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|distance-learning versus attending college or university
5 - ... your opinion should be more focused on whether distance learning brings same benefits of attending college or...
Writing Feedbackmelisia - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS: Some people believe that competitive sports have no place in the school curriculum.
6 - Good introduction. The only missing feature is your hook because you straight away start with paraphrasing your prompt to...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|[TOEFL]Do you think classmates or colleagues should work on projects in person or by e-mai
Writing Feedbackcshcara - Feb 3, 2014 / eddies - Feb 4, 2014
|Limit absurd contents from children viewing - filtering the Internet access at home as a solution
9 - This is quite natural with all candidates, especially when the exam date approaches :D However, you do not have...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Fixed Punishments for each type of crime
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 3, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 3, 2014
|Japanese tourists travelling abroad and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market
5 - Hi Harry, According to my knowledge, when talking about number, it is Plural which is usually used....
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Feb 3, 2014 / eddies - Feb 3, 2014
|Advertisement encourages customers to buy the products and to increase high income for company
4 - Dumi and harry, thanks for your suggestion, it will improve my writing skill. Well, i didn't mention...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 2, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 3, 2014
|İELTS ESSAY- TASK 1 -MAP- AN İSLAND AFTER AND BEFORE CONSTRUCTİON
Writing FeedbackStudent_17 - Feb 2, 2014 / Student_17 - Feb 2, 2014
|Incompleteness - the problem lay before me, challenging me to enter its deep labyrinth; inspiration
2 - Wow! What a great piece! I was engaged the whole time. I love your introduction! Since you are speaking...
Writing FeedbackDiscipulus96 - Feb 2, 2014 / EF_Jasmine - Feb 21, 2015
|Have children or not - Decision; 'Fatherhood should not be ignored'
5 - Moreover, I think next time you should write the complete question, because in IELTS writing we should focus on...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 2, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 3, 2014
|Adult decide to study because of interest in subject/max% cost shared by himself
8 - ...its better if you paraphrase and linked the introduction. ....I think it is not appropriate if...
Writing FeedbackDish1 - Feb 1, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 2, 2014
|Influence on children. Does it depends on sex of a parent? IELTS Task 2
Writing Feedbacksynako - Feb 1, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations
13 - Very much thank you, MisterWandering. I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback I read all your writings posted...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / eddies - Feb 6, 2014
|TOEFL Essay: Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company.
Writing Feedbacksmmmmi - Feb 1, 2014 / smmmmi - Feb 3, 2014
|Need evaluation on my 4 latest essays from Writing Task
6 - The bar chart illustrates the amountnumber of the undergraduates of Computer Science in a faculty of United Kingdom from...
Writing Feedbacksfinosg - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Ielts test task 2: Air transportation for fruits and vegetables
5 - I think you write extremely well. Excellent grammar, sentences, vocabulary and ideas. It is only that you need to...
Writing FeedbackLetwind - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest in Brooklyn's Coney Island, USA
6 - You are very good with your intro and overview. I think now you are clear about dumi's point too...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: A Letter to a friend in an English speaking country
8 - .... sounds too slang. Avoid such phrases and keep your writing in line with a more professional approach...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / dumi - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS: women's work / historic buildings / equal numbers of male and female students
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 1, 2014 / dumi - Feb 1, 2014
|IELTS Introductions; Need correction only for introduction.
5 - Well, still your issue is not getting conveyed properly. That should be the core of your introduction. However,...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Need help to find out appropriate introductions
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 1, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: People with Certain Talent VS Not Having a Certain Talent
4 - Well, you need to introduce the issue in the introduction and that is very very important. You don't...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 31, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2014
|University plays a responsibility to deliver knowledge which is useful in the workplace
3 - Dear friend, your essay lacks good alignment with your prompt and hence we feel as if you are...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The main function of a university
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 30, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS:become a huge ordeal; Children learning foreign language in primary school
7 - I'm little bit confuse with the question .. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? I think...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 30, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 31, 2014
|Task 2 : Importance of studying history
5 - No, I don't say it is irrelevant. However, your topic is a general one that includes everybody irrespective or...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|Today's fast paced and busy life demands quicker and easier food preparing methods
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|TOEFL: a study with regular exercises generates dual thinking
3 - Your body paragraphs do not contain specific examples that are important for you to get a decent score. So...
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS - Junk food consumption Vs Health
7 - Especially children, they are the most vulnerable group who could affectedby the accessibility of the junk food because...
Writing FeedbackSogdiana - Jan 30, 2014 / indah_hai - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Non-exam subject that should be compulsory in curriculum
2 - Your body paras need improvement. First tell the reason why you hold that opinion. And then support your reason...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS: Art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students
4 - This sentence is too very long and disturbs the clarity of your ideas. Do not write long sentences....
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Some educationalists argue about arts-based subject.
5 - For me, this is still confusing and less meaningful. It's still very difficult to capture your idea. Why...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 30, 2014
|Moving to a new place is always challenging - you have to adapt quickly.
5 - In my opinion I would prefer to move in search of new places as it is challenging and adventurous....
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS- Number of visits to the two new music sites - fifteen days period
Writing Feedbackluanawars - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS ( TASK 1 ) Expenditure on Health & Education , UAE as % of GDP
5 - This statement seems to be a bit too compact. Have two sentences, one that describes the main observation...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task2 : People reluctant to changes. What are the issues and possible solutions?
2 - Journey of life is generally a collection of inevitable changes in which people happen to face both positive and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessors.
3 - There is no specific example to back your justification. You need to pay attention to the structure of...
Writing FeedbackPepsicub - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home
2 - Woman is the live wire of every person's life. She could be one's mother, sister, daughter, wife or...
Writing Feedbacksabi123 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|The ocean is much like a woman; Descriptive piece about the ocean- 10 high level English
3 - Hi, This essay should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackvictoriarichtst - Jan 29, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Children under drug influences and solutions
4 - In conclusion, the drugs have always been a serious threat to our society, and the younger generation in...
Writing Feedbackmrbin - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|One Official international Language or more languages?
6 - (why...?) If you could, here you'd better restate what you've mentioned above. Then, show some suggestion or warning...
Writing FeedbackAbi90 - Jan 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|Toefl; Childhood is the happiest time of our life (My weakness point is writing)
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Jan 28, 2014 / aldebaran - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Resist change or Welcome change?
6 - Yes, that's my approach :) Anyways, hope this structure would help you too (this is for Agree/ Disagree or...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|People rely more on technology to solve problems impacting ability of humans to thinking.
Writing FeedbackEssay4gre - Jan 28, 2014 / Essay4gre - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS [TASK 2] alternatives to fossil fuels
3 - You need to pay attention to your essay structure. Your introduction should contain certain features in order to earn...
Writing FeedbackMonen - Jan 28, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Increasing fuel price is best way to solve traffic.agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 1, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: the benefits of technologies mobility outweigh the disadvantage
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS: outlay and expense on fast foods in the UK
5 - The bar chart illustrates the outlay on fast foods in the UK in 1990 whereas the line graph gives...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|Hello! I am studying in class 7 I want to improve my English help me.
Writing Feedbackkrity - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy
Writing Feedbacklavie - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2:How technology has changed the way people interact?Advantages/Disadvantages.
3 - Let's check this intro with dumi's suggested structure; With the advancement in the field of communication technology and IT...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Information Technology in Human's Life
7 - I don't think it is appropriate to say "throughout 21st century" because this century is still not over....
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create.
5 - Whatever the reason, I would give an argumentation that government cannotshouldn't prevent artist to earn much money from their...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS : Space Exploration - More to do with national pride than international effort?
3 - In my mindview, people who ... have been made their nationalitynation proud of thembecause they ...Now, let's discuss this...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 1: First Year Assessments
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Erosion of a headland
3 - you need to follow struture : 1. Intro sentences : introduce the topic of the chart [Paraphrase] 2. Overview...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|TOEFL; Playing Computer games can have negative impact on society
7 - Now days, the computer games are not only fun but they also possess some significant features and all of...
Writing Feedbackahmadeng - Jan 27, 2014 / MelisaStewart - Feb 3, 2014
|Is it true that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions?
Writing Feedbackraflo - Jan 27, 2014 / raflo - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Influence of Colours in humans' feeling
10 - Thanks znack and Vijay. Vijay, I dont think it is necessary to mention any research names in Introduction and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 27, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Televisions are the most favorite media for comunicating
8 - In your introduction you should have introduced the there types of media that yo are going to compare and...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
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