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|Some people argue that it is more importsnt to have enjoyable job that to earn a lot.
6 - Pay attention to what Pahan suggested above. Yes, it is always better you conclude your intro with a statement...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS: Computers have made life easier Vs Complicated ??
5 - give priority to your real reason. Here the reason is that computers handle transactions much more efficiently and faster...
Writing Feedbackanshita - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Being a volunteer in the community is not rare among high school students
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 26, 2014
|BENEFITS AND DRAWBACKS OF CREDIT CARDS
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|Public health is a big issue. Government can play an important role in improving it.
3 - Your topic suggests that you have written this fro either IELTS or TOEFL :D However, I wish you...
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|"Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget,
9 - In conclusion, it is the duty of governments that they provide better health services as well as educate their...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 24, 2014 / mariasultana - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: AIR TRANSPORT USED TO EXPORT FOOD
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 23, 2014 / Purwati Ayu - Feb 24, 2014
|How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
8 - ... this sentence is very confusing. Just like dumi, I too cannot understand what you are trying to...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS. The Question is: The replacement of old workers. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|attending in university
Writing Feedbackoranji - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Toefl Topic: which is better? Gaining knowledge from books or experience?
Writing FeedbackCharlos0987 - Feb 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|IELTS: Usually directors are paid much higher salaries than simple workers.
3 - MostIn most of the big corporation's,their CEO's salary is incomparable to that of ordinary workers. Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 Essay: Chorleywood Village development
3 - Yes, I too agree. Overview is more important than a conclusion which is actually not necessary for this...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents.
5 - essayforum. com/graduate-essays-4/realistic-expectation-job-satisfaction-all- workers-56004 Please also comment on my other piece if possible :] Many thanks!!...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|A paragraph for IELTS: benefits of mobile phones
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 23, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Technology Effect
3 - As the high developing of technology,With the rapid development of information communication technologies, people now have a lot of...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years.
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: the advantage and disadvantage of media for communicating information
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 22, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014
|Wealth and poorer nations; 'developing country and developed country'
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than
Writing FeedbackALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014 / ALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS; Nowadays the way many people intearact with each other has changed
9 - Hellooooo..., Dumi has shown you how to deal with the best structure. What you do is to adjust....
Writing Feedbackdigestion - Feb 22, 2014 / eddies - Mar 17, 2014
|The Perceptions of The Electronic Device in Modern Era
3 - hi, Electronic devices are the best stuff in the world to communicate. To compare it on a couple ofSome...
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 22, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 - Whether necessary to travel abroad to learn about foreign culture or not
6 - Well... in this task, you would be given marks for particular features of your essay. That is why...
Writing Feedbackrogerl - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|STRICKLY ENGLISH (Article re-write)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 27, 2014
|IETLS Task II : News Editor decide to broadcast or print in news paper
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 21, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 22, 2014
|Toefl - Which Technology in the past 50 years has changed your life the most?
4 - Pahan, thanks for your feedback. I looked at the sample essays that you mentioned. They are very helpful. I...
Writing Feedbacktoefltest123 - Feb 21, 2014 / toefltest123 - Feb 22, 2014
|Task I, consumption and expenditure of Fast food
2 - The first chart provides agglomerationdetails of expenditure for fast food based on per-capita income and the second graph illustrates...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 21, 2014 / dumi - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS - "Health is wealth " ; average weight of people is increasing
6 - hello Thank you for reviewing my essay. I will consider your suggestions and improve my writing....
Writing Feedbackmottana - Feb 20, 2014 / mottana - Feb 22, 2014
|I am applying Semester at Sea and I just want feedback!
2 - Since youthmy very young days , I have been listening to my father tell thefather's stories of adventures he...
Writing Feedbackjordifg - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|first impression about a person´s character - toefl
5 - As I said before this a pretty cool website. Very useful for those who want to improve their writing...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 20, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 22, 2014
|Toefl - Work in GROUP or Work independently?
4 - Hi, I want to request you to have a more meaningful topic for your essay. The title should carry...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 20, 2014 / dumi - Feb 21, 2014
|Toefl: "To err is human" - listening to the advice of family and friends
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS - TASK1 - BAR CHART - average bed use in three typical hospitals
7 - To provide readers with a clear view of the main trends of the given charts, write your overview...
Writing Feedbackraflo - Feb 20, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|Traditional methods of cooking is likely to be extinct - IELTS writing
Writing Feedbackyohooooo - Feb 20, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: On road transport in a number od European countries
2 - .... The highlighted parts are not delivering your idea clearly. You need to rephrase them :( It's better...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Describing chart - help me to correct if any mistakes!
6 - This is good. However, you'd better have an overview instead of a conclusion. Write your overview paragraph after...
Writing Feedbackcarolinenguyen - Feb 20, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|GRE1. dependence on technology weaken thinking ability
3 - First, thinking ability of people would be further fine tuned by the influence of technology. ......
Writing FeedbackSarah Park - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|"why a new global language is absolutely necessary for a new world.?"
Writing Feedbacksanky - Feb 20, 2014 / sanky - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK I Fitnes Membership
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Number of students attending three courses from 2001 to 2004
3 - This is to assess your report writing skills and therefore you need to adopt a more formal tone...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IETLS Task II : Information Technology Benefit vs Disadvantages
2 - Information technology (IT) nowadays likesis likenuclear explosion which influences all parts of live including home, leisure, and work. nuclear...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task II : the influence of advertisement on children
Writing FeedbackMaisy - Feb 19, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014
|Parents are most selfless well-wisher of children - IMPORTANT QUALITIES OF A GOOD SON OR DAUGHTER
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 19, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Living in "CONSUMER SOCIETIES"
2 - However, some people believe that consumer culture might bringplay a vital role in order to improving lives.living standards...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS 1; Global sales of games software, Ds and Video or DVD
5 - The bar chart provides information about sales of games software, CDs and Video or DVD from the year...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|MALE AND FEMALE FITNESS MEMBERSHIP BETWEEN 1970 AND 2000
4 - I think that this sentence should be active sentence. the figure was almost doubled to approximately...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Feb 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 20, 2014
|Essay on " Every year several languages die out"; 'but still we manage our life'
7 - Yes, you can say that, but then you need to justify this stance in your body paragraphs. What you...
Writing Feedbackmottana - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About athletes's Income
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014 / ehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : International Sporting in easing international tensions
4 - Furthermore, with this events ==> these? cannot be the one way ==> could i remove "one"? cannot be...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 19, 2014 / ehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Full-time and Part time Education in Britain
4 - It is better you presented these details in a manner of analysis. I mean compare the figures of males...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS: SCIENTISTS VS POLITICIANS - Who have the greatest influence on our lives?
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|ESSAY EVALUTION - TOEFL - FALLOW YOUR CUSTOM OR OTHER COUNTRY'S.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 18, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Male and Female Fitness Membership
5 - To me, 2 details (para) look more organised: selecting the key information, including Number, and making comparison/contrast. Tell me...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|TOEFL Essay - Compare and contrast you and your parents way of living
3 - ...."For starters" is not a good way to begin your sentence. "To begin with", "First" are better phrases...
Writing FeedbackNbabichev - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 19, 2014
|Nowadays, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. --ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. -- ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Pros and cons of Credit card
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL - Reasons of choosing dangerous sports or activity.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 17, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|I live in a country where poverty is a massive problem, and the lack of resources is very common
3 - There are some unacceptable spelling errors such as "First of all", "project". My suggestion is always to proofread after...
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