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|IELTS ESSAY: People in the past used to be more dependent on one another
4 - This sounds pretty vague :( What sort of transformation it undergoes? Remember, this is your hook statement that...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS: ECOLOGICAL BALANCE; 'technology as major culprit for ecological impact'
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS; At young age children are more adaptable to studying foreign language
6 - Hi, I have an admin request for you - Please have a more meaningful topic, similar to the one...
Writing FeedbackraDJa - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|Warnings and smoking - IELTS task 2 Academic.
3 - ... well this is not for speech writing, but essay writing. So, avoid unnecessary redundancy. It is well...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives
6 - Some grammatical errors: teach somebody something (to do something); expect somebody to do something I think you...
Writing FeedbackKate64 - Nov 23, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 6, 2013
|'Taxpayer, employer and individual' - IELTS Writing : Cambridge 1 : Practice 1
Writing Feedbacklimarchung - Nov 22, 2013 / limarchung - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay:Social networking has the advantages and disadvantages
Writing Feedbacknhr - Nov 22, 2013 / pakias - Nov 23, 2013
|Doing things within groups or by individual - ielts essay
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed and it is too crowded with so many words and improper phrases. You...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 22, 2013
|IELTS essay, Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities
7 - great.... I think you should what you desire :) Let us know when you get your score. Also, keep...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|'Babasaheb Ambedkar'; hich one person in the history would you like to meet?
Writing Feedbackakshayj25 - Nov 22, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 26, 2013
|Every day computer use by children - 'Computer is a miraculous tool'
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|IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth
14 - Hi, Dumi, my tutor insist that Discuss both views and give your own opinion means you should...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Nov 22, 2013 / tiyuok - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS; Technology cannot solve all the world's problems!
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 21, 2013 / raDJa - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS: pros and cons of work in other countries and take families together
8 - Since you struggle with time management, I think this structure for your introduction also would help you organize your...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|[IELTS] Does a celebrity benefit society or not? (Cambridge IELTS 9 G1 Task2)
2 - ... I find this statement unfair. Not everybody is interested in becoming a celebrity although there can be...
Writing FeedbackRomanticDog - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|distance travelled - IELTS academic task 1 writing (table form)
6 - Good... Hey, I've done a major mistake while providing you the structure for this task. The one I provided...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 22, 2013
|'Jail time or community sevices work' - Ielts essay 02
5 - First, I have an admin request for you - IELTS threads should be opened in Writing Feedback forum (...
Writing FeedbackHgly - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|Public utilities and surroundings are the primary factors to consider before moving to a place
7 - I don't find much meaning in this line.... Your introduction sounds better without this line. Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|GRE Practice Essay - Governments should limit the amount of restriction, if any, on scient
Writing Feedbackchloespaha - Nov 20, 2013 / Nikkyrulzz - Nov 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] learning a foreign language in my own country or anther country
4 - hi. You have to be careful in choosing your words to describe your idea, like in the sentence below...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS ; Nuclear energy is a better source of power for today's global energy needs.
3 - To produce energy using traditional methods, we need to burn fossils and natural gases. These emit...
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|Economic growth is defined as an increase in the number of goods and services produced in one year
5 - In my opinion, your introduction is not appropriate for your task. Firstly, you are more likely talking about Economic...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 22, 2013
|SAT; Judging a book by its cover
6 - Well.... you may cite certain literature work as examples and that is no harm. However, in this...
Writing Feedbackslevia94 - Nov 20, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS - Line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES OF PEOPLE IN THE US AND JAPAN)
3 - Many thanks for your help! Hopefully, I can receive more feedback from you for next reports and essays....
Writing Feedbackphuongthuy247 - Nov 20, 2013 / phuongthuy247 - Nov 21, 2013
|[TOEFL] The advantages and disadvantages of building a large factory near community.
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 20, 2013 / ggalaxy - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS; Mobile phones have made life easier - More positive than negative effects?
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 20, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS Essay, Advantages and disadvantages living in a house and apartment
5 - There is nothing wrong with both. They are both grammatically correct. Well... they follow a marking...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 20, 2013
|Books? The knowledge learned from experience will remain in our minds better
4 - Thank you so much Your points of views really help me be more ready for the test(TOEFL) I'm going...
Writing Feedbackkhodekhodam - Nov 20, 2013 / khodekhodam - Nov 27, 2013
|[TOEFL] experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live
5 - Take out "are" in the second sentence. Dont tell your audience what your are foing to do, do it....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / JulieRose - Nov 20, 2013
|Whether to offer a higher education in high unemployment rate countries? ielts essay.
3 - Thank you DUMI Thank you for reminding me of cutting the sentence shortly to looks more brief. i will...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 19, 2013 / Ericidelia - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS; Studying a foreign language at primary school is very advantageous!
Writing FeedbackHgly - Nov 19, 2013 / HelpmepassIELTS - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS: Is economic progress only way of measuring Country's Success? Add health care and education
4 - Thanks for your suggestions Dumi. I think i used repeated few main words that I think causes the essay...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Nov 19, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 25, 2013
|Effects of computers on children/youth
7 - Okkkkkk... you've posted the above response and that's exactly how you should make a comment on someone else's thread....
Writing Feedbackalmam - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should replace normal classroom with online computer classes?
3 - This is because the classrooms are well equipped with resources that help students to comprehend their lessons better....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 20, 2013
|Antidemocratic countries and the effect of capital punishment on our lives
Writing Feedbackera1996 - Nov 19, 2013 / era1996 - Nov 23, 2013
|[TOEFL] Compare and contrast knowledge from experience with knowledge from books.
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 19, 2013 / aoey - Nov 22, 2013
|IELTS chart - the nutritional consistency of two dinners
3 - Pahan It seems like you are experienced and professional :-) . Thank you for the feedback, really....
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 19, 2013 / pakias - Nov 20, 2013
|[TOEFL] marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 19, 2013 / something - Nov 19, 2013
|Private and public health care system s- IELTS Academic essay
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 19, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Which is better: one, two close friends - a large number of casual acquaintances?
2 - First, this sentence is too very long and it really disturbs its flow. Second, you have not introduced...
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Old people take a while to begin using new technology such as mobile
5 - you have to take care about your conclusion part. you have to mention any connecting word at starting of...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 19, 2013 / reddy - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Is nuclear energy is better source of power?
5 - Your example is good but I think you should expand more about the consequences of this accident. Because...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 19, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS Essay; Education is a key factor for a successful life
3 - ..."immature period of life" does not sound proper; It is argued that children should start schooling from young...
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 18, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|ESSAY ABOUT DREAM THEORIES; we have only brushed the surface
3 - but after centuries of interpretations and studies accumulated throughout the years, it's still a question to which we have...
Writing FeedbackCtence - Nov 18, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|Some Governments and Businesses prohibit smoking.Do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackreddy - Nov 18, 2013 / reddy - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS part1 - Number of minutes of telephone calls in Australia
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 18, 2013 / pakias - Nov 19, 2013
|This movie is very hysterical when one is watching it alone; Film Review - The Dictator
2 - ... your focus is on Aladeen and therefore I feel you should not talk about the actor's roles...
Writing FeedbackJulieRose - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Choose two topics from the book and reflect it to your life!
Writing Feedbacktabithamica - Nov 17, 2013 / tabithamica - Nov 18, 2013
|MY IDEAL HOME; Apartment surrounded by a few shops and a park
5 - Oh sorry! The reason I crossed out some words and sentences is because it's not needed. Make the...
Writing Feedbackshatha100 - Nov 17, 2013 / tabithamica - Nov 18, 2013
|With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a waste!
3 - ... very good introduction :) Yes, I too agree... Your introduction is superb. However, your body paragraphs...
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Eco tourism. (for and against essay) - benefits far outweigh the negatives
2 - ... empowering what? Community members stay involved at all stages of the process, having them empowered with ?????...
Writing Feedbackdashka_6539 - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Some people think secondary students should study international news as a school subject
Writing FeedbackBobbypark - Nov 17, 2013 / Bobbypark - Nov 18, 2013
|IELTS essay, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before
3 - In the conclusion, you wrote although.... . This sentence is incomplete. The sentence structure goes like this: Although... ,...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 17, 2013 / pakias - Nov 18, 2013
|Essay about people taking more than one job to earn extra money
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 17, 2013 / pakias - Nov 19, 2013
|Multiple Pregnancies - Research paper - Preterm Labor
2 - Pregnancies can be difficult and dangerous whichand this is why mothers need to follow the instructions of doctors to...
Writing Feedbackbkewing3 - Nov 16, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|I learn about who I am; DEPRESSION & ANXIETY
4 - ... it sounds too general when you declare that everybody experience these things everyday. There may be people...
Writing Feedbacktabithamica - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Is Advertising Changing our Idea of Sex?
2 - Honestly, I can't find much wrong with this. However, I do have a suggestion. "In the following essay...
Writing Feedbackharrylev1995 - Nov 16, 2013 / SilverKnight - Nov 24, 2013
|Hobbies are a regular activities that is done for pleasure
2 - As we all know, hobbies are regular activities in which we engage for pleasure and relaxation during our...
Writing Feedbackazdim - Nov 16, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 18, 2013
|Have you ever felt like you don't recognize the feeling of being happy anymore?
3 - This sentence sounds better if you present it in a more simplified version; Have you ever felt that...
Writing FeedbackJumanaa - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Increasing population required many energy sources to meet what people need
2 - You had better provide us with the full prompt of the essay. Also, you have to revise your grammar...
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