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|IELTS TASK II : "Mother is the dead heart of the family" - Fatherhood vs Motherhood
7 - Do you write a 5-paragraph essay? Yes. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. In the bodies,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|International sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions
2 - i think that you should add adjective to intensify your meaning. Be more specific if you can. For...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 27, 2014 / agi - Feb 28, 2014
|TOEFL; In general , people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of phenomenon
6 - Yes, I agree I know you write well. However, you'd better always try to include the prompt. To...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TASK 1 population in yemen and italy
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Graduates should be advised to do a second degree
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Overweight
2 - In your first paragraph you should make it clear what you want to say in the following paragraph, in...
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|Let's make mineral soup..........
4 - yep.... now understand what your task expects. :) However, as Pahan also had some concerns above, I too...
Writing FeedbackDuave - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|What is Love? What does it mean to you?
3 - Why not keep this in present tense? Of course we need love today and also tomorrow :D Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackjordandhale - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS: Wealthy nations among poorer nations; 'level of export'
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 26, 2014 / xsimio - Feb 28, 2014
|Its Hard to say Goobye
3 - Pay attention what Pahan suggested to you :) sheShe had Bowel Cancer, but she never told anyonetill about a...
Writing Feedbackmgurl101 - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies.
2 - Hi! You have some great ideas, great start! I think you should develop your thoughts more for each section....
Writing FeedbackNovi Sri W - Feb 26, 2014 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 22, 2015
|Toefl - essay evaluation - Many subject learning is better or specializing in one subject
2 - which can be availed.... "avail" may not be the best word for this idea. My suggestion; Knowledge is...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: WHY DO YOU NEED MUSIC?
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|It is astonishing that people keep in circling in their comfort zone and avoid life variation
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 26, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|Graduates from coeducational schools are more likely to integrate into the real life effortlessly
4 - Where is your opinion? It is always good to conclude an intro stating your opinion clearly if the...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind
5 - In many under developed countries, poverty is the biggest problem and people cannot afford basic needs of life such...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS 7 WRITING TASK 2: ARE THE ENTERTAINERS PAID TOO MUCH?
3 - It is common to rouse a debate on whether celebrities deserve their paymentssuch high revenueswhenever we talk about them....
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|Every generation has a lot of differences - because problems, technology and ideology surrounded
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 25, 2014
|Toefl evalution - Impact of television on children
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: The best way to improve public health- increasing sports facilities?
4 - Moreover, improving sports facilities may motivate more and more people to take care of their health and fitness because...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 27, 2014
|Internet advantages and disadvantages.
4 - Using internet becamehas become an indispensable part of life for many people.However, some people think that it has a...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WHO DECIDE TO CHOOSE SUBJECT FOR CHILDREN
4 - It is nicer if you could construct this into: 1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc, 2. a...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS (Writing 2) - Personality development - Born characteristics Vs Experiences
3 - Hi dear, Thanks for your comment. Would you have any suggestions on separating this thesis statement for...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 25, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Born talents or Experiences - which is the major influence?
7 - hy, Pahan. As far as I am feel, many comments before give me correction technically.what I want...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 25, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Distance Education or Classroom-based learning. Agree Disagree
3 - Well, I feel you have some idea about how to construct your introduction. However, you have not sufficiently introduced...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS: some actions should be taken to preserve the endangered languages
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 25, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Task II: who should decide the subjects that children are taught in schools
Writing Feedbackdaiyi2002 - Feb 25, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014
|Egypt and United State: Differences and Similarities
4 - As we aware ofknow, Egypt has a long history andhas beenthey believed it has been created for about 3,200...
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|Many people oppose changes, yet those changes make's big differences; moving or?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Capital punishment (the death penalty) in society
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 24, 2014 / rairaichan0323 - Mar 11, 2014
|Help With Drugs and Alcohol Psych Class Thesis Statement
Writing Feedbackpsychkate - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 25, 2014
|Why people go to Japan for vacation (Writing Class' assignment - English Major)
Writing Feedbackglensnicholas - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|Some people argue that it is more importsnt to have enjoyable job that to earn a lot.
6 - Pay attention to what Pahan suggested above. Yes, it is always better you conclude your intro with a statement...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS: Computers have made life easier Vs Complicated ??
5 - give priority to your real reason. Here the reason is that computers handle transactions much more efficiently and faster...
Writing Feedbackanshita - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Being a volunteer in the community is not rare among high school students
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 26, 2014
|BENEFITS AND DRAWBACKS OF CREDIT CARDS
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|Public health is a big issue. Government can play an important role in improving it.
3 - Your topic suggests that you have written this fro either IELTS or TOEFL :D However, I wish you...
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|"Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget,
9 - In conclusion, it is the duty of governments that they provide better health services as well as educate their...
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|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: AIR TRANSPORT USED TO EXPORT FOOD
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 23, 2014 / Purwati Ayu - Feb 24, 2014
|How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
8 - ... this sentence is very confusing. Just like dumi, I too cannot understand what you are trying to...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS. The Question is: The replacement of old workers. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|attending in university
Writing Feedbackoranji - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Toefl Topic: which is better? Gaining knowledge from books or experience?
Writing FeedbackCharlos0987 - Feb 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|IELTS: Usually directors are paid much higher salaries than simple workers.
3 - MostIn most of the big corporation's,their CEO's salary is incomparable to that of ordinary workers. Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 Essay: Chorleywood Village development
3 - Yes, I too agree. Overview is more important than a conclusion which is actually not necessary for this...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents.
5 - essayforum. com/graduate-essays-4/realistic-expectation-job-satisfaction-all- workers-56004 Please also comment on my other piece if possible :] Many thanks!!...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|A paragraph for IELTS: benefits of mobile phones
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 23, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Technology Effect
3 - As the high developing of technology,With the rapid development of information communication technologies, people now have a lot of...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years.
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: the advantage and disadvantage of media for communicating information
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 22, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014
|Wealth and poorer nations; 'developing country and developed country'
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than
Writing FeedbackALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014 / ALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS; Nowadays the way many people intearact with each other has changed
9 - Hellooooo..., Dumi has shown you how to deal with the best structure. What you do is to adjust....
Writing Feedbackdigestion - Feb 22, 2014 / eddies - Mar 17, 2014
|The Perceptions of The Electronic Device in Modern Era
3 - hi, Electronic devices are the best stuff in the world to communicate. To compare it on a couple ofSome...
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 22, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 - Whether necessary to travel abroad to learn about foreign culture or not
6 - Well... in this task, you would be given marks for particular features of your essay. That is why...
Writing Feedbackrogerl - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|STRICKLY ENGLISH (Article re-write)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|IETLS Task II : News Editor decide to broadcast or print in news paper
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 21, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 22, 2014
|Toefl - Which Technology in the past 50 years has changed your life the most?
4 - Pahan, thanks for your feedback. I looked at the sample essays that you mentioned. They are very helpful. I...
Writing Feedbacktoefltest123 - Feb 21, 2014 / toefltest123 - Feb 22, 2014
|Task I, consumption and expenditure of Fast food
2 - The first chart provides agglomerationdetails of expenditure for fast food based on per-capita income and the second graph illustrates...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 21, 2014 / dumi - Feb 21, 2014
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