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|IELTS - Compulsory military service for men and women
Writing Feedbackmiri - Jan 16, 2014 / miri - Jan 17, 2014
|Everyone likes to be famous in their own field and they put great effort for that; "Celebrities"
3 - I think you need to improve a bit more on the introduction. (The problem is with the Background...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 :Children need to eat a healthy meal at school!
4 - ....Actually I think this is out of question. Everybody agrees with the statement and therefore this sentence sounds...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 16, 2014 / dumi - Jan 17, 2014
|Two limits for each crime type is needed: the upper and the lower - for equity
Writing Feedbackorthofracture - Jan 16, 2014 / orthofracture - Jan 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : customer satisfaction lever with airlines and aspects of air travel
2 - You should have uploaded the chart together with your essay. It helps us to provide you more relevant comments....
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|Technology is huge part or our daily life
Writing FeedbackDave2014 - Jan 15, 2014 / dumi - Jan 16, 2014
|AP English class, We need to write a 300-400 essay on WHAT HOME IS?
5 - Hi There! I attend Townsend Harris Highschool, a humanities school and they teach us english till it becomes...
Writing Feedbackdaydreamer08 - Jan 15, 2014 / tharrisite15 - Jan 17, 2014
|Has the widespread use of the internet influenced taken the world`s control?
4 - As others have commented, you need lots of improvement with regard to presentation and essay structure. I don't have...
Writing Feedbacktrouble - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|music can nurse and improve feeling; The traditional vs international music
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Planning for the town
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / thakursajeeb - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS task 1:the fishers in different regions and the world's top ten exporter of fish
2 - It is always good to include your graph together with the essay. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature for uploading...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|Robert Pattinson is for me the best actor around the world
5 - This sentence is way too long and cramped up with so many ideas. So this lacks good presentation....
Writing FeedbackMira97 - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|Essay about my classmate - English Essay
Writing Feedbackartem1395 - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 15, 2014
|IELTS; government´control on water´using.
11 - Hey. Thanks for commenting on my essay. After reading through all the comments, there really isn't anything more to...
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 14, 2014 / thenewdude - Jan 15, 2014
|Argumentative Essay: Singer's Strategy for Fighting Poverty--Refute, Qualify, or Support
Writing Feedbacknolanhamilton - Jan 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 15, 2014
|IETLS; Agree or Disagree on every year several languages die out?
5 - be careful when you try to use long sentence. try to organize well and consider the right pattern....
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Jan 14, 2014 / fikri - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS; buildings often reflected the culture of a society !
4 - Yep... The IELTS requires specific features in your essay structure, otherwise you would not be able to score well....
Writing Feedbackbatais - Jan 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Summarize a map of the city of Brandfield
4 - I think this sentence should be the different paragraf, because it has coherence with the next paragraf (paragraf...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 15, 2014
|[TOEFL] higher education should be available only to good students or not
2 - No one can disagree that knowledge is the most important wealth for everyone. Colleges and universities play...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 14, 2014
|In democracy the media can be controlled in terms of avoiding misrepresentation of information
6 - In the introduction, just mentioning your position is quite enough. If you have time, then you can mention...
Writing Feedbackmiri - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS: Government's financial support for elderly people
Writing Feedbackkitty_9010 - Jan 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Human's dependence in the modern world
5 - There is no harm in expressing your view in the introduction itself and still progress discussing both views....
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 13, 2014 / znack - Jan 16, 2014
|Toefl: "never, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals
3 - Well.... if you are preparing for TOEFL, then you need to pay attention to the essay structure that contains...
Writing FeedbackDelusional_mell - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Shakespeare's Social Critique in Much Ado About Nothing - Hero Character Analysis Essay
Writing FeedbackPeteSkizzle - Jan 12, 2014 / travisl - Jan 12, 2014
|IELTS task 1 General Training : Letter to landlord
7 - Thanks again Pahan and Dumi. Will follow the standard structure for letter writing as below 1) Introduce you...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 12, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS - Children should be brought up under strict rules of behavior or not?
5 - Mostly it does. There may be small adjustments you need to make depending on the essay type (I mean...
Writing Feedbackfly2shashi - Jan 12, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS Essay: Old people health care. Is it the responsibility of the family or government
7 - ... State your opinion more clearly and more direct when concluding your introduction. ... Your prompt...
Writing Feedbackbapu_60 - Jan 11, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY:Government responsibility to provide infrastructure and Defence not others
NEW - Question: A government's role is only to provide defense capability and Urban infrastructure (roads, water supply etc.).All other services...
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|IELTS: TECHNOLOGY affects the way we interact with other people!
3 - Advances in modern technology have definitely altered how people keep in touch closely with one another. Communication...
Writing Feedbackfreakingout - Jan 10, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|We now live in 'consumer societies' where money and possessions are given too much import?
2 - In act, it is undeniable that the more the society be developed, higher the money be valued. ...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 10, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|'government is in charge' - equal numbers of male and female students
Writing Feedbackminaf - Jan 9, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 9, 2014
|IELTS: more and more young people go oversea for further studies. Some people think it
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 9, 2014 / leoking - Jan 9, 2014
|Corrupt Hope: An argument for fighting corruption
Writing Feedbacktwinkinstar - Jan 8, 2014 / animecomics - Jan 9, 2014
|Toefl: The truth issue - Relationships are boon to humans in this world
7 - I think you should pay some attention to punctuations. For example, there should be a coma after "on the...
Writing FeedbackBharu - Jan 8, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|More reliance on technology reduces human thinking ability
2 - You assume that your reader knows the statement. If this is an essay task, the generally accepted norm...
Writing FeedbackSourabhSN - Jan 8, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 8, 2014
|How to write a persuasive essay arguing for the use of school uniforms at my school?
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I will take that into mind. I'll post my edited version and you can...
Writing Feedbackilovemkim13 - Jan 7, 2014 / ilovemkim13 - Jan 8, 2014
|Education & Individual Development & Well-being of societies
2 - If this is for TOEFL or IELTS, then it looks too short. You need to meet their respective word...
Writing Feedbacklindaqueen - Jan 7, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.Which could you prefer ?
6 - Hmm... sorry but couldn't you apply every point you made arguing for the mouse to the business? Just asking...
Writing Feedbackasokh - Jan 7, 2014 / PeteSkizzle - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS essay-Modern children are suffering from the diseases like obesity. Causes&solutions
8 - From nutrition class, I know that taste is very important. Rather than having children told what to eat. People...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 7, 2014 / nimroz93 - Jan 11, 2014
|GRE; Political leaders must yield to public opinion
2 - Hi...I'm new to this forum and I'm a novice in writing and correcting essays, but I'm trying to help...
Writing Feedbackrazzack - Jan 7, 2014 / gBv - Jan 8, 2014
|Ielts essay. Violent crime among teenagers
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Jan 7, 2014 / dumi - Jan 8, 2014
|People should scrutinize the ideas and actions of people in positions of authority - Napoleon story
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Jan 6, 2014 / znack - Jan 9, 2014
|John Diefenbaker A Legendary Man Biography Essay
Writing FeedbackQammer - Jan 6, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Why or why not should high schools require hours of community work? GOVERNORS SCHOOL
6 - Young people under the age of 18 are the best candidates to volunteer in the community because they...
Writing Feedbackmishal_horan - Jan 6, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014
|Toefl: The reasons that people visit museums.
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Jan 6, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|Ielts. Problems and solution of ageing populations.
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 6, 2014 / znack - Jan 7, 2014
|IELTS-Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths
Writing Feedbackravenet - Jan 6, 2014 / ravenet - Jan 8, 2014
|IELTS Task2: Teacher's responsibility in Student Upbringing
4 - yes, you could have had a better alignment with your topic and the prompt is not directed at the...
Writing Feedbackraj_ielts - Jan 6, 2014 / dumi - Jan 7, 2014
|GRE essay: Are people's attitudes determined more by society or situations?
2 - i also suggest you to post your essay in testbig forum. rating of your essay ~~3.5/6 try at least...
Writing Feedbackquocthai7005 - Jan 6, 2014 / kishorbhandari - Jan 6, 2014
|IELTS essay - Work at home - benefits workers and NOT employers - agree/disagree ?
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 6, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 6, 2014
|Toefl: The characteristic of best friend that you prefer the most.
4 - Admittedly, intelligent friends help us find great solutions for our issues while the friends with humor keep our...
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Jan 5, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Sports and social activities - 'both are important for student while in colleges and in the future'
3 - Well, you've written a very good essay and you display excellent writing skills. Pahan's suggestion is to provide you...
Writing Feedbackclee2908 - Jan 5, 2014 / dumi - Jan 7, 2014
|Providing financial support for elders is the responsibility of governments or not?
3 - You take the position of disagreeing with the statement. i.e. you hold the view that governments have an obligation...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 5, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|"pen and paper" examinations and your view.
Writing Feedbacktuanvn - Jan 5, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Visit - voluntary experience for our project involved an orientation.
2 - Hygiene is another important factor since we are going to be in a hospital even though it is a...
Writing Feedbackairamcalleja96 - Jan 5, 2014 / theiceman - Jan 5, 2014
|IELTS;"Responsible Tourist" - Agree or Disagree type essay
5 - State your opinion more direct and clear.... Your body paragraphs do not contain any specific examples that are...
Writing Feedbacksharonpan - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|People need fight against unfairness of authorities decision and protect themselves from its results
5 - Hi You should have opened this thread in "Writing Feedback" forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackbraska1 - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|Rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers of Poor Countries-Agree or Disagree
5 - Thanks Pahan, last time I could not do well in writing :D. I've to check out the other formats...
Writing Feedbackraj_ielts - Jan 4, 2014 / raj_ielts - Jan 6, 2014
|International events show peaceful things for people, distracts from problems
3 - no, it is a discussion essay. thank you, now i can change something in this essay, but please help...
Writing Feedbacknana867 - Jan 4, 2014 / nana867 - Jan 4, 2014
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