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|memo introducing myself. help: mechanicalism and grammar
4 - You probably don't have to, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to include something like "I appreciate you...
Writing Feedbackbhickey0827 - Sep 15, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|[Toelf] idea or fact? which one is important
3 - ...very true...good point Because anything that is not convinced strongly would be forgotten as time passes...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 15, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Plato statement - There are many different types of music; Why we need it?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 15, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS - CAM 5; three different countries population compare
4 - The line graph provides information about the percentage of people with an age of 65 years or more in...
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 15, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 16, 2013
|Multiculturalism ; Accepting more cultures
Writing Feedbackqasderwdw - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|GRE ARGUE: A "Palean" Basket Was Discovered in Lithos
Writing Feedbackharry52 - Sep 14, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Children consume too much unhealthy food. Cause & solution?
4 - .... you should not crowd your sentences with too many words unnecessarily. That harms your flow ; The...
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 14, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|[Toefl] spending equal amount of money on libraries and sports?
2 - Well.... I feel you can present this idea better, in a more logical way; The degree of interest...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: OPINIONS ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING OF ARTISTS.
5 - Thanks guys. First of all you are right, I needed to put "alternative sources" instead of " health and...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 13, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 18, 2013
|Capital punishment and criminal execution essay
3 - Well.... what is this essay for? Is it for IELTS or TOEFL? It's better you mention this purpose in...
Writing FeedbackYahyaSl - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)?
4 - Rather, he should try to get the subordinates involved in decision making by consulting their ideas and opinions...
Writing Feedbackyunjaeclyn - Sep 13, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Ielts: Parents are sole responsible for their children's misbehavior. Do you agree?
2 - ....the word behavior is getting repeated. This you can present in a more simple way ; The way that...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 The best way of spreading news
6 - Very good introduction. Clear and interesting :) First of all, the Internet is the fastest form...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Extended family is less important than before; 'lifestyle has changed'
3 - ... ok... you are talking about the joint family concept that helped people to manage their family farms...
Writing Feedbackfs7 - Sep 12, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] need for land kept in natural condition or developed for housing, industry?
Writing Feedbackholylua - Sep 12, 2013 / Allen Hu - Sep 22, 2013
|TOEFL; Children & their own money? lack of self-control and financing conception
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 12, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 17, 2013
|[IELTS] consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat - GRAPH
5 - Hi, Please open IELTS related writing in Writing Feedback forum. Also, you can use the feature, "Attach file(s) "...
Writing Feedbackmatthewdang131 - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|[toefl] important business woman; business or house?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|[IELTS]- Use of mobiles have become common in many countries.
3 - Thank you guys. Thanks yosh, Very much appreciated. Thanks for correcting the essay... I didn't notice all those...
Writing Feedbackdelvydavis - Sep 11, 2013 / delvydavis - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS; Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries
4 - 1- There are several reasons of causing serious effects of obesity: Clear this, those reasons are "cause" of obesity...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 11, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 13, 2013
|GRE issue essay about "educational institutes responsability"
4 - .... I wish you improve this line a bit mre; This responsibility is not limited to ensuring the...
Writing Feedbackquique7991 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 28, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 1 USA marriage and divorce rates
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 11, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 13, 2013
|TV Vs. Literature. GRE Analyze an Issue
2 - Throughout history, we find various efforts taken by people to record events for future references. ......
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|TOEFL;The rapid growth of cities in today's world - Positive development?
5 - ...not "can", but it is :D Traffic congestion impacts very negatively on a city. ....very good...
Writing Feedbackblackwoman - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Carry guns or not? No for gun carrying!
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|Happiness Vs Success; Which is more important?
2 - As you know, happiness and success determines your quality of life. Happiness is the best emotion...
Writing Feedbackchoutxu - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Some argue parents should impose strict control on their children
Writing Feedbacknectar_s - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 21, 2013
|IELTS: Education is the main determinant of a country's future development
3 - .... What do you mean by "highest education levels"? Do you mean to say that they have better...
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; TV has adverse effects on friends and family
4 - Instead of spending time with family or friends, they indulge themselves sitting in front of a TV for...
Writing Feedbackmjlm - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|ielts do you agreewith the private companies support science rather than government
3 - I guess you follow this format for the introduction; Hook - Begin your essay with a strong sentence...
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Sep 10, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2:Retirement age at 60/65.What is your opinion.
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 10, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 10, 2013
|IELTS; Should all countries have laws to prevent animals being used in circuses ?
Writing Feedbackscorpio - Sep 10, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|[IELTS] Issue on Retirement Age! Agree or Disagree?
5 - .... don't use synonyms if you are not very familiar with their usage. They may mean something very...
Writing FeedbackHai An Hoang - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|[GRE] - The indicator of a great nation is represented by the general welfare
3 - From my point view too, I believe that general welfare of citizens needs to be considered as a...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|Teachers should not talk about their personal viewpoints like the social and political ones.
5 - I suggest you to follow the following format for the introduction; Hook - write a sentence which is relevant...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|[GRE] - University should require students to take various courses
3 - ... Why do you include the word "physically"? I feel many universities deal more with intellectual development and...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|GRE: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern
2 - In my view there are many grammatical and spelling mistakes in this essay, for example, should be...
Writing Feedback600score - Sep 9, 2013 / xiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013
|IELTS (Letter)- Invite your friend for a vacation
3 - this sounds odd, stick with the standard phrase - Hope everything goes well with you and your family...
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Sep 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 9, 2013
|If you succeed your past events you'll be able to experience the present at easy
4 - The main task of the marketing consultant is to judge how the company would perform in the years...
Writing Feedbackramprashanth_18 - Sep 9, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 21, 2013
|[TOEFL] Changing something in time from the past
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE: Colleges and universities should specify all required courses
Writing Feedbacksistan - Sep 8, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Some people think that no one should be allowed to work after the age
6 - With the incredible economic growth, the working and living condition has been significantly improved in recent decades. This line...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 1 School Spending - Feedback
9 - @pijiuwdw: The conclusion also states the overview again. That's what I have in the paragraph 2....
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 8, 2013 / muffle - Sep 11, 2013
|[TOEFL] For me the influence of my friends was more highlighted than impact of the school
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 8, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 14, 2013
|Essay about the influence of Technology on human thinking - feedback
4 - Introduction:We are in the "tech era" where one is relied on techonology for a solution probably to a minuscule...
Writing Feedbacksaiwiwo - Sep 8, 2013 / septem1821 - Sep 12, 2013
|IELTS: Today the high sale of popular consumer goods reflex the power of advertising
4 - Nowadays there are many products with the same usage that compete heavily in the market. Therefore, the only...
Writing Feedbacksaphirblu - Sep 8, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|The usage of free time properly; Relax or Improve mind?
2 - .... good start... this is the type of hook I like :) However, your essay is poorly structured....
Writing FeedbackDr Kumar - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|Essay Title: Something Different That Day
3 - ... By any chance, do you mean fifteen minutes ? quarter minute means one quarter of a minute...
Writing FeedbackKiarasparks16 - Sep 7, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Essay introduction about SELF CONFIDENCE
2 - WOW...are you a poet? your introduction was really beautiful. I do not know if it maches the requirements for...
Writing Feedbackderpeena - Sep 7, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 11, 2013
|In order for any work of art-for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song-to have
2 - Some people might argue that a piece of art is useless unless it contains a precise message that itwhich...
Writing Feedbackwatiss - Sep 7, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 11, 2013
|The mystery of Angelica /descriptive piece
Writing Feedbackmahnoorhassan - Sep 7, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|Notting Hill shows the highest and Fulham is the least in both rental cost and salaries - the table
4 - Hi, You write well, but I feel you better improve on structure. Iwish you followed this structure for this...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|A little inaccuracy saves a world of explanation; SAT peparatory essay
Writing Feedbackaneeta - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|[GRE Argument]To alleviate serious unemployment problem Autotech should be encouraged
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Sep 6, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS; WRITING TASK 1 - TELEPHONE CALLS BY CATEGORY
6 - This is report writing. So limit your introduction to introduce the graph title. In this introduction you have...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|The reasons of an increase in social problems involving teenagers
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 6, 2013 / zoha - Sep 15, 2013
|TOEFL; you have enough money to purchase a house or a business. Which one you buy?
5 - Thanks for your recommendations. I greatly appreciate your help. I tried to write the essay under time condition at...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Sep 5, 2013 / holylua - Sep 9, 2013
|IELTS-Write a letter to your friend about a public event
Writing Feedbackredstone804 - Sep 5, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Sharing room with other students or living on one's own?
2 - Overall pretty good essay, just a few grammar problems. Living in a dormitory is a very good opportunity...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 5, 2013 / kaybee - Sep 7, 2013
|[TOEFL] Your job has more effect on your happiness than your living environment does.
11 - Thanks first! But refer to "any" I checked the dictionary and give the following example, I never...
Writing Feedbackewido - Sep 5, 2013 / ewido - Sep 12, 2013
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