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|Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods.
4 - Yes, this is very important for us to provide you with meaningful feedbacks. Use the "Attach file (s)"...
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: The best period to start learning languages?
2 - you're far better writer comparing to me :D your passage's structure is well-organized and the words used are flexible,...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 15, 2014 / Pyon9x - May 15, 2014
|Advantages and disavantages of gap year
7 - Here, you are using the same second person voice (you) which refers to your examiner (as dumi has...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 15, 2014 / Pahan - May 17, 2014
|Toefl: you have received a gift of money - jewelleries are always a asset for us
4 - Everyone loves to have gifts. weWe had gotten many gifts in our life, some may be money while some...
Writing Feedbackbrisky - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|Classical Conditioning Narrative - Psychology 101 Course
2 - Classical Conditioning isas defined by Gerrig (2012) asis "a type of learning in which a conditioned response comes to...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - May 15, 2014 / niesaysi - May 17, 2014
|The table subordinate to Somecoutry's people
Writing FeedbackAmmapurnamasari - May 15, 2014 / Ammapurnamasari - May 24, 2014
|IELTS: traditional skills and ways of life die out because of technology
5 - Hi, I am also working on Ielts preparation. Very happy to read your eaasy and share my knowledge with...
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 15, 2014 / zeable - May 17, 2014
|[Toefl] It is not necessary for university students to attend classes ......
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS task 2: video games provide harmless fun
Writing FeedbackStarSea - May 15, 2014 / StarSea - May 29, 2014
|[TOEFL WRITING] Technology create more problem than it solves?
Writing Feedbackvincethahaha - May 14, 2014 / Tiffany Lin - May 18, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TAST 2：REPEATED OFFENSE
2 - The best solution tofor this problem is to make prisons fulfill the function of rehabilitation.change the prison environment to...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Student's Executive Summary (Finance and Business Marketing)
2 - It takes into consideration that CSL is not a part of the labour intensive industry and cannot use direct...
Writing FeedbackBachChaconne2 - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Are changes negative or positive???
6 - Hi, this eassy is well written, also your grammar is very good. Only one sentence concern me if I...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 14, 2014 / zeable - May 16, 2014
|GRE Argument Essay: 'A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian .....'
5 - Actually, this is grammatically accepted. "Survey" is a noun that modifies methodologies. Thus, 'survey' is a modifier. ...
Writing FeedbackShourya - May 14, 2014 / niesaysi - May 19, 2014
|IELTS: The proportion of postgraduate students owning a computer
4 - Yes, the intro and overview look fine. Always mention the specific time period in the intro ; ...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL: schools should provide equal financial support to different courses
3 - Yes, as Pahan has mentioned above, I too feel you need to improve your essay structure since there are...
Writing FeedbackTiffany Lin - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Problems overrellance on cars can cause/suggest at least one possible solution.
Writing FeedbackBob brother - May 14, 2014 / Bob brother - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL- studnets prefer home-schooling rather than trditional schools
3 - ... Pahan has a very valid point. I too guess your topic is on which system, homeschooling or traditional,...
Writing Feedbackthalac - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: animal experiments & animal rights
7 - .... LOL ... looks like Pahan got so excited over your comment :D .... No wonder because he keeps...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|IELTS - Internet will end the era of newspapers and magazines
Writing Feedbackrims - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|GRE: fields of study in which students are unlikely to succeed should be banned
5 - Based on this knowledge, they can better choose their field of education for themselves rather than an outsider choosing...
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|GRE Essay: major cities study to learn characteristics of a society
5 - That is something I did not think about while writing the paragraph. I'll think of something else to include...
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 13, 2014 / KMeghji - May 20, 2014
|Essay about freedom - Can anyone look over my paragraph?
3 - i also thought about doing this but it kind of contradicts my statement in the paragraph so i couldn't...
Writing Feedbackeldlflfk - May 13, 2014 / eldlflfk - May 13, 2014
|Line graph for the consumption and production of energy
3 - Pay attention to the approach that Pahan suggested above. .... This is your overview and therefore it...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Not believe everything in newspaper, it's form of business; the goal: gain money
4 - You need to improve the presentation of this sentence as it needs to act as an interesting hook...
Writing Feedbackodon - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL; More important to work quickly& risk making mistakes
7 - The most important task here is to complete your essay with must features. As I see, your essay need...
Writing Feedbackfarshid_t - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|Both Working parents and problems faced and how does it effect family
Writing Feedbacksreddy - May 13, 2014 / sreddy - May 14, 2014
|Traffic problems in city; new roads and railway networks, sub ways and skylines
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Advantages and Disadvantages of using Machines?
Writing Feedbackquocdai - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Write a letter to your manager asking for a training course
Writing Feedbackrims - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: Honey bees life cycle
4 - The first stage of the life cycle is startedoccurs when the queen layinglays 1 or 2 eggs once in...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|Concrete produce: cement, water, sand and gravel are poured to a concrete mixer
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - May 12, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - May 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Encouraging sense of competition or cooperation in childhood
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / rims - May 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Garlsdon City on plan to build a supermarket
3 - As per the map's featuresAccording to the map, the suggestedproposed location (no comma) S2, for building a new supermarket(no...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 12, 2014
|Should all young adults require to perform national services?
3 - Also, what is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this a practice essay for TOEFL or IELTS? If...
Writing Feedbackhere2study - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 15, 2014
|IELTS: 'right proportion of raw materials'; Cement and Concrete production
Writing Feedbackandial - May 12, 2014 / candy07 - May 16, 2014
|The more and more importance of Practical skills
Writing FeedbackNguyen Cong - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Brave new world and Children of men; Dystopia Comparison Essay
Writing Feedbackvincentvincent - May 12, 2014 / dil77 - May 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: factor of choosing a career.
9 - This sentence is pretty long. When you write longer sentences, the reader has to keep memorizing the details...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|the charts below give information about travel to and from UK.
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - May 12, 2014 / SHanafi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS : An enjoyable job or a good salary? Discuss both sides and give your view
Writing Feedbackharry137181143 - May 12, 2014 / harry137181143 - May 13, 2014
|Misbehaviour of students at school
4 - Nevertheless, issues relating to bad behavior of students can be addressed to a great extent. First,...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS: UK Tourism (Departure and Arrival)
4 - As per the line graph, the number UK citizens who visitedof visiting abroad among UK residentsslightly increased from around...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS task 2:should physical education be optional in school or not?
3 - ... Well, can you please give us the references where you find this information. It is worth for...
Writing FeedbackAndy_Vo - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 12, 2014
|IELTS - Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects
9 - .... good :) As an example, a student who isstudents preparing for deliveringto deliver a speech on...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 13, 2014
|TOEFL: Teaching is harder than it was in the past.
Writing FeedbackNancy is here - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Total school spending in the UK
Writing Feedbackandial - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS: How Dangerous Products are Dealt with in Three Countries
4 - In the Overview, you need to talk about the most obvious trend/ trends without any details. It is not...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 11, 2014
|Is international sport releasing patriotic emotions? 'fans support their teams'
4 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. (Hook) For some people, sport events heighten international tensions....
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 12, 2014
|CBEST essay - Give entering college students advice
3 - Hi Nguyen Cong, Thank you for your comment. I think I still need more improvemenst when writing my...
Writing Feedbackokdeerpass - May 11, 2014 / okdeerpass - May 13, 2014
|IELTS: Children from poorer families are more successful in the future life.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 14, 2014
|Some people say the world would be a better place without private cars
3 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of...
Writing Feedbackulviqulieff - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 12, 2014
|"pursuit of happiness" - Need some relevant examples for this SAT essay!
2 - It is necessary to give example from the history? Can't you give a general example on happiness? I do...
Writing Feedbackmaheenatiq - May 11, 2014 / here2study - May 11, 2014
|Being a celebrity has plenty of benefits than downsides
6 - ... ok, let's do this para according to the approach I suggested; First, the celebrities are generally very...
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|TOEFL - Employers should provide smoking areas for their employees
4 - Cigarettes smokingSmoking causes deadly diseases like lung cancer, heart and lung diseases. IncidenceCases of lung cancer hashave been increased...
Writing Feedbackbrisky - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 13, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Recent medical problems and sedentary lifestyle.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / candy07 - May 16, 2014
|Ielts task 2: What factors measure country's status.
3 - You write very well. First, you follow a good approach and your essay is well structured. Second, you have...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / Pahan - May 11, 2014
|IELTS: Foreign language instruction should begin in kindergarten
Writing Feedbackkace - May 11, 2014 / Pahan - May 11, 2014
|IELTS Task - CHANGING CAREER AND PLACE OF LIVING ; POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?
7 - Change is an inevitable part of life . To excel in their lives, many some people now a daysnowadayseasily...
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS - Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools
13 - Thank you so much Pahan, Dumi Yep I am lucky Waiting for other paragraphs... I hope the model essay...
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 10, 2014 / candy07 - May 12, 2014
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