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|racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems
3 - If racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems that come from...
Writing Feedbackvishal19balar - Mar 2, 2014 / vishal19balar - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, One year off after secondary school and before starting university.
3 - :((((((((...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 1, 2014 / agi - Mar 2, 2014
|Informations from books or from real life?; unexpected things happening everyday
2 - Let's not worry about your grammar problems for now. Let's get the message of the essay cleaned up first....
Writing Feedbackkordestanchi - Mar 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Money for space exploration? Government should spent more on space research
3 - A closer look at the intro: Space exploration has become a debatable issue:I don't think this is a...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 1, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Freedom of speech in a free society
5 - Very good introduction - good structure, ideas, vocabulary :) I feel this is a good suggestion....
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 1, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: distance education to classroom-based education ?
4 - I totally agree with kridUessay. Your essay is very good if something are added, such as supporting ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackNinamar - Feb 28, 2014 / nightmare2k - Mar 1, 2014
|IELTS; Changing look is good or not?
6 - ... there is no problem in terms of grammar or presentation of this sentence. However, I feel it...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you?
Writing Feedbackmahshad - Feb 28, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS: Living in modern Apartment or Traditional House - support your choice
4 - Yes, it is not delivering the idea you want to convey to the reader. Afford means having enough money...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS, Change look is good or not?
4 - ... wrong grammar - "when compared"/ "in contrast of" Today the general attitude towards one's appearance is very...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing - Argument - "Is country music more important than the International Music"
5 - Hi Srkrishnan, In my personal view you have good range of vocabulary and many point with supporting examples, however...
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 4, 2014
|Today more people are travelling than ever before, why is this the case?
5 - Something I was told that helps with sentence fragments is to put "I realize" in front of each individual...
Writing Feedbackgramya25 - Feb 28, 2014 / Ems27 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Interpreting survey data on Adult (Higher/Executive) Education.
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|TOEFL - HOUSE OR BUSINESS? Which do you prefer more?
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Relationship between HIGH SALES & POWER OF ADVERTISING
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The IELTS Score In Four Different Countries
3 - It seems that you just use the same sentence structure in your two body paragraphs. Also, your ideas need...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 28, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 2, 2014
|Raise of awarness; Younger are much more aware about issues like environment
6 - Do you write 3 paragraphs? Yes, but tell you the truth, you are playing with fire. You need an...
Writing Feedbackbilalakoz - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|ACADEMIC WRITING Nuclear Energy: Boon or Bane?
2 - I read the essay, Critiquing it for and against needs to be done in a systematic manner. In the...
Writing Feedbackvincere - Feb 28, 2014 / jennifer2000 - Mar 3, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue
9 - Include the purpose of your writing, e.g. IELTS, TOEFL,GRE etc. in the title itself. Then we can provide you...
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|High salaries to sportsmen or other important professions; equally hard work
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 14, 2014
|People who do not prefer change are pessimistic and who like changes- optimistic
6 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your...
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Why vaccinations are important? English 102 class
2 - The modern field of medicine is constantly discovering new methods to keep us healthy and safe. ...
Writing Feedbackamandah9109 - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|Classmates can have positive or negative impact on a child's behaviour at school
Writing FeedbackNickar - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|My friend veipune
5 - Firstly, I learnedshe helped me learn how important it is to hold a positive attitude was importantin life. She...
Writing Feedbackveipune - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Hours of leisure time per year in Someland
5 - I suggest you to take this line after introduction and present it as the overview (have a look...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : "Mother is the dead heart of the family" - Fatherhood vs Motherhood
7 - Do you write a 5-paragraph essay? Yes. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. In the bodies,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|International sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions
2 - i think that you should add adjective to intensify your meaning. Be more specific if you can. For...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 27, 2014 / agi - Feb 28, 2014
|TOEFL; In general , people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of phenomenon
6 - Yes, I agree I know you write well. However, you'd better always try to include the prompt. To...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TASK 1 population in yemen and italy
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Graduates should be advised to do a second degree
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Overweight
2 - In your first paragraph you should make it clear what you want to say in the following paragraph, in...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 27, 2014 / nightmare2k - Feb 27, 2014
|Let's make mineral soup..........
4 - yep.... now understand what your task expects. :) However, as Pahan also had some concerns above, I too...
Writing FeedbackDuave - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|What is Love? What does it mean to you?
3 - Why not keep this in present tense? Of course we need love today and also tomorrow :D Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackjordandhale - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS: Wealthy nations among poorer nations; 'level of export'
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 26, 2014 / xsimio - Feb 28, 2014
|Its Hard to say Goobye
3 - Pay attention what Pahan suggested to you :) sheShe had Bowel Cancer, but she never told anyonetill about a...
Writing Feedbackmgurl101 - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies.
2 - Hi! You have some great ideas, great start! I think you should develop your thoughts more for each section....
Writing FeedbackNovi Sri W - Feb 26, 2014 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 22, 2015
|Toefl - essay evaluation - Many subject learning is better or specializing in one subject
2 - which can be availed.... "avail" may not be the best word for this idea. My suggestion; Knowledge is...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: WHY DO YOU NEED MUSIC?
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|It is astonishing that people keep in circling in their comfort zone and avoid life variation
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 26, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|Graduates from coeducational schools are more likely to integrate into the real life effortlessly
4 - Where is your opinion? It is always good to conclude an intro stating your opinion clearly if the...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind
5 - In many under developed countries, poverty is the biggest problem and people cannot afford basic needs of life such...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS 7 WRITING TASK 2: ARE THE ENTERTAINERS PAID TOO MUCH?
3 - It is common to rouse a debate on whether celebrities deserve their paymentssuch high revenueswhenever we talk about them....
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|Every generation has a lot of differences - because problems, technology and ideology surrounded
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 25, 2014
|Toefl evalution - Impact of television on children
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: The best way to improve public health- increasing sports facilities?
4 - Moreover, improving sports facilities may motivate more and more people to take care of their health and fitness because...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 27, 2014
|Internet advantages and disadvantages.
4 - Using internet becamehas become an indispensable part of life for many people.However, some people think that it has a...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WHO DECIDE TO CHOOSE SUBJECT FOR CHILDREN
4 - It is nicer if you could construct this into: 1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc, 2. a...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS (Writing 2) - Personality development - Born characteristics Vs Experiences
3 - Hi dear, Thanks for your comment. Would you have any suggestions on separating this thesis statement for...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 25, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Born talents or Experiences - which is the major influence?
7 - hy, Pahan. As far as I am feel, many comments before give me correction technically.what I want...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 25, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Distance Education or Classroom-based learning. Agree Disagree
3 - Well, I feel you have some idea about how to construct your introduction. However, you have not sufficiently introduced...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS: some actions should be taken to preserve the endangered languages
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 25, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Task II: who should decide the subjects that children are taught in schools
Writing Feedbackdaiyi2002 - Feb 25, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014
|Egypt and United State: Differences and Similarities
4 - As we aware ofknow, Egypt has a long history andhas beenthey believed it has been created for about 3,200...
Writing Feedbackrashad20 - Feb 24, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 7, 2014
|Many people oppose changes, yet those changes make's big differences; moving or?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Capital punishment (the death penalty) in society
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 24, 2014 / rairaichan0323 - Mar 11, 2014
|Help With Drugs and Alcohol Psych Class Thesis Statement
Writing Feedbackpsychkate - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 25, 2014
|Why people go to Japan for vacation (Writing Class' assignment - English Major)
Writing Feedbackglensnicholas - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|Some people argue that it is more importsnt to have enjoyable job that to earn a lot.
6 - Pay attention to what Pahan suggested above. Yes, it is always better you conclude your intro with a statement...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS: Computers have made life easier Vs Complicated ??
5 - give priority to your real reason. Here the reason is that computers handle transactions much more efficiently and faster...
Writing Feedbackanshita - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Being a volunteer in the community is not rare among high school students
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 26, 2014
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