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|Ielts take 2 Young people attitude towards parents and grand parents
4 - Actually, both are interchangeable. Meaning, both are correct. However, in writing, it is more appropriate to use "with...
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts: invite letter: for Tom - coming for a visit in Beijing
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: People attend collage or university especially for career preparation
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|'monster if we cannot manage it well' - Movies or tv influence people's behavior
7 - Television is one of the most popular media used by any household. It has also becomingbecome an important...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine
5 - The picture depicts the hydroelectric dam process which is used for electricity. Grammar issue it's...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: paying taxes is enough contribution from citizens
8 - Hi alexwater... in this sentence, I look 2 verb through conjunction. If in the sentence use two verb,...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014
|Learn more about another country by watching tv programmes and films about it
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|Water cycles - process showing how water evaporates, condenses and precipitates
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 28, 2014 / brandymhunter - May 1, 2014
|The charts: reasons why adults decide to study / shared costs of adult education
4 - The charts give information about results of a survey of adult education i will write The chart gives...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 28, 2014 / Mattgang - Apr 29, 2014
|ielts - Every year several languages die cut; Language as pride of every nation
13 - Thanks alot dumi :) now I will write another essay and will try to do like you have suggested...
Writing Feedbackmrs rafey - Apr 28, 2014 / mrs rafey - May 2, 2014
|The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999
4 - between 1996 and 1999. wrong noun phrase ; a significant increase or significantly (adv) increase (verb)...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 28, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS:The stages and equipment used in the cement-making process
6 - The diagram shows how cement is producedthe stages of cement and concrete productionand how is way of using cement...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 28, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By 2020 may be as many as 29 million vehicles.
3 - Here is the sample (page 77) retrieved from IELTS official website: ielts.org/PDF/Vol4_Report2.pdf Perhaps you may start analyzing...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 28, 2014
|Tim Hortons vs Starbucks // gr9 personal
4 - As a consumer, you'd want to buy from the company that sells products which best suits your needs as...
Writing FeedbackBananaMilk - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : People move to cities is increasing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|TOEFL: Famous people are bothered by the media
7 - One reason isthatwhy television and newspapers focus on famous peoples' lives isin order to increase their audience or readership....
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|Watching movies vs. reading the original books
4 - Second of allSecondly , are nearlythe movie can take about maximumtwo hours and the film director cannot possibly accommodate...
Writing Feedbackr1996mm - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IES: the state pay all students tuition fees, or students should pay themselves?
7 - College education is a business- and any good business knows to offer good incentives to its clients. And I...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Apr 27, 2014 / tdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014
|GRE: Development of technology and the way people rely on it too much.
2 - Hey, this essay is so good considering its your first. You almost have no mistakes however, I think you...
Writing Feedbackkarltran3s - Apr 27, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014
|SAT: Learning from mistakes or from our successful actions?
Writing FeedbackItsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Ielts: complaint letter - dissatisfaction with the T-shirt
4 - First, give them some reference to trace your purchase and then tell the reason for writing the letter....
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 8, 2014
|IELTS TASK I : Britons weekly expenditure on fast food (two charts)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 27, 2014 / SHanafi - May 8, 2014
|IELTS: Children are working for money, therefore they learn the value of money
4 - Children at work raise long-standing debates. While some people argue that this is good to teach new skills and...
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|IELTS TASK 1: How greenhouse gases
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 26, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 27, 2014
|SAT Essay: Do we value only what we struggle for? Kindly grade.
6 - "That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly. It is dearness only which gives everything its value."...
Writing Feedbackmaheenatiq - Apr 26, 2014 / maheenatiq - May 11, 2014
|IELTS: advertising impact on people's choice of consumption
4 - This intro is too big. You need to organize better otherwise you would run out of allowed time. This...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 26, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|SAT essay: 'Taking a bad decision is way better than the terror of indecision'
3 - Thanks man!...
Writing Feedbackofficialseif - Apr 26, 2014 / officialseif - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS: problem of obesity and how to solve it; parents & school all have a role
Writing Feedbackhbzezo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS task 2: A successful person is one who has earned a lot of money...
3 - in agree disagree task, you should mention both sides whether you agree or disagree for example, when...
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|TOEFL: Technology impact on children's creativity.
7 - Yes, your essay looks pretty lengthy and you need to worry about that if you were not able to...
Writing FeedbackVince1992 - Apr 26, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IETLS task 2: Is it necessary to restict Long working hours in workplace?
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Apr 26, 2014 / Arun0506 - May 5, 2014
|college or university; Success or a good life in future through knowledge
Writing Feedbackthaontt1408 - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|IELTS: Greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun
9 - Greenhouse give affects to atmosphere and earth. Your detailed body paras are not adequately informing the details of what...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 25, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|Germany and France electricity generation 2009
7 - The piespie charts present details ofshowGermany and France electricity generation in 2009 in Germany and France.The power of electricity...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|IELTS: production of electricity in Germany and France from all sources
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 25, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 28, 2014
|SAT: Are we free to make our decisions or are we limited by circumstances?
4 - It is better if you included your prompt also in the essay. It helps us understanding the topic better...
Writing FeedbackItsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|TOEFL: if you had money, which one do you prefer. buying a car or going vacation
3 - Well, these two sentences mean almost the same :( One is enough because one makes the other redundant....
Writing Feedbacksevan_777 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 3, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - Technology makes people's lives simpler rather than complicated
Writing FeedbackAlbatross1993 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 28, 2014
|broad knowledge vs many academic subjects; various subjects in order to be wise
4 - Thank you very much! And do you mean that my paragraph structure is not clear enough? I just think...
Writing FeedbackFYR - Apr 25, 2014 / FYR - Apr 26, 2014
|Ielts: Why people are moving to big cities - social issue
6 - First, you write very well. However, you need to have more specific examples to support the reasons you are...
Writing Feedbackxingshigang3030 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|"Living alone without parent" - Do you guys think this is good narrative essay?
Writing Feedbackgwp1095 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 28, 2014
|Should children be reeducated with severe methods?
8 - Also, I forgot to make my admin requests in the previous post - You should include the prompt in...
Writing FeedbackmasteringIELTS - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: electricity generated in Germany and France in the year 2009
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 25, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Number of childeren ever born from mother aged 40-45
6 - The table shows the percentage of baby born from Mother aged 40-44 in Australia during particular periods from 1981...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 25, 2014 / SHanafi - May 21, 2014
|IELTS: Subway system in London, Paris, Tokio, Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles
4 - This is not adding any value to your writing as it does not give any meaningful information to...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|Every movie made in a country can reflect some realities about that country
5 - For example, when we are watching a picture made in Iran.. The right form is: when we are watching...
Writing Feedbacksevan_777 - Apr 24, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Changes of mode transportation using in UK
5 - This is a very important aspect in report writing. You should not make any errors when interpreting data,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 24, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: The relative electricity consumption; 'spa is more extravagant used'
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / eddies - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2- MUSIC IN THE WOLD TODAY
4 - Above all, nowadays, people are always surrounded with music. International pop music is a trend in the near future,...
Writing Feedbacktiandteo - Apr 24, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|Education of boys & girls in separate schools; 'distracting and hamper progress'
Writing Feedbackrsaca - Apr 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS-GT (task2): Working Extended hours should restricted. (Agree/Disagree)
6 - I would strongly emphasis and recommend, Government must include the clause of maximum number of working hours in its...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 24, 2014 / sevan_777 - Apr 25, 2014
|During this 25 year period, consumption of pizza and hamburgers by Australian teenagers increased
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS 1:Type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
4 - shoping list or listing. i suggest you to adopt comparison and contrast essay to deliver your detail information. Moreover,...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The electricity consumption and cost per year
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 24, 2014 / fikri - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : High sum of money of modern artist
4 - . It is true while the modern artists who implementemploy their creative thinking onto high value creations are paid...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Inventors are not as important to society as doctors ?
5 - appreciate what inventors have created in the past which hasbeengiven brought advantages for to the public (science inventions for...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 23, 2014 / Samantha1111 - Apr 28, 2014
|Doctor is the most important person for society
5 - Ok, I see :D They think the doctors can help society from their illness.save others lives which is an...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|'our life would be easier'; government's money for improving computer technology
3 - First of all, an improved computer technology will inevitably make our lives easier by offering very sophisticated and advanced...
Writing Feedbackbestonline99 - Apr 23, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|GRE: analyze and issue -- technology will deteriorate human thinking
NEW - -- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for...
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|IELTS: Graph of the winter heating costs from 2003 to 2011
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