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|The 21st century; world always changes - technology, transportation, and humankind
6 - Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|Toefl evalution - God is too large to fit in one religion
5 - Firstly, nobody have ever seen god except their imaginations, faith or beliefs , probably that is the reason god...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 6, 2014
|food security / sustainability assignment; scenario
2 - An interesting way to look at this might be to look into urban agriculture; people in cities are looking...
Writing Feedbackfeversome - Mar 26, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 29, 2014
|food from restaurants or from home - it doesn't matter; food just must have good nutrition
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 26, 2014 / ernhy - Mar 27, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love'
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 26, 2014 / juliajonk5 - Apr 4, 2014
|IELTS: The same money for sport activities or libraries? They assemble money from learner
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 28, 2014
|What are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'care your attitude to other people'
7 - sing or plur...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 26, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|Toefl essay - CELEBRITY OR ATHLETE - WHOM DO YOU WANT TO MEET AND WHY?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS exam; changes to the educational system; good & bad effects
3 - I feel this sentence is incomplete, disrupting the free flow of the ideas in this paragraph. ...
Writing Feedbackgoraya - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|"I am glad that my mother didn't give up"; most intelligent and beautiful lady in our town
3 - Today, as I write this, I recall the memories that were never swept out of my mind. (stop here)whileI...
Writing FeedbackaliMurtaza - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Apr 10, 2014
|price of petrol vs traffic & pollution - temporary solution
3 - In my opinion, the hike of petrol's price has various effects to people. Spelling: sollution (solution)...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 26, 2014
|Traditional and International - Why do we need music? 'essence of individuals and society'
3 - From the beginning of civilisationcivilization music was one of the most fundairtentalfundamentalpartsaspects of our society. Every one listen to...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: High price of petrol as sollution the traffic and pollution;the Nederland
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 26, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: BENEFICIAL INTERNET AND TRAFFIC CONGESTION; encyclopedia of human
3 - First of all, it cannot be denied that the Internetinternet has revolutionizedthe way people used to communicatepeople's communication. ...
Writing Feedbackhunglk - Mar 26, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 26, 2014
|It is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one
6 - ramshah... please consider eddies' analyses regarding your essay. I think that your statement ... gain a...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Mar 26, 2014 / andial - Mar 26, 2014
|some high school leavers choose to work/travel; a matter of personal preference
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 26, 2014 / tiaDS - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS: Studying in univ. or finding a job? High education prospects a successful career
5 - High education and higher education do not have similar meanings. Higher education means education beyond high school such...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 26, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 26, 2014
|Technology become Culture - big effect to our lives
7 - ridwan, you should mention what type of your writing, whether it is ielts or toefl essay, so that the...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element.
6 - Maybe your sentence was not clear and the moderator replaced it with a more meaningful one. Anyway, the...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 25, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 27, 2014
|TOEFL evalution -PEOPLE LEARN THINGS FROM LISTENING OTHER, SELF- EXPERIENCE, READING.
3 - this essay is not good in organization. You need 3 paragraphs, each paragraph has: Thesis, detail, concusion. hey...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 26, 2014
|Toefl essay - stress are relieved by people by reading, gardening, exercising.
3 - These books address enormous matters that sometime serve us solutions for our problems All embracing books hashave proven inexpensive...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|Power of advertising; My two friends who owned well serviced car bought the same car
Writing FeedbackPrabina12 - Mar 25, 2014 / dumi - Mar 26, 2014
|Air Force Academy - Ethical Dilemma essay; The following story was real and not fabricated
2 - had the right ofto distributing untouched leftovers among employees I think your essay is generally well-written....
Writing Feedbackfotuniverse - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|Writing: The high sales of popular consumer goods/ advertising as extremely powerful tool
15 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Choice between academic qualifications vs personal experience and values, when hiring
4 - I see you try to vary your sentences by using synonyms, but you should remember not all synonyms have...
Writing Feedbackmshojaei - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS International sporting games are essential in releasing patriotic emotions; safe way
2 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. (Hook) For some people, sport events heighten...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Mar 27, 2014
|The most beneficial discovery in last 100 years - internet invention; many impacts
7 - Yes,as dumi says it is the contents and presentation matter more than the word count (however, you should...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 24, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS exam: studying at university is the best route to reach successful career
8 - Being at a univerity is better: -gives time to find yourself -harder to work pay check by pay check,...
Writing Feedbackandial - Mar 24, 2014 / SalomeA - Mar 25, 2014
|Politicians are the most important people on earth! -- They have the final say
4 - Well, generally you use examples to support your justifications and they come in body paras. Introduction is meant for...
Writing Feedbackesmayli - Mar 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share.
3 - Use these phrases to avoid repetition of words in your visual writing: The number of = the figure for...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 24, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL: friends you can have fun with or those who can help you?
4 - AsBeing a kind of social animal, our human beings needthe human needs company of others .attention and love from...
Writing Feedbackcococherry - Mar 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL: Why museums nowadays are so popular places to visit while traveling?
NEW - Could you please give me a feedback on this independent TOEFL essay? Many people visit museums when they...
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|Begin learning EL at primary rather than secondary school?Advantages outweigh disadvantage
4 - First of all, at primary school,younger the brain of children caneasier and quicker to learn aadapt to new langguage...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: the high sales of goods & power of advertising - 'what we buy is up to ourselves'
Writing FeedbackRebeccaZ - Mar 24, 2014 / RebeccaZ - Mar 25, 2014
|(IELTS essay) It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media
3 - I am sorry, shady. I really want to describe the part of my suggestion clearly. Unfortunately, when I want...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Mar 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL: Keep trying and never stop working for your goals.
6 - Thank you dumi. That is very kind of you. I would certainly try to improve my introduction. ^...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Mar 24, 2014 / sntinn - Mar 24, 2014
|Watching television is one of the simplest ways to relax after hard working time
Writing Feedbacknoriaki - Mar 23, 2014 / noriaki - Mar 24, 2014
|IELS - A cheap air travel? advantage/ disadvantage; overweight - safety considerations
4 - This is what I have from your intro: A cheap air travel is becoming more popular than ever before....
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Hand work culture elimination is the 1st thing that would be cherished by human
4 - Use of machineriesmachines isare less time consuming. Theyit can complete a task in few minutes or hours.much shorter...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS-GT: it's important for parents to teach their children about the importance of money
3 - In IELTS, you'd better avoid using idioms or sayings which either state the obvious or seem out place...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL Essay: How does advertising influence people's behaviour?
Writing FeedbackHaydi - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Sep 12, 2014
|Toefl essay: Should we only watch movies that can teach us something about real life?
Writing FeedbackSpookysnoopy - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|[TOEFL] The internet provides people with a lot of valuable info or problems?
Writing Feedbackramshah - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS: highly qualif graduates without employment are frequent, why? cutthroat competition
3 - But this sole factor don't explain the whole problem, which is much more complex and difficult to deals with....
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|Task 1. imprisonment in five counties between 1930 and 1980
5 - ... thirty thousand or 30 thousand ... The chart illustrates imprisonment level in five major countries...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 24, 2014
|internet is the great innovation in our lives; be selective to see many effects
6 - You don't need to use this. In IELTS, this is called 'Lazy expression', belonging more to oral presentation....
Writing FeedbackRestu - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TO PROTECT ANIMALS OR TO TACKLE PROBLEMS OF HUMAN BEINGS?
2 - Good writing. With relevant arguments, against the main opinion, which is valuable in this kind of exercise. Btw I...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 23, 2014 / Mowonight - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 the most important thing in applying for jobs
2 - All of people need a job for earning money for surviving their life. Most of people need a job...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 23, 2014 / Restu - Mar 23, 2014
|There are many different types of music in the world today. 'enjoy, pleasure'
3 - On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay file on the...
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS: Expenditure on fast food by Income groups in UK; hamburger and pizza
6 - The bar chart compares the expenditure of three income groups of Britain on three types of fast foods...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 23, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: a table about poverty rates among Australian.
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 23, 2014 / Banshee611 - Mar 23, 2014
|(IELTS essay)Topic- in some countries young people have little leisure time...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Mar 23, 2014 / Slim shady - Mar 24, 2014
|"It sucks that we're dead." ; SHORT STORY
3 - The oldest, wisest and most responsible one among them, Prudent, thought Reck a nuisance and felt that the...
Writing FeedbackTempest2455 - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Tobacco and alcohol are drugs. Should made legal or illegal?
4 - Some people on the other hand might argue that these products should be legal as it helpinghelpsto boost employment...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Different views about the rising consumption of consumer products
4 - Well, I think you have given enough explanations as to how the economy would be boosted by enhancing public...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.
Writing Feedbackonlineuser - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS: Pros and Cons - advertisement - has become integral part of modern society's life
5 - I strongly advise you to follow Pahan's suggested structure for this task. Time is a critical factor for this...
Writing Feedbackandial - Mar 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|Televised talent shows is not only to entertain
9 - Honestly I find my self too confused in developing my idea to support my view. As the question stated...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Mar 22, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Apr 1, 2014
|Some people prefer to eat meals at home. Other people would rather eat at restaurants.
Writing Feedbackgoraya - Mar 22, 2014 / goraya - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 2- Modern buildings vs traditional buildings
5 - Nowadays, there are increasing number of modern buildings to meet different needs of office workers and residents. Modern...
Writing Feedbackrachelaska - Mar 22, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 23, 2014
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