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|"A father's influence in his daughter's life: ; Every Girl Needs Her Dad
Writing FeedbackRylee23 - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|Charity began at home - helping others essay
3 - Charity is about helping people either with money or other forms of aids such as medicine, clothes and...
Writing Feedbackakhalifa - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|Toefl; Self studying or studying with a teacher?
4 - thank you so much pahan for your helping.In toefl essay, I need to develop my ideas very quickly, therefore...
Writing Feedbackokaert - Dec 16, 2013 / okaert - Dec 21, 2013
|[TOEFL] contribution of scientists have value more than contribution of artists
2 - .... This should be a hook statement which can grab the reader's attention instantly. However, this sentence does...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS; The Internet Vs Newspapers - Which is more powerful?
4 - I suggested you the appropriate structure for the introduction in your other thread and hope you would follow...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|IELTS; Importance of academic and non-academic subjects
5 - thank u dumi...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Dec 16, 2013 / handsome7boy - Dec 18, 2013
|Internet and video games; ASSIGNMENT
Writing Feedbackoad94 - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|TOEFL: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends
3 - Well ... your essay looks like a direct answer to the prompt. However, you need to present it in...
Writing Feedbacksivian - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|TOEFL:Some people prefer to work for a large company; international conferences
5 - I'll put in some comments about your grammar. As mentioned by Sivian easier already has a comparative...
Writing Feedbacklast - Dec 15, 2013 / Liyuan - Dec 17, 2013
|''TOEFL'' any children can be an expert in every distinct of creativeness because of technology
Writing FeedbackNinita - Dec 15, 2013 / Ninita - Dec 19, 2013
|Overpopulation; Effects and Solutions
2 - I guess you are preparing for IELTS. It is good to mention this purpose in the title itself so...
Writing Feedbackbloodkid - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 20, 2013
|Six different categories of families living in poverty in Australia - report
2 - I think you have written this in preparation of IELTS Task 1. It is always good to mention the...
Writing Feedbackzyxily - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|IELTS; It is essential to treasure music as one of the vital kinds of art
Writing Feedbackladyjoy - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|International pollution issues such as the energy shortage and global warming
3 - I agree with Dumi. " Increasing and deteriorating are contrast to each other. Grammatically speaking, the...
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Dec 14, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 15, 2013
|Teenagers have job while they are still student; bad effects on their education
9 - Thank you. I appreciated your sympathy. I'm in a good condition. My place is far from the area...
Writing Feedbackokaert - Dec 14, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 17, 2013
|I stood gazing at the dilapidated house
2 - As I stood gazing at the dilapidated house, I shivered as though ice had replace my spine. ......
Writing Feedbackmolly_butler01 - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 14, 2013
|Humankind is interested to imitate novel things, since he opened his eyes in this world
6 - youhold an opinion Also, I prefer if this fits in with the structure I suggested to you above. Conclude...
Writing FeedbackNinita - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS: People from different countries have various customs and behaviors
3 - .... you can improve the presentation of this idea; Customs and traditions differ from nation to nation and...
Writing Feedbackpamani - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 14, 2013
|GRE Issue Essay - Governments should offer a free university education
4 - ... I feel you should have presented this idea with better clarity; Other than the high costs that...
Writing FeedbackROMULO85 - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2014
|IELTS- Workers in traditional industry (doctors, nursing and teachers)
7 - Yes, this is much better than what you wrote previously. :) People hold beliefs / People believe...
Writing Feedbackvmagic - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people
2 - meat contains protein mostly and not vitamins. :D Well... this is the essay structure we suggest for this...
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|Internships are required for university students in order to graduate.
3 - Your whole essay looks like just one paragraph. That's no good dear :( What is this writing for? TOEFL...
Writing Feedbackgabiglima - Dec 13, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 21, 2013
|When students evaluate their teachers, teachers can know what they need to improve themselves
4 - Well, I think it is better if you take some extra care in presenting your essay. Everything seems cramped...
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Dec 13, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 21, 2013
|People listen to music for different reasons at different times
2 - I find this paragraph irrelevant to the topic. You didn't give reasons why music is so important to...
Writing Feedbackhanyoojung - Dec 13, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS : Tradations and money-making attractions aimed at tourists
7 - Well.... in the introduction you need to introduce the title in its original sense. This prompt says; ...
Writing Feedbackgavin - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS-More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items.
5 - Why would you link famous brand products to fake items, instead more people would feel comfortable with the idea...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Dec 12, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 19, 2013
|IELTS- Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one- advantages/disadvantages
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 12, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS-task1-the table below gives information related to population growth...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Dec 12, 2013 / tiyuok - Dec 13, 2013
|The Role of Media in The Lives of Americans
2 - Media has had a profound affectimpact on the lives of Americans / Media has profoundly affected the lives of...
Writing FeedbackAlecSalisbury - Dec 12, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|No one can deny the benefits to be gain from leading a hand to in needed nations
Writing FeedbackMichael Tran - Dec 12, 2013 / MisterWandering - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS ; Pay attention to preserve culture and environment
Writing Feedbackznack - Dec 12, 2013 / JethroJosh - Dec 17, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should the government sponsor artists or artists sponsor themselves?
4 - Dumi, Greenleaf, Thank you both for pointing out the mistakes. Actually, I am going to take TOEFL this weekend...
Writing Feedbackbleu929 - Dec 12, 2013 / bleu929 - Dec 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] the most important characteristic to be successful is intelligence
2 - .... this has a few issues in terms of grammar; People who become successful in life possess certain...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 12, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|"Old is gold" - City should try to preserve its old, historic buildings
Writing FeedbackHuma khan - Dec 12, 2013 / Huma khan - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS 2: Average weight of people is increasing and level of health decreasing,solution
Writing FeedbackJins - Dec 12, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS 2: Food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. Good or Bad
Writing FeedbackAlexielts - Dec 12, 2013 / Alexielts - Dec 18, 2013
|The importance to have second language ; First paragraph
6 - Ok... if so, this should contain the reasons and examples to support those reasons. Generally it is good to...
Writing FeedbackMurilo - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|TOEFL; Today's competitive society requires at least social independence from parents for survival
Writing Feedbackatacankucuk - Dec 11, 2013 / atacankucuk - Dec 12, 2013
|After 19 century, everything changes dramatically like never before - Life today is more comfortable
Writing Feedbackwendi - Dec 11, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|The Equal Rights: men should be responsible for children's upbringing
Writing Feedbackmonokakau - Dec 11, 2013 / monokakau - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS; Subjects taught in schools are to be decided by central authorities or teachers?
4 - Being in the teaching profession for years, teachers would be able to clearly picturise the ideas and topics which...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 11, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS ; What is the best way to reduce crime?
3 - 1. Need to improve your grammar & punctuation 2. Try writing simple sentences & make it clear for...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 11, 2013
|One of the characteristics of successful leaders is the sense of responsibility for accept
3 - Well, leadership had always been in demand since the inception of this world, not only among humans, but...
Writing FeedbackHellen - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|Young adults - early independence or living with family for a long time?
4 - Yes, I too agree with greenleaf. Your topic sounds like an IELTS or TOEFL topic. If you prepare...
Writing Feedbackmasoud48 - Dec 10, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 10, 2013
|IELTS essay - role of news editors in broadcasting the news
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Some schools are introducing unpaid community services into their school programmes compulsorily.
Writing Feedbackruilee - Dec 10, 2013 / fatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS WT 2 - Advertisment is more harmful than helpful to humantity. Agree or disagree?
6 - 1. Good essay. 2. Introduction could have been more attractive or catchy ---------------- Help with mine ⇒...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 10, 2013 / CASOON - Dec 10, 2013
|[Toefl ibt-Opinion Essay] Should Attendance Be Required in College?
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|[IELTS - Task 2] Examinations can give a clear picture of students' true ability
7 - That's good news! Please go to the EF Contributors page (you find it at the bottom - click on...
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Every year some languages die out; language as the most important achievment
3 - ..as the most important achievement we have made... ..as many languages have been developed , each language has its...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 9, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 24, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task2 - Causes and solutions in preventing bad influence of adult products
7 - FrankZheng: Yep, thank you, now I find it clearer :D I should rewrite the second paragraph, and focus to...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 9, 2013 / mariali - Dec 9, 2013
|[TOEFL] Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance.
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 9, 2013 / something - Dec 9, 2013
|IELTS; Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
5 - Thanks a lot for helping me guys. It's really very helpful for me. Someone can please also help me...
Writing FeedbackGirishgautams - Dec 8, 2013 / Girishgautams - Dec 10, 2013
|Homework helps teachers to assess students' understanding ; Advantages of homework
6 - Body paragraphs are used to elaborate on reasons. What is the key reason here? It is time management....
Writing FeedbackFofo123 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|TEEN MIAMI; How extracurricular activities have influenced me
Writing Feedbackmj2794 - Dec 8, 2013 / mj2794 - Dec 13, 2013
|Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.
8 - If the hook is so problematic for you, jut forget it and start with the background part of the...
Writing FeedbackBullet32 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 21, 2013
|IELTS: applying community service in schools serving a good purpose
7 - You could rewrite again and again ,and assess according the standards by yourself. Maybe ,in this way ,you can...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 8, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 9, 2013
|[IELTS / TASK 2] The government has to pay for aged care
5 - It's quite clear and I think your essay could hit the 6.5 band score :D Just pay more attention...
Writing Feedbackbellavista0414 - Dec 8, 2013 / mariali - Dec 8, 2013
|[IELTS - Task 2] Trees are essential for the existence of the human race
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 8, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 8, 2013
|It is crucial in mathematics, insight plays an secondary role; Amherst Insight 'Reasoning' Essay
3 - nicely done. I take it that your response agrees with the paragraph at the top (albeit without stating it...
Writing FeedbackLydmeister - Dec 8, 2013 / coolintake - Dec 10, 2013
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