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|progress is always precarious; every step toward it brings suffering, sacrifices
6 - Let me also give some help here :D Well, if you particularly struggle with the hook, straightaway start with...
Writing Feedbackhere2study - Apr 10, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Estimated world illiteracy
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 10, 2014 / bakhadeer - Apr 11, 2014
|IELTS: Question about the influence of the media coverage of celebrities
8 - Well, the structures that I and Pahan have already suggested to you in our previous comments are the best...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 10, 2014 / dumi - Apr 11, 2014
|IELTS: born with certain talents or not?; professional football player
3 - .... well, this statement has an issue... :( .... "people can acquire any fields"? That part does not...
Writing FeedbackJasS - Apr 10, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS - GT: On recent Holiday you lost valuable item, claim to insurance
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 10, 2014 / Naveed786 - Apr 13, 2014
|people living longer nowadays. Is it good or bad?
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Apr 10, 2014 / kikiliyik - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: International Graduations of Canadian Colleges; New Brunswick highest %
4 - I think "university" and "college" are not interchangeable. Ontario had the lowest percentage of international graduates...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 10, 2014 / MisterWandering - Apr 10, 2014
|Number of visits to two new music sites on the web - 180,000 / 80,000
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 10, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTSTASK1:illiteracy rates by region and by gender; 2%, 12% and 20% rate
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 10, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Underground railway systems; 'London has been the oldest'
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 9, 2014 / oneclbb - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS : Contacting nowadays seems to be not a difficulty anymore; technology
9 - Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy...
Writing FeedbackKellyChu - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|Cultural differences should be welcomed by everyone
6 - Thank you :D...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 9, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 10, 2014
|Movies & TV affect people. 'Vietnamese man who hasn't gone to other countries'
9 - Try direct speech. You can express ideas much clearer and effectively when you write in direct speech, not...
Writing Feedbackkurapika312 - Apr 9, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|The contribution of three different sectors to the UK economy; 'agriculture 50%'
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 9, 2014 / thiagocardoso - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS: There have been significant developments in the field of IT!
6 - Working with an essay's layout, you' better pay particular attention to this point: Developing the classical five paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Some people are attracted to dangerous sports? 'feel more alive'
4 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing Feedbacksamiraaa - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS - advantages and disadvantages of machines instead of human to do the work
9 - I feel this sentence contains many words and has faulty comparison between human and machines: "It is undoubted that...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : success is ten per cent talent and ninety per cent hard work?
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 9, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: Technology impact on people; Earth has become like a small village
10 - Thank you Pahan, dumi and eddies. I really appreciate your helps. I will be grateful to see your comments...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 9, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: international students graduated in several canadian regions
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 9, 2014 / dumi - May 10, 2014
|TOEFL - Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 9, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS Task II The different of Life Culture in the past and in the modern era
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 9, 2014 / Apsari - Apr 14, 2014
|Money is a major source of satisfaction while searching for a job
5 - The first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|Wealthy nation shares to support poor countries at the solidarity among nations
7 - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Australian weather broadcasting process
6 - The diagram shows a process of weather broadcasterbroadcastingwhich is broadcasted by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology Overall,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|ielts; Teaching foreign languages broaden childrens horizons
7 - axa thanks for feedback) i will try to be active and i hope you regularly give me your suggestions)...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 8, 2014 / bakhadeer - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS: Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access
8 - Sorry, dear :( I am not the one who is capable of answering your question. To make everything clear,...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|Never miss a chance to attend a live performance, its way better than TV at home
4 - You'd better rewrite this expression. What I see is that many students think the memorization of the phrase...
Writing Feedbackhere2study - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS: The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of fun?
4 - In Europe, in 1995, the bar chart started from 97.000 million dollars were spent on entertainment in 1995.It...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 8, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 9, 2014
|TOEFL - Most important room; Bathroom is my essential demand
6 - I see you write good, but It is always better if you take much consideration for the following point...
Writing Feedbackyanhongnanbk - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS - Freedom in showing creation is the right for every creative artist
7 - It is nicer if you could construct this paragraph with this pattern below: 1. a 'conclusion' signal: In...
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - May 8, 2014
|TOEFL - Human needs vs. saving land for endangered animals
Writing FeedbackLeonP - Apr 8, 2014 / LeonP - Apr 9, 2014
|'homeless or in jail'; Parents are the best teachers; I agree with the statement
4 - Obviously, you write small letter "i" not just once but several times. Practice writing it in capital. Otherwise,...
Writing Feedbackmikoo4444 - Apr 8, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 27, 2014
|Be positive when unemployed; People attending schools for many different reasons
3 - 1. Utilize the grammar and spell check features of Microsoft Word to correct as many spelling and grammar problems...
Writing Feedbackmikoo4444 - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|TOEFL - Rush vs. Slower Pace
5 - If you do not hurry yourselfrush for things, then you can take more time for your family and friends....
Writing FeedbackLeonP - Apr 8, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 9, 2014
|TOEFL: Listening to the advice of family and friends or via personal experience?
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Student joining education by gender.
4 - I think you wrote writing task 1 perfectly. There are some mistakes such as felt , it should be...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 7, 2014 / techgeek - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS: The number of men and women in further education in Britain
2 - The bar charts illustrate the changes in the number of men and women who undertook full-time and part-time...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 7, 2014 / MisterWandering - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS: more and more people are going to other countries for significant period
Writing Feedbackchaaaany - Apr 7, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, ..
4 - Nowadays, most people use e-mail for communicating and sharing data with individualsothers who live in a long distance. It...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 7, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS: Reading news in the internet or newspapers ?
7 - This item is highly common. Use these less common lexical items: The aforementioned evidence examines that ... Given...
Writing Feedbackchaaaany - Apr 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|These days, more and more people are going to another countries.IELTS
2 - Concurrently, taking a year out to live and study abroad is being popular among young adults. For many, it's...
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 7, 2014 / chaaaany - Apr 7, 2014
|ielts essay: Physical education plays an important role in pupil's life
4 - Yes, you should follow Pahan's suggested structure. Read those examples to get a good knack about it. For this...
Writing Feedbacksunny0438 - Apr 7, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS: leisure time - joblessness people take the highest place in the race
5 - Yes, Dumi is right. It is hard to share thoughtful feedback for your IELTS visual writing if the...
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS: 'car industry is developing extremely fast' ; traffic problems
7 - which every family pays / which all families pay Today, income taxes, which every family pays are...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 7, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|Single career is an old fashion - 'being an expert in one specified sphere'
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 7, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 9, 2014
|Work or travel between high school & university; beneficial or unfavorable year
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|'Gender and jobs relate to gender' - Equal numbers of male and female students
Writing FeedbackTruong Nguyen - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS: University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet..
5 - Eddy and Dumi, thanks a lot buddies! : ) Can somebody give me an approximate band, which I will...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 6, 2014 / techgeek - Apr 7, 2014
|The extended family is less important now; 'urban life / communication tools'
Writing Feedbackramshah - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 7, 2014
|Increasing weight, decreasing health; 'can't find absolutely healthy person'
4 - Today it seems to be impossible to meet an absolutely healthy person who is absolutely healthy , (1)( stop...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS "a subject that you haven't opportunity to study" study religion more deep
6 - You should utilize the grammar and spell check features of Microsoft Word to correct as many spelling and grammar...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|'Advertisements make people feel like they are successful and special person'
Writing Feedbackoneclbb - Apr 6, 2014 / oneclbb - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS:The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall.
8 - This item is highly common. Use these less common lexical items: The aforementioned evidence examines that ... Given...
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|Co-Educaitonal Schooling Systems; integrating concepts of the future; conclusion
2 - that ( END YOUR SENTENCE HERE) co-educational institutes do not compromise the academic achievement of students, and that co-educational...
Writing Feedbackclassified9988 - Apr 6, 2014 / sandipsinh - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS; Jewelry or concert tickets; What is more important for you?
6 - Well, your topic is not exactly argumentative type, but you can have it fitting into the above structure. For...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Apr 6, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; UK TELEPHONE CALLS - three categories
5 - Let's give a try for the overview: Overall, the most popular category was recorded by local fixed line...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 5, 2014 / eddies - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; Students VS Homework - unnecessary encumbrance
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 5, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Parents vs teachers: development of a child.
4 - Your introduction does not contain what you think about the issue. It's important to have that in your intro....
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 5, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|TOEFL: Parents are the best teachers? No - the experience is.
4 - Read as many authentic texts/ sample writings of TOEFL as you can to improve your writing skills. Reading texts...
Writing FeedbackAsia97 - Apr 5, 2014 / eddies - May 8, 2014
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