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|Radio and television audience in UK
4 - The TV audience is pretty less in numbers from 1.00 to 11.00 Thereafter the audience begins to grow and...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The sector of economy for employment
3 - what does the word 'than' means? you put 'than' twice in a sentence before 'than' you put 'the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999
6 - is that your introduction? if it is your introduction i think too long and quite confusing. Introduction...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: Sector of the economy - employment by age
5 - this sentence makes me confuse, you wrote too long. it would be better if you separate them into...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Different age group work in economical sector
9 - By the way, about the various comment that all of you given, it is coloring me. hehehhe, Thank you...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 22, 2014 / SHanafi - May 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Advertising increase tendency to buy unneeded thing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 22, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 23, 2014
|Cultural Changes in Music from Generation to Generation
3 - Yes, this is very important. You need to tell us the purpose why you wrote it (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE...
Writing FeedbackTarcisiofl - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 23, 2014
|Ielts: Discuss both harms and good of advertising & give your opinion
Writing Feedbackningo - Apr 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 23, 2014
|These days, fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in high schools.
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 22, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS: The diagram about the evolution of the horse
5 - Once the first two evolution stages finishedwere completed, it can be seen that equineEquin e transformed into Merychippus with...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|Lost flight data recorders! What is going on?
Writing Feedbackdon2074978 - Apr 22, 2014 / uzboy - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS General Training; 'growing trend of increasing the retirement age'
4 - also, I just give additional advise, try to give specific details, you can take some events from your real...
Writing Feedbackvarsha2606 - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 27, 2014
|Ielts: 'the corner stone' - Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
3 - Your writing is good. However, you should polish the structure of your essay more. Try to follow the structures...
Writing Feedbacksamsonyeung - Apr 22, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: 'sense of cooperation' - children should be competitive or cooperative?
11 - also, you can put some relevant specific examples, you may take from your own experience or your friends'...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 28, 2014
|An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phones and precautions
7 - Can someone help me correct and make this sentence more academic ? I don't know how to express properly...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 22, 2014 / linh110 - Apr 24, 2014
|Toefl - going to classes should be optional for the students
4 - BecauseSince the university students haveare intellectually matured enoughgrown up , they have enoughthe ability to read and understandthe concepts...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: visits abroad; some persons visit to abroad because they have some gains
4 - you should use present on your introduction because it covers all parts of the report, it does not...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit
7 - Yes, follow dumi's advice on structuring your writing for this task. It is important that you have those three...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Write a report about education in Australia between 1997 and 2005.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Task II : Internet, the most significant invention in the last 30 years
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - May 7, 2014
|Classification essay; aren't rock music isn't boring - 'sub-genres of choice'
3 - Rock music is important to me because it acts as an outlet for expressing things that I am unable...
Writing FeedbackOrangeeskies - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: the positive and negative effects of the increase in the elders
2 - Crystal, the prompt begs you to discuss the topic in the manner of a compare and contrast essay. That...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phone impacts on people's lives
6 - From my point of view, your introduction is quite long compared with 3 or 4 sentences for a model...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 21, 2014 / ningo - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS Exam; essay part, intro, every related information
2 - Well, you need to have a good essay structure, good grammar and clarity in your sentences, good flow of...
Writing Feedbackravneets007 - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The results of a survey by the UK residents
4 - This sentence has several issues. First, what the tables show are not reasons of a survey. What they...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: Education in Australia
2 - The tables show the results of a survey abouton education in Australia between 1997 and 2005. And then,...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|Do you agree that the traditional skills will die out? -- IELTS Essay
7 - Alright.... the ideal way is to write a catchy short hook that provides a very good entrance to...
Writing FeedbackGoleo8 - Apr 20, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS: The Charts show the proportion of the population of two countries
NEW - The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections...
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|Enterprises should never put all eggs in one basket - Money in advertising.
Writing FeedbackBRonnie - Apr 20, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process
2 - Your essay is really specific. And a lot of concrete verbs. I think it's really good. However, there are...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 20, 2014 / BRonnie - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS:The process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: The method of bricks; heated in high temperature 200-1300C
2 - The diagram explains the method entire process of how bricks how to make it become material that people can...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: 'all processes occur in the water' - Live cycle of a frog
3 - ... Good introduction :) .... this needs improvement; Overall, there are seven stages in the life...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|Ielts task 2: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 19, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: The process of apple how to be canned; 'apple tree'
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 24, 2014
|Parents should allow their children to select their own profession
7 - Dear Aisha, kindly let us know the purpose of your wirting, whether are you preparing for IELTS or any...
Writing FeedbackAisha Baloch - Apr 19, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: man to man interaction changed; reason - technology
Writing Feedbackchien - Apr 19, 2014 / chien - Apr 20, 2014
|Ielts: Bricks manufacturing process from clay
2 - You should write at least 150 words, otherwise your essay score will be low. Try to use linking words...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns - 'used for illegal purposes'
Writing FeedbackUmidabonu - Apr 19, 2014 / bestonline99 - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'Durdle Door and Dorset' - Erosion of a Headland
3 - Diachronic maps/picts Intro: here you should state what the maps/picts show Overview: state what the direction of change is...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 19, 2014 / eddies - May 10, 2014
|IELTS; 'unique from other animals' - How life cycle of a frog?
3 - Well, the mating part of the frogs not shown or indicated in the diagram. Do not write anything...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Life cycle of frog - from eggs to adult frog
2 - These sentences do not provide any useful detailed information to the reader. This is a task that attempts...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'six processes' - Cycle life of frog
4 - You should use complex structure of sentences dumi's advice to put an overview after the introduction is good as...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|Apple canning process; 'sterilizing from bacteria'
8 - The diagram shows a process of making an apple canningproducing canned apple . This is totally irrelevant...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS :How apple is canned? 'durable before it is bought'
3 - These are not relevant stuff for reporting what you observe in the diagram. In this task, you should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts: apple is canned; 'there are many processes'
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|'Many small businesses focus on individualism' - teamwork versus individual work
4 - For this reason, organizations make teams of employees with complementary skills who can work with each other, sharing experiences...
Writing Feedbackwhonevercome - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Honesty vs Telling lies - persuasive essay
Writing FeedbackAndy01 - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: people should create a sense of co-operation in their children
6 - The above approach I have given is for your introduction. Follow this one for your overall essay structure and...
Writing FeedbackUmair Bandhani - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|"Get bored because nothing to do around" - a new movie theater may be built
7 - Second, the closest movie theater is 25 minutes from my home and it is quite a distance we need...
Writing Feedbacksamuelbartoli - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|We have to bend children in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing
Writing Feedbackbhanusri - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The precentages of library books read at Starmouth School
2 - a problem with Dangling particle. Visit this link: usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm a problem with Sentence fragments. Visit this...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 18, 2014 / eddies - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.
5 - I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|The Argumentative Essay - Eliminating Extreme Poverty
3 - Poverty is one of the most arduous challenges facing the world is facing today Similar to the poor,...
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Apr 17, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|Are people today live a healthier life than ancient people did or not?
Writing Feedbackljjay - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|TOEFL composition, about effective leadership
5 - thank you~I made an elementary mistake ⊙-⊙... not clear...do you mean the following words seems unconvincing?or I should do...
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