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|Governments &Companies should share their scientific discoveries
2 - It's always better you mention the purpose of your writing in the title. For example, IELTS, TOEFL etc. Then...
Writing FeedbackRichardGe - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|TOEFL; The internet provides a lot of valuable information. However,others disagree
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|IELTS:In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries th
5 - I thinks your introduction to the essay is somehow too long. your examples should be mentioned in the body,...
Writing Feedbacksoheylvahabzade - Oct 21, 2013 / vmtct - Oct 24, 2013
|COMPARE/CONTRAST essay about my mother&sister
4 - Overall though is it a good essay.... I'm going to edit it and make changes and post it again...
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 21, 2013 / College girl 13 - Oct 22, 2013
|"I believe in our universe, everything we see and believe, is nothing more than a dream"
2 - I believe our universe , everything in the universe, we see and believe , is nothing more thanbut a...
Writing FeedbackDelainaMichelle - Oct 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|major cities are essential sources of information about the culture of a country
5 - First sentence : Major cities are heart of a country. It would be better : Major cities are the...
Writing Feedbacknilka61 - Oct 21, 2013 / SalehMamdouh198 - Nov 20, 2013
|What changes your perception in order to be a better communicator
4 - In high school, I also got involved with Physics Olympiad Team. ... what do you mean by science-based...
Writing Feedbackkevinj888 - Oct 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: Ads result in high sales of well-received consumer goods. Agree or disagree?
4 - Yes.... you should not narrow down the scope of your topic. ...which outweigh advertisements. ... here...
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS : IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY INSUFFICIENT RESPECT GIVEN TO OLD PEOPLE >...
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 21, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 24, 2013
|what are benefits of shopping online.
Writing Feedbackbixanh - Oct 21, 2013 / bixanh - Oct 21, 2013
|GRE; Welfare of the nation and the desire of corporations to maximize profits
3 - Personally I think you need a stronger thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. It is ambiguous which side you...
Writing Feedbacksnowcones - Oct 21, 2013 / dunguyen - Sep 12, 2014
|"Cartesian Duality";Term Paper for Core Humanities
2 - Mary Shelley believes humans are naturally innocent at birth and also are born as a blank slate or as...
Writing FeedbackFranky 1994 - Oct 20, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|UNIFORM TO WEAR OR NOT TO WEAR?
6 - What I found worked best under a graduation gown. Is a dress you wont necessarily be able to see....
Writing Feedback98_IIG - Oct 20, 2013 / siamesefox - Feb 27, 2014
|Truth is most important factor in making a romantic relationship persistent
2 - - The debate about whether telling the truth is an important factor in any kind of relationship has...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Oct 20, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Timing, distances, and social relations, forcing separation of extended family
5 - I think you can start your introduction by: " Families are divided in two kinds: extended family and nuclear...
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 20, 2013 / phuongnam95 - Nov 10, 2013
|TOEFL: 'analogous concern and money' - financial support for sports and social activities
6 - TOEFL Independent writing task expects you to provide specific examples to back the reasons that you present to...
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 22, 2013
|TOEFL: learning facts has more subsequent advantages for students' future lives
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL: Why people attend universities?
3 - ... I don't find any relevance between this sentence and your topic. This is your hook and it...
Writing Feedbackaqua12713 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 21, 2013
|Argumentative Essay : Living on campus
8 - .... good point, but when you talk about competition among them, it kind of disturbs your idea :(...
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 23, 2013
|IELTS: Should government hold all the responsibility of society or even people are respon.
3 - government has limitations in approaching people and satisfying their needs . On the other hand, each...
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Socialization by parents of their children into gender roles
Writing FeedbackSalewaa - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|I live in beautiful Vietnam; My Country
4 - I think you better improve the structure. In the introduction give a short description about Vietnam's geography, its people,...
Writing Feedbackhikarulap - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|TV & Movies have negative effects on children.
3 - Where is the example? Make sure you provide a specific example to each reason you bring up to...
Writing Feedbacksusananley - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|INTEGRITY IS A PRINCIPLE ONE SHOULD HAVE ALL TIMES; What does integrity mean to you?
Writing Feedbackdwhsm1989 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 29, 2013
|Agree/ Disagree -Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program
4 - I sincerely thank you! MisterWandering ! you must have seen thoroughly for giving me comments. thank to your assistance,...
Writing FeedbackTHUSINHTITANA - Oct 20, 2013 / THUSINHTITANA - Oct 27, 2013
|BABYSITTING; Narration of process essay
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|'intellectual sources'; Colleges should better prepare students for the future.
3 - unfortunately in medicine they offer alot of courses for getiing ready them before being a doctor but in technical...
Writing Feedbackevelyn410 - Oct 19, 2013 / soheylvahabzade - Oct 19, 2013
|GRE AWA Issue Analysis ; Studying major cities helps understand their society
Writing FeedbackFatimaK - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|What are the pros and cons of immigration?
Writing Feedbacksoheylvahabzade - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL; Dancing plays an important role in a culture.
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 19, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 20, 2013
|Discuss the impact of the influx of immigrants and foreigners into Singapore.
Writing FeedbackSmiler - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|The benefits of travelling for the traveller
4 - ... This is not a very clear sentence. The word "people" getting repeated too often and that confuses...
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|Parents and adults should have a say in important decisions of teenage children
3 - Well... you need to give prominence to the reasons you use to back your position in the argument....
Writing Feedbackguisela - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|It is certain that a country's success is built up by several factors
2 - ... it's not the quality, .... it is the status of economy or economic development/ progress ...
Writing Feedbackningo - Oct 18, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|Prevalence and Risk of Violence; Sex Trafficking in India
Writing Feedbackhaleyfister - Oct 18, 2013 / cactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013
|Friends and family have a lot of topics to talk together and sharing their opinion when watching TV
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 18, 2013 / legend777 - Nov 10, 2013
|In some countries most of the people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one
7 - However, there are negative aspects toin renting a house. .... very good point :) In many instances,...
Writing Feedbackhello2hanson - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL INTEGRATED:The objectives of Dinosaurs' crests
Writing FeedbackJin Hyung - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|It is important to have good person to be a good roommate - you have to stay with him for a while
2 - To begin with, a roommate should be a considerate person. If the roommate does not possess this quality...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Choosing and wearing clothes by high school students
7 - .... try to have more prominence to the reason and then give more details about it; First, uniform...
Writing Feedbackelan - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|IELTS: Born with talents or talents can be trained? Discuss both views!
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 17, 2013 / skynet0512 - Oct 20, 2013
|Most of the people do not have adequate knowledge of the place they are traveling to
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL Essay about capital punishment
6 - I agree with legend777. You display very good writing skills, however, you need to adopt a good essay...
Writing Feedbackhamed_vali68 - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|IELTS;A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure
2 - ... Why did you have a capital "I" for that word (irrespective)? The primary function of every government...
Writing Feedbackshiva sai - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|"Driven by idea of the 'common good'" ; Constitution of May 3
2 - Using sentence structure/ writing accurately - Varied and sophisticated sentence structures used to impressive effect - Uses a...
Writing Feedbackleslav - Oct 17, 2013 / 98_IIG - Oct 24, 2013
|Negative effects of small vehicles; Persuasive Essay
2 - What would be the first thing an immigrant would notice aboutin Toronto? There is no doubt, it...
Writing Feedbackcontigo - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|compare-contrast b/w mother and father;Really need some help;20% part of grade
3 - There are several ideas crowded in this one line sentence. Better re-organize them; One needs money to provide...
Writing FeedbackBisasa - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Small age kids have fresh brains, they are curious and grasp things easily.
2 - Throughout your essay, I find some disturbance in your presentation of ideas. I don't say your sentences are grammatically...
Writing Feedbacktushar241319 - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 16, 2013
|TOEFL - Children managing their own money - best way to learn responsibility
8 - No problem ;)...
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 16, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 17, 2013
|Schooling helps kids to learn socialism and other important lessons - in school
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Banning of smoking in public places; "Smoking is injurious to health"
2 - Try not to use questions in the intro and use facts or history(However, do not use defintion) First, details...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
|IELTS - Do the benefits of globalization outweigh the drawbacks?
2 - This is a good body paragraph where you explain the reason as to why you take that position in...
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL Government is not necessary since we can redress many problems by our own.
5 - .... hey.... you've got to be careful with your spellings because they also are an important aspect of...
Writing Feedbackelan - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|IELTS; Schools should provide practical knowledge and skills to students
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 16, 2013
|Increased fees affecting demand for University degrees
Writing FeedbackCJA - Oct 15, 2013 / CJA - Oct 22, 2013
|Some people think that parents should teach children ; INTRODUCTION
5 - Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on beinga person becoming a good member of society....
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 15, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|Should animals be used to research?
Writing Feedbackamymaria - Oct 15, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
|Human Cloning is the creation of a lab human or test tube baby!
Writing FeedbackNiuWang - Oct 14, 2013 / NiuWang - Oct 21, 2013
|Banning of Smoking in Public Places; 'smoke free environment'
6 - Hi tishca2013 - You cannot expect others to provide feedbacks on your writing when you post your essays...
Writing FeedbackVashAng - Oct 14, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|Why tommy douglas is the greatest Canadian?
2 - In my view, Tommy Douglas was the most outstanding Canadian although many may vote for Terry Fox. Fox,...
Writing Feedbacksheryarali - Oct 14, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
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