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|IELTS task 1: Two possible sites for the supermarket
4 - Hey, sure :D This is excellent :) You have followed the most appropriate structure, good clear sentences, good...
Writing Feedbackpuman - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|Ielts : academic writing ; Learning A New Language Fast and Properly
2 - You cannot use "I, you, we" in IELTS, and must change to objective words. eg. Some say..., most people...
Writing Feedbackxlife - Apr 3, 2014 / puman - Apr 3, 2014
|Ielts: Causes of worldwide land degradation; 'over-grazing'
3 - As a salient example, I can give Europe. Because this continent's lands are do not begin a sentence with...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 3, 2014 / codeblue - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS: 'Woman'; behavior of children and the role of a modern mother
6 - Well I attended my IELTS test on saturday. The first task was a line chart representing the number of...
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Apr 3, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 7, 2014
|Telecomm. effects; 'Edison would be astonished if he saw the use of telephone'
3 - Where is your prompt? Anyway, I will just concentrate on syntactical principles (grammar, mechanics, sentence structure). What has...
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 3, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS; Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg - succesful people who earned a lot of money
5 - A tip dealing with EF: Every time you want to submit writing, you should always include the full prompt...
Writing Feedbackundral - Apr 3, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS: solution for arresting traffic & pollution?; 'proper mass transportation'
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|'heat-debated topic'; Everyone has the right to get university education?
5 - I have seen this phrase from different corners of the world. It is too common for words. You'd...
Writing Feedbackclairpure - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit'
10 - Well, the last sentence of your intro is not serving any purpose for your essay and instead it breaks...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: What gift would you give to a child develop? 'It is computer'
5 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|Museum is a place that retain of history object; Visiting museums during travel.
3 - It is always good to mention the purpose of writing your essay in the title itself. For e.g. IELTS,...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 3, 2014
|Large shopping center in your neighborhood; 'it can increase province income'
7 - Well, you conclude this intro with a question to the reader. However, your prompt expects you to answer...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 9, 2014
|Cambridge English IELTS 9, Test 1; island/ tourist facilities
5 - I like the notes eddies have provided you :) You need to follow dumi's suggestion seriously. Your...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|Toefl essay - Science or art - contributed more in the society
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / Jaanu - Apr 15, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - qualities of good co -worker. 'cooperative and compatible'
3 - Well, compatibility is not actually a skill. Compatibility means that a state in which two things are able to...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|'relieve tension' - Going to a new school is exciting / frustratating
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this for TOEFL or IELTS? It is always better the...
Writing FeedbackSandP - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|Life comes in different shapes and sizes; staying in one place or moving- choice
4 - This is a pretty confusing sentence :( You should present your ideas more clearly. You have to rephrase...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|TOEFL iBT - Saving/Spending money
Writing FeedbackLeonP - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS: phone calls in UK; 35 billions minutes in 2002
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Apr 2, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 2, 2014
|Your teamwork experience that you have learned the most from (300ws)
3 - Thank you Asia97 :) What about the body and the conclusion? Please give me a piece of advise if...
Writing FeedbackRolla Ngo - Apr 2, 2014 / Rolla Ngo - Apr 3, 2014
|Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality; complaint by writing more effective
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / BOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014
|Budget control; it is better to enjoy your money than you save your money?
5 - I actually wanted to ask you this question in my earlier comment, but somehow I have missed it out...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 8, 2014
|IELTS ; Various genre of music ; Traditional more important that modern
6 - You can make this sentence much more interesting had you presented it is in a simpler way. Also,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|Earning of money differs from person to person; 'money doesn't give success'
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful....
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|IELTS Task 1 : Adult educational survey report
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|Many teachers assign homework to students every day; 'not important in Physics'
3 - Some people think homework can help students toexercise comprehension toward lessons.comprehend and memorize what they learn in the classroom....
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 2, 2014
|Toefl - enforce limit the use of automobile for the betterment of our earth
4 - The second reason is that increasedinincrease in number of automobile has produced inconveniencyinconvenience in our life. We cannot...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 13, 2014
|impressive buildings are important for a city or hospitals and schools
5 - After perusing the prompt, I conclude that the essay should be written to respond to the ideas: Money should...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 6, 2014
|not to separate influence of parents & school on child; useful member of society
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 1, 2014 / BINGBINGLIANG - Apr 3, 2014
|IELTS; electricity volume for two major seasons in UK
2 - First, a few admin requests :) 1. Have a more meaningful title for your essay. This one has been...
Writing Feedbackgggooniel - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|'special talents' parent and family background vs teachers influence on children
8 - As professional teachers, it is obvious thatEvidently, they, professional teachers, have adequate teaching techniques which can help young people...
Writing Feedbackjack zhao - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 7, 2014
|IELTS; Parents are the best teachers? Use specific reasons and examples
Writing Feedbackxingshigang - Apr 1, 2014 / xingshigang - Apr 11, 2014
|'Today 's children are tomorrow's citizen' - good members of SOCIETY
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 1, 2014 / ammus1 - Apr 1, 2014
|Television should have only shows and entertainment programs?
Writing FeedbackMari5464 - Apr 1, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 14, 2014
|Advantages outweigh the disadvantages to starting foreign language early
3 - and, my conclusion style will be like: In conclusion, despite that fact ... may be beneficial for...., ...are...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 1, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 1, 2014
|'culture of conserve'; company should give money to support the arts
8 - Well, you use many inappropriate words in your sentences that completely destroy your ideas and the flow of your...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 2, 2014
|IELTS: CHALLENGE - some people are attracted to dangerous sports/ activities
5 - My teacher said that introduction is a part to catch reader attention. So, making the good introduction is...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 1, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|Controversial: Teenagers are working while they are still students
4 - Pahan is right. I too think this phrase adds no value. they can arrange time when they should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS: Young people commiting serious crimes should be punished as adults
9 - Yes, she is right. When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout,...
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|WHAT SHOULD YOU CONSIDER TO SET A NEW BUSINESS ?
Writing FeedbackNgochieu - Mar 31, 2014 / Ngochieu - Apr 1, 2014
|Toefl - Is technology creating single world culture? fights for culture & belief
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Toefl - 'members can learn more' - live a life without any burdens
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better to be a member of a group than...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014 / — -
|Toefl - Language plays a significant role in our lives
Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 7, 2014
|Article: "What do you want to when you grow up?" medical student
5 - Doctor is one of the highest paying professions, (stop here) For example,thean average family doctor has an annual salary...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Toefl - teacher evaluation; students can learn more
3 - I totally agree with Pahan. Alignment between your writing and the prompt is a mandatory requirement for this...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS essay - why adults decide to study; shared cost of each course
6 - Hope this can cover the data presented in the bar chart: A subject's preference breaks a record as the...
Writing Feedbackshikamaru - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 10, 2014
|IELTS: unemployment rate comparaison between US and Japan mar.93-mar.99
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 31, 2014 / crystal941 - Apr 1, 2014
|'we gather in living room and talk about daily activities' - most important room
Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014 / dumi - Apr 6, 2014
|IELTS: languages die out annually. The greatest victims: history and culture
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 31, 2014 / puman - Mar 31, 2014
|conventional medicine, is it safe or not?
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 31, 2014 / dumi - Mar 31, 2014
|I agree with the selective roommate system; Dormitory rooms shared by 2 students
4 - Well, the first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout...
Writing Feedbackpedramcontrol - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 9, 2014
|'dissatisfaction with the house' ; IELTS TASK 1
14 - Were I you, I would start constructing the bodies of the paragraph, like this: Para 2: Thank him for...
Writing Feedbackgoyote - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 11, 2014
|IELTS - Is social skill as important as good qualification? give your reasons.
21 - Ok, thanks Pahan!...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Mar 31, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 9, 2014
|Dormitory rooms shared by two students. Choice of room should be allowed.
6 - You need to pay attention to grammar because you tend to make some minor grammar errors; University is...
Writing FeedbackPriya1 - Mar 30, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|Relying more on technology to solve problems let human ability deteriorate.
Writing Feedbackpedramcontrol - Mar 30, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2014
|Researching the Collapse of 2008: The Rise, Fall, and Flat Line
2 - But for recent college graduates- (I prefer using a comma, instead of hyphen) the group of immediate interest for...
Writing FeedbackMitchyy - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Essay: teachers lesson vs other sources; 'one click of a button'
3 - Bad grammar. You may use these: alternative sources of information or alternative information sources or other secondary...
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|Older people lived with their children - multifarious Nursing Home Advantages
2 - Logon to EF On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay...
Writing Feedbackjassi - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|'People need food, fashion, and health' - advertisements may improve our lives
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 30, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|Internet and school teachers. 'Teachers are much more essential than computers'
2 - I can't even provide you the examples, dear :D Well, I think the best examples come from your...
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
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