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|IELTS: leisure time - joblessness people take the highest place in the race
5 - Yes, Dumi is right. It is hard to share thoughtful feedback for your IELTS visual writing if the...
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS: 'car industry is developing extremely fast' ; traffic problems
7 - which every family pays / which all families pay Today, income taxes, which every family pays are...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 7, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|Single career is an old fashion - 'being an expert in one specified sphere'
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 7, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 9, 2014
|Work or travel between high school & university; beneficial or unfavorable year
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|'Gender and jobs relate to gender' - Equal numbers of male and female students
Writing FeedbackTruong Nguyen - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS: University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet..
5 - Eddy and Dumi, thanks a lot buddies! : ) Can somebody give me an approximate band, which I will...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 6, 2014 / techgeek - Apr 7, 2014
|The extended family is less important now; 'urban life / communication tools'
Writing Feedbackramshah - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 7, 2014
|Increasing weight, decreasing health; 'can't find absolutely healthy person'
4 - Today it seems to be impossible to meet an absolutely healthy person who is absolutely healthy , (1)( stop...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS "a subject that you haven't opportunity to study" study religion more deep
6 - You should utilize the grammar and spell check features of Microsoft Word to correct as many spelling and grammar...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|'Advertisements make people feel like they are successful and special person'
Writing Feedbackoneclbb - Apr 6, 2014 / oneclbb - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS:The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall.
8 - This item is highly common. Use these less common lexical items: The aforementioned evidence examines that ... Given...
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|Co-Educaitonal Schooling Systems; integrating concepts of the future; conclusion
2 - that ( END YOUR SENTENCE HERE) co-educational institutes do not compromise the academic achievement of students, and that co-educational...
Writing Feedbackclassified9988 - Apr 6, 2014 / sandipsinh - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS; Jewelry or concert tickets; What is more important for you?
6 - Well, your topic is not exactly argumentative type, but you can have it fitting into the above structure. For...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Apr 6, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; UK TELEPHONE CALLS - three categories
5 - Let's give a try for the overview: Overall, the most popular category was recorded by local fixed line...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 5, 2014 / eddies - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; Students VS Homework - unnecessary encumbrance
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 5, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Parents vs teachers: development of a child.
4 - Your introduction does not contain what you think about the issue. It's important to have that in your intro....
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 5, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|TOEFL: Parents are the best teachers? No - the experience is.
4 - Read as many authentic texts/ sample writings of TOEFL as you can to improve your writing skills. Reading texts...
Writing FeedbackAsia97 - Apr 5, 2014 / eddies - May 8, 2014
|Many teachers assign homework to students every day. 'Valuable exercise'
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 5, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS, TASK; 'In Indonesia, child workers are still the one of the big issues'
3 - Hey Friend, please have this note: When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your...
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 5, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|Directors of large companies receive high salary; 'Employees are working hard'
9 - Well , I wrote like this because I am supporting normal workers rather than directors, can I write like...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 4, 2014 / ammus1 - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS: Men and women are having children late. 'it can be more beneficial'
Writing Feedbackgggooniel - Apr 4, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 10, 2014
|ielts writing task - Causes of obesity and worsening people's health and fitness
5 - My best advice for you is that do not worry about how well your writing would impress the reader....
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 4, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|IELTS; tuition fees, who are responsible to pay?
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Apr 4, 2014 / Nhasir Rahmatia - Apr 7, 2014
|'prophet Adam' - famous person from history
9 - You need to introduce the issue completely. Also, it is good to conclude your introduction stating your opinion though...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 4, 2014 / eddies - May 8, 2014
|'Game is imagination bowed three dimension'; important for adults and children
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 4, 2014 / eddies - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS - governments or individuals should take care of environment? 'equal role'
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Apr 3, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 9, 2014
|IELTS; schools as oppose to parents; different forms of violence
6 - Well, if you struggle so much for finding a most appropriate hook, don't trouble yourself. What you can...
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|IELTS: 'satisfaction'; People are never satisfied with what they have
8 - On the one side, I think that some persons want to reach something that they want. They will not...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 3, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS 'helicopter model'; General test Writing Task 1: complaint letter
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Apr 3, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS; 'I can't think too quiet' - Making important decision alone.
7 - Personally, sometimes I cannot make decision without askingto my best friend. So, my choice is always between agree and...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS task 1: Two possible sites for the supermarket
4 - Hey, sure :D This is excellent :) You have followed the most appropriate structure, good clear sentences, good...
Writing Feedbackpuman - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|Ielts : academic writing ; Learning A New Language Fast and Properly
2 - You cannot use "I, you, we" in IELTS, and must change to objective words. eg. Some say..., most people...
Writing Feedbackxlife - Apr 3, 2014 / puman - Apr 3, 2014
|Ielts: Causes of worldwide land degradation; 'over-grazing'
3 - As a salient example, I can give Europe. Because this continent's lands are do not begin a sentence with...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 3, 2014 / codeblue - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS: 'Woman'; behavior of children and the role of a modern mother
6 - Well I attended my IELTS test on saturday. The first task was a line chart representing the number of...
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Apr 3, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 7, 2014
|Telecomm. effects; 'Edison would be astonished if he saw the use of telephone'
3 - Where is your prompt? Anyway, I will just concentrate on syntactical principles (grammar, mechanics, sentence structure). What has...
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 3, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS; Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg - succesful people who earned a lot of money
5 - A tip dealing with EF: Every time you want to submit writing, you should always include the full prompt...
Writing Feedbackundral - Apr 3, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS: solution for arresting traffic & pollution?; 'proper mass transportation'
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|'heat-debated topic'; Everyone has the right to get university education?
5 - I have seen this phrase from different corners of the world. It is too common for words. You'd...
Writing Feedbackclairpure - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit'
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: What gift would you give to a child develop? 'It is computer'
5 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|Museum is a place that retain of history object; Visiting museums during travel.
3 - It is always good to mention the purpose of writing your essay in the title itself. For e.g. IELTS,...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 3, 2014
|Large shopping center in your neighborhood; 'it can increase province income'
7 - Well, you conclude this intro with a question to the reader. However, your prompt expects you to answer...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 9, 2014
|Cambridge English IELTS 9, Test 1; island/ tourist facilities
5 - I like the notes eddies have provided you :) You need to follow dumi's suggestion seriously. Your...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|Toefl essay - Science or art - contributed more in the society
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / Jaanu - Apr 15, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - qualities of good co -worker. 'cooperative and compatible'
3 - Well, compatibility is not actually a skill. Compatibility means that a state in which two things are able to...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|'relieve tension' - Going to a new school is exciting / frustratating
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this for TOEFL or IELTS? It is always better the...
Writing FeedbackSandP - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|Life comes in different shapes and sizes; staying in one place or moving- choice
4 - This is a pretty confusing sentence :( You should present your ideas more clearly. You have to rephrase...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|TOEFL iBT - Saving/Spending money
Writing FeedbackLeonP - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS: phone calls in UK; 35 billions minutes in 2002
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Apr 2, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 2, 2014
|Your teamwork experience that you have learned the most from (300ws)
3 - Thank you Asia97 :) What about the body and the conclusion? Please give me a piece of advise if...
Writing FeedbackRolla Ngo - Apr 2, 2014 / Rolla Ngo - Apr 3, 2014
|Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality; complaint by writing more effective
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / BOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014
|Budget control; it is better to enjoy your money than you save your money?
5 - I actually wanted to ask you this question in my earlier comment, but somehow I have missed it out...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS ; Various genre of music ; Traditional more important that modern
6 - You can make this sentence much more interesting had you presented it is in a simpler way. Also,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|Earning of money differs from person to person; 'money doesn't give success'
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful....
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|IELTS Task 1 : Adult educational survey report
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|Many teachers assign homework to students every day; 'not important in Physics'
3 - Some people think homework can help students toexercise comprehension toward lessons.comprehend and memorize what they learn in the classroom....
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 2, 2014
|Toefl - enforce limit the use of automobile for the betterment of our earth
4 - The second reason is that increasedinincrease in number of automobile has produced inconveniencyinconvenience in our life. We cannot...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 13, 2014
|impressive buildings are important for a city or hospitals and schools
5 - After perusing the prompt, I conclude that the essay should be written to respond to the ideas: Money should...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|not to separate influence of parents & school on child; useful member of society
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 1, 2014 / BINGBINGLIANG - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS; electricity volume for two major seasons in UK
2 - First, a few admin requests :) 1. Have a more meaningful title for your essay. This one has been...
Writing Feedbackgggooniel - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
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