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|A Good Friend; trustworthy and loyal person
4 - The essay is very acceptable, but I think that you should have included examples of your own experiences in...
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|The natural resources are being consumed at an alarming rate.What does it cause?how solve?
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|Do you think in mordern society, wearing formally is still important?
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|[toefl]was it easier to find jobs that would lead to a secure future In the past?
5 - you already used intense in your first paragraph, try to use synonyms like extreme, fierce etc.. Also, there...
Writing Feedbackscurry - Nov 8, 2013 / sky2586 - Nov 8, 2013
|IELTS essay about pay tax to the state or not
Writing Feedbackcatherine0605 - Nov 8, 2013 / Sundin - Nov 9, 2013
|Topic: Books can lead us and give a heads up on some topics
5 - we come across new situations which can not be directly solve using the books so we try to find...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Nov 7, 2013 / aoey - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS-CAM 9-TASK 1-ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER THE CONSTRUCTION OF TOURIST FACILITIES
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Nov 7, 2013 / dumi - Nov 8, 2013
|IELTS essay about professional workers ,sports and entertainment personalities
3 - ... economic growth This sentence is very confusing. It has grammar issues too. I cannot grasp the idea...
Writing Feedbackcatherine0605 - Nov 7, 2013 / dumi - Nov 8, 2013
|TOEFL _ intelligence as the most important characteristic of a student
4 - You should have provide a specific example for your reasoning as you did in the first paragraph. It is...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Nov 7, 2013 / dumi - Nov 8, 2013
|[TOEFL]Does the telephone greater influence on people's lives than television has?
Writing Feedbackscurry - Nov 7, 2013 / dumi - Nov 7, 2013
|IELTS : Modern technology has an influence on schools today!
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 7, 2013 / MisterWandering - Nov 9, 2013
|IELTS; Children learning foreign languages - Good or Bad?
2 - In my opinion , you tried to state firstly the advantages by following this sentence : "Nowadays, children are...
Writing Feedbackanus - Nov 6, 2013 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2013
|Definition essay: Relevant unimportance (Defining: " oxymoron" )
2 - Now a days one can realize that(Try "Today, it is easy for one to realize that life is chaotic...
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Nov 6, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Nov 14, 2013
|global warming essay: causes and what solutions for people and for governments
3 - Try not to use first person in such a formal paragraph. Your paragraphs are very clear but the introduction...
Writing Feedbackbeula - Nov 6, 2013 / MaryMag96 - Nov 7, 2013
|Unpaid social service revive patriotism and responsibilities among students
2 - I think you've done a very good job. To be honest, your writing skill is much better than mine....
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 6, 2013 / scurry - Nov 8, 2013
|Five Sentence Chronological Paragraph. "Let me tell you how to make my favorite sandwich."
Writing FeedbackMaryMag96 - Nov 6, 2013 / MaryMag96 - Nov 7, 2013
|[TOEFL]Agree or disagree: The telephone has greater influence on people's lives than TV
4 - As per TOEFL standards, an effective essay written for the TOEFL Independent Writing Task, which can score over...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Nov 6, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 6, 2013
|[TOEFL] Some people prefer travelling alone; 'meet other traveler'
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 6, 2013 / legend777 - Nov 10, 2013
|Educational systems of the United States and Ukraine
Writing Feedbackmerukameru - Nov 6, 2013 / merukameru - Nov 6, 2013
|[IELTS] Unpaid community service and its role in high school programs
5 - Alright thanks for all your help. I will try to re-write the intro again. By the way, would you...
Writing FeedbackRomanticDog - Nov 6, 2013 / RomanticDog - Nov 7, 2013
|[IELTS] The private motor vehicle and air pollution
Writing Feedbackgowtham - Nov 6, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should good people are rewarded and bad people are punished in movies or dramas?
Writing Feedbackscurry - Nov 6, 2013 / Allen Hu - Nov 6, 2013
|bar graph task 1 spending money on entertainment
Writing Feedbackladyjoy - Nov 6, 2013 / ladyjoy - Nov 29, 2013
|IELTS task-2, talk about private seconary school
Writing Feedbackeric628 - Nov 5, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|Expanding a ban on texting, talking on the phone and internet access while driving
5 - ... wrong grammar ! There are some other phone applications that are not yet banned. Therefore...
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 13, 2013
|information technology make a polarised society and this will lead to serious social
5 - ....some and certain mean the same. So one word makes the other redundant. After reading your...
Writing Feedbackthaly - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 10, 2013
|Real life vs books - practical and theoretical ways to gain a knowledge.
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|IELTS: Humans responsibility to prevent lesser-known languages from dying out
Writing Feedbackboannie - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS essay about Multitasking, problems and solutions
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Nov 4, 2013 / gabbie - Nov 7, 2013
|Advantages and disadvantages of being famous
3 - What is the prompt? Are you preparing for TOEFL or IELTS? It's good if you mentioned them because then...
Writing FeedbackSleepingBeauty - Nov 4, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 4, 2013
|Children are easily impressed by colors and sugar and this is dangerous.
4 - Actually this is your position of the argument which you should have been stated in the introduction. (have...
Writing FeedbackNatQ - Nov 4, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 6, 2013
|why do we need music? Traditional Vs Contemporary Music
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|People benefit more from traveling in their own country or traveling to foreign countries?
4 - ... I just fixed your grammar error. However, this is not an interesting hook. Your opening sentence, the...
Writing FeedbackHaruhi - Nov 4, 2013 / dumi - Nov 8, 2013
|IELTS; CONTROL ON WATER OR NOT?
Writing Feedbackmaniskul - Nov 4, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 5, 2013
|I contend that adolescents should coordinate their time of studying and working.
10 - Mistakes: 1, who attend working ( who work) 2,need a coordinator between peers and thanks ( peers and thanks)...
Writing Feedbackfantianxiao - Nov 4, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 11, 2013
|IELTS- Problems with students behaviour
3 - The upbringing of children is very important for preventing children from in-disciplinary actions. .... the first...
Writing Feedbackwoodfish - Nov 4, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|The new forms of communication have positive effects on interpersonal relationships.
3 - ...."different" regions is not the important fact here. It is the "far apart" that makes inconveniences for the...
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|United States is rated average in education ; something goes unnoticed
2 - In my opinion i don't think you have said anything about something in your life that you think goes...
Writing Feedback04mmensah - Nov 3, 2013 / Foriya - Nov 10, 2013
|[ielts] Should we only be concerned with our own communities and countries?
Writing Feedbackhongphuc - Nov 3, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 4, 2013
|Government officials should rely on their own judgment or not?
Writing Feedbackserendipityluo - Nov 3, 2013 / serendipityluo - Nov 6, 2013
|Paying teacher basing on grade that students got is not appropriate and not fair
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|IMPORTANCE OF MUSIC - important factor in the life of human being
2 - Hence = so, therefore, hence, consequently, thence, accordingly try to use various words. Hope it can help...
Writing Feedbacknileshv1 - Nov 3, 2013 / something - Nov 3, 2013
|"Boarding school is beneficial for student". Illustrate your point of view.
Writing Feedbackasifulizlam - Nov 3, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 8, 2013
|GRE ISSUE ESSAY:Is power an empirical act or an immaterial ability?
2 - These are some things that caught my eye in your Introduction. Is power an empirical act or an...
Writing Feedbackjhb - Nov 3, 2013 / Layune - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS; FOOD PREPARATION IS EASIER TODAY COMPARED TO PREVIOUS ERAS
Writing Feedbackbatais - Nov 3, 2013 / batais - Nov 5, 2013
|[IETLS] TV advertising is bad - Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackwoodfish - Nov 3, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 4, 2013
|IELTS task 2: EDUCATING CHILDREN TO BEHAVE, PARENTS OR SCHOOLS AND GOVERNMENTS ?
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Nov 3, 2013 / 912vinay - Nov 11, 2013
|should the government spend money on saving nearly extincted language ?
2 - I am preparing IELTS exams as well. I am not fully capable to correct your grammars and the way...
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|Reduce Recidivism: Invest in Life Changes
5 - Fortunately, there are programs that can help ex-offenders make their transition to normal life effectively. The...
Writing Feedbackjland72 - Nov 2, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 8, 2013
|She walked along the beach on a warm summer night
Writing Feedbackdewalea - Nov 2, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 2, 2013
|IELTS task 2: STUDYING OVERSEAS OR STAYING HOME
6 - some people claim that ... whilst others concern that ... they should take the former approach...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Nov 2, 2013 / phuoc - Nov 11, 2013
|TOEFL: Which would you change to improve your health? EXERCISE
3 - Also,take some sports that could equip us with better body shape and help us to (need a space...
Writing Feedbackrolin - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 2, 2013
|The past 20 years have seen a considerable increase of international tourism.
Writing Feedbackvietcuong89ks - Nov 1, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 3, 2013
|Over the past few decades, society has been technologized; political duality of technology
Writing Feedbackvaulting - Nov 1, 2013 / vaulting - Nov 3, 2013
|IELTS 1; DIAGRAMS; Island before and after construction
Writing FeedbackShpr - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS, Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular
4 - .... this sentence has grammar issues; Modern and busy society depends on fast food for efficient and convenient...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|Online education and traditional education
3 - If this writing is meant for IELTS or TOEFL, I am pretty confident that this essay is too very...
Writing FeedbackShaunFenty - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS: Foreign languages should be instructed in kindergarten
6 - Well... I can see you have excellent writing skills . However, it is better to pay more attention to...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 2, 2013
|It's better to live in a small town than a big city
2 - .... Don't use numbers in essay writing unless it is something to do with time or dates. Also,...
Writing FeedbackDoanhty - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2:boarding schools are getting popular,positive or negative ?
3 - In the boarding life, students are required to become more independent because they live away from their families....
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