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|IELTS ( TASK 1 ) Expenditure on Health & Education , UAE as % of GDP
5 - This statement seems to be a bit too compact. Have two sentences, one that describes the main observation...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task2 : People reluctant to changes. What are the issues and possible solutions?
2 - Journey of life is generally a collection of inevitable changes in which people happen to face both positive and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessors.
3 - There is no specific example to back your justification. You need to pay attention to the structure of...
Writing FeedbackPepsicub - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home
2 - Woman is the live wire of every person's life. She could be one's mother, sister, daughter, wife or...
Writing Feedbacksabi123 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|The ocean is much like a woman; Descriptive piece about the ocean- 10 high level English
3 - Hi, This essay should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackvictoriarichtst - Jan 29, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Children under drug influences and solutions
4 - In conclusion, the drugs have always been a serious threat to our society, and the younger generation in...
Writing Feedbackmrbin - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|One Official international Language or more languages?
6 - (why...?) If you could, here you'd better restate what you've mentioned above. Then, show some suggestion or warning...
Writing FeedbackAbi90 - Jan 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 16, 2014
|Toefl; Childhood is the happiest time of our life (My weakness point is writing)
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Jan 28, 2014 / aldebaran - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Resist change or Welcome change?
6 - Yes, that's my approach :) Anyways, hope this structure would help you too (this is for Agree/ Disagree or...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|People rely more on technology to solve problems impacting ability of humans to thinking.
Writing FeedbackEssay4gre - Jan 28, 2014 / Essay4gre - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS [TASK 2] alternatives to fossil fuels
3 - You need to pay attention to your essay structure. Your introduction should contain certain features in order to earn...
Writing FeedbackMonen - Jan 28, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Increasing fuel price is best way to solve traffic.agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 1, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: the benefits of technologies mobility outweigh the disadvantage
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS: outlay and expense on fast foods in the UK
5 - The bar chart illustrates the outlay on fast foods in the UK in 1990 whereas the line graph gives...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|Hello! I am studying in class 7 I want to improve my English help me.
Writing Feedbackkrity - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy
Writing Feedbacklavie - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2:How technology has changed the way people interact?Advantages/Disadvantages.
3 - Let's check this intro with dumi's suggested structure; With the advancement in the field of communication technology and IT...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Information Technology in Human's Life
7 - I don't think it is appropriate to say "throughout 21st century" because this century is still not over....
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create.
5 - Whatever the reason, I would give an argumentation that government cannotshouldn't prevent artist to earn much money from their...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS : Space Exploration - More to do with national pride than international effort?
3 - In my mindview, people who ... have been made their nationalitynation proud of thembecause they ...Now, let's discuss this...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 1: First Year Assessments
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Erosion of a headland
3 - you need to follow struture : 1. Intro sentences : introduce the topic of the chart [Paraphrase] 2. Overview...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|TOEFL; Playing Computer games can have negative impact on society
7 - Now days, the computer games are not only fun but they also possess some significant features and all of...
Writing Feedbackahmadeng - Jan 27, 2014 / MelisaStewart - Feb 3, 2014
|Is it true that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions?
Writing Feedbackraflo - Jan 27, 2014 / raflo - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Influence of Colours in humans' feeling
10 - Thanks znack and Vijay. Vijay, I dont think it is necessary to mention any research names in Introduction and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 27, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Televisions are the most favorite media for comunicating
8 - In your introduction you should have introduced the there types of media that yo are going to compare and...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|Memorable day in my entire life!
5 - ... This has some grammar issues. Also, try to avoid using numbers in essay writing. I have spent...
Writing Feedbackninamoradi - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Species extinctions and the threats to plant life in tropical forests
3 - Very good introduction :) Very good overview too :) Let's see how you tackle the detail section :D ...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 27, 2014
|IELTS; Rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide issue!
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Jan 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|Nowadays there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past.
5 - Once upon a time, women's rights were significantly limited, and thanks forto exemplary decision judgedtaken by the Institution of...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Jan 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facil
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 26, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 30, 2014
|Literature review : Gender inequality in the global economic crisis....
2 - Professor Senguino--CAPITALIZE it for it is a title. gender-based employment had huge influences on not only well-developed...
Writing Feedbackpemaptheki - Jan 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Colour can affect human psychologist
4 - Hi Fardhani Putri, Yes , I understand your point here. I am not an expert in writing but still...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 27, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Britons fast food
4 - I think your writing is just fine. Though, the conclusion should be more abstract. P.S I think you...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 26, 2014 / Serapke - Jan 26, 2014
|High-income and average-income people are more likely to consume hamburgers - IELTS
5 - Hi, active sentences are USUALLY preferred to be used, but in that case, you have to consider one...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2014
|Disenfranchising women voters
6 - In this modern age of 21st century, nations can never think of development without equal contribution of both...
Writing FeedbackAlexx - Jan 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Advertisements are benefial to people or not ?
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 25, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|Road accidents claim too many lives. What can governments and individuals do to reduce it?
Writing Feedbackyohooooo - Jan 25, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The main reasons for study and the amount of study grant
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 25, 2014
|IELST TASK 1: Australian kids' leisure actives.
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Jan 24, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014
|My sister got sick - I had embarrassing experience then.
2 - Hello Elhaam, I found some punctuation errors in your paragraph. Always space after (,)and (.) You don't have to...
Writing FeedbackElhaam - Jan 24, 2014 / Neupane3 - Jan 24, 2014
|"Inventions vs doctors"; 'broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering'
NEW - Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statements? Give...
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|Where do you want to live? traditional vs modern - 'health environment choice'
21 - Your overall structure of the essay and the way you supported your ideas are good. My main observation is...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 24, 2014 / sush2 - May 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: LINE GRAPH/ change in fish and other three types of meat consumption
7 - This could be replaced by the overview paragraph, which is often written after the introduction....
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 24, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: How color influence people's health and capacity for work
5 - Let's do one for this following this approach; Colors have a great impact on our lives (hook) According to...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 23, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|The worlds friendliest city
3 - I want to mention that Rio which know as highly criminalization city is the friendliest city in the...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 5, 2014
|Should university students be required to attend class;gain education profoundly
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 23, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014
|Letters, email, or telephone communication? Yes - it's more comfortable and can save time and money
5 - Gabriella especially when we are talking about embarrassing moments or apologizing for what I have done wrong especially...
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Parents presently tend to let their children study or research subjects freely what they want
3 - Hi hoangle308 . I think i should have been This is because parents allow their little kids not only...
Writing Feedbackhoangle308 - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS; what people say about advertisement?
7 - Hi Fikri, As dumi said do not narrow down you scope in the introduction itself In several parts of...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 23, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Diagram of Earthquake-resistant buildings
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Rechargable vs Disposal Battery
5 - IELTS Task 1 :Rechargable vs Disposal Battery (re-write) This is the link of my old writing essayforum.com/writing-3/task-rechargable-vs-disposal-...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 23, 2014 / SHanafi - May 7, 2014
|TOEFL/Disagree Playing Computer Games wastes time and students should not be allowed!
3 - You should separate this sentence into two sentences, and in fact, these sentences should be put in...
Writing Feedbackcshcara - Jan 22, 2014 / sntinn - Jan 23, 2014
|TECHNOLOGY; PROBLEM AFFECTING MY COMMUNITY
6 - Well, your question asks you to write about a problem that affects your community. So, you need to talk...
Writing Feedbackshaii - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|The proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040. Writing Task 1
5 - The good pattern of IELTS in writting task 1 if you have overview/ Main trend the example for overview...
Writing FeedbackKarlito - Jan 22, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014
|IELTS task 1: the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040
6 - Ok... this is what I suggest' Similarities - From 2030 onward the aging population of all three countries...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|The bar chart depicts the percentage how Britons spent the amount of money for buying fast foods
2 - Your should adopt a more formal style of writing that suits report writing. Be concise and clear in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 22, 2014 / dumi - Jan 23, 2014
|TOEFL; Do you prefer to eat out or eat at home ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 22, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Report of Numeracy Skill in 24 Countries
10 - This is a fragment sentence. You need a main sentence to lead your reader understanding the topic of...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 22, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|IELST Task 2: Should people be exempted from taxes?
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