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|[TOEFL] The advantages and disadvantages of building a large factory near community.
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|IELTS; Mobile phones have made life easier - More positive than negative effects?
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 20, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS Essay, Advantages and disadvantages living in a house and apartment
5 - There is nothing wrong with both. They are both grammatically correct. Well... they follow a marking...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 20, 2013
|Books? The knowledge learned from experience will remain in our minds better
4 - Thank you so much Your points of views really help me be more ready for the test(TOEFL) I'm going...
Writing Feedbackkhodekhodam - Nov 20, 2013 / khodekhodam - Nov 27, 2013
|[TOEFL] experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live
5 - Take out "are" in the second sentence. Dont tell your audience what your are foing to do, do it....
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|Whether to offer a higher education in high unemployment rate countries? ielts essay.
3 - Thank you DUMI Thank you for reminding me of cutting the sentence shortly to looks more brief. i will...
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|IELTS; Studying a foreign language at primary school is very advantageous!
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|IELTS: Is economic progress only way of measuring Country's Success? Add health care and education
4 - Thanks for your suggestions Dumi. I think i used repeated few main words that I think causes the essay...
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|Effects of computers on children/youth
7 - Okkkkkk... you've posted the above response and that's exactly how you should make a comment on someone else's thread....
Writing Feedbackalmam - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should replace normal classroom with online computer classes?
3 - This is because the classrooms are well equipped with resources that help students to comprehend their lessons better....
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|Antidemocratic countries and the effect of capital punishment on our lives
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|[TOEFL] Compare and contrast knowledge from experience with knowledge from books.
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|IELTS chart - the nutritional consistency of two dinners
3 - Pahan It seems like you are experienced and professional :-) . Thank you for the feedback, really....
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|[TOEFL] marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different
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|Private and public health care system s- IELTS Academic essay
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 19, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Which is better: one, two close friends - a large number of casual acquaintances?
2 - First, this sentence is too very long and it really disturbs its flow. Second, you have not introduced...
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Old people take a while to begin using new technology such as mobile
5 - you have to take care about your conclusion part. you have to mention any connecting word at starting of...
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|IELTS Academic essay: Is nuclear energy is better source of power?
5 - Your example is good but I think you should expand more about the consequences of this accident. Because...
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|IELTS Essay; Education is a key factor for a successful life
3 - ..."immature period of life" does not sound proper; It is argued that children should start schooling from young...
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 18, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|ESSAY ABOUT DREAM THEORIES; we have only brushed the surface
3 - but after centuries of interpretations and studies accumulated throughout the years, it's still a question to which we have...
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|Some Governments and Businesses prohibit smoking.Do you agree or disagree
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|IELTS part1 - Number of minutes of telephone calls in Australia
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|This movie is very hysterical when one is watching it alone; Film Review - The Dictator
2 - ... your focus is on Aladeen and therefore I feel you should not talk about the actor's roles...
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|Choose two topics from the book and reflect it to your life!
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|MY IDEAL HOME; Apartment surrounded by a few shops and a park
5 - Oh sorry! The reason I crossed out some words and sentences is because it's not needed. Make the...
Writing Feedbackshatha100 - Nov 17, 2013 / tabithamica - Nov 18, 2013
|With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a waste!
3 - ... very good introduction :) Yes, I too agree... Your introduction is superb. However, your body paragraphs...
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Eco tourism. (for and against essay) - benefits far outweigh the negatives
2 - ... empowering what? Community members stay involved at all stages of the process, having them empowered with ?????...
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|Some people think secondary students should study international news as a school subject
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|IELTS essay, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before
3 - In the conclusion, you wrote although.... . This sentence is incomplete. The sentence structure goes like this: Although... ,...
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|Essay about people taking more than one job to earn extra money
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|Multiple Pregnancies - Research paper - Preterm Labor
2 - Pregnancies can be difficult and dangerous whichand this is why mothers need to follow the instructions of doctors to...
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|I learn about who I am; DEPRESSION & ANXIETY
4 - ... it sounds too general when you declare that everybody experience these things everyday. There may be people...
Writing Feedbacktabithamica - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Is Advertising Changing our Idea of Sex?
2 - Honestly, I can't find much wrong with this. However, I do have a suggestion. "In the following essay...
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|Hobbies are a regular activities that is done for pleasure
2 - As we all know, hobbies are regular activities in which we engage for pleasure and relaxation during our...
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|Have you ever felt like you don't recognize the feeling of being happy anymore?
3 - This sentence sounds better if you present it in a more simplified version; Have you ever felt that...
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|Increasing population required many energy sources to meet what people need
2 - You had better provide us with the full prompt of the essay. Also, you have to revise your grammar...
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|Toefl essay : Most important character
4 - This is your prompt and let see how you have introduced it to the reader in your introduction;...
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|Hiking a memorable experience; academic writing skills course
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|Most countries are compared by economic success. Do you think any other factors?
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|Tv advertising is not good, agree or dis agree (IELTS)
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|Effect of Technology on Children - Persuasive
3 - This issue is very important to all of us. Global warming is actually related to technology. I loved the...
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|if it should be parents who choose the partner of their children
5 - I guess you have written this essay in preparation for IELTS or TOEFL. It's always good to include that...
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|IELTS Reduce air travel to protect the environment. Agree or Disagree ?
2 - You don't have the presence of a hook in your introduction that helps grab reader's attention to your...
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|Some people think that increasing business and cultural contacts have positive influences
7 - sure.... let's do your introduction following that structure; Unlike in the past, we live in a heavily...
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|In many cases the development of a country is accompanied by pollution and environmental d
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|Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore - CLEP Essays
2 - Rucha, let me offer you some words of advice in order to help polish your essay. You have written...
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|[TOEFL] Has the change of easier food preparation improved the way people live?
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|'Salary, work atmosphere' - factors contribute to job satisfaction?
3 - Dear Dumi, Thank you for your kind attention. You're right. My purpose is to prepare for the IELTS General...
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|Cinema was born in 1895
2 - It's good essay and the best thing you chose many example but i think it need more linking word...
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|IELTS Academic essay: Is increasing working hours leads to economic success?
4 - companies' main goal working overtime affects work-related problems such as health, meltal and social...
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|Abortion Controversey -some choices come with consequences
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|[TOEFL] Different Reasons for attending college or universtiy
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|The internet as a reliable/unreliable source of information
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|Some people say that increasing working hours leads to economic success
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 13, 2013 / gerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013
|EXPLAIN THE CHARACTER OF MR LURIA in " The Halawe'en Party " short story ; Prose essay
4 - He can sometimes be harsh on certain acts of his family members, for example when they go for...
Writing FeedbackTheUnlimited - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|IELTS essay youth criminals should be punished in the same way as adults ?
4 - Very good introduction - Good structure, vocabulary , grammar etc. :) A teenage murderer would not feel...
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|Unreal movies are not worth watching - Toefl essay writing
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|IELTS - A gift can be in any form!
3 - You write very long sentences and they actually get you carried away at the end of the sentence....
Writing Feedbackfaarah73 - Nov 12, 2013 / dumi - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS Task 2: Traffic flow problems
NEW - Traffic Ruins Cities With the number of cars continuously growing, more and more city centres encounter a problem...
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|TOEFL improve the quality of education,more money should be spent on professors' salaries
5 - ... Wish you improve clarity a bit more; One of the important ways of improving the quality of...
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