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|Fair view on PROSTITUTION ; Grammar/ Structure
Writing FeedbackPeterdo1988 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS; Popular events help ease international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions
Writing FeedbackBALOCH - Oct 8, 2013 / BALOCH - Oct 9, 2013
|Eating at restaurant vs eating at home; Which is better?
4 - "Those who have no time for healthy eating will sooner or later have to find time for illness." -...
Writing Feedbackkrishnadeo - Oct 8, 2013 / krishnadeo - Oct 10, 2013
|'solution for world hunger' or ' space exploration'?- Which project do you choose and why?
NEW - Your candid feedback is highly appreciated. Thanks in advance for the help. Prompt: A science laboratory in Britain...
Writing Feedbackjondoe - Oct 8, 2013 / — -
|Personal enjoyment? Everyone is working as a diligent worker for the family.
9 - Dear pahan I meant happy :D:D:D I will continue to take part here because it helped me alot. and...
Writing Feedbackcgcbjunpark - Oct 8, 2013 / marmaria - Oct 12, 2013
|Adam Smithwas was one of the key figures of the Scottish Enlightenment -KEY IDEAS
3 - Adam Smith is best known for two classic works 1. The Theory of Moral Sentiments 2. An Inquiry into...
Writing Feedbackleslav - Oct 8, 2013 / eventzkaze - Oct 14, 2013
|We should look at computers advantages and research to utilize them in a good manner.
6 - Thanks...you will have your turn soon. Just keep on writing and practice proofreading..Cheers....
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 7, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 9, 2013
|IELTS ; The only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university
Writing FeedbackKjerry - Oct 7, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS; Why do we need music?
5 - To much 'telling the reader' in the essay. Let the essay convey its own ideas through itself. The sentences...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Oct 7, 2013 / OchoCinco85 - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS; People who have committed a crime should always be in jail ?
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS - Course of study that has no direct employment opportunities serves no purpose
5 - Thanks Dumi for the feedback. I now understand the issue with words of the kind that you've spotted. Regarding...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 6, 2013 / ieltsp - Oct 11, 2013
|Should you start a career or enter university at 18?
2 - good introduction :) ... I guess he would become an experienced worker rather than a qualified...
Writing FeedbackElizabethAsking - Oct 6, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK -2 :- Control over usage of water
Writing Feedbackmirchi1123 - Oct 6, 2013 / dumi - Oct 6, 2013
|My favorite room is my study because it keeps my memories alive!
Writing FeedbackNora_Toxic - Oct 6, 2013 / Nora_Toxic - Oct 10, 2013
|successful sport professionals can earn great deal money than people in other ...
Writing Feedbackneosit - Oct 5, 2013 / neosit - Oct 5, 2013
|[toefl task] TELEPHONE or TELEVISION? Which one is more effective in people's life?
8 - Copying others comments is against forum rules and such users would be suspended. .... smart point.... there...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 13, 2013
|You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you
Writing Feedbackfextora - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 7, 2013
|TOEFL writing 2 essey: Big city vs small town
4 - Let's take your first body paragraph - In body paragraphs you should give reasons to justify your...
Writing Feedbackhosein_g - Oct 5, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|The concept "translation" has been changing during the last century; TRANSLATION PROCESS
Writing FeedbackMarina123 - Oct 5, 2013 / joylabx - Oct 8, 2013
|IELTS-CAM4-TRAVEL TO AND FROM THE UK AND MOST POPULAR COUNTRIES FOR UK RESIDENTS
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Oct 5, 2013 / dumi - Oct 5, 2013
|The fewer language the world have, the more convenient we can live our life
3 - has become / is becoming The numbers of international students coming from overseas for studies are...
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|IELTS : What contributes for a GOOD JOB? University education or job experience?
6 - Hi hisho, For me your essay looks monotonous. Your ideas are circling around what is it like to...
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 7, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1:Bar graph/ Asian Elephants
Writing Feedbackhisho - Oct 4, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 5, 2013
|'telephones rank first and television second' - what have a bigger impact in people's life?
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 4, 2013 / aster0224 - Oct 5, 2013
|IELTS TASK1 THE GRAPH SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF UK AND INTERNATIONAL STUDENTS GAINING SECON..
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 4, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Modern Technology make parents have no time for their children
Writing Feedbacklilyvn1009 - Oct 3, 2013 / Kjerry - Oct 7, 2013
|The Teachability of Virtue; It is argued that virtue is much the same
2 - The topic of piety, virtue and what it means to make a good citizen are central ideas discussed in...
Writing FeedbackSpatchie - Oct 3, 2013 / cgcbjunpark - Oct 14, 2013
|[TOEFL] Telephones and emails have made personal communication less required
5 - I advise you to use these conectors "Firstly" instead of "To begin with", "Secondly" instead of "Second" because they...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 3, 2013 / Marina123 - Oct 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Control Over use of Water by Government
3 - "scarcity" is a more appropriate key word to express "less availability" ... I doubt "strata" is...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 3, 2013
|"wake up, sleepy head!"; My Memoir : Art is silence of thougths
3 - You should organize your into smaller paragraphs; the paragraphs you wrote are huge. Furthermore, you have a few grammatical...
Writing Feedbackqn1144 - Oct 2, 2013 / zazros - Oct 14, 2013
|ielts; examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country
3 - Tests or examinations require students to prepare for them before taking them and this makes students to study...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS; I'm on holiday and ask my friend to take care of my house and pet
4 - As dumi has already commented, you need to be more humble when asking help. So, you need to rephrase...
Writing Feedbackashat165 - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 13, 2013
|IETLS TASK 1; CHARTS on results of a survey of adult education
7 - Thanks for your suggest. I will correct follow you tomorrow. I hope you will help me for correct....
Writing Feedbackbinhpht - Oct 2, 2013 / binhpht - Oct 4, 2013
|Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because
3 - .... this sentence needs improvements in its presentation; To begin with, the world today is becoming closer and...
Writing Feedbackabbas8158 - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 6, 2013
|Gre -- Argument; homeowners in nearby Brookville community
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Having fewer languages is a good thing?
9 - .... this section does not convey your idea clearly. I cannot really get what you try to mean...
Writing Feedbackhkahal - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|I grow up in Jiquilpan Michoacán; My New Life
Writing Feedbackoscar cazares - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 11, 2013
|Solving the gap between rich and poor nations requires much effort from governments - IELTS
Writing Feedbackhaisergeant - Oct 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 THE GRAPH SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF UK ADOLESCENTS FOLLOWING A VEGETARIAN DIET
5 - Hi, your essay failed to reach 150 words, however with only one line in the graph it's difficult to...
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 1, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 2, 2013
|TOEFL - Should we tell the truth always to our friends?
5 - Hi Dumi thanks for your attention As I read so many answer templates , all of them had mentioned...
Writing Feedbackghazal85 - Oct 1, 2013 / ghazal85 - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS:It has been reported that several minority languages become extinct each year.
Writing FeedbackAntonio Lu - Oct 1, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Oct 4, 2013
|Involvement of children in different paid work, is it good or bad?
3 - I like this introduction. It is simple, yet interesting and contain all necessary features. .... great...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 1, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2.........Eating habits and lifestyle of children and their effects
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 30, 2013
|whether job is only for money or there are several other reasons for it..
4 - thank u very much,dumi and pahan for ur suggestions.i will try my best,not to make this type of mistakes...
Writing Feedbackprakrit - Sep 30, 2013 / prakrit - Oct 1, 2013
|Reading books continuous/ separate ; Which is better?
Writing Feedbacknhip2912 - Sep 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 30, 2013
|talk about a photograph or painting you have seen that was memorable.
Writing Feedbackmahsa kh - Sep 30, 2013 / dumi - Oct 10, 2013
|People naturally resist making changes in their lives.What kind of problems can this cause
4 - ... I think it is not fair to make such generalization. In the contrary, people look forward to...
Writing Feedbacksaddream - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Technology and Its Effects on Reading and Writing.
Writing Feedbackdarashea - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|WHAT ARE YOUR OPINIONS ON CITY VERSUS COUNTRY LIVING ARGUMENT ?
Writing FeedbackKillions23 - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|What is "happiness"? ; It is the inner state of well-being and satisfaction!
Writing FeedbackFiras - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|Murder, bloodshed, carnage; why exactly is it wrong?
4 - From the beginning of times, murder hashad been viewed as the ultimate crime deprived of life ...
Writing FeedbackBipabrena - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|SAT: What motivates people to change something in their life?! (I wrote in 25 minutes)
Writing FeedbackAs is - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|For & Against Topic (TOEFL) . Students should attend to classes or it should be optional?
3 - .... here you need to tackle why these teachers can explain those lessons thoroughly - It is because...
Writing FeedbackGolnazgol - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|GRE Issue Essay; All nations should help support the development of a global university
4 - .... I don't see issues with your structure. I think it is well structured and you have presented...
Writing Feedbacknikitabonawate - Sep 28, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|TOEFL- increasing professors' salary as an effective factor influencing educational system
5 - Nice job! But I think you should introduce the backgroud in short, otherwise your eaasy may seem a bit...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 28, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|IELTS:There is no doubt that globalization affects the world's economies positively
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 27, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|TOEFL;should universities spend more money on salaries for university professors?
4 - .... here there are several grammar issues. Also, ideas are scattered here and there. Arrange them according to...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 1, 2013
|TOEFL; Parents are our important teachers during children's life
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS; Increase in crimes among young people - Social & Emotional learning
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS (Charts); electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / hisho88 - Oct 1, 2013
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