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|IELTS: Global warming is warming up of the earth to produce greenhouse gases
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|IELTS: Birth rates in China and the USA from 1920 to 2000
3 - The graph illustrates birth rates in china and the USA from 1920 to 2000. Both of these countries have...
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|IELTS Graph: Changes in the birth rates of China and USA
6 - As per the basic rule, a paragraph is a collection of related sentences dealing with a single topic. You...
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|Cambridge IELTS 7 Test 2 Writing Task 2 - "fixed punishment"
5 - thanks...
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|IELTS: Happiness - factors and importance; "small gap between birth and death"
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|IELTS - the reasons why people travel and the benefits of it.
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|IELTS: Nature or nurture is more influential in children education?
6 - Education and upbringing are quintessentialquite essentialelements forfor one's development. For instance, children who are exposed to violence tend...
Writing Feedbackmeomeo3892 - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Judgement and verification. Understand concepts and ideas is MORE IMPORTANT than learning facts?
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|lifetime spent in one job or move. IELTS TASK 2
4 - Please leave a space in between your paragraphs, it would help you to impress the reader to attain good...
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|IElTS: Traveling to and from the UK chart - increasing numbers after 1999
4 - Well, I don't understand why you separate parts as A, B1,B2, C1. You seem to be having very good...
Writing Feedbackmmacyli - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|Film review - "Gone with the wind"; 'deserves to be the most successful film'
3 - When the Civil War erupts and brings devastation and poverty to the O'Hara family, Scarlett becomes the indomitable one...
Writing Feedbackrainie1911 - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|Culture in my hometown influences the increase cost of wedding party or marriage
7 - Mayday... Mayday... Mayday... all these accounts refer to one user: (all suspended ) Do you have more than...
Writing Feedbackdjayadi - May 3, 2014 / eddies - May 6, 2014
|IELTS: Ages of the populations chart - Yemen vs Italy
5 - First, you need to upload your image with the essay. Then only others can verify what you have written...
Writing Feedbackuzboy - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS: Nowadays an increasing number of people change their jobs
4 - Ok, let's do the intro as per dumi's approach; Career plays an important role in one's success (hook) ...
Writing Feedbackata2931977 - May 2, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: USA marathon records by age and gender in hours.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 2, 2014 / MisterWandering - May 2, 2014
|'robotic teacher' - Will technology replace the teacher in classroom??
Writing Feedbackanshita - May 2, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|IELTS essay: Parents should teach children about money
3 - That is the very reason why we include sample essays. Read them carefully and try to figure out...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|CAPITAL PUNISHMENT AND THE INNOCENT; 52 states that have the death penalty in US
3 - Thank You....
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|Ielts: most popular sports - the pie chart
9 - Dear Pahan and MisterWandering thank you very much! What can you say about coherence and grammar??...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 1, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 2, 2014
|Cities are the Ideal place to study Societies
8 - Yes, you've got it. Also, stick to a particular essay structure ( the one we suggested above is very...
Writing Feedbackas14 - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS: Capital Punishment - is beneficial to penalize the recidivist
5 - However, in the side of humanistic viewfrom a more humanistic perspective, every human being should be honour for...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : UK Residence travel report
3 - BritonsBritish travelerscoming highest movement revealed the number ofhave mostly traveled abroad on holiday purpose recording 20.700 holiday trips...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: To solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car
5 - ... this is contains some errors ...As result, the pollution's level will be reduced. I correct...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - May 1, 2014 / SHanafi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS_TASK2_ People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives
4 - In present-day society, to accomplish own dreams, most people hashave failed to keep a balance between their busy work...
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|IELTS TASK 1 : The percentage of school aged boys in 5 sports in the UK in 2010
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|IELTS: traffic problems - some people in the world have a car for themselves
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|'good to be realized for government' - The tax of private car owners
5 - Don't open your essay with complicated sentences :( Here you leave the reader with so many questions -...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of sports in the UK in 2010
3 - Overall, it is clearlyclear that the biggesthighest percentage of boys in both age groups were involved insport was football...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: Sport in UK - boys interested to play football
2 - The table provides information about the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|WRITING TASK 2 - VIOLENT MOVIES can cause serious social problems
8 - To begin with , there are three factors bringing about thenegative consequencesofcaused by violent films . First of all...
Writing Feedbackkamikazexoxo - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 5, 2014
|IELTS_News media is important in our society.
4 - Let's do this intro as per the structure Pahan provides :) Media plays a very dominant role in...
Writing Feedbackitsmonica - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Computer ownership - From 2002 to 2010
6 - Single graphs Introduction: Here you sould state what the graph shows short body paragraph: state the most improtant piece...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|[IELTS] schools should only teach children the academic subject
6 - Let me give you simple advice as to how your writing could be marked higher: When you deal with...
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|IELTS: Government should be considered to budget more for preventing programs
3 - after this sentence, it will seem more interesting if you add some supporting sentences in the next which...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 30, 2014 / fikri - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history.
8 - Secondly, some people think they should not change their buildings . For example, in my country there is a...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS 1: Computer ownership among educated people
5 - Double graphs Introduction: Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g "This first bart chart shows..., and the...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings = history --> it is very important to protect them
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graphs above give information about computer ownership
8 - Generally, percentage of people who haveowned a computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same astrend with...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Planning new supermarket in Pellington (by upinipin)
7 - In Task 1 of the IELTS test, you ARE NOT required to give your personal opinion. So you should...
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|IELTS: limited resources, infrastructure; traditional house vs modern apartment?
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|Mindfulness Reflection - Communications course essay
3 - Thank you for your immediate response. You brought many points to my attention that I had overlooked. ...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014 / brandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Animals should not be exploited by people
6 - In my opinion, I think that animals should have the same rights as human beings because animals are also...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: should all offenders be sent to prisons? 'alternative punishment'
7 - You have very good writing skills. Improve on the essay structure as Pahan suggested to you because this task...
Writing FeedbackYvonne_lulu - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Planning a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington.
8 - In this diagram, there is no reference to governments. So, you should not touch on anything that is...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Proposed sites for a new hypermarket in the city of Pellington.
5 - A key point in the writing task 1 is the differences and similarities. Personally, i prefer to explain the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|It is better to use money for improving our planet than space exploration
4 - There is lots of redundancy in the first part of this sentence. Keep your writing more clear and...
Writing Feedbackmrsoup90 - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|Ielts take 2 Young people attitude towards parents and grand parents
4 - Actually, both are interchangeable. Meaning, both are correct. However, in writing, it is more appropriate to use "with...
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts: invite letter: for Tom - coming for a visit in Beijing
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: People attend collage or university especially for career preparation
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|'monster if we cannot manage it well' - Movies or tv influence people's behavior
7 - Television is one of the most popular media used by any household. It has also becomingbecome an important...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine
5 - The picture depicts the hydroelectric dam process which is used for electricity. Grammar issue it's...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: paying taxes is enough contribution from citizens
8 - Hi alexwater... in this sentence, I look 2 verb through conjunction. If in the sentence use two verb,...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014
|Learn more about another country by watching tv programmes and films about it
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Water cycles - process showing how water evaporates, condenses and precipitates
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 28, 2014 / brandymhunter - May 1, 2014
|The charts: reasons why adults decide to study / shared costs of adult education
4 - The charts give information about results of a survey of adult education i will write The chart gives...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 28, 2014 / Mattgang - Apr 29, 2014
|ielts - Every year several languages die cut; Language as pride of every nation
13 - Thanks alot dumi :) now I will write another essay and will try to do like you have suggested...
Writing Feedbackmrs rafey - Apr 28, 2014 / mrs rafey - May 2, 2014
|The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999
4 - between 1996 and 1999. wrong noun phrase ; a significant increase or significantly (adv) increase (verb)...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 28, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS:The stages and equipment used in the cement-making process
6 - The diagram shows how cement is producedthe stages of cement and concrete productionand how is way of using cement...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 28, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By 2020 may be as many as 29 million vehicles.
3 - Here is the sample (page 77) retrieved from IELTS official website: ielts.org/PDF/Vol4_Report2.pdf Perhaps you may start analyzing...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 28, 2014
|Tim Hortons vs Starbucks // gr9 personal
4 - As a consumer, you'd want to buy from the company that sells products which best suits your needs as...
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