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|Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?
3 - Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL: "My shy girlfriend" - people should be honest
3 - I, too, do agree. You have to clearly present the prompt in the introduction. I think that sort...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2014
|Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.
3 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. ...
Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|IELTS - Happiness is one of the most vital factors for a worth-living life
4 - Additional comment: I think this part is not related to the topic. We are talking about factors of happiness,...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Sep 17, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014
|The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS
2 - The pie chart reports main causes of worldwide agricultural land degradation and while the table shows main reasons...
Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014 / Kian1378 - Sep 17, 2014
|I went to Thailand this summer for a school service trip - Narrative Essay
6 - For the first sentence, instead of directly restating the question, try to change it so that you are answering...
Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Sep 16, 2014 / m924 - Sep 20, 2014
|A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.
12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 18, 2014
|John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task
5 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence...
Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS practice - Families are a group of people bonded by blood relations
5 - Although vangiespen has revised this part, I would like to give additional comments. Firstly, it is a fragment....
Writing Feedbacknareshkrp - Sep 16, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 9, 2014
|GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities
3 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty
5 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some words...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014
|Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities
8 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some...
Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2
2 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment
3 - When it comes to an introductory statement, you are asked to introduce the topic. Most students simply paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|Grandmother, the inspiration of my life (her pictures, love, and sacrifice)
5 - 1. who loves me and sacrifice (sacrifices) for me and my father most (not needed- or: more than...
Writing Feedbackvietanhphan - Sep 15, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 29, 2014
|'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries
Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014 / masghar - Sep 15, 2014
|Drugs, alcohol and messy sex lives - Celebrities news has negative impacts on children; [IELTS]
7 - Thanks for your comment. Yes recently I have realized that maybe it is better to develop one idea further,...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Sep 15, 2014 / zjxhz - Oct 6, 2014
|What should kids do when parents are too busy to accompany their child? TOEFL EXAM
8 - Focus on your beginning and conclusion. Your beginning was not abrupt which is good. But the conclusion is not...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 15, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Sep 19, 2014
|My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition
2 - When e ating and drinking, we need use money. Similarly, it is also necessary when giving an fancy gift...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 15, 2014
|Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.
3 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014 / fikri - Sep 15, 2014
|Free time or money? Spending time with family brings more advantages for both workers and companies
3 - Omit base on the hours, so as to avoid writing redundancy. Everyone knows that wage is according the...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS Writting task 1: UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
7 - You write well. However, you need to pay particular attention to the appropriate language of change. Please allow me...
Writing Feedbackvandon92 - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|A letter to a pen friend whom you plan to visit (my IELTS score?)
Writing Feedbackmasghar - Sep 15, 2014 / Vera Canderine - Oct 11, 2014
|'It was at that moment I realized my mistake' - sample from my autobiography; college essay
Writing Feedbackjakobymeyers - Sep 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000
NEW - *The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.* ...
Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Sep 14, 2014 / — -
|School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow
3 - Related: Essay ideas - students should have more input into the school curriculum Greetings! It depends in...
Writing Feedbackboo2601 - Sep 14, 2014 / boo2601 - Sep 15, 2014
|I'm a nice person that is always trying to help others. Self-evaluation for my teacher
5 - This is incomplete. What are you going to accomplish? Your goals? If that so, better state it clearly...
Writing Feedbackronny12 - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Cars have had a greater impact on the society than airplanes.
2 - Admittedly, automobiles have greatly facilitated our lives,and hence definitely have a great impact on our society. Statement...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.
4 - the new version! Nowadays automobiles are the most important type of transportation. However, automobiles have an important effect on...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 15, 2014
|The law need the flexibility in each verdict of criminal behaviours
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
|Writing Task 1 - IELTS Academic - Post-school qualification in Australia according to gender 1999
3 - If I were you, I prefer writing an overview paragraph instead of conclusion paragraph. Writing task 1 needs...
Writing Feedbackbocahnakal - Sep 13, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|GRE Issue: Great nations should be assessed by general welfare of its people
2 - You have a solid start for your introduction. There is a slight problem though. You were supposed to agree...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 13, 2014
|Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'
6 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays...
Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Responsible tourists to preserve about culture and environment
5 - This is a very meticulous essay and then I suggest that you pay more attention concerning the overall arguments...
Writing Feedbacksyabring - Jan 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|which one have an important role in order to success of students in school?classmate or parents?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 12, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 13, 2014
|[TOEFL] 'Firstly, people want to have more knowledge' - why attend to college or university?
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 12, 2014
|[TOEFL] Parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life.
6 - Lian, I have the same problems with my essay writting as you do. Sometimes I even realize that I...
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|GRE: It is very responsible task to create school nationwide curriculum
2 - Xatutik, while you present an immediate and effective body paragraph to the prompt, you still need to establish your...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Young people and their participation in helping their communities
3 - I agree with xatutik. While you presented a well thought out essay. There was a failure on your part...
Writing Feedbackmtkee - May 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility
3 - Louisa, I am very grateful for your support! Frankly, it takes me more time to write an essay than...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|IELTS: "Countryside resort"; Where would you like to spend you unforgettable holidays next summer?
5 - By way of personal explanation,summer holiday is one of the best possible ways to get away from the...
Writing FeedbackLuke Cameron Jr - Sep 11, 2014 / fikri - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: Scandals are really a way of information spreading, yet it often spread unwarranted information
2 - I have a few suggestions and revisions that I believe you can use to further improve the content of...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|New seafood restaurant: profit or no profit
5 - ok thank you...
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 11, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Public health. Should government introduce a law or is it a personal issue?
5 - Without government's attention to public health, epidemic diseases could be catastrophic. Please choose the first statement of the...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
|IELTS: we can not forcedly put the same numbers of males and females into every subject
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|Do you think it is necessary to take an entrance exam to enter a college or university?
4 - I tried to revise your opinion paragraph. Please look it over. I think I was able to keep the...
Writing FeedbackLourdes - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|[GRE ISSUE] Government regulation in the economy.
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|Toefl - Replacing old buildings is important for any city but it should not affect historic houses
9 - Having taken the TOEFL in the past, I can understand your concerns. The key to passing the TOEFL lies...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|'Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions' - GRE Argument Essay
2 - You wrote a very good argument that could refute the claims of the author. However, your arguments also lacked...
Writing Feedbackisyemky - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|Fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing cloths
4 - Frankly, I am not familiar with IELTS requirements, but it seems to me that your essay is too short....
Writing Feedbacknazanin5879 - Sep 10, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|The author's conclusion about woven baskets is based on the assumptions that are not very strong
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 10, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: "what you should believe finally is not others, not any book, but only you" knowledge gained
Writing Feedbackyocoambush - Sep 10, 2014 / yocoambush - Sep 10, 2014
|People care more about public recognition than about money
Writing Feedbackkarenchen - Sep 9, 2014 / dumi - Sep 10, 2014
|The colours and sounds of Rain - imaginative writing
2 - Rain is not unusual weather. The prompt is asking you to write about an extreme weather experience. Most likely...
Writing FeedbackAlleo - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|We are bombarded with news every day, ranging from the frivolous to the catastrophic - serious issue
3 - Thank you! :-) I understood that I have to show direct answers to the prompt, and I am thinking...
Writing Feedbackuic - Sep 9, 2014 / uic - Sep 9, 2014
|TOEFL - There are many parents that invest more and more money to prosper their children
2 - You presented a good but somewhat unclear discussion about the topic so I tried to clean it up for...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|Eating at home is far better than to dine in a restaurants - IELTS writing task 2
Writing Feedbackgela07 - Sep 9, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 9, 2014
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