|Home / Writing Feedback [24,528] - page 228 of 409|
|IELTS: 'Durdle Door and Dorset' - Erosion of a Headland
3 - Diachronic maps/picts Intro: here you should state what the maps/picts show Overview: state what the direction of change is...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 19, 2014 / eddies - May 10, 2014
|IELTS; 'unique from other animals' - How life cycle of a frog?
3 - Well, the mating part of the frogs not shown or indicated in the diagram. Do not write anything...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Life cycle of frog - from eggs to adult frog
2 - These sentences do not provide any useful detailed information to the reader. This is a task that attempts...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'six processes' - Cycle life of frog
4 - You should use complex structure of sentences dumi's advice to put an overview after the introduction is good as...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|Apple canning process; 'sterilizing from bacteria'
8 - The diagram shows a process of making an apple canningproducing canned apple . This is totally irrelevant...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS :How apple is canned? 'durable before it is bought'
3 - These are not relevant stuff for reporting what you observe in the diagram. In this task, you should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts: apple is canned; 'there are many processes'
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|'Many small businesses focus on individualism' - teamwork versus individual work
4 - For this reason, organizations make teams of employees with complementary skills who can work with each other, sharing experiences...
Writing Feedbackwhonevercome - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Honesty vs Telling lies - persuasive essay
Writing FeedbackAndy01 - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: people should create a sense of co-operation in their children
6 - The above approach I have given is for your introduction. Follow this one for your overall essay structure and...
Writing FeedbackUmair Bandhani - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|"Get bored because nothing to do around" - a new movie theater may be built
7 - Second, the closest movie theater is 25 minutes from my home and it is quite a distance we need...
Writing Feedbacksamuelbartoli - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|We have to bend children in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing
Writing Feedbackbhanusri - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The precentages of library books read at Starmouth School
2 - a problem with Dangling particle. Visit this link: usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm a problem with Sentence fragments. Visit this...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 18, 2014 / eddies - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.
5 - I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|The Argumentative Essay - Eliminating Extreme Poverty
3 - Poverty is one of the most arduous challenges facing the world is facing today Similar to the poor,...
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Apr 17, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|Are people today live a healthier life than ancient people did or not?
Writing Feedbackljjay - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|TOEFL composition, about effective leadership
5 - thank you~I made an elementary mistake ⊙-⊙... not clear...do you mean the following words seems unconvincing?or I should do...
Writing Feedbackbestgen - Apr 17, 2014 / bestgen - Apr 18, 2014
|GRE ISSUE: Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 17, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: Modern artist is a sort of high paid profession; 'preparation process'
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 24, 2014
|WRITING IELTS TASK 2: Artists, Money and Government
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 17, 2014 / dumi - Apr 17, 2014
|Life is unfair; Big money for some modern artist while other struggle to survive
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS - "India Takes Pole Position" - FII Flow to Emerging Markets
6 - Oh...yes... I am pretty late to find this post. This is not at all acceptable to be published...
Writing FeedbackEssayForumSB - Apr 17, 2014 / dumi - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS task 1- summarize charts information budget allocation
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 17, 2014 / minhvo - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: Should a jury know about previous crime records of a defendant?
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 16, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS bar - post-school qualifications in Australia; 70%<females undergraduate
6 - Restrict the usage of commas to only where it is absolutely necessary. Alternatively, structure your sentences in such a...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 16, 2014 / EssayForumSB - Apr 17, 2014
|TOEFL: Scientists' contribution vs. artists' contributions
5 - Align your writing more with the topic; On the one hand, we should not forget the contribution that...
Writing Feedbackenikolova - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|GRE test prepar. - memo from the vice president of a food distribution company
Writing FeedbackAsallam - Apr 16, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 17, 2014
|Some sportsmen earn more money than other professionals; 'specialist of sphere'
10 - Thank you very much! You all have helped me very greatly! I am grateful that there are people like...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 16, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|TOEFL - Scientist are responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.
Writing Feedbackthalac - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|How should children be taught?
6 - Yes, good advice by Pahan With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly. This is...
Writing FeedbackKelly219 - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|Ielts task 1 : the number of animals with tha amount of rainfall
6 - Hey, upload the graph using the Attach file(S) feature in the Message block :) Without seeing that it is...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|Public transportation is a great way to travel
4 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackIELTSScorer - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|Practice Essay for CLEP College Comp - Are Scandals Useful
Writing FeedbackKkossan - Apr 15, 2014 / — -
|Fixed punishment or flexible one?
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Apr 15, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|Person with Humor - Humor is an important trait
4 - First, you should have mentioned what had been the purpose of writing this essay. It is an important aspect...
Writing Feedbackyparekh - Apr 15, 2014 / dumi - Apr 16, 2014
|Biographical sketch on experiences or events with significant effect on you- BYU
Writing Feedbacksjaqj04 - Apr 15, 2014 / sjaqj04 - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: 'everal reasons rates as adults' decision to study' - A REPORT FOR A UNIVERSITY LECTURER.
6 - This is good, but shows complexity. Let me give a try: A subject's preference breaks a record...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS-GT: Our Dependency on computers, & computer's use in future.
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 15, 2014 / dumi - Apr 16, 2014
|parents go abroad for work with their family.
8 - Bad grammar in Correlative Conjunctions. To learn more, visit this link: grammarly..../handbook/grammar/conjunctions/4/correlative-conjunctions/ When you write...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Male graduate from Cullum university
9 - Yes, I agree with MisterWandering. It is always better to reflect on the number of redundant expressions people constantly...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS TASK1; the number of Canadian university based on sex
7 - As per the basic rule, a paragraph is a collection of related sentences dealing with a single topic. You...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|Toefl- The qualities of a good neighbor - should be sociable and helpful
6 - Ok, so the idea is good but some sentences arent written in a right form so here's the correction:...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 15, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. University graduates, Canada, 1992-2007
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : TRIP TO WORK IN HOUSTON, TEXAS
5 - For me, probably, that way of organizing body paragraphs is very common in writing. However, let us not...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 15, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS task 1: Callum University graduates - numbers of male students
8 - Single graphs Introduction: Here you should state what the graph shows short body paragraph: state the most important piece...
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - May 9, 2014
|IELTS: with increasing use of computers, letters writing will disappear
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS-International tourism should respect local cultures; 'Chinese restaurants'
Writing Feedbackilovemilch - Apr 14, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: Canadian students graduated; 3 pharagraphs
6 - Your total words is 160+, i think you could simplified some sentences such as even though more...
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 14, 2014 / Big B - Apr 19, 2014
|higher price of petrol vs traffic and pollution; 'odd-even traffic restrictions'
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 14, 2014 / enikolova - Apr 16, 2014
|Human cloning should remain banned.
Writing Feedbackbora99 - Apr 14, 2014 / bora99 - Apr 15, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers; 'they play vital role on children's education'
8 - I agree with eddies on the use of articles. They're slightly...awkward, I would say, just by looking at where...
Writing FeedbackBRonnie - Apr 14, 2014 / iamnicholas1 - Apr 16, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Stagnation in Health and fitness
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Apr 14, 2014 / zjxhz - Apr 15, 2014
|International student from an emerging market economy; course essay
8 - Serg, Duminda's suggestion is a very good one. You should dedicate one paragraph to each of these questions....
Writing FeedbackSerg007 - Apr 14, 2014 / pdcohen - Apr 16, 2014
|'computers & gadgets' - Modern forms of communicate with people
7 - In conclusion, based on the above reasoning, I believe that modern forms of communications have made our lives...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Modern forms of communication; 'electronic letter'
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 14, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 15, 2014
|TOEFL) have phones and internet made our personal relationships decreased?
6 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing Feedbacksetsam - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TALKS IELTS 1: The map of Pellington city - new shopping mall
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 19, 2014
|[ESSAY] How people's food choices are a reflection of large values they hold?
Writing FeedbackSP88 - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|Classification essay on music; "When the Music's Over"
2 - Music is used for entertainmentto entertain us and it can effectaffect us emotionally, and even impact our physical...
Writing FeedbackOrangeeskies - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|About My Times of Life - 'I had a nice childhood'
Writing FeedbackStwhWindresides - Apr 13, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 14, 2014
|Home / Writing Feedback|