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|if you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor? toefl essay
4 - Well, I think you have covered all these things in your essay. I find this is very well written....
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 8, 2014 / dumi - Mar 9, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: taking risk vs careful planning
7 - This preposition can be used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have said, not quoted from your...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 8, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS Writing: Qualities for Becoming Successful Can't Learn At A University?
6 - in this part, you should state what mean being successful and what qualities associated with success. then link...
Writing Feedbackieltsfighter - Mar 7, 2014 / agi - Mar 9, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Flowchart process of academic writing
6 - Thank you, Tuan. You correct the grammar and syntax wholly. I found in the dictionary, and i consider ...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 7, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 11, 2014
|IELTS task 1: How a thermos flask works.
4 - Next part is called vacuum flask THAT IS OR WHICH IS divided into two parts: This part is divided...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 18, 2014
|SAT ; Suspect honesty and motives of people?
2 - Well, you start with expressing your opinion. However, in my view, it is good to open your essay...
Writing FeedbackThePariah - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The traditional skills and ways of life die out.
4 - Well, this sounds like an example and not a reason that you use to justify a particular opinion....
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 10, 2014
|The governors decision - the students should take part in competitive team sports
4 - Thak you...
Writing Feedbackissey1455 - Mar 7, 2014 / issey1455 - Mar 8, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Good exam results at school or college guarantee success in life.
4 - .... This is not an effective hook . I find it's pretty too long and contain some inappropriate...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 1: The total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The rise of overweight children in developed countries
3 - Well, have you been able to complete this task within 30 mins? Your essay looks pretty lengthy. Especially your...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS: Solving the issues of growing traffic and pollution - Increase petrol price?
6 - Hi, i am preparing IELTS as well, my teacher said that answer the question is very important for IELTS...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Mar 7, 2014 / oneclbb - Apr 10, 2014
|compare and contrast your fashion style with that of someone you know
3 - Here is I found on the net that should be followed as an organizational structure for your compare and...
Writing Feedbackmina karimi - Mar 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS task 1: The continuous movement of water on, above & below the surface of the Earth
7 - You are welcome, Eddy :) And also, congratulations on your IELTS score! You deserve it every bit :-D...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS task 1: International students graduating from universities in Canada
2 - The bar chart compares international graduates in percentage terms from universities in seven regions in Canada in two...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 8, 2014
|One national cirriculum is forcing students to study materials they dont want to
5 - Well, I think should have not opened your essay with a statement expressing your opinion. You need to tell...
Writing Feedbacksudeepdai - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 18, 2014
|'find a method' - Children begin learning foreign language at primary school
NEW - Traditionally, children have begun studying foreign language at secondary school, however some educationalist recommended that it's better to introduced...
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|Eassy For Toefl: computer for students vs books for library
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 7, 2014 / sntinn - Mar 27, 2014
|Should government spend money on highways or public transportation?
4 - about speaking section i m also in perplex. i could not find any suitable site to practice speaking where...
Writing FeedbackEslam8787 - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 7, 2014
|Persuasive essay on banning schoolies forever
Writing Feedbackirasa_lafi - Mar 6, 2014 / irasa_lafi - Mar 30, 2014
|Effects of the gold rush to Australia. 1850's Gold Rush changed the country face
4 - the gold is getting pulled up is the subject and the verb is the immigrants following. Does it make...
Writing Feedbacksabstar - Mar 6, 2014 / sabstar - Mar 17, 2014
|Does Internet Censorship damage a free society?
2 - I think that a discussion about sites like Piratebay would be interesting. UK blocked the site, while other countries...
Writing FeedbackMikeyyy - Mar 6, 2014 / Leelee1960 - Mar 9, 2014
|"Where I see myself in ten years" but written in third person essay.
3 - Many people thingthink about their future and the things theydream about their desiresto achieve . A student may want...
Writing FeedbackEms27 - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Private car ownership has grown, led to traffic congestion
Writing FeedbackKenNgo - Mar 6, 2014 / KenNgo - Mar 7, 2014
|GRE ISSUE Government should not found any scientific research whose consequences are uncle
2 - excellent writing... coherent, easy to follow, clearly expressed opinion in intro and good supporting body paragraph, your word count...
Writing FeedbackJudith Yan - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - teach every young person how to be a good parent
4 - well, your body paragraphs should contain reasons that helps you justify your opinion on the issue. Then you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 6, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Learning from experience or from book, TOEFL
6 - Sure :) This is what I would do for this intro; "Intellectual growth should commence at birth...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|IELTS:Working people are busy -don't have time for family and friends; severe consequences
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 6, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: how can schools help new students with their problems?
9 - Well, that's fine. This forum is for everybody to express their views on others' writing in view of helping...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|University students should be required to attend class; 'skipping some boring'
3 - As dumi mentioned above, you need to do more work on improving your grammar. The best way is to...
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - homework to students everyday - 'intersection between home and school'
Writing Feedbackmia_01 - Mar 5, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS General Task 1- Letter to employer describing the problem
Writing Feedbackrairaichan60 - Mar 5, 2014 / rairaichan60 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, LIFE WILL BE BETTER IN THE FUTURE OR NOT
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 5, 2014 / anselzhang - Mar 6, 2014
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree that children should not be allowed to play computer games
3 - Actually, I have edited this essay before I posted in. The original version was written within the time limitaion,...
Writing Feedbackjinhailing - Mar 5, 2014 / jinhailing - Mar 7, 2014
|IELTS task 2: History a fascinating subject.
3 - I feel you do not come up with strong arguments why history fascinates some people. You say it is...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS :Distance-learning cannot bring the benefits that traditional colleges offer; Agree?
3 - This indicates you don't care enough to finish a sentence properly. You don't need to use lazy...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 25, 2014
|Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 4, 2014 / Phuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of en
2 - Well, I think you need to have an overview after the introduction. Overview is an important feature in report...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Young people now have a lot of pressure .
Writing Feedbackchunguyen97 - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL; Classroom learnng vs online education - Which is better?
5 - You need to include a specific example for every reason you use to justify your position. So, my...
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|TOEFL- People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities
7 - I think you put too much information in just one sentence, which makes your writing hard to follow. I...
Writing FeedbackSunny H - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Fast food is unhealthy. Do you agree and disagree?
Writing Feedbackshezad - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 9, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: With the help of technology student can learn more information
4 - First of all thank you for your quick and informative reply. I honestly never thought I will get response...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 4, 2014
|Some are born with talents and others not; Discuss!
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Mar 4, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|Toefl- Government should spend more money on improving roads or public transport?
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTs - Voluntary community service fulfils the purpose of education
3 - First, I want to request you to select the right forum when you open a new thread. For IELTS,...
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes?
2 - Use space after comma ( FIRST LINE) - In this electronic age, advanced technology and modernized world has imposed...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 3, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014
|Movies and television changing the way that we entertain; big influence
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Mar 3, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS, EXTREME SPORT, WHY KEEPING IT AND HOW RISK COULD BE MINIMIZED?
2 - This needs more clarity. Your opening sentence should hook your reader and therefore you should present it in...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 3, 2014
|About Technology Effect
NEW - " Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology." " In what ways...
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|IELTS task 2: What to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers.
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor
4 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|University student should stay away from their parents in most country; Agree or Disagree?
3 - It is good to include your purpose (TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the title itself so that others would...
Writing FeedbackKARNIK - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; TV programmes are transmitted throughout the day and night
4 - There is no denying toabout the fact that watching television can be beneficial both tofor work and entertainment. Comprehensive...
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WOMEN'S RIGHT TO CHOOSE PROFESSION
2 - "logical thinking" is a noun phrase while a adjective phrase is "physically stronger". those phrase are not equivalent...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 2, 2014 / Vanthai - Mar 3, 2014
|(IELTs) Should developing countries concentrate on industry or education?
Writing FeedbackkridUessay - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS: Elderly Population in three different countries: Japan, Sweden and USA
5 - ... better mention the years; The graph illustrates the proportion of elderly population during a period of 100...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 2, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 9, 2014
|TOEFL; Words Speak Louder Than Words
Writing Feedbackneyeuboy - Mar 2, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 9, 2014
|Extended definition essay; Enigma, intro and outline
3 - Everyone knows how it is (no comma) to encounter a situation that leaves one wondering how it happened. According...
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