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|IELTS: task 2 Some people think the foreign visitors should be charged more than the local
3 - ....Great start ... very good :) .... well this disturbs your flow... the first sentence give...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|GUN CONTROL LAWS in the USA; ENG 102 Essay
3 - ... I think you need to give more emphasis to the term "law" instead of "politicians". Nearly every...
Writing Feedbackgoodchild - Sep 20, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS; Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money
6 - your writing is good but you must pay special attention to your writing coherency and fluency. you have to...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 20, 2013 / hoseini57 - Sep 23, 2013
|Write about a product you have bought online.
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 20, 2013 / congchop - Sep 21, 2013
|IELTS; the number of people continuing their education after school has increased,
3 - In recent years more and more number of people are seen persistingpursuing higher education Good introduction :) ...
Writing Feedbackhpatel - Sep 20, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL; "traveling ten thousands miles"; The best way to travel is in a group
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Effects of natural disasters on countries have less impact on developed countries - Agree?
2 - People have a huge influence in theon earth, especially natural and environmentalsoas a consequence, most countries in the world...
Writing Feedbackhonghanh - Sep 19, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 22, 2013
|IELTS Task 2 writing. Who should be responsible for subjects taught in schools?
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 19, 2013 / ah_zafari - Sep 24, 2013
|Who could this person be? descriptive essay
4 - Anyone????...
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|People Learn from Their Mistakes
Writing FeedbackAk_Mueller - Sep 19, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE LINE GRAPH/ fast food consumed by teenagers
NEW - The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from...
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|Ielts Essay task 1 : Different forms of entertainment over a five- year period
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Sep 19, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|Ielts line graph-percentage of population aged 65 and over
7 - i think your task must be divided into paragraphs and try to connect the sentences more effectively...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 19, 2013 / hisho88 - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2: being a celebrity - Pros & Cons
Writing Feedbackmazharbari - Sep 19, 2013 / hpatel - Sep 20, 2013
|[IETLS Task2] Celebrities gain more benefits from their jobs, popularity, and human network
Writing Feedbackchungun - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|Ielts Writing task 1: The portion of different ages of the population in Yemen and Italy
4 - ... Good introduction. However, I feel it is good if your intro is followed by an overview of...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|knowledge consolidating; Teachers should assign homework for students every day
5 - well... may be the vocabulary that confused me ... "knowledge system" does not refer to anything straight. It...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL (task II): compare / contrast " learning from book or experience" ?
Writing FeedbackReshaidNasser - Sep 18, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose?
3 - this is well written. Only issue is it does not introduce your prompt to the reader. No where...
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS - CAM 4 - TASK 1 - DEMAND FOR ELECTRICITY IN ENGLAND
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 18, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 24, 2013
|TOEFL; making teachers' social or political views known to students cannot be judged completely.
10 - I think you still have enough time. You are now almost there. It's a matter of keep practicing as...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - Top internet purchase categories by country
3 - Thank you very much, your passage seems to be better than me, I have difficulty in expressing my ideas...
Writing FeedbackTrang Nguyen - Sep 17, 2013 / Trang Nguyen - Sep 18, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE GRAPH; three different categories in the Britain economy
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|It has been said, "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Compare and contrast
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 17, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL; WITHOUT A GOOD SENSE OF HUMOR LIFE WILL BE NOT ANY DIFFERENT FROM DEATH
2 - ....make the people... i think you should use "people" instead of "person" . person is a singular noun...
Writing FeedbackEnas30 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 18, 2013
|Writing Task 1: The pie chart; People living in poverty in the UK
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013
|TOEFL; Ability to Relate Well to people Vs Studying Hard
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 17, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE Sample Essay Response; Perceived Greatness of political leader
NEW - This is my response to a practice revised GRE Issue Essay response. I would love some feedback and scores...
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|The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991
3 - Where is the table? Use the "Attach file(s)" feature to upload the table. It is always good to upload...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Do you think mathematics can predict divorces ?
2 - In the contemporary eras, predicting divorces based on Mathematics is a matter of increasing concerns . Some people...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Sep 16, 2013 / JDCho - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the development of technology and its implication
2 - I feel you should have a hook that relates more with your prompt.Your prompt actually talks about technology...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|A Person knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract
2 - I partially agree with the argument made here that banning from civil rights and the discredit about his own...
Writing Feedbackhemkantaregmi - Sep 16, 2013 / bui23353 - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: various nutrition of two different dinners
7 - Try to keep things simple, organise your task 1 in 3 or 4 paragraphs (e.i. introduction, overview and details)....
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / Traveler - Sep 16, 2013
|Changing trends of local access to the advanced technology in the UK from 1996 to 2003.
4 - Thank you very much, Kalyn. Actually, I tried to do these tasks as regularly as possible and read relevant...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 16, 2013
|memo introducing myself. help: mechanicalism and grammar
4 - You probably don't have to, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to include something like "I appreciate you...
Writing Feedbackbhickey0827 - Sep 15, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|[Toelf] idea or fact? which one is important
3 - ...very true...good point Because anything that is not convinced strongly would be forgotten as time passes...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 15, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Plato statement - There are many different types of music; Why we need it?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 15, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS - CAM 5; three different countries population compare
4 - The line graph provides information about the percentage of people with an age of 65 years or more in...
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 15, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 16, 2013
|Multiculturalism ; Accepting more cultures
Writing Feedbackqasderwdw - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|GRE ARGUE: A "Palean" Basket Was Discovered in Lithos
Writing Feedbackharry52 - Sep 14, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Children consume too much unhealthy food. Cause & solution?
4 - .... you should not crowd your sentences with too many words unnecessarily. That harms your flow ; The...
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 14, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|[Toefl] spending equal amount of money on libraries and sports?
2 - Well.... I feel you can present this idea better, in a more logical way; The degree of interest...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: OPINIONS ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING OF ARTISTS.
5 - Thanks guys. First of all you are right, I needed to put "alternative sources" instead of " health and...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 13, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 18, 2013
|Capital punishment and criminal execution essay
3 - Well.... what is this essay for? Is it for IELTS or TOEFL? It's better you mention this purpose in...
Writing FeedbackYahyaSl - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)?
4 - Rather, he should try to get the subordinates involved in decision making by consulting their ideas and opinions...
Writing Feedbackyunjaeclyn - Sep 13, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Ielts: Parents are sole responsible for their children's misbehavior. Do you agree?
2 - ....the word behavior is getting repeated. This you can present in a more simple way ; The way that...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 The best way of spreading news
6 - Very good introduction. Clear and interesting :) First of all, the Internet is the fastest form...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Extended family is less important than before; 'lifestyle has changed'
3 - ... ok... you are talking about the joint family concept that helped people to manage their family farms...
Writing Feedbackfs7 - Sep 12, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] need for land kept in natural condition or developed for housing, industry?
Writing Feedbackholylua - Sep 12, 2013 / Allen Hu - Sep 22, 2013
|TOEFL; Children & their own money? lack of self-control and financing conception
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 12, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 17, 2013
|[IELTS] consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat - GRAPH
5 - Hi, Please open IELTS related writing in Writing Feedback forum. Also, you can use the feature, "Attach file(s) "...
Writing Feedbackmatthewdang131 - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|[toefl] important business woman; business or house?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|[IELTS]- Use of mobiles have become common in many countries.
3 - Thank you guys. Thanks yosh, Very much appreciated. Thanks for correcting the essay... I didn't notice all those...
Writing Feedbackdelvydavis - Sep 11, 2013 / delvydavis - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS; Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries
4 - 1- There are several reasons of causing serious effects of obesity: Clear this, those reasons are "cause" of obesity...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 11, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 13, 2013
|GRE issue essay about "educational institutes responsability"
4 - .... I wish you improve this line a bit mre; This responsibility is not limited to ensuring the...
Writing Feedbackquique7991 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 28, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 1 USA marriage and divorce rates
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 11, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 13, 2013
|TV Vs. Literature. GRE Analyze an Issue
2 - Throughout history, we find various efforts taken by people to record events for future references. ......
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|TOEFL;The rapid growth of cities in today's world - Positive development?
5 - ...not "can", but it is :D Traffic congestion impacts very negatively on a city. ....very good...
Writing Feedbackblackwoman - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Carry guns or not? No for gun carrying!
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|Happiness Vs Success; Which is more important?
2 - As you know, happiness and success determines your quality of life. Happiness is the best emotion...
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