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|Negative effects of small vehicles; Persuasive Essay
2 - What would be the first thing an immigrant would notice aboutin Toronto? There is no doubt, it...
Writing Feedbackcontigo - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|compare-contrast b/w mother and father;Really need some help;20% part of grade
3 - There are several ideas crowded in this one line sentence. Better re-organize them; One needs money to provide...
Writing FeedbackBisasa - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Small age kids have fresh brains, they are curious and grasp things easily.
2 - Throughout your essay, I find some disturbance in your presentation of ideas. I don't say your sentences are grammatically...
Writing Feedbacktushar241319 - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 16, 2013
|TOEFL - Children managing their own money - best way to learn responsibility
8 - No problem ;)...
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 16, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 17, 2013
|Schooling helps kids to learn socialism and other important lessons - in school
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Banning of smoking in public places; "Smoking is injurious to health"
2 - Try not to use questions in the intro and use facts or history(However, do not use defintion) First, details...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
|IELTS - Do the benefits of globalization outweigh the drawbacks?
2 - This is a good body paragraph where you explain the reason as to why you take that position in...
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL Government is not necessary since we can redress many problems by our own.
5 - .... hey.... you've got to be careful with your spellings because they also are an important aspect of...
Writing Feedbackelan - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|IELTS; Schools should provide practical knowledge and skills to students
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 16, 2013
|Increased fees affecting demand for University degrees
Writing FeedbackCJA - Oct 15, 2013 / CJA - Oct 22, 2013
|Some people think that parents should teach children ; INTRODUCTION
5 - Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on beinga person becoming a good member of society....
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 15, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|Should animals be used to research?
Writing Feedbackamymaria - Oct 15, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
|Human Cloning is the creation of a lab human or test tube baby!
Writing FeedbackNiuWang - Oct 14, 2013 / NiuWang - Oct 21, 2013
|Banning of Smoking in Public Places; 'smoke free environment'
6 - Hi tishca2013 - You cannot expect others to provide feedbacks on your writing when you post your essays...
Writing FeedbackVashAng - Oct 14, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|Why tommy douglas is the greatest Canadian?
2 - In my view, Tommy Douglas was the most outstanding Canadian although many may vote for Terry Fox. Fox,...
Writing Feedbacksheryarali - Oct 14, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|Students' academic skills strongly reflect how their teacher helps them to promote their performance
5 - Thanks to help me. If you possible, Can you give me any writing tips? and give me score (full...
Writing FeedbackJintastic - Oct 14, 2013 / Jin Hyung - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL: Which do you prefer: do only what you already do well, or not.
2 - When you use use the word "you" and "your" alot it sounds like you are accusing the person. Try...
Writing Feedbackyusukexo - Oct 14, 2013 / anoopam - Oct 14, 2013
|Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged- IELTS
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 14, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: more and more pollution and waste are created everyday
7 - As this is one of your body paragraph, I think you should focus on one consequence of pollution and...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Oct 14, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 15, 2013
|Family environment is the base for the children to be good members of society
3 - The family environment is the base for the children that parents should work hard to raise their children on...
Writing FeedbackNadaish - Oct 14, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 14, 2013
|The Rise of the Indus River Valley Civilizations essay
5 - Egypt and Mesopotamian civilizations possess lots of written evidence. However, in case of the Indus River valley not...
Writing Feedbacksheddy - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Some teachers and parents suggest that rivalry between children should exist, while others don't
8 - In your body paragraphs, you should justify your opinion by giving reasons. And then you should support them...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|'political stability': Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth
Writing Feedbackadhikaribabita - Oct 13, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 16, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Gender differences in work
2 - Hey... I think you have posted the wrong essay... your topic talks about children obeying rules and your essay...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Oct 13, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] Always better to do the shopping in the big shopping mall
3 - You summarize your statement at the end of each paragraph. Like: It clarifies your position and helps...
Writing Feedbacksimonlee726 - Oct 13, 2013 / yusukexo - Oct 14, 2013
|Work place or research updates will help universities in showing direction to educate students
9 - Hi dumi, Anyways once again thanks a lot to dumi and pahan, that was a great learning experience. I...
Writing Feedbackshiva sai - Oct 13, 2013 / shiva sai - Oct 14, 2013
|IELTS: 'optimum utilization of available resources' - Inequality between rich and poor nations
6 - Thank you everyone for your suggestions. Please suggest me an introductory line for this task. I am not able...
Writing FeedbackJoohi24 - Oct 12, 2013 / Joohi24 - Oct 14, 2013
|New restaurant? My neighborhood would become more prosperous and people living here would be happier
5 - In this set up, all the restaurants would need to change their current strategies in attracting clients for...
Writing Feedbackmusicariel - Oct 12, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 14, 2013
|'International Baccalaureate senior' - Tell us about yourself
Writing FeedbackElementary11 - Oct 12, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 12, 2013
|TOEFL WRITING: In 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.
6 - As a result, somebodysome people states that, students will not use printed books any more after 20 years ...
Writing FeedbackKaren Zhang - Oct 11, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|I was waving goodbye to the life I had for 16 years/Transition from Childhood to Adulthood
5 - I like it! It's really great. The ONLY thing I would say is switch one "alive" to something else,...
Writing Feedbackrp2013 - Oct 11, 2013 / tayleeb - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL writing: governments should spend as much money as possible on IT?
3 - I really appreciate your comment. It'll definitely help me improve my essay and a writing skill....
Writing Feedbackyusukexo - Oct 11, 2013 / yusukexo - Oct 14, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Graphs ; Actual number of houses constructed in UK 2002
Writing FeedbackJoohi24 - Oct 11, 2013 / Joohi24 - Oct 12, 2013
|Live in the same climate or changing climates? Which one do you prefer?
5 - Thank you....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 11, 2013 / something - Oct 18, 2013
|TOEFL- The opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people?
Writing Feedbacksimonlee726 - Oct 11, 2013 / dumi - Oct 11, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: THE TABLE/ Actual Vs Estimated house construction
5 - Likewise, 8100 houses were estimated to be constructed in the Central England, which was half the figure for...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Oct 11, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 13, 2013
|IELTS 9 Test 4 - Languages die out every year......... Is this a positive trend?
6 - Oh, there should be one more sentence in the introduction. I am inclined to support fewer languages. ...
Writing Feedbackstrongwillow - Oct 11, 2013 / strongwillow - Oct 13, 2013
|'Rabindranath Tagore'; Children should be educated at home by their parents
Writing FeedbackJoohi24 - Oct 11, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 16, 2013
|IELTS; rejecting public educational system would not be better
4 - Yes.... both Pahan and MisterWandering are trying to align your introduction with the task requirements. I remember providing...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 11, 2013 / dumi - Oct 14, 2013
|Doing the same job for whole life, is it challenging?
2 - As per the human nature , no matter how lucrativeinteresting and well paid th e job is, people may...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Essay: Schools problems with student behavior.
Writing Feedbackmerurino - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 11, 2013
|Despite having few harmful consequences, Internet has a positive effect on the society.
4 - English_Learner I think it is better to bring the negative part to the second paragraph so that you...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 10, 2013 / phuoc - Oct 31, 2013
|"Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone"
4 - Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandySandy sitting alone. He walkswalked up to her and very nervously asked...
Writing FeedbackAnelis123 - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Studying abroad has become a very common phenomenon in the modern world - globalisation result
Writing Feedbackdewploy - Oct 10, 2013 / dewploy - Oct 15, 2013
|IELTS; As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role
3 - What is the reason you try to tell that can justify your position stated in the introduction? I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|IELTS: who should responsible for elderly?
6 - On the other hand, people should act more responsibly when they are young and energetic and should save...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|[TOEFL] What makes a good neighbor? - Optimistic people
Writing Feedbackyushan - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|Attending university is now mandatory for student to be accepted for better work
7 - thank you sir...
Writing Feedbackbatais - Oct 10, 2013 / batais - Nov 5, 2013
|If I had a chance to go back in time, I would like to meet Albert Einstein
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|Ielts topic: Is it justified for the entertainers to earn huge salaries?
8 - Sure :) ... are we impressed or shocked? ....lol... This line needs improvement; Nowadays, we often...
Writing Feedbackthuy duong - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decision today.
Writing FeedbackArunabh05 - Oct 10, 2013 / ebychris - Oct 22, 2013
|Man's Best Friend and Medicine; ESSAY ON ANIMAL THERAPY
4 - ... this sentence is too long and contain too many ideas. Therefore, it does not clearly deliver the...
Writing Feedbackczlets12 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Integrated Writing Task; Research Writing and Quotation
3 - Is this for TOEFL Integrated writing? Mention the purpose in the subject so that other can provide you with...
Writing Feedbacknephop - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|IELTS; youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly
3 - These are good starting sentences for your paragraphs... Let's do this on a different approach... I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY:WHAT CAN WE DO TO PROMOTE EQUALITY?
Writing Feedbackbey - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|Media should present diverse aspects of our life, so like bad guys sometimes live happy
Writing Feedbackjugajoa - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS - Do the same thing and Avoid Changes; GOOD or BAD?
4 - .... this sentence does not make sense.... I think you have made some typos. Is this what you...
Writing FeedbackWattanhi - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|Fair view on PROSTITUTION ; Grammar/ Structure
Writing FeedbackPeterdo1988 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS; Popular events help ease international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions
Writing FeedbackBALOCH - Oct 8, 2013 / BALOCH - Oct 9, 2013
|Eating at restaurant vs eating at home; Which is better?
4 - "Those who have no time for healthy eating will sooner or later have to find time for illness." -...
Writing Feedbackkrishnadeo - Oct 8, 2013 / krishnadeo - Oct 10, 2013
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