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|'dissatisfaction with the house' ; IELTS TASK 1
14 - Were I you, I would start constructing the bodies of the paragraph, like this: Para 2: Thank him for...
Writing Feedbackgoyote - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 11, 2014
|IELTS - Is social skill as important as good qualification? give your reasons.
21 - Ok, thanks Pahan!...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Mar 31, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 9, 2014
|Dormitory rooms shared by two students. Choice of room should be allowed.
6 - You need to pay attention to grammar because you tend to make some minor grammar errors; University is...
Writing FeedbackPriya1 - Mar 30, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|Relying more on technology to solve problems let human ability deteriorate.
Writing Feedbackpedramcontrol - Mar 30, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2014
|Researching the Collapse of 2008: The Rise, Fall, and Flat Line
2 - But for recent college graduates- (I prefer using a comma, instead of hyphen) the group of immediate interest for...
Writing FeedbackMitchyy - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Essay: teachers lesson vs other sources; 'one click of a button'
3 - Bad grammar. You may use these: alternative sources of information or alternative information sources or other secondary...
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|Older people lived with their children - multifarious Nursing Home Advantages
2 - Logon to EF On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay...
Writing Feedbackjassi - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|'People need food, fashion, and health' - advertisements may improve our lives
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 30, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|Internet and school teachers. 'Teachers are much more essential than computers'
2 - I can't even provide you the examples, dear :D Well, I think the best examples come from your...
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|Early children formal education - kids need to play making them happy
4 - Hallo brother. i want to comment your writing. i think, your grammar is good. But, you forget put article...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Mar 29, 2014 / ridwan - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Japanese tourists in Australia - numbers went from 0% to 6%
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 29, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|money as a cause of happiness; the important necessity in human life
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Popular events are essential; world sport events provide positive waves
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 29, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|'Internet is helping humankind for getting information important from corner of the world'
15 - A small tip when you work with the classical five paragraph essay Developing the classical five paragraph essay or...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|'various viewpoints' Extreme sports should be banned or not?
5 - The topic of extreme sports is too broad. Why? sports are considered 'extreme' is debatable. Lead your reader by...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Why students should have laptop in their learning process? Wikipedia, Google, Bing
5 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackSigit_EngLearn - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|Travel within a group with guide? 'we do not enjoy the traveling, can't go everywhere'
8 - Problems with grammatical mechanics for this sentence. One of them is called comma splice, occuring when you use...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 2, 2014
|Toefl-Teachers encouraging students to question everything 'for our knowledge, o
9 - Pay attention to the approaches we have suggested to you above as your essay looks so lengthy and you...
Writing Feedbacktairisca - Mar 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|I prefer to live in small town, big city is terrible and have much pollution
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Energy consumption by fuel in the USA (1980-2030) nuclear, solar, wind, hydro power
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Toefl evalution - STAYING IN A PLACE WHERE SEASON CHANGE OR IN A PLACE WHERE IT DO NOT.
3 - I quite agree with Pahan. This is something we often notice here in IELTS and TOEFL essays. Students tend...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|hard work vs luck - become the person what you are trying to be, not by the luck
5 - When introducing the topic and expressing your opinion, you do this in the introduction . (redo this in the...
Writing Feedbacknhando - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Boys and Girls leisure activities; computer games, netball, basketball
5 - A closer look at the counterpartboys show thatwhile coming second 17 percent of boysthemenjoys Basketball. theThe highest percentage of...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Why study at formal educations is so important? for diploma and better future.
Writing FeedbackSigit_EngLearn - Mar 28, 2014 / Sigit_EngLearn - Mar 29, 2014
|IELTS: Prediction of world population growth - 4000 millions of people in 2040.
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 1, 2014
|advertising issues; regulate a law prohibiting unacceptable advertising
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|Painter, director, writter, photographers - creatives artists, expressing their own ideas.
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Some people enjoy change, new experiences. Changing our habits is making us better
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 28, 2014 / ridwan - Apr 2, 2014
|Should wealthy nations be required to share among poorer; education and food - government
7 - You need to consider other sides of the argument and say why they're wrong not just state your own...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 28, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Some people like to do only what they already do well.
10 - [quote=]Additionally, I people need changes make our lives more beautiful and exiting. [/quote] I think if you want...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Emigration intentions, Bulgarian aged 15-60, 2001 & 2006
9 - A few words for the layout of the paragraph: Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|ToEFL EVALUTION - government money grant for arts or enviornment safety.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: How many people listened to different types of music in Tokyo last month
3 - As can be seen from the table, a massivea large majority of 79% of males use Mp3-players to listenfor...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 28, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS; Learning with a teacher or learning alone - Which one do you prefer?
5 - None of these sentences provide any idea to the reader. You need to improve clarity of your sentences...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Main reason for study; different age groups; employer support
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 28, 2014
|Teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Good Idea? Knowledge vs Money.
8 - Hi Mrs.Ira, I think if you want to use the affirmative statements connected with and, after and you...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 27, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this?
5 - Pay serious attention to improve your essay structure. Hope you would follow what dumi has suggested. That structure contains...
Writing FeedbackStella Croatia - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|small town vs big city - pros and cons
4 - Small towns and big citycities have very different environmentsthat it is very different. The big city hasis subject to...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 28, 2014
|Spending money on six consumer goods in Europe between 1980 -1990. 'British spent more'
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 27, 2014 / dumi - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS: Children to learn about money via parents - educate about the significance of money
10 - Amazing score :-) let me try your idea in my next writing. Thanks for sharing your experience....
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Mar 27, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 1, 2014
|My Life Goals; I came to realize my passion in the Entertainment Industry and in Computing
4 - I have edited few words: there are lots of unsolved problem which needs to be giving a solution In...
Writing Feedbackdejiman - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|About my self - education; parent; activities; strength; weakness; end notes
Writing Feedbackdejiman - Mar 27, 2014 / dumi - Apr 7, 2014
|Toefl essay. Computer vs book - chose to buy computers
3 - It is nicer when you conclude the intro with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. 5...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|TOEFL: 'my rest time' - Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
7 - I think the structure suggested by Dumi can help you a lot, Asia97. And below is not a complete...
Writing FeedbackAsia97 - Mar 27, 2014 / Rolla Ngo - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS: Who concerns issues more? Young people or elderly people?; equally concerned
NEW - Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than...
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|IELTS-GT: Women in Navy or Air Forces - should not be allowed; instead: career, children
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 1, 2014
|Commonly understood; Game are as important for adults as they are for children.
6 - Yes, actually the most important part in the intro is the background. It is the skeleton and other...
Writing Feedbackidok - Mar 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|The 21st century; world always changes - technology, transportation, and humankind
6 - Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|Toefl evalution - God is too large to fit in one religion
5 - Firstly, nobody have ever seen god except their imaginations, faith or beliefs , probably that is the reason god...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|food security / sustainability assignment; scenario
2 - An interesting way to look at this might be to look into urban agriculture; people in cities are looking...
Writing Feedbackfeversome - Mar 26, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 29, 2014
|food from restaurants or from home - it doesn't matter; food just must have good nutrition
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 26, 2014 / ernhy - Mar 27, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love'
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 26, 2014 / juliajonk5 - Apr 4, 2014
|IELTS: The same money for sport activities or libraries? They assemble money from learner
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 28, 2014
|What are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'care your attitude to other people'
7 - sing or plur...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 26, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|Toefl essay - CELEBRITY OR ATHLETE - WHOM DO YOU WANT TO MEET AND WHY?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS exam; changes to the educational system; good & bad effects
3 - I feel this sentence is incomplete, disrupting the free flow of the ideas in this paragraph. ...
Writing Feedbackgoraya - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|"I am glad that my mother didn't give up"; most intelligent and beautiful lady in our town
3 - Today, as I write this, I recall the memories that were never swept out of my mind. (stop here)whileI...
Writing FeedbackaliMurtaza - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Apr 10, 2014
|price of petrol vs traffic & pollution - temporary solution
3 - In my opinion, the hike of petrol's price has various effects to people. Spelling: sollution (solution)...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 26, 2014
|Traditional and International - Why do we need music? 'essence of individuals and society'
3 - From the beginning of civilisationcivilization music was one of the most fundairtentalfundamentalpartsaspects of our society. Every one listen to...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: High price of petrol as sollution the traffic and pollution;the Nederland
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 26, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 27, 2014
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