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|IELTS: SCIENTISTS VS POLITICIANS - Who have the greatest influence on our lives?
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|ESSAY EVALUTION - TOEFL - FALLOW YOUR CUSTOM OR OTHER COUNTRY'S.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 18, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Male and Female Fitness Membership
5 - To me, 2 details (para) look more organised: selecting the key information, including Number, and making comparison/contrast. Tell me...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|TOEFL Essay - Compare and contrast you and your parents way of living
3 - ...."For starters" is not a good way to begin your sentence. "To begin with", "First" are better phrases...
Writing FeedbackNbabichev - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 19, 2014
|Nowadays, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. --ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. -- ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Pros and cons of Credit card
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL - Reasons of choosing dangerous sports or activity.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 17, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|I live in a country where poverty is a massive problem, and the lack of resources is very common
3 - There are some unacceptable spelling errors such as "First of all", "project". My suggestion is always to proofread after...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 17, 2014 / Alison - Feb 17, 2014
|I was a rebel I was a trouble maker; Epiphany in My Life
6 - Utilize spell check features of Microsoft Word to correct as many spelling problems as possible before...
Writing Feedbackdayanag - Feb 17, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|IELTS WRITING SKILL 1 : Global water use by sector and in 2 different country
Writing Feedbackneda ziee - Feb 17, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Do you believe studying hard will bring better life, Agree disagree
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / eddies - Feb 18, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Describing Map Chorleywood Area
11 - hi, Pahan. while I mention the technical content, like diagonally area and darkly area, it makes reader easier...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS General writing task II:Advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackdeyangsh - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS ; Should tax be paid ? Advantages and Disadvantages
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 17, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 23, 2014
|TOEFL :Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often make them more complicated
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 17, 2014 / krnjeong - Feb 17, 2014
|Higher salaries, risky job is better; 'people are motivated by their distress'
5 - First, open your threads for TOEFL essays in Writing Feedback forum. This has been transferred from Undergraduate to Writing...
Writing Feedbackmassiekur - Feb 17, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|Modern parents are more devoted to their children's education than parents in the past.
4 - Yes, you should have included the prompt of the essay so that we can have a better understanding about...
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 16, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISTANCE EDUCATION AND CLASSROOM-BASED EDUCATION
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 16, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|Some employers are giving increased importance to social skills --ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 16, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Male and female number in University (re-write)
5 - In this sentence try to make link before describe about requirement (high school report and university early examination)....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|check and grade IELTS Task 1 Diagram and table are attached
Writing Feedbackkimkitty - Feb 15, 2014 / eddies - Feb 18, 2014
|My Flight to The U.S.A
6 - In a while, the pilot greeted us and made his anouncement "Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen! this is...
Writing Feedbackrashs - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|toefl - governments should spend more money improving on roads or public transportation?
3 - Ok, let's see what mistakes you have done in this intro- 1. You have not introduced your prompt...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|Vulnerable social groups like youth and elders need social welfare system - IELTS
5 - This is pretty confusing and fails to convey your idea to the reader clearly :( Second, the old...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Coastal Villange changing (Map Description)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|[ESSAY]: INDUSTRIALIZED NATIONS AND THE DUTY FOR GLOBAL WARMING. AGREE OR NOT ?
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|Renewable sources of energy (sun, water, wind) will soon replace fossil fuels
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS task 2: kindly check my introductory paragraph (hook, etc)
6 - Thank you for all contributors and our moderator for the thoughtful feedback. I get much help for my writing,...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 14, 2014 / eddies - Feb 15, 2014
|TOEFL-AD. Television has had a greater effect on people's lives than the telephone has.
Writing FeedbackCassieM - Feb 14, 2014 / CassieM - Feb 16, 2014
|IELTS TAsk 1 : Small fishing village become European tourist resort (Picture)
3 - .... you need to mention about the tourist resort because it may mean a little different from a...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 14, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 15, 2014
|Toefl - Government should spend money for developing ICT or meeting basic needs of people?
5 - sandipsinh: Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 16, 2014
|Toefl-Government's attention should be on ICT development or Meeting basic needs of people
4 - My Gratitude to u guys, Ill keep on practicing so that i could able to write effectively in time....
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 16, 2014
|toefl: Learning with a teacher is more efficient than by myself.
5 - Not sure about this: It gives you a chance to concentrate on what you learn causebecause there is no...
Writing Feedbackodon - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 15, 2014
|[Ielts task 1] Fish and Meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004
7 - reduce the length of your sentences a bit more. Long sentence gives more work to the reader as he...
Writing Feedbacksouthstar - Feb 14, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Joint family versus Independent family
5 - in this part, i recommend you to use more advanced vocabulary. You could write and develop your essay...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 14, 2014 / agi - Feb 15, 2014
|toefl - what are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'friendly and trustworthy'
6 - Thanks for your appreciation :) Yes, this forum is a great platform for collaboration. We all help each other...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 14, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|IELTS, nowadays it is more difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school.
7 - You have had very great commentaries :) Here are a few details to work with your concluding paragraph...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|a short essay describing yourself as a person
Writing Feedbackhopeanngroff - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|Toefl - Advertising can tell you a lot about a country
7 - You should write at least two paragraphs for the TOEFL independent essay. Your word count is low and you...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 13, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 15, 2014
|evaluating argument : arranged marriage
2 - Most often parents are the initiators of these types of marriages, although other family members and friends may also...
Writing Feedbacklisa93 - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 15, 2014
|Task 2. Crime and Punishment. IELTS
9 - For me, you write well enough. Also, if you could, you might construct your conclusion with this structure: ...
Writing FeedbackKarlito - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 21, 2014
|Hydro-electric power generation
Writing Feedbackanhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014 / anhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014
|Pros or cons of mobile phone; contribution to society cannot be underestimated
Writing FeedbackMimo00 - Feb 13, 2014 / Mimo00 - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: RICH NATION HELP POOR TO ESTABLISH HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE AREAS
5 - some countries. When you use the negated verb(s) or a negative meaning such as decline or refuse,...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|Traffic jams in big cities - headache question for the government to solve
Writing FeedbackThanh Thuy - Feb 13, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 14, 2014
|Teenagers are encouraged to have part-time jobs - What do you think about this?
2 - I need to request two things from you - First, have a meaningful title for your essay when you...
Writing Feedbackjacquelyn - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Some people fail on their school but achieve success in their adult life. Why do you think
3 - here is the prompt: and Were I you, I would start analyzing the prompt, like this: Topic/discussion:...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Mar 13, 2014
|TOPic : Long distance flights use more fuel than cars & pollute the environment!
11 - Secondly reduction in number of vehicle is a remarkable way to cut average liters of petrol used by aper...
Writing FeedbackGreenstem2 - Feb 12, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS;More & more people are relying on private cars as their major means of transport
4 - You write well. However, it is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this following structure:...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 12, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|Winter Carnival Queen Scholarship Pageant Essay
Writing Feedbackraya1001 - Feb 12, 2014 / dreamer7 - Feb 12, 2014
|Child is like a piece of white paper available for anything to be written on
2 - Better you do not narrow down the scope of your prompt which talks about "foreign languages" in a...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 12, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 12, 2014
|"to teach or understand the concept of the topic" - purpose of teaching and learning is same
7 - a closer look at the prompt given. Here, you should focus this topic on keywords: important ideas,...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 12, 2014 / eddies - Mar 13, 2014
|Solutions to improve public health.
6 - Thank you so much for your comments, will concentrate on the point you mentioned going further....
Writing FeedbackAbi90 - Feb 12, 2014 / Abi90 - Feb 14, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Equal number of gender in the universities entrance
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 12, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : School attendance in the UK in 2007
7 - I would have written: The pie chart given elucidates information on reasons why British pupils are absent at school...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 12, 2014 / Meyfam70 - Feb 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The Freedom of Creativity
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 21, 2014
|The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in
5 - I am not sure enough this is the right sentences. This indicates run-on sentences. (two main sentences running...
Writing FeedbackJennyPham - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|Should a new restaurant be built in your neighborhood?
5 - You put too many commas in this paragraph. You'd better end your paragraph with a simple structure which only...
Writing Feedbackodon - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|IETLT Task I : Spending leisure time by young individuals and couples
9 - A few details it takes for grammatical mechanics. "Contain" here as a transitive verb, so omit "with"...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
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