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|Online education and traditional education
3 - If this writing is meant for IELTS or TOEFL, I am pretty confident that this essay is too very...
Writing FeedbackShaunFenty - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS: Foreign languages should be instructed in kindergarten
6 - Well... I can see you have excellent writing skills . However, it is better to pay more attention to...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 2, 2013
|It's better to live in a small town than a big city
2 - .... Don't use numbers in essay writing unless it is something to do with time or dates. Also,...
Writing FeedbackDoanhty - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2:boarding schools are getting popular,positive or negative ?
3 - In the boarding life, students are required to become more independent because they live away from their families....
Writing FeedbackAgenderine - Oct 31, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 1, 2013
|PRIVATE SCHOOL SHOULD BE BANNED! Ielts task 2
5 - Interactive learning, rich media and well prepared lectures let students find the subjects interesting, regardless of boredom textbook...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / phuoc - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS - the largest percentage of consumer spending in each country went on food/drinks/tobacco
3 - very good summarising! I do not know much about writings but I noticed repetitive using of the word 'spending'....
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Oct 31, 2013 / ladyjoy - Nov 7, 2013
|IELTS;Education should be given priority over recreational and sports activities
3 - First, you should have included the prompt in your essay. Otherwise we do not get an exact idea about...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|Task 2 IELTS, AIMS OF UNIVERSITY ARE FOR GETTING JOB OR BENEFITING INDIVIDUAL AND SOCIETY
4 - Maybe your fundamental problem here is over-complicated sentence structure that leads to grammatical mistakes or confusing in meaning. Hopefully...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / vmtct - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS, Even though developing countries receive financial help, poverty is still an issue
2 - Developed countries are supporting developing countries to fight poor conditionspoverty mainly through financial aid but perceived improvement is not...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|GRE Argument Essay - Smith Corporation/ Youngtown Wildlife Preserve
NEW - The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife...
Writing Feedbackritikatiwari - Oct 31, 2013 / — -
|Education plays fundamental role in the growth of a country
7 - thanks a lot for your support. I've got some problems with brainstorming and expressing ideas. I wonder if we...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 2, 2013
|Music brings joy and emotion to our soul, traditional music should be preserved
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|Ielts essay, The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades
3 - more and more people finds internet essential => it should be " find " because "more and more people"...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS; GRAPH - evolving trend of population aged 65 and over
3 - Hi, I suggest you to change a little bit the organization of your details paragraphs. Try to make one...
Writing Feedbacklanlinhcc - Oct 30, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS Academic writing: FREE FRESH WATER OR PAID FRESH WATER?
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Oct 30, 2013 / gerelmaa - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Some people believe money is a less important factor than free time
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Oct 30, 2013 / Altaa - Nov 6, 2013
3 - Good editing by Pahan. .... too many spelling mistakes in this sentence. Pay attention to your spellings....
Writing Feedbackoum - Oct 30, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|"The Nearer the Church Farther from God".
3 - danbikim Thanks dear you are right. i should have used like "This proverb is not solely applicable to the...
Writing FeedbackQurban Ali - Oct 30, 2013 / Qurban Ali - Oct 30, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want.
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Oct 29, 2013 / JethroJosh - Oct 30, 2013
|IELTS essay : people prefer to live in a house OR to live in an apartment
NEW - Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 29, 2013 / — -
|People are both alike and different in many ways; COMPARE & CONTRAST - two friends
Writing FeedbackBasketballg - Oct 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 30, 2013
|Now, the developing countries are not in the same row as that of developed one
7 - equipment is an uncountable noun. so, it is not correct using plural form write as 'medical equipment'...
Writing FeedbackNandu - Oct 29, 2013 / beula - Nov 9, 2013
|Write a rough draft that examines a particular relationship and its significance; explain
Writing Feedbackwilliamp - Oct 29, 2013 / Sarath Kumar - Oct 31, 2013
|'Children tend to imitate parents behavior'; Children - good members of society
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 29, 2013 / dumi - Nov 2, 2013
|IELTS; Popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising;To what extent you agree?
NEW - Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of the advertising and not the real needs...
Writing FeedbackKjerry - Oct 29, 2013 / — -
|Diamonds are unflinchingly hard; Students and Stress
2 - Inside the brick walls, around the lines of lockers, between the rows of desks and within the minds of...
Writing Feedbackestumph - Oct 28, 2013 / Kalena54 - Oct 30, 2013
|TOEFL ; Who is the Best Teacher ?
4 - ... student's ----> one student students' ------> many students He or she should devote his/her time in understanding...
Writing Feedbackclaudiaatalah - Oct 28, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS: Which should be the ones to teach children into good citizens? Parents or Schools?
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 28, 2013 / stream_xu - Nov 3, 2013
|TOEFL: Whether countries have moral obligation to help each other or not ?
Writing Feedbackthwadu - Oct 28, 2013 / thwadu - Nov 13, 2013
|IELTS: Are our zoos cruel to wild animals?
4 - Your IELTS Score depends on how accurately you used grammar and vocabulary. Though you need a variety of sentence...
Writing Feedbacklonghoho - Oct 28, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 2, 2013
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Watching television is bad
4 - Ok, here the reason you give is that TV makes people unsociable. Then you should tell them how...
Writing Feedbackumanga - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS Human's dependence in the modern world - about coherence, academic style
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 27, 2013 / gabbie - Nov 5, 2013
|ielts essay : water should be always free. governments should ban bottled water.
4 - hi, I noticed several grammatical errors which made your sentences misleading. try to review your work by paragraphs to...
Writing Feedbackbeula - Oct 27, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 27, 2013
|IELTS; Is money the main motivator for employees ? To what extent you agree with that?
3 - Good advice from Pahan :) This is not a typical agree/disagree topic. However, you can still use this format...
Writing FeedbackAllii - Oct 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Education is only accessible to privileged members of our society ? MUIS SCHOLARSHIP
2 - The study of commerce has always been my preferred choice of study and my strong transcripts only reinforces my...
Writing Feedbackyuzeee2 - Oct 27, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 30, 2013
|TOEFL: Best ways of reducing stress: listening to music, exercise, meditation
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|[GRE] USAGE OF MOPEDS IN BALMER ISLAND - Response
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Oct 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 29, 2013
|IELTS:Who should be responsible for cleaning pollution? Private Individuals or Government?
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|[ IELTS Task 2] the standard of living in country benefits cities rather than rural areas
8 - Let's take your first sentence; Why has it sparked a major dispute? Also as JethroJosh points out,...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 28, 2013
|Maintaining status quo can cause personal and professional stagnation of a person's development
5 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackAnnaAnna - Oct 26, 2013 / AnnaAnna - Oct 31, 2013
|[toefl task] Is the purpose of television to educate, not to entertain?
5 - After 8-hour working or study, people are so exhausted that they may be reluctant to spend time on...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|[TOEFL] : Governments should spend money on space exploration or for basic needs of people
5 - Your second sentence in the introduction is more meaningful and depict the same meaning. I feel that the...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 26, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|Young People Are Much More Aware of and Concerned About Issues Like the Environment, Pover
4 - Overall, your essay needs lots of improvement with regard to clarity of your sentences. They don't convey the idea...
Writing Feedbackyas 2013 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Recalling an Experience; NARRATIVE ESSAY
3 - First, I have a request; You need to provide a more meaningful topic for your thread which is a...
Writing FeedbackPICHIRO - Oct 25, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|"Why people attend college?" To fulfill their dreams!
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Oct 25, 2013 / sky2586 - Oct 28, 2013
|Me and Myself; Need help with Grammar!
Writing Feedbackfarhanwsd - Oct 25, 2013 / hongphuc - Nov 3, 2013
|Love and friendship - the best things in life are free.
3 - "each people" is wrong. People means a collection of men/women and therefore it is a plural word. So...
Writing Feedbackcarmspinto - Oct 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|Destiny and Character; "Your moments of decisions affect your Destiny"
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Oct 25, 2013 / Faith318 - Mar 14, 2014
|Community service can give a sense of fullment to students
4 - By working in unpiad community services, students will be able to acknowledge the way in which people communicating...
Writing Feedbacklynn731 - Oct 25, 2013 / hongphuc - Nov 3, 2013
|Why study?; 'improve understanding, practical knowledge and career planning'
Writing Feedbackphuongdunglotus - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|IELTS:Motorized flight is the greatest invention in the modern world; Agree or Disagree?
3 - First of all, the frequent air travels have detrimental effects on the environment due to the emission of the...
Writing Feedbacklslt - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|'broaden horizons'; it is better to begin learning foreign language early
5 - I think this is the best way to practice because these tasks you need to finish within the allocated...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|'depends on the age'; should teachers assign homework for students every day?
6 - establish a rule proposing that teachers should not assign homework for their pupils students need...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS; Some prefer changes in life while others refuse to change
2 - Some people think change in their lives is unnecessary, because they would like to keepmaintain a regular lifestyleslifestyle. ...
Writing FeedbackJerry0123 - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|The gap between the rich and the poor; Introduction to essay on socio-economic inequality
Writing FeedbackJane321 - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|The best teacher is one who is very knowledgeable about the subject matter
4 - it should be Knowledgable you have met the problem of repeating words "knowledgeable teachers" and "can't...
Writing Feedbacksofianc - Oct 23, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 3, 2013
|Have you ever been in a crowded and dirty place? ;descriptive essay
4 - That is my introduction so i tried not to be specific in that paragraph. My teacher told me to...
Writing Feedbackboy3005 - Oct 23, 2013 / boy3005 - Oct 23, 2013
|TOEFL;universities require students to studymany subjects or specialize in one subject
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Some people think that private schools should be banned.
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|IELTS -Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think
12 - Dear Dumi, Thank you for your all explanation and I just now read in Oxford dictionary that make...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 23, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 24, 2013
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