paragraph structure is not clear enough? I just think...
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