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|Capital punishment has been a major source of concern for the last two decade
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|Should students have to wear uniforms? - Persuasive Essay
3 - .... is this "something so ridiculous" has got anything to do with uniforms? You need to link that...
Writing Feedbackbriancd3 - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|IETLS Proportion of population aged 65 & over; Aging will accelerate after 2030s
3 - All the country present a upward situation. ---> all the coutries presented a upward situation Sweden go upward signally...
Writing FeedbackJIMMY0907 - Sep 25, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|'I feel much more safe'; Traditional house or a modern apartment building? Toefl
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|IELTS; TECHNOLOGY Vs TRADITIONAL SKILLS
Writing Feedbackle soleil - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|IELTS: Compare and contrast:taking a trip by oneself and taking a group tour with guidance
Writing Feedbackminhvupt - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|TOEFL [To be a financially responsible adult, children should manage their own money at]
3 - ... you used the same term "money management" in the previous sentence. So avoid repeating it in this...
Writing FeedbackShawn1974 - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for my country
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 25, 2013
|Leave my country and move to another; Overcome a challenge
3 - you begin your writing with this sentence: "The decision to leave my country and move to another is going...
Writing FeedbackJessicax84 - Sep 24, 2013 / moonname - Sep 25, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: THE MAPS / coastal resort of Templeton
2 - Hi, The maps illustrate marked changes which have takentook place at the coastal resort of Templeton through/over the...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 23, 2013 / ah_zafari - Sep 24, 2013
|May's Camping Trip; stay on topic of the title is the instructions
2 - .... this is all good except for the repetition of the word "camp" in every sentence. Avoid that...
Writing FeedbackAngiesclark - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 23, 2013
|IELTS - Movies or Books? Which is beneficial for a child's development?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 23, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 24, 2013
|the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones
Writing Feedbackaparna ram - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|CHEATING IS GOOD AND BAD! (in easy words)
Writing FeedbackLAIBA - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|[toefl] people born with certain talents or they are taught?
6 - Some people think that talented people are the God's gifted creatures. What's your opinion? State it...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|Qualities of a good son/daughter? - Cultural influence and Time factor
5 - Of course your essay displays good writing skills, especially with the sentences construction and vocabulary. You can score more...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|TOEFL:What is a important skill to succeed in life.
8 - Impessive...
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Sep 23, 2013 / Killions23 - Sep 29, 2013
|IELTS; governments should give financial support to creative artists
4 - Good feedback from gmad06 as always. @gmad06 - I wish you become a contributor to this forum. In fact...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 23, 2013
|Value of Education; Which education do you believe is most important?
Writing Feedbackttsao88 - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 23, 2013
|The influence of popular music on young people?
4 - "hear"...
Writing Feedbackcrystella - Sep 22, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|Some parents have many obvious similarities and differences; Compare and contrast essay
Writing Feedbackswimmer_chick - Sep 22, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|Personal learning style - How and Where I position myself in Kolb's style
Writing Feedbacko5vx - Sep 22, 2013 / o5vx - Sep 23, 2013
|We stand together looking at the flag; What does patriotism mean to me?
4 - the audience will be veterans, i think it probably should stay on the topic of war veterans but...
Writing Feedbackoksanavy7 - Sep 22, 2013 / oksanavy7 - Oct 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] agree or disagree the purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|TOEFL ; Parents should encourage children to do part-time jobs
3 - Okkkkkkkk... first , you should have a meaningful topic for your essay to get others attracted to it. So,...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Applying for the position advertise in a weekend paper for a job as a local tour guide.
3 - As a person who loves travelling around and making new friends, I confident that I can work as...
Writing Feedbackhuynhthanhhuyen - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|TOEFL: studying helps people to get ready for their entire life - in both social and economic
3 - .... You need to bring out the real reason more direct; First, some students love to advance their...
Writing FeedbackParia33 - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 23, 2013
|Hospitals have an unbearable smell - Narrative Essay
NEW - Some people say that hospitals have an unbearable smell, but to be honest, in the fall of 2009, the...
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|The two friends I can count on - help with grammar!
Writing Feedbackcyborg55 - Sep 21, 2013 / oksanavy7 - Sep 22, 2013
|IELTS; The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS-TASK2: In some countries today, there is an attitude that anyone can do it in arts..
Writing Feedbackhpatel - Sep 21, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 22, 2013
|IELTS: Should the government subsidise heavy indsustries to improve economic development?
7 - Well.... For this task you would score on your essay structure too. So, specific reasoning and examples to back...
Writing Feedbackhoseini57 - Sep 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 4, 2013
|Amount of violence in films - ACADEMIC IELTS Writing task2 essay
Writing FeedbackMjkk91 - Sep 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|Writing Task 1: The pie charts- Age groups in Oman and Spain
4 - First, I have a request for you; please open all IELTS related writing in the Writing Feedback forum category....
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 21, 2013
|work quickly, risk making mistakes or slowly? 'depends on our current situation'
5 - Yes, I see you do follow that structure. However, your reasoning sound a bit confusing in the body paragraphs,...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 21, 2013
|IELTS: task 2 Some people think the foreign visitors should be charged more than the local
3 - ....Great start ... very good :) .... well this disturbs your flow... the first sentence give...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS; Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money
6 - your writing is good but you must pay special attention to your writing coherency and fluency. you have to...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 20, 2013 / hoseini57 - Sep 23, 2013
|Write about a product you have bought online.
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 20, 2013 / congchop - Sep 21, 2013
|IELTS; the number of people continuing their education after school has increased,
3 - In recent years more and more number of people are seen persistingpursuing higher education Good introduction :) ...
Writing Feedbackhpatel - Sep 20, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL; "traveling ten thousands miles"; The best way to travel is in a group
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Effects of natural disasters on countries have less impact on developed countries - Agree?
2 - People have a huge influence in theon earth, especially natural and environmentalsoas a consequence, most countries in the world...
Writing Feedbackhonghanh - Sep 19, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 22, 2013
|IELTS Task 2 writing. Who should be responsible for subjects taught in schools?
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 19, 2013 / ah_zafari - Sep 24, 2013
|Who could this person be? descriptive essay
4 - Anyone????...
Writing Feedbackkawsneffect - Sep 19, 2013 / kawsneffect - Dec 8, 2013
|People Learn from Their Mistakes
Writing FeedbackAk_Mueller - Sep 19, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE LINE GRAPH/ fast food consumed by teenagers
NEW - The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 19, 2013 / — -
|Ielts Essay task 1 : Different forms of entertainment over a five- year period
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Sep 19, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|Ielts line graph-percentage of population aged 65 and over
7 - i think your task must be divided into paragraphs and try to connect the sentences more effectively...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 19, 2013 / hisho88 - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2: being a celebrity - Pros & Cons
Writing Feedbackmazharbari - Sep 19, 2013 / hpatel - Sep 20, 2013
|[IETLS Task2] Celebrities gain more benefits from their jobs, popularity, and human network
Writing Feedbackchungun - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|Ielts Writing task 1: The portion of different ages of the population in Yemen and Italy
4 - ... Good introduction. However, I feel it is good if your intro is followed by an overview of...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|knowledge consolidating; Teachers should assign homework for students every day
5 - well... may be the vocabulary that confused me ... "knowledge system" does not refer to anything straight. It...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL (task II): compare / contrast " learning from book or experience" ?
Writing FeedbackReshaidNasser - Sep 18, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose?
3 - this is well written. Only issue is it does not introduce your prompt to the reader. No where...
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS - CAM 4 - TASK 1 - DEMAND FOR ELECTRICITY IN ENGLAND
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 18, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 24, 2013
|TOEFL; making teachers' social or political views known to students cannot be judged completely.
10 - I think you still have enough time. You are now almost there. It's a matter of keep practicing as...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - Top internet purchase categories by country
3 - Thank you very much, your passage seems to be better than me, I have difficulty in expressing my ideas...
Writing FeedbackTrang Nguyen - Sep 17, 2013 / Trang Nguyen - Sep 18, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE GRAPH; three different categories in the Britain economy
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|It has been said, "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Compare and contrast
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 17, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL; WITHOUT A GOOD SENSE OF HUMOR LIFE WILL BE NOT ANY DIFFERENT FROM DEATH
2 - ....make the people... i think you should use "people" instead of "person" . person is a singular noun...
Writing FeedbackEnas30 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 18, 2013
|Writing Task 1: The pie chart; People living in poverty in the UK
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013
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