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|"book smarts" and "street smarts" ; The Intellectual Aspect of Nursing essay
Writing FeedbackDonnanicole - Nov 27, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|IELTS: Development of a country Vs pollution and environmental damage
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 27, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 28, 2013
|TOEFL - Why some like to engage in dangerous activities? 'joy and happiness'
Writing Feedbackggalaxy - Nov 27, 2013 / ggalaxy - Nov 28, 2013
|IELTS-Mobile phones & the Internet are very useful
5 - You're trying to cramp too much information in a single sentence. Trying to write such sentences increases chances...
Writing FeedbackAUSTINCLUB - Nov 27, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 28, 2013
|The 2nd Holocaust - Argumentative essay about Death Penalty.
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Nov 27, 2013 / batais - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS academic - Rules on loan and credit card
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Nov 30, 2013
|'Women less appreciated in society?' - an IELTS exam
Writing Feedbackalex90 - Nov 27, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 28, 2013
|Toefl - Should teenagers have paid jobs while they are students? be independent
4 - Thanks, dumi This is my first essay on this forum. Definitely I will switch over to writing feedback forum....
Writing FeedbackAlice123 - Nov 27, 2013 / Alice123 - Nov 28, 2013
|Building a large factory in our community - Advantageous or disadvantageous?
4 - really a good essay... try using more synonyms instead of repeating words.. it would look great :)...
Writing Feedbackkhodekhodam - Nov 27, 2013 / sri_1 - Nov 28, 2013
|IELTS essay - Teaching children at home or put them in school- pls review n comment
6 - nice vocabulary range and ideas... Maybe a little structuring is needed for the introduction and conclusion paragraphs. ...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Nov 27, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 28, 2013
|CBEST Technology is out of control or has improved the quality of life?
3 - ...."Some" sounds better than "Many"; Some people believe that technology has gone out of control. What...
Writing Feedbackiwtny - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Dec 29, 2013
|The effects of technology on children - NEGATIVE/ POSITIVE
2 - I don't find this an interesting hook statement. You can do better with your opening sentence :) ...
Writing FeedbackHOL2040366 - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Ielts: cement and concrete production graph
4 - Thanks for your comments, Altaa and Dumi. :) For introduction, can i use the sentence Altaa suggested. It...
Writing Feedbacklongngo - Nov 26, 2013 / longngo - Nov 28, 2013
|TOEFL IBT - altruistic behavior (Integrated Writing)
Writing Feedbackggalaxy - Nov 26, 2013 / ggalaxy - Nov 27, 2013
|Telling truth has been a debatable issue among people from the past till now
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 26, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS Academic- stringent age rules to reduce the road accidents.
2 - Here you assume the reader knows the argument. However, you are supposed to introduce the argument to the...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|toefl essay, face-to-face communication, seeing the other person eye to eye
2 - Well structured essay. Please take a note on the punctuation. Use comma in appropriate place. Especially after connectives...
Writing FeedbackArinadeer - Nov 26, 2013 / sri_1 - Nov 26, 2013
|"Every coin has two sides"; Effects of globalization - discuss
7 - at first i guess some words need to be replaced. also you had better talk about other effects of...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Nov 26, 2013 / mika1998 - Nov 28, 2013
|Why do we need music? 'effect on the infants'
8 - you said that which music was more important.This sentence can be true but you have to say that which...
Writing FeedbackHelpmepassIELTS - Nov 26, 2013 / okaert - Dec 23, 2013
|IELTS- opinion about languages dying out
Writing Feedbackmingming - Nov 26, 2013 / SreeSam - Nov 27, 2013
|[IELTS] - Problems caused by Traffic and its Solutions
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Nov 25, 2013 / asmy - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay:Some people think that music brings benefits to individuals
3 - First, I have a small admin request for you; Please open all IELTS essays in Writing Feedback forum :)...
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 25, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS Essay - Money spent on parties is waste or for betterment.
3 - Partying is considered as a great way to socialize.... I think this provides a better hook statement for...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 25, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 25, 2013
|Journalism article for Final Paper on the Berley brothers
Writing Feedbackariulloa - Nov 25, 2013 / ivylaw - Nov 29, 2013
|IELTS; Universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge
2 - It is generally accepted that universities are the very places where students can obtain profound knowledge ofin the fields...
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 25, 2013 / dumi - Nov 25, 2013
|Sports & Social Activities are just as important as Classes- Equal financial support!
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 24, 2013 / 600score - Nov 25, 2013
|'Why don't we use laughing gas in wars?'
3 - Sir thank you very much for some real grammar check.I believe these valuable suggestions of yours would help improve...
Writing FeedbackRavi Vj - Nov 24, 2013 / Ravi Vj - Nov 27, 2013
|Financing artists from tax payer's money - Ielts
Writing FeedbackBobbypark - Nov 24, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|'Education and social disharmony' - IELTS
5 - Nice essay with good ideas. However as this is an argument essay i would suggest you to state your...
Writing Feedbacknidhishaw - Nov 24, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 29, 2013
|IELTS: Improving careers or spend time with family and friends more important
3 - It is often believed that money and success are directly correlated with each other. Therefore, some...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 24, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|'Radio and Television users' - IELTS - Line Graph
Writing FeedbackLifeBringer - Nov 24, 2013 / LifeBringer - Dec 1, 2013
|some people prefer to eat at food stands. other people prefer to eat food at home.
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|iELTS: Is ambition is a positive or negative characteristic? Is it necessary for success?
5 - ... I fixed the grammar error. However, technogical marvels and change in living standards are not the outcomes...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 24, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS - Some business prohibits smoking in any of their offices
4 - to gtamani:Thanks so much for your time. It helped me a lot to locate my common mistakes tiyuok :...
Writing Feedbackkumkap - Nov 24, 2013 / kumkap - Nov 24, 2013
|Nowadays traffic in major cities is worsening. What problems does it create? Solutions?
7 - You should use more data or statistics to help display how traffic is worsening, some of the major problems,...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / desaik111 - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS- competition and cooperation , which one is important for children?
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Nov 23, 2013 / duo008 - Nov 24, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY: People in the past used to be more dependent on one another
4 - This sounds pretty vague :( What sort of transformation it undergoes? Remember, this is your hook statement that...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS: ECOLOGICAL BALANCE; 'technology as major culprit for ecological impact'
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS; At young age children are more adaptable to studying foreign language
6 - Hi, I have an admin request for you - Please have a more meaningful topic, similar to the one...
Writing FeedbackraDJa - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|Warnings and smoking - IELTS task 2 Academic.
3 - ... well this is not for speech writing, but essay writing. So, avoid unnecessary redundancy. It is well...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives
6 - Some grammatical errors: teach somebody something (to do something); expect somebody to do something I think you...
Writing FeedbackKate64 - Nov 23, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 6, 2013
|'Taxpayer, employer and individual' - IELTS Writing : Cambridge 1 : Practice 1
Writing Feedbacklimarchung - Nov 22, 2013 / limarchung - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay:Social networking has the advantages and disadvantages
Writing Feedbacknhr - Nov 22, 2013 / pakias - Nov 23, 2013
|Doing things within groups or by individual - ielts essay
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed and it is too crowded with so many words and improper phrases. You...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 22, 2013
|IELTS essay, Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities
7 - great.... I think you should what you desire :) Let us know when you get your score. Also, keep...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|'Babasaheb Ambedkar'; hich one person in the history would you like to meet?
Writing Feedbackakshayj25 - Nov 22, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 26, 2013
|Every day computer use by children - 'Computer is a miraculous tool'
Writing FeedbackMe1992 - Nov 22, 2013 / Me1992 - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth
14 - Hi, Dumi, my tutor insist that Discuss both views and give your own opinion means you should...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Nov 22, 2013 / tiyuok - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS; Technology cannot solve all the world's problems!
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 21, 2013 / raDJa - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS: pros and cons of work in other countries and take families together
8 - Since you struggle with time management, I think this structure for your introduction also would help you organize your...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|[IELTS] Does a celebrity benefit society or not? (Cambridge IELTS 9 G1 Task2)
2 - ... I find this statement unfair. Not everybody is interested in becoming a celebrity although there can be...
Writing FeedbackRomanticDog - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|distance travelled - IELTS academic task 1 writing (table form)
6 - Good... Hey, I've done a major mistake while providing you the structure for this task. The one I provided...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 22, 2013
|'Jail time or community sevices work' - Ielts essay 02
5 - First, I have an admin request for you - IELTS threads should be opened in Writing Feedback forum (...
Writing FeedbackHgly - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|Public utilities and surroundings are the primary factors to consider before moving to a place
7 - I don't find much meaning in this line.... Your introduction sounds better without this line. Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|GRE Practice Essay - Governments should limit the amount of restriction, if any, on scient
Writing Feedbackchloespaha - Nov 20, 2013 / Nikkyrulzz - Nov 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] learning a foreign language in my own country or anther country
4 - hi. You have to be careful in choosing your words to describe your idea, like in the sentence below...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS ; Nuclear energy is a better source of power for today's global energy needs.
3 - To produce energy using traditional methods, we need to burn fossils and natural gases. These emit...
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|Economic growth is defined as an increase in the number of goods and services produced in one year
5 - In my opinion, your introduction is not appropriate for your task. Firstly, you are more likely talking about Economic...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 22, 2013
|SAT; Judging a book by its cover
6 - Well.... you may cite certain literature work as examples and that is no harm. However, in this...
Writing Feedbackslevia94 - Nov 20, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS - Line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES OF PEOPLE IN THE US AND JAPAN)
3 - Many thanks for your help! Hopefully, I can receive more feedback from you for next reports and essays....
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