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|IELTS; rejecting public educational system would not be better
4 - Yes.... both Pahan and MisterWandering are trying to align your introduction with the task requirements. I remember providing...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 11, 2013 / dumi - Oct 14, 2013
|Doing the same job for whole life, is it challenging?
2 - As per the human nature , no matter how lucrativeinteresting and well paid th e job is, people may...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Essay: Schools problems with student behavior.
Writing Feedbackmerurino - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 11, 2013
|Despite having few harmful consequences, Internet has a positive effect on the society.
4 - English_Learner I think it is better to bring the negative part to the second paragraph so that you...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 10, 2013 / phuoc - Oct 31, 2013
|"Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone"
4 - Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandySandy sitting alone. He walkswalked up to her and very nervously asked...
Writing FeedbackAnelis123 - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Studying abroad has become a very common phenomenon in the modern world - globalisation result
Writing Feedbackdewploy - Oct 10, 2013 / dewploy - Oct 15, 2013
|IELTS; As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role
3 - What is the reason you try to tell that can justify your position stated in the introduction? I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|IELTS: who should responsible for elderly?
6 - On the other hand, people should act more responsibly when they are young and energetic and should save...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|[TOEFL] What makes a good neighbor? - Optimistic people
Writing Feedbackyushan - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|Attending university is now mandatory for student to be accepted for better work
7 - thank you sir...
Writing Feedbackbatais - Oct 10, 2013 / batais - Nov 5, 2013
|If I had a chance to go back in time, I would like to meet Albert Einstein
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 10, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 10, 2013
|Ielts topic: Is it justified for the entertainers to earn huge salaries?
8 - Sure :) ... are we impressed or shocked? ....lol... This line needs improvement; Nowadays, we often...
Writing Feedbackthuy duong - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decision today.
Writing FeedbackArunabh05 - Oct 10, 2013 / ebychris - Oct 22, 2013
|Man's Best Friend and Medicine; ESSAY ON ANIMAL THERAPY
4 - ... this sentence is too long and contain too many ideas. Therefore, it does not clearly deliver the...
Writing Feedbackczlets12 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Integrated Writing Task; Research Writing and Quotation
3 - Is this for TOEFL Integrated writing? Mention the purpose in the subject so that other can provide you with...
Writing Feedbacknephop - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 15, 2013
|IELTS; youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly
3 - These are good starting sentences for your paragraphs... Let's do this on a different approach... I...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY:WHAT CAN WE DO TO PROMOTE EQUALITY?
Writing Feedbackbey - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|Media should present diverse aspects of our life, so like bad guys sometimes live happy
Writing Feedbackjugajoa - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS - Do the same thing and Avoid Changes; GOOD or BAD?
4 - .... this sentence does not make sense.... I think you have made some typos. Is this what you...
Writing FeedbackWattanhi - Oct 9, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 9, 2013
|Fair view on PROSTITUTION ; Grammar/ Structure
Writing FeedbackPeterdo1988 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS; Popular events help ease international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions
Writing FeedbackBALOCH - Oct 8, 2013 / BALOCH - Oct 9, 2013
|Eating at restaurant vs eating at home; Which is better?
4 - "Those who have no time for healthy eating will sooner or later have to find time for illness." -...
Writing Feedbackkrishnadeo - Oct 8, 2013 / krishnadeo - Oct 10, 2013
|'solution for world hunger' or ' space exploration'?- Which project do you choose and why?
NEW - Your candid feedback is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance for the help. Prompt: A science laboratory in Britain...
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|Personal enjoyment? Everyone is working as a diligent worker for the family.
9 - Dear pahan I meant happy :D:D:D I will continue to take part here because it helped me alot. and...
Writing Feedbackcgcbjunpark - Oct 8, 2013 / marmaria - Oct 12, 2013
|Adam Smithwas was one of the key figures of the Scottish Enlightenment -KEY IDEAS
3 - Adam Smith is best known for two classic works 1. The Theory of Moral Sentiments 2. An Inquiry into...
Writing Feedbackleslav - Oct 8, 2013 / eventzkaze - Oct 14, 2013
|We should look at computers advantages and research to utilize them in a good manner.
6 - Thanks...you will have your turn soon. Just keep on writing and practice proofreading..Cheers....
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 7, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS ; The only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university
Writing FeedbackKjerry - Oct 7, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS; Why do we need music?
5 - To much 'telling the reader' in the essay. Let the essay convey its own ideas through itself. The sentences...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Oct 7, 2013 / OchoCinco85 - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS; People who have committed a crime should always be in jail ?
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS - Course of study that has no direct employment opportunities serves no purpose
5 - Thanks Dumi for the feedback. I now understand the issue with words of the kind that you've spotted. Regarding...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 6, 2013 / ieltsp - Oct 11, 2013
|Should you start a career or enter university at 18?
2 - good introduction :) ... I guess he would become an experienced worker rather than a qualified...
Writing FeedbackElizabethAsking - Oct 6, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK -2 :- Control over usage of water
Writing Feedbackmirchi1123 - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 6, 2013
|My favorite room is my study because it keeps my memories alive!
Writing FeedbackNora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 10, 2013
|successful sport professionals can earn great deal money than people in other ...
Writing Feedbackneosit - Oct 5, 2013 / neosit - Oct 5, 2013
|[toefl task] TELEPHONE or TELEVISION? Which one is more effective in people's life?
8 - Copying others comments is against forum rules and such users would be suspended. .... smart point.... there...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 13, 2013
|You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you
Writing Feedbackfextora - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 7, 2013
|TOEFL writing 2 essey: Big city vs small town
4 - Let's take your first body paragraph - In body paragraphs you should give reasons to justify your...
Writing Feedbackhosein_g - Oct 5, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|The concept "translation" has been changing during the last century; TRANSLATION PROCESS
Writing FeedbackMarina123 - Oct 5, 2013 / joylabx - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS-CAM4-TRAVEL TO AND FROM THE UK AND MOST POPULAR COUNTRIES FOR UK RESIDENTS
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 5, 2013
|The fewer language the world have, the more convenient we can live our life
3 - has become / is becoming The numbers of international students coming from overseas for studies are...
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS : What contributes for a GOOD JOB? University education or job experience?
6 - Hi hisho, For me your essay looks monotonous. Your ideas are circling around what is it like to...
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 7, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1:Bar graph/ Asian Elephants
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 5, 2013
|'telephones rank first and television second' - what have a bigger impact in people's life?
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 4, 2013 / aster0224 - Oct 5, 2013
|IELTS TASK1 THE GRAPH SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF UK AND INTERNATIONAL STUDENTS GAINING SECON..
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Modern Technology make parents have no time for their children
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 3, 2013 / Kjerry - Oct 7, 2013
|The Teachability of Virtue; It is argued that virtue is much the same
2 - The topic of piety, virtue and what it means to make a good citizen are central ideas discussed in...
Writing FeedbackSpatchie - Oct 3, 2013 / cgcbjunpark - Oct 14, 2013
|[TOEFL] Telephones and emails have made personal communication less required
5 - I advise you to use these conectors "Firstly" instead of "To begin with", "Secondly" instead of "Second" because they...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 3, 2013 / Marina123 - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Control Over use of Water by Government
3 - "scarcity" is a more appropriate key word to express "less availability" ... I doubt "strata" is...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 3, 2013
|"wake up, sleepy head!"; My Memoir : Art is silence of thougths
3 - You should organize your into smaller paragraphs; the paragraphs you wrote are huge. Furthermore, you have a few grammatical...
Writing Feedbackqn1144 - Oct 2, 2013 / zazros - Oct 14, 2013
|ielts; examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country
3 - Tests or examinations require students to prepare for them before taking them and this makes students to study...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS; I'm on holiday and ask my friend to take care of my house and pet
4 - As dumi has already commented, you need to be more humble when asking help. So, you need to rephrase...
Writing Feedbackashat165 - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 13, 2013
|IETLS TASK 1; CHARTS on results of a survey of adult education
7 - Thanks for your suggest. I will correct follow you tomorrow. I hope you will help me for correct....
Writing Feedbackbinhpht - Oct 2, 2013 / binhpht - Oct 4, 2013
|Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because
3 - .... this sentence needs improvements in its presentation; To begin with, the world today is becoming closer and...
Writing Feedbackabbas8158 - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|Gre -- Argument; homeowners in nearby Brookville community
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Having fewer languages is a good thing?
9 - .... this section does not convey your idea clearly. I cannot really get what you try to mean...
Writing Feedbackhkahal - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|I grow up in Jiquilpan Michoacán; My New Life
Writing Feedbackoscar cazares - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Solving the gap between rich and poor nations requires much effort from governments - IELTS
Writing Feedbackhaisergeant - Oct 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 THE GRAPH SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF UK ADOLESCENTS FOLLOWING A VEGETARIAN DIET
5 - Hi, your essay failed to reach 150 words, however with only one line in the graph it's difficult to...
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 1, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 2, 2013
|TOEFL - Should we tell the truth always to our friends?
5 - Hi Dumi thanks for your attention As I read so many answer templates , all of them had mentioned...
Writing Feedbackghazal85 - Oct 1, 2013 / ghazal85 - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS:It has been reported that several minority languages become extinct each year.
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