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|TOEFL: It is more important to use available land for farmland, housing, and industry.
2 - Well, we are not great experts, however, with our experience for all these years we can certainly help...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 1, 2014
|The wide-spread use of labor-saving devices has only made our life much more hectic.
Writing FeedbackRevin - Aug 1, 2014 / sundin928 - Aug 3, 2014
|Whether each individual or government should be responsible for the healthy diet?
NEW - Please give me a look and your comments on this essay! Thanks all! :-* IELTS TASK 2: Some people...
Writing Feedbackningo - Aug 1, 2014 / — -
|Not only mother is giving her time and energy to nourish and raise children
3 - You should avoid using question to start an essay. The purpose is to paraphrase this topic fluently. ...
Writing FeedbackHiruni - Aug 1, 2014 / ningo - Aug 1, 2014
|IELTS - historic buildings are precious legacy to human development
2 - "development of modernization"? I really don't get your idea :( You need to open your essay with an...
Writing FeedbackMinnaliao - Jul 31, 2014 / dumi - Aug 1, 2014
|Studying in foreign university should be very helpful for everybody who does not afraid difficulties
Writing FeedbackNortT - Jul 31, 2014 / dumi - Aug 12, 2014
|TOEFL: children should be allowed to play computer games(the whole title is written in the message)
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 31, 2014 / VadimKlimenko - Aug 2, 2014
|Change of career and living place has more positive effect on the whole society and the individual
3 - MisterWandering: Your suggestions are very valuable. Thanks! The question is: People change their career and place of residence...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 30, 2014 / digitalidea - Jul 31, 2014
|Learning a new language process
4 - Learning a new language it is a difficult process. Recently found this language exchange website: languageforexchange It's especially for...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jul 30, 2014 / ANSAN - Aug 2, 2014
|Ielts: Is it necessary to teach children handwriting?
3 - here is my example,, Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what...
Writing Feedbackningo - Jul 30, 2014 / fikri - Jul 31, 2014
|IELTS Museums and art galleries should show artworks of the local culture
3 - THANKS Nathan, i rewrite it Today, Traditional arts and crafts are going through tough times and most of them...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 30, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 30, 2014
|IELTS - 'the chart also predicts the proportions in 2040' - quantity of the population aged 65
6 - You must write overview paragraph in writing task 1 because overview is important instead of conclusion. In this prompt,...
Writing FeedbackHiruni - Jul 30, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 8, 2014
|TOEFL: 'ancient people lived a natural life' - Now it's easier to maintain health
3 - However, some people even scholars are arguing about ifwhether modern people can maintain a good health easier compared to...
Writing FeedbackStevenKuang - Jul 30, 2014 / dumi - Jul 31, 2014
|The bar chart shows the amount of sales in silver goods in 000's of units for two companies nextyear
4 - Yes, you need to upload the image. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message Block to upload...
Writing FeedbackGulnar604 - Jul 30, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Appropriate age of adulthood
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jul 29, 2014 / fikri - Jul 31, 2014
|'children in Gaza' - Pre-Toefl - Childhood is not always a happiest time of people's life
6 - Yes, I quite agree with Ahmad :) What he has suggested is the most appropriate approach because it helps...
Writing FeedbackSarah Gharavi - Jul 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 31, 2014
|IELTS: The contribution of agriculture, manufacturing and business sectors to the UK economy
7 - Between the intro and the body paras, insert an Overview which gives an overall idea to the reader :)...
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jul 29, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Ielts: Can environmental problems be solved by individuals?
Writing Feedbackningo - Jul 29, 2014 / eddies - Jul 29, 2014
|'In countries like Japan, the population is getting older' - aging population essay Ielts
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|'Travel is the thing, that makes you richer' - Semester at Sea Essay
Writing Feedbackoreillee - Jul 28, 2014 / Hiruni - Aug 1, 2014
|TOEFL - people are way more disparate at the exterior contrary to what they are inside
4 - I think you need to pay more attention to the approach. Your essay does not contain a good introduction...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jul 28, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS: the importance of history - removing this course from school curriculum is unwise
Writing FeedbackNZsky - Jul 28, 2014 / eddies - Jul 30, 2014
|IELTS Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society
NEW - Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 28, 2014 / — -
|Effects of sexual abuse and injustice on the personal lives of countless females today
2 - You need to check on your first line structure. It should be something like this, "In this world, we...
Writing Feedbacklydiuta - Jul 28, 2014 / nathan2014 - Jul 30, 2014
|IELTS: Money as a members of staff reward for their exceptional contribution to the company
Writing FeedbackWillNgo - Jul 27, 2014 / eddies - Jul 28, 2014
|Fast Internet connection is a source of great entertainment
Writing Feedbackhoanghonn97 - Jul 27, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 28, 2014
|"THE MAKING OF PAPER UMBRELLAS" - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
2 - You introduce your paper fairly well although I would add more to it. Try to be more descriptive and...
Writing Feedbacknhungqnk - Jul 27, 2014 / lydiuta - Jul 28, 2014
|IELTS - Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way
5 - On one hand, the purpose of community service or any form of voluntary work is a question still upopen...
Writing FeedbackBurguete - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|Some cultures value more the elderly people, while others paid more attention on young generation
5 - It is a little bit difficult to provide more meaningful feedbacks without seeing your full prompt. However, I guess...
Writing FeedbackGulnar604 - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 31, 2014
|Some subjects should be optional rather than compulsory
2 - Education has been viewed as one of the most essential elementsaspects of individual and social development.One topic now under...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS Should we invent a new language for people to use for international communication?
2 - Why do you talk about "English" in particular here? Your prompt is much broader and talk about the...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS: learning a foreign language early has benefits for an individual but not for the culture
Writing FeedbackHiruni - Jul 26, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|It is very boring and monotonous to keep living in the place you were born until you die
3 - First and foremost, there may be more job opportunities available in another area.outside. For example, many people choose to...
Writing Feedbackmandana193 - Jul 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS: One of advertising's drawbacks - purchasing not necessary products
2 - Well, your essay has many issues and the most obvious one is that you have written everything in one...
Writing FeedbackJuliet Ngo - Jul 25, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS: The pie charts indicate different percentages of expenditure on seven items
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 25, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 21, 2014
|Topic: Which better? Living in a city or living in the country? why (150 words)
2 - This should be split into two paras - Firstly and Secondly, should go into two separate paragraphs :)...
Writing FeedbackNamkeo - Jul 24, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|Should people be allowed to have cosmetic surgery before the age of 18?
5 - Therefore, I believe that there are in-depth discussion about the pros and cons of having surgery for teenagers....
Writing Feedbackhwabatte - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|TOEFL: If young children did not get in touch with technology, their creation would not develop
4 - Write a concluding signal, like: In conclusion,... This is important to show that you will end your essay....
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|Most important characteristic of a good teacher?
3 - You better include the full prompt in your post for us to get a better understanding as to what...
Writing Feedbackashkannaghib - Jul 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 24, 2014
|[TOEFL] Sometimes we have to do something for others which are not interesting for us
5 - It is not good to work in other pressure.Nobody can be happy when they follow other and go against...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Jul 24, 2014 / poudelmelina - Jul 24, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 25, 2014
|Advertisement are only the good way of gaining information and one should not be fully depends on it
5 - As you have pointed out, it is difficult to generalise about IELTS template. You'd better focus on the...
Writing Feedbackemonabin - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Life cycle of silkworm and production of silk cloth
2 - You should have followed this approach ...> Introduction, Overview and Detailed paras :) I can see your introduction,...
Writing Feedbackzoomikag - Jul 23, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 24, 2014
|More and more people now choose to wear the fashionable clothes.
2 - negative- The more and more people get "trendy", the greater the expectations in what clothes you should wear increases....
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 23, 2014 / louisa216 - Jul 23, 2014
|Most people believe that adult should provide all child demands, because they not are independent
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Jul 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|IELTS writing 1: meat and poultry consumption
2 - The line graph comparespresents the per capita consumption of different meat items, namely beef, pork, brollersbroilers and turkey in...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - Jul 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|Vehicle has enhanced people being. However, cars harm nature.
3 - First of all, there are few researches worry about influence transport on nature. They show that...
Writing FeedbackHappyman - Jul 22, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 24, 2014
|IELTS - Effect of movies and computer games containing violence
7 - even this essay opens for discussion or both views, it is always nicer if you state your opinion in...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jul 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|'Europe had degraded most of its land' - three regions of the world during 1990's
2 - First, you need to upload the charts in to the thread for us to provide you with more meaningful...
Writing Feedbackkashaf - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|'We should acknowledge and use most suitable methods of learning' - Books vs Experience?
3 - well, I changed it to: We can learn and gain knowledge with different methods, such as reading a...
Writing Feedbackhirt_01 - Jul 22, 2014 / hirt_01 - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS; Schools greatest failure is that it focuses too intensely on academic subjects
9 - this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result...
Writing FeedbackSagar1004 - Jul 22, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS: 'food, drink and tobacco' - statistic of expenditure graph
3 - Yes, your approach seems to be fine with me too - Introduction, Overview ( overall idea of the...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|In order to avoid social crisis we should treat the elders with a courteous attitude
3 - This sentence has a few issues :( Here you assume that the reader knows the topic. However, the...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS : Everyone possess a talent - we should recognize it and improve
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 22, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
|We are always told that money is the most fundamental if one wants to make his own living
Writing FeedbackFor a voy - Jul 22, 2014 / For a voy - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS Air travel is becoming more welcomed by common people since its price is going down
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 21, 2014 / msarkar - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: some people think the government should spend more money on science than art. Do you agree ?
4 - (the) amount of is followed by uncountable noun (the) number of followed by plural noun excellent...
Writing Feedbacksky1997 - Jul 21, 2014 / eddies - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS Easy for poor people to get access to university education
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: Too much freedom for children affected their studies
2 - I like yoru approach towards the intorduction. However, I wish you removed the last line as it is...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|An increasing amount of students have negative attitude of learning. Why is this happening?
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
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