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|Writing IELTS task 1 - the variation in types of food which, were consumed by Europian people
Writing Feedbacktramanh - Jan 15, 2019 / tramanh - Jan 15, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2. Encouraging children to live separately from parents
3 - Anna, the discussion you have presented does not properly represent the dual point of view and personal opinion discussion....
Writing FeedbackIoneskoanna - Jan 15, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2019
|The school curriculum - sport activities for students?
2 - Nguyen, good work with the paraphrase and response. Bad work adding the reasoning sentence at the end. Remember, if...
Writing Feedbacktinhnguyen - Jan 14, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2019
|There are many instances nowadays where younger individuals are becoming increasingly popular
2 - Frooti, you should always remember to change the verb form after an auxiliary presentation. So when you say "a...
Writing FeedbackFrooti - Jan 13, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2019
|Skills of any individual cannot be observed by his appearance.
Writing Feedbackpiyush_anand - Jan 13, 2019 / piyush_anand - Jan 20, 2019
|Technology in Education Programs is the Future? - IELTS WRITING TASK2
3 - Your introduction does need to be tweaked a little bit beginning with the omission of '"nowadays". Also, I think...
Writing FeedbackRosi akira - Jan 12, 2019 / charleto9 - Jan 12, 2019
|Speaking essay about FAMILY - the most important thing of your life
3 - Quang, the essay lacks a proper introduction for every family member. Remember that you are introducing your parents to...
Writing Feedbackquangduy2110 - Jan 12, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2019
|Effects of technology (impact on users and on different industries). 250 word essay
4 - @mona21khan There are quite a lot grammatical mistakes in your writing, for example its discovery it is well-known for...
Writing Feedbackmona21khan - Jan 12, 2019 / thuduong19 - Jan 16, 2019
|IETLS Task2: The power of advertising, and its influence on consumer buying - agree or disagree
Writing FeedbackJean Lin - Jan 11, 2019 / Jean Lin - Jan 12, 2019
|Online courses in university vs campus classes - impacts on students' learning outcomes
2 - Pham, this being your first post at this forum, I would like to focus first on the most common...
Writing Feedbacktonystark - Jan 11, 2019 / Holt - Jan 12, 2019
|Task 1_ Map_The maps below show how the town of Harborne changes from 1936 to 2007
2 - I think, you can write something else instead of writing: river was developed into residential area. For example, you...
Writing FeedbackTruong Ha - Jan 11, 2019 / RIA123 - Jan 11, 2019
|IELTS essay: Should everyone follow a vegetarianism diet?
5 - @Holt thank you so much for your response! I would certainly rewrite. Also sorry for my late reply....
Writing FeedbackthuyEDHANU - Jan 10, 2019 / thuyEDHANU - Feb 21, 2019
|PROS AND CONS OF TRAVELLING TO REMOTE NATURAL ENVIRONMENT
Writing Feedbacklinhnguyen2002 - Jan 10, 2019 / linhnguyen2002 - Jan 13, 2019
|Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV should be banned.
3 - Thank you Mr./Mrs. Holt for your precious assessment. In my next essays, I will pay more attention to the...
Writing Feedbackpanzerwarfare - Jan 10, 2019 / panzerwarfare - Jan 11, 2019
|SHARING INFORMATION IN SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH, BUSINESS - DISSCUSS AND GIVE OPINION
2 - Hoang, the prompt for this essay asks you to discuss both public points of view first. You are required...
Writing Feedbackcb25288 - Jan 10, 2019 / Holt - Jan 11, 2019
|Humans and Music - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
3 - Tran, your presentation, though fulfilling the word requirement, does not meet the minimum paragraph presentation. That is why your...
Writing Feedbackzzeldaaa - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|Imposing heavier punishments on dangerous drivers is the solely way to secure traffic
Writing FeedbackChuminh - Jan 9, 2019 / Chuminh - Jan 11, 2019
|IELTS : In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - There are some grammatical mistakes here: should be changed to "advertising alcoholic beverages" or "advertising alcohol" should...
Writing Feedbackhyashintaonen - Jan 9, 2019 / not_from_denmark - Jan 9, 2019
|Disadvantages of travelling by air
4 - Really thank you for helping me correct my mistakes. By the way, this paragraph is just an writing exercise...
Writing Feedbackvquang2512 - Jan 9, 2019 / vquang2512 - Jan 10, 2019
|The government should prohibit to smoke in public areas for the sake of community health
2 - In my opinion, your ideas are quite good and well-developed and I'm impressed by the figures provided in your...
Writing Feedbackhyashintaonen - Jan 9, 2019 / Red Moon - Jan 9, 2019
|Bringing up the mentally and physically healthy children had been a constant concern of families
3 - Ramin, this essay will get an automatic failing TA score because you changed the discussion requirements and method of...
Writing Feedbackraminramin - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ENVIRONMENTAL ISSUES AND SOLUTIONS
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jan 8, 2019 / RIA123 - Jan 11, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: NOT HAVING CHILDREN AT A YOUNG AGE
3 - Ta, due to the fact that you did not understand the discussion prompt and you changed the discussion format...
Writing FeedbackThanhtam2412 - Jan 8, 2019 / Holt - Jan 9, 2019
|The problems people overreliance on cars and suggest the solution - IELTS Task 2
NEW - More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of...
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|Physics - CBEST Writing - describe one class which you faced difficulty
2 - Zhu, the best accomplishment that you have with this piece of essay writing is that you were able to...
Writing Feedbackqqtant - Jan 7, 2019 / Holt - Jan 8, 2019
|Writing ielts task 1: Developments in the town of Lakeside
3 - Thank you for taking your time to give me such quality feedback. But I find it unbalanced if you...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Jan 6, 2019 / sillyman2000 - Jan 8, 2019
|DIVERSITY CAN BENEFIT ORGANIZATIONS IN MANY WAYS
2 - Minh, your essay requires more than simple grammar editing. The content is also poor and lacking in substance. Aside...
Writing Feedbackylnl5051 - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|Air pollution and emission - Writing- Ielts- task 1- line graph
Writing Feedbacklethithuhuong - Jan 6, 2019 / lethithuhuong - Jan 8, 2019
|Products price fluctuation - fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks
5 - Nguyen, you have to complete your prompt overview when presenting your report otherwise your TA score will be low....
Writing Feedbackbnm123 - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE IMPACT OF ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE - LIMITLESS POTENTIAL
3 - You should include more research on the impact of AI / technology in schools (for example there was research...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jan 6, 2019 / Rich Monte - Jan 8, 2019
|Punishing murderers with death penalty vs life in prison - IELTS Task 2
4 - Hi. As two people have cited out your primary mistakes in this essay, so I'm going to just remind...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Jan 6, 2019 / sillyman2000 - Jan 7, 2019
|IETLS Writing Task2: It is more important to teach the literature and history of their own country
3 - Sorry if I offend you but some parts in your essay are so confusing that I cannot understand anything....
Writing FeedbackJean Lin - Jan 6, 2019 / Red Moon - Jan 6, 2019
|The given figure shows the birth rates during the period from 1920 to 2000 in China and the USA.
2 - For the third paragraph, did you mean to put rates instead of percent? Also, I feel that it's...
Writing FeedbackSherk - Jan 6, 2019 / iahamed - Jan 6, 2019
|Finding safe replacement powers which have less side-effects on environment are vital in the world.
Writing FeedbackMosi - Jan 6, 2019 / Mosi - Jan 10, 2019
|In this era, people are facing major issue relating to the rising temperatures of the earth
3 - Muhammad, kindly familiarize yourself with English grammar writing rules. You need to learn about how to construct sentences properly...
Writing Feedbacktabe_success - Jan 5, 2019 / Holt - Jan 6, 2019
|What is it that excites me the most about a college.
4 - Unfortunately, still millions of ... I want to be become an engineer who can could connect to...
Writing Feedbackhellstein - Jan 5, 2019 / Sherk - Jan 6, 2019
|IELTS II : Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
4 - 1. You're absolutely not writing an exactly the topic sentences in your essay, you have to substitute your idea,...
Writing Feedbackvikedarliyasi - Jan 4, 2019 / Sherk - Jan 6, 2019
|Speaking topic: Describe a memorable period or event from your childhood
3 - Hoa, when you write a conjunction, always remember to add a comma as in the case of "... some...
Writing FeedbackRoseHana - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|Causes and solutions of anti-social behaviors and disrespectful attitudes towards others.
Writing Feedbackhnmai - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|Taxes that support universal education taken in the case of attending to government-financed schools
4 - Annatha, your inability clearly express yourself in English is causing problems for you in the essay presentation. When it...
Writing Feedbackannanthaayu - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|People make differentiation on skills and ability between women and men; IELTS2
2 - Tias, your essay will be considered in deviation of the prompt requirements because you created a new discussion point...
Writing Feedbacktiassubiasti - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: Women and Men Commonly Having Different Strengths and Weakness
3 - Dini, let's start with the grammatical problems in your essay. You have made a grammatical error regarding word usage...
Writing Feedbackdinimaulana - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|The human activities on our earth make some animal species becoming extinct
3 - The human activities on ... instead of this I would say The human reckless activities on land in sea...
Writing FeedbackVayaIelts9 - Jan 3, 2019 / cezar_matreniuc - Jan 4, 2019
|People activities in sea as well as on land lead to the damaging environment; Ielts 2
2 - Agro, you definitely have a problem when it comes to sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary. However, these weaknesses do...
Writing FeedbackAgro Wisudawan - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Human activities and industrial waste become the main reasons regarding extinctions of animal life
3 - Herdi, contrary to the advice given to you above, it is not possible to write 500 words during this...
Writing Feedbackherdiladchi - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|Essay on Construction Regulation in Cities
2 - Pham, be consistent in your presentation. When you count out the reasons for a discussion such as your reference...
Writing Feedbackphamleminh - Jan 3, 2019 / Holt - Jan 4, 2019
|TOEFL task 2 writing - adolescents must focus primarily on their major subjects
2 - I think you should not use contractions due to the academic characteristic of the test. "In summation, yes," may...
Writing FeedbackStevenSameh1512 - Jan 2, 2019 / naly92 - Jan 4, 2019
|Many people are treating pets as their own family member.
Writing Feedbackvipentul - Jan 1, 2019 / cutiewen - Jan 4, 2019
|In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder?
2 - The essay is really great. One thing I might add is probably one more example and I would add...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jan 1, 2019 / cezar_matreniuc - Jan 4, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: every funds for education are needed - also those in the form of tax
2 - This is a good essay and well-organized one. You deliverd your message clearly and with good range of vocabulary....
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 2, 2019
|Percentage of monthly household income spent on various items [IELTS -Pie chart 186words]
2 - This is well-designed essay. You illustrated the holistic information in the graph. I noticed such one grammer mistake which...
Writing Feedbacknchi0987 - Jan 1, 2019 / StevenSameh1512 - Jan 1, 2019
|IETLS TASK 2 - Houses should follow style of the old houses in the area?
3 - Hi, let's talk about the good things of your essay first. The vocabulary range you used in your essay...
Writing Feedbackkenmoony - Jan 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|Should governments set a limitation on dangerous sports or not?
3 - the modern society opinions toward about take part in to get an injury extreme sports game extremely high...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 30, 2018 / thiancut - Dec 30, 2018
|Working from home and studying at home are on trend. Do you think it is a positive development ?
Writing Feedbacktopswijaya - Dec 29, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Dec 31, 2018
|In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
4 - Hi, your understanding about the topic is good, however, the way you organize the ideas is your main problem....
Writing Feedbackthaonghiem - Dec 29, 2018 / vietduccan - Jan 1, 2019
|Budget allocation for children's sports and the number of children playing sports
2 - You need to consider using the appropriate transition words at the start of each paragraph. Phrases like "moving to...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Dec 28, 2018 / Alao0702 - Dec 28, 2018
|The figure of travelling abroad by Japanese tourists and how many of them are coming to Australia
3 - The summary overview of your presentation should be at least 3 lines since there are several information points that...
Writing Feedbackonkileung1124 - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Dec 29, 2018
|Some people claim that financing the costs of health care and education should be government's duty
3 - @vietduccan - give public a great chance to enjoy give the public access to better health care services ...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Dec 28, 2018 / MichelleA - Dec 28, 2018
|FINANCIAL AID VS PRACTICAL AID AND SERVICE
3 - Thank you for your advice. I will avoid using long and complex sentences and pay attention to the conclusion...
Writing FeedbackLizLee - Dec 28, 2018 / LizLee - Dec 28, 2018
|[Task 1] The following tables show the average age of students at a college.
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