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|Advertisement response - Letter ielts general training
2 - Tejal, your essay is confusing to read. If you are writing in response to an advertisement, then that means...
Writing FeedbackTejalnsoni - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|The effects of the growing use of technology in classroom environment
3 - Van, you are over thinking this essay topic. Overthinking is what will cause you to fail. You do not...
Writing Feedbackvan0606au - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|Ielts task 1- usage of three spreads, including margarine, low fat & reduced spread and butter
4 - Thank you for your comment! Do you mean that I should combine the first two paragraphs into one,...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jul 3, 2018 / imchang - Jul 4, 2018
|Recently, more and more rubbish are being produced by human being around the world
2 - results with the step ... this issue, it is my firm conviction that this can help ... garbage...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jul 3, 2018 / Phuongnguyen256 - Jul 3, 2018
|GAP YEAR BETWEEN HIGHSCHOOL AND COLLEGE. Is it a good decision?
2 - Viet, I did not even get past reading your opening paraphrase when I immediately spotted a prompt deviation error...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|IELTS 1: Table showing the television viewing figures for tennis, golf, motor racing and athletics
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 3, 2018 / cao1km - Jul 4, 2018
|The proportion of families who owned and rented an accommodation in two countries
Writing Feedbacksusdoctor - Jul 3, 2018 / susdoctor - Jul 6, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 Line Graph: Customer Number Comparison from various restaurants
3 - Chang, though you wrote more than 150 words in this essay, the coherence is lacking, the comparison points were...
Writing Feedbackianchang - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|[IELTS]Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. Advantage or disadvantage essay.
4 - @Holt, thank you, for pointing out the problems that I have right now. The way I speak is actually...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jul 2, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 4, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1 LINE GRAPH AND BAR CHART : WATER CONSUMPTION - globally from 1900 to 2000
2 - Viet, your opening summary / overview is not properly presented. There are a few bits of missing information in...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 2, 2018 / Holt - Jul 3, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Are fixed punishments necessary? Without considering different circumstances ?
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jul 1, 2018 / hyperephania - Jul 2, 2018
|IELTS task 2: animal experiments should be conducted or not ?
3 - Hi Nguyen, I noticed that the words 'animal experiments' have been used throughout the essay. Maybe you should try...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen105 - Jul 1, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 2, 2018
|iELTS WRITING TASK 2: Topic: In cities, large shopping center and supermarket become more popular
3 - Bui, this is not a comparison essay but rather a single opinion essay discussion. A comparison essay indicates the...
Writing FeedbackBuivandat - Jul 1, 2018 / Holt - Jul 2, 2018
|Some people think that rich countries should help the poor countries by giving money directly. IELTS
Writing Feedbackmelodyyyyy - Jul 1, 2018 / melodyyyyy - Jul 2, 2018
|IELTS task 2; is it better to participate in solo sports like tennis or swimming than a team sport?
3 - Nguyne, who are you arguing with? Why are you arguing? There is no indication of an argument anywhere in...
Writing FeedbackSophia Nguyen - Jul 1, 2018 / Holt - Jul 2, 2018
|The inborn talents for music, art or sport?
3 - Mu, even though you wrote 301 words in this essay, I can see certain points where you struggled with...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jul 1, 2018 / Holt - Jul 2, 2018
|Can advertising BEATS our own judgement when we buy something ?
2 - Viet, While your 2 body paragraphs contain the correct number of sentences to represent a full paragraph, your opening...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 1, 2018 / Holt - Jul 2, 2018
|The proportion of parcels delivered between FEDEX and TNT between 1920 and 2000
2 - Erin, you have mentioned the most obvious information to be found in the line chart. However, the information you...
Writing Feedbackerinjuliana - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|Popular having a year off finishing school and going to uni. Advantages and disadvantages.
3 - @Holt your feedback helped me a lot. However Im uncertain about sth. Here some details: 1) Whether only 3-5...
Writing Feedbackdewyleah - Jun 30, 2018 / dewyleah - Jul 3, 2018
|(Table) How money was spent in 5 different countries in 2002
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 30, 2018 / hyperephania - Jul 1, 2018
|Free higher education for poor people
3 - Tien, you need to familiarize yourself with the various types of Task 2 essay question formats. These questions require...
Writing Feedbackjunny - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|IELTS 1 Weight group comparison; the proportion of underweight, normal-weight and overweight people
2 - Hi, here are some suggestions for your answer: course --> in my opinion, I think you should use word:...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 30, 2018 / Buivandat - Jul 1, 2018
|The question is whether or not motorized flight is the greatest invention ever
3 - thanks for your feedback sir, With all my respect, i have to explain that the detail data in my...
Writing Feedbackmelodyyyyy - Jun 30, 2018 / melodyyyyy - Jul 1, 2018
|The historical data about wheat exports over three different parts of the world
3 - Ngo, you have not delivered a complete summary overview. You only have a partial introduction to the topic when...
Writing FeedbackNgoThanhHuyen121 - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|The higher number of young adults in a society has more advantages
3 - Felicia, your essay is only 231 words. That is 19 words short of the minimum word count of 250....
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jun 29, 2018 / Holt - Jun 30, 2018
|Task 2: state-of-art-technology is changing the way we learn
5 - @Holt thank you so much for your help. Your review has been invaluable to me during this time. I...
Writing FeedbackMinh Thu - Jun 29, 2018 / Minh Thu - Jul 11, 2018
|More and more burden over young people with the expectations in the modern world
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang96 - Jun 29, 2018 / trangtrang96 - Jul 2, 2018
|IELTS Task 2- Government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home
4 - imchang, , in order to make sure that you stay within the advisable word count of 250-300 words in...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jun 28, 2018 / Holt - Jun 29, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - The increasing influence of the young generation
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 27, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 28, 2018
|IELTS- THE VARIETY OF MUSIC IN THE WORLD TODAY
4 - @hyperephania This is very helpful for me to improve my writing. Thank you! @holt I will make sure...
Writing Feedbacknatashaebab - Jun 27, 2018 / natashaebab - Jun 28, 2018
|IELTS Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays.
2 - Hi there. The first problem I noticed is that the question clearly asks you to state if the development...
Writing Feedbackismigyul - Jun 27, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 27, 2018
|IELTS - Equal numbers of boys and girls in every course of an university?
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 27, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 30, 2018
|Some people think that employers should not strict on their employees dress code. Agree or disagree?
3 - Felicia, your response is more appropriate for an extent essay that uses the basis of "I partially agree" as...
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jun 27, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|WEALTHY NATIONS SHOULD SHARE WITH THIRD WORLD COUNTRIES
4 - Ebab, this is a direct question essay that asks you to pick one opinion in response to the question....
Writing Feedbacknatashaebab - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|IELTS - Why do people learn a foreign language? Show the reasons.
7 - @Holt Thanks for your comments! I really appreciate your spending time interpreting my writing....
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 26, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 27, 2018
|IELTS - large number of children play computer games - how it may affect them?
6 - Franciane, this being a 5 paragraph comparative essay needs to be better threshed out than the way that you...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|Studying alone is the best way. Agree or disagree?
5 - Nghi, since the prompt thesis asked you to consider whether you agree OR disagree with the statement provided, you...
Writing Feedbacknghigia219 - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|Spending large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities
5 - Gloria, there is a 250 minimum word count for the Task 2 essay. You wrote only 244 words which...
Writing FeedbackKino18 - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|(Bar charts) The weight measurements of people living in Charlestown
5 - @Holt Thanks for your comment, I am working hard on improving my writing skills and I will try my...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 26, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 27, 2018
|The view that businesses should have the duty with community beside their aim to make profit
2 - Tran, please keep in mind that the C&C scoring section of the task will be based on a complete...
Writing Feedbackemma_chen - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|To Make Public Education Better in S.Korea
2 - Chaeun, is this supposed to be a research paper or an opinion paper? I am confused as to what...
Writing Feedbackhanuely - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Similarity and Difference between Child and Adult Language Acquisition
2 - Chaeun, the major problems that I see with this research paper stem from the non-academic tone that you have...
Writing Feedbackhanuely - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Relocation to cities in order to look for a job.
3 - @ismigyul you have the right idea regarding the discussion for this essay topic but you have the wrong approach...
Writing Feedbackismigyul - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Has knowledge about the past value for those of us living today?
3 - imchang, , your response to the essay is right on the mark. However, your extent response is not appropriate....
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|TEACHING CHILDREN THE LITERATURE THEIR OWN COUNTRY - OTHER COUNTRIES
3 - Nana, it is evident that you have misunderstood the prompt you were provided for discussion. The prompt instruction is...
Writing Feedbacksumidakanae - Jun 24, 2018 / Holt - Jun 25, 2018
|Causes and measures to overcome overweight.
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 24, 2018 / jalp - Jul 3, 2018
|The advertisers use advanced techniques to show their products better and more attractive. TOEFL
Writing Feedbacksalvia - Jun 22, 2018 / salvia - Jun 23, 2018
|Some countries have a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of elderlies
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you for your feedback. I did review the site that I am referring to improve my...
Writing FeedbackKino18 - Jun 22, 2018 / Kino18 - Jun 24, 2018
|IELTS GT Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
2 - Franciane, your essay suffers in terms of C&C in some sections. For example, I am unclear about what you...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|Why do we need music? And what about 'traditional' tracks? Aren't they obsolete today?
Writing Feedbackhanaa1989 - Jun 22, 2018 / hanaa1989 - Jun 25, 2018
|IELTS - The digital and traditional newspapers
6 - Hi, I agree with Holts suggestion on deciding which side you are 'agree' or' disagree' and focus on...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 22, 2018 / Kino18 - Jun 25, 2018
|What invention in the last 30 years has made the most difference in the lives of people?
3 - @pp50123 You have chosen some very good lines of reasoning for the topic you chose to discuss in this...
Writing Feedbackpp50123 - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|Essay about the charts' summarization - money for children's sports in Britain
2 - Linh, your paper has a factual error located within it. The first error is that you are citing the...
Writing FeedbackLinh Pham - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|IELTS - Artists have more attention than scientists
5 - Thank you, I should have mentioned that artists are more visible through their work more than scientists. For example,...
Writing FeedbackMTALY - Jun 22, 2018 / MTALY - Jun 24, 2018
|IELTS - useful or harmful chemicals in our food
3 - Franciane, I can say that you have a good understanding of the topic provided for discussion. However, you do...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|Many employers are now offering their employees the option to work from home.
4 - Hello, do you mean i should write 5 paragraph? Paragraph 1: Introduction Paragraph 2: Opinion Paragraph 3: Reason...
Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 21, 2018 / cherny - Jun 22, 2018
|IELTS; The media should reduce bad news that they write or say
3 - Artin, it is difficult to help you. I am unsure about how to advise you regarding possible improvements to...
Writing FeedbackIMRXI - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|The youngster population surpass the number of older people in some countries
3 - Nguyen, this is a direct response question. The response should be coming from a singular point of view. A...
Writing Feedbackkhanhmeoxx - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing?
5 - Hoa, you were only asked whether the topic provided was a good or bad thing. To exaggerate the response...
Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Jun 20, 2018 / Holt - Jun 21, 2018
|Several advantages of playing sport games
4 - Your essay has a lot of 'they', 'therefore', and 'children'. I understand why you are using it but why...
Writing Feedbackhoanghadhtm - Jun 19, 2018 / hanuely - Jun 25, 2018
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