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|GRE ISSUE Government should not found any scientific research whose consequences are uncle
2 - excellent writing... coherent, easy to follow, clearly expressed opinion in intro and good supporting body paragraph, your word count...
Writing FeedbackJudith Yan - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - teach every young person how to be a good parent
4 - well, your body paragraphs should contain reasons that helps you justify your opinion on the issue. Then you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 6, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Learning from experience or from book, TOEFL
6 - Sure :) This is what I would do for this intro; "Intellectual growth should commence at birth...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|IELTS:Working people are busy -don't have time for family and friends; severe consequences
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 6, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: how can schools help new students with their problems?
9 - Well, that's fine. This forum is for everybody to express their views on others' writing in view of helping...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|University students should be required to attend class; 'skipping some boring'
3 - As dumi mentioned above, you need to do more work on improving your grammar. The best way is to...
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - homework to students everyday - 'intersection between home and school'
Writing Feedbackmia_01 - Mar 5, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS General Task 1- Letter to employer describing the problem
Writing Feedbackrairaichan60 - Mar 5, 2014 / rairaichan60 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, LIFE WILL BE BETTER IN THE FUTURE OR NOT
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 5, 2014 / anselzhang - Mar 6, 2014
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree that children should not be allowed to play computer games
3 - Actually, I have edited this essay before I posted in. The original version was written within the time limitaion,...
Writing Feedbackjinhailing - Mar 5, 2014 / jinhailing - Mar 7, 2014
|IELTS task 2: History a fascinating subject.
3 - I feel you do not come up with strong arguments why history fascinates some people. You say it is...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS :Distance-learning cannot bring the benefits that traditional colleges offer; Agree?
3 - This indicates you don't care enough to finish a sentence properly. You don't need to use lazy...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 25, 2014
|Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 4, 2014 / Phuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of en
2 - Well, I think you need to have an overview after the introduction. Overview is an important feature in report...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Young people now have a lot of pressure .
Writing Feedbackchunguyen97 - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL; Classroom learnng vs online education - Which is better?
5 - You need to include a specific example for every reason you use to justify your position. So, my...
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|TOEFL- People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities
7 - I think you put too much information in just one sentence, which makes your writing hard to follow. I...
Writing FeedbackSunny H - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Fast food is unhealthy. Do you agree and disagree?
Writing Feedbackshezad - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 9, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: With the help of technology student can learn more information
4 - First of all thank you for your quick and informative reply. I honestly never thought I will get response...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 4, 2014
|Some are born with talents and others not; Discuss!
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Mar 4, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|Toefl- Government should spend more money on improving roads or public transport?
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTs - Voluntary community service fulfils the purpose of education
3 - First, I want to request you to select the right forum when you open a new thread. For IELTS,...
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes?
2 - Use space after comma ( FIRST LINE) - In this electronic age, advanced technology and modernized world has imposed...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 3, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014
|Movies and television changing the way that we entertain; big influence
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Mar 3, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS, EXTREME SPORT, WHY KEEPING IT AND HOW RISK COULD BE MINIMIZED?
2 - This needs more clarity. Your opening sentence should hook your reader and therefore you should present it in...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 3, 2014
|About Technology Effect
NEW - " Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology." " In what ways...
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|IELTS task 2: What to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers.
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor
4 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|University student should stay away from their parents in most country; Agree or Disagree?
3 - It is good to include your purpose (TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the title itself so that others would...
Writing FeedbackKARNIK - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; TV programmes are transmitted throughout the day and night
4 - There is no denying toabout the fact that watching television can be beneficial both tofor work and entertainment. Comprehensive...
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WOMEN'S RIGHT TO CHOOSE PROFESSION
2 - "logical thinking" is a noun phrase while a adjective phrase is "physically stronger". those phrase are not equivalent...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 2, 2014 / Vanthai - Mar 3, 2014
|(IELTs) Should developing countries concentrate on industry or education?
Writing FeedbackkridUessay - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS: Elderly Population in three different countries: Japan, Sweden and USA
5 - ... better mention the years; The graph illustrates the proportion of elderly population during a period of 100...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 2, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 9, 2014
|TOEFL; Words Speak Louder Than Words
Writing Feedbackneyeuboy - Mar 2, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 9, 2014
|Extended definition essay; Enigma, intro and outline
3 - Everyone knows how it is (no comma) to encounter a situation that leaves one wondering how it happened. According...
Writing Feedbackcareswho - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems
3 - If racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems that come from...
Writing Feedbackvishal19balar - Mar 2, 2014 / vishal19balar - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, One year off after secondary school and before starting university.
3 - :((((((((...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 1, 2014 / agi - Mar 2, 2014
|Informations from books or from real life?; unexpected things happening everyday
2 - Let's not worry about your grammar problems for now. Let's get the message of the essay cleaned up first....
Writing Feedbackkordestanchi - Mar 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Money for space exploration? Government should spent more on space research
3 - A closer look at the intro: Space exploration has become a debatable issue:I don't think this is a...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 1, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Freedom of speech in a free society
5 - Very good introduction - good structure, ideas, vocabulary :) I feel this is a good suggestion....
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 1, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: distance education to classroom-based education ?
4 - I totally agree with kridUessay. Your essay is very good if something are added, such as supporting ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackNinamar - Feb 28, 2014 / nightmare2k - Mar 1, 2014
|IELTS; Changing look is good or not?
6 - ... there is no problem in terms of grammar or presentation of this sentence. However, I feel it...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you?
Writing Feedbackmahshad - Feb 28, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS: Living in modern Apartment or Traditional House - support your choice
4 - Yes, it is not delivering the idea you want to convey to the reader. Afford means having enough money...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS, Change look is good or not?
4 - ... wrong grammar - "when compared"/ "in contrast of" Today the general attitude towards one's appearance is very...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing - Argument - "Is country music more important than the International Music"
5 - Hi Srkrishnan, In my personal view you have good range of vocabulary and many point with supporting examples, however...
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 4, 2014
|Today more people are travelling than ever before, why is this the case?
5 - Something I was told that helps with sentence fragments is to put "I realize" in front of each individual...
Writing Feedbackgramya25 - Feb 28, 2014 / Ems27 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Interpreting survey data on Adult (Higher/Executive) Education.
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|TOEFL - HOUSE OR BUSINESS? Which do you prefer more?
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Relationship between HIGH SALES & POWER OF ADVERTISING
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The IELTS Score In Four Different Countries
3 - It seems that you just use the same sentence structure in your two body paragraphs. Also, your ideas need...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 28, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 2, 2014
|Raise of awarness; Younger are much more aware about issues like environment
6 - Do you write 3 paragraphs? Yes, but tell you the truth, you are playing with fire. You need an...
Writing Feedbackbilalakoz - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|ACADEMIC WRITING Nuclear Energy: Boon or Bane?
2 - I read the essay, Critiquing it for and against needs to be done in a systematic manner. In the...
Writing Feedbackvincere - Feb 28, 2014 / jennifer2000 - Mar 3, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue
9 - Include the purpose of your writing, e.g. IELTS, TOEFL,GRE etc. in the title itself. Then we can provide you...
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|High salaries to sportsmen or other important professions; equally hard work
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 14, 2014
|People who do not prefer change are pessimistic and who like changes- optimistic
6 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your...
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Classmates can have positive or negative impact on a child's behaviour at school
Writing FeedbackNickar - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|My friend veipune
5 - Firstly, I learnedshe helped me learn how important it is to hold a positive attitude was importantin life. She...
Writing Feedbackveipune - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Hours of leisure time per year in Someland
5 - I suggest you to take this line after introduction and present it as the overview (have a look...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
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