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|Use of computer; Advantages and Disadvantages
Writing Feedbackdjaffar - Aug 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|IETLS General Task 1: You have taken apart time job. issue with them and its solution
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 20, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 20, 2013
|TOEFL - Factory near your community/ Advantages & Distadvantages
3 - ... I don't find a connection between your first and the second part of this sentence; On the...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|TOEFL - Impact made by fast food on our lives
7 - One of those aspects is the decreasing the time given for preparing he food which made the people face...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS task 1 - line graph aging population
Writing Feedbackteehee123 - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|Now many employees have the option to telecommute - why?
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 19, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 21, 2013
|IELTS essay about the effects of future developments in the field of IT
5 - ... why do you cite developed countries? Even in developing countries such as India or China (which are...
Writing Feedbackmoutaz1978 - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|Installing lights to reduce accidents. GRE Analyze an argument. Feel free to comment.
5 - Hi Pahan, Sorry, the first mistake came about as a result of typing too fast and not proofreading it...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS: Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more
4 - .... I feel you should have more weight on the reason why they believe so; The people support...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: Some people think that sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
NEW - Please grade my essay by your valuable suggestions. Topic: Some people think that sense of competition in children...
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|IELTS; Competition instills confidence into the child's mind.
5 - I request both Pahan and Dumi to use marking pen when you suggest me writing new sentence instead of...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 19, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: Nowadays, many secondary schools teach business and communication skills
Writing Feedbackgustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013 / gustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS : ESSAY ON DESCRIPTIVE WRITING FOR GRAPHICAL DATA
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 19, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Deal with the cane toad; Integrated Writing Task
3 - ... this is not grammatically incorrect. But I wish you changed the beginning a little bit; Both the...
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|Petition to University administration/ GRE analyze
6 - ... lacking in the fact????? do you mean that author's argument lacks factual evidence? .... I...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 20, 2013
|Stay in one job or change jobs frequently.Discuss both and give your own opinion.
7 - However, this does not mean you can't do better. Your ideas and essay structure are good though. So hopefully...
Writing FeedbackRealTMac - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 19, 2013
|Student behavior has became major problem in world .causes and solution .
6 - What's the purpose of this essay? Are you preparing for IELTS, TOEFL or what? It's better you mention the...
Writing FeedbackMohkam - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 - line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN)
4 - Thank you very much guys, I will definitely keep on eye on my mistakes and learn from them :)...
Writing Feedbackteehee123 - Aug 18, 2013 / teehee123 - Aug 21, 2013
|People visit museums when they travel to new places; 'National Museum of Iraq'
6 - Museums contains the largest collection of the art works.These collections represents the true heritage,customs and traditions of the great...
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 18, 2013 / thomascarlson - Aug 31, 2013
|The sense of competition and the spirit of cooperation, I believe are equally essential to children.
7 - ... I guess you should have used a different wording :) It is essential to promote cooperation in...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 18, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 19, 2013
|TOEFL: sometimes it is good to learn with a teacher and sometimes on my own
4 - In your conclusion, you are stating that both sides are equal so you should also present your ideas...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS: It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be.
5 - ... this is an interesting simple idea which you have presented in a very complicated manner. Also, this...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|Agree/Disagree? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends
Writing Feedbackalexcripton - Aug 18, 2013 / alexcripton - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS; GAP YEAR is helpful for students to gain experience through work or travel
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 18, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|In order to have a better future, every high school student should take at least one economic course
3 - First, since a basic economics course would be intended for providing students with a general understanding of economics,...
Writing Feedbackshiyayewu - Aug 18, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS; FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMES? Or they need to be based on circumstances?
7 - In my opinion, you have taken an example of a child for the fixed punishment system where there...
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 18, 2013 / Redtape - Aug 20, 2013
|Male & female equal in universities; Different subjects according to the gender
4 - Well... it's better you mention the purpose somewhere in your post. You find some good video clips on google...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 17, 2013 / dumi - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK: an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18.
3 - .... Yes, I too believe this has a major hand in these recent violence happenings. However, you need...
Writing Feedbacknhonphan - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|Ielts task 1- give me feedback, and mark on /9.0
Writing Feedbackanliv - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|transportation vehicles you think it has changed people's lives.
2 - Thanks to many advanced technologies these days the human life has become more comfortable and convenient. ...
Writing FeedbackNgoc Tran - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: ZOOs are only to entertain people?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 17, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|IETLS General Task 1: You have lost your credit card. Letter to manager
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 16, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL; What's more important: hard work or luck? not reckon on luck in our plan
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 16, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere.
6 - instead of "student's manner" you could use "Etiquette" For instance, mother/father = for instance parents to conclude...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 16, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 18, 2013
|GRE ; Advancing our understanding of the world
2 - Accepted Wisdom is correct in mosesome cases and can be exper imented. overall, your writing is good...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 16, 2013
|WHO HAVE BETTER INFLUENCE ON STUDENTS - TEACHERS OR PEERS?
4 - make your intro a little more captivating, hook the audience/reader. And like Dumi said, express your view lucidly, it...
Writing Feedbacktpo112358 - Aug 15, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 16, 2013
|Ielts- The internet and change of lives
Writing Feedbacktmtrang91 - Aug 15, 2013 / tmtrang91 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1 - line graph on usage of cars in the UK
Writing FeedbackHA254 - Aug 15, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|Essay written on Back to basic; CBEST
Writing Feedbackpig1 - Aug 15, 2013 / Aakash13 - Aug 17, 2013
|Creative artists should be given the freedom to express - 'range of limitation'
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 15, 2013 / me4mbd - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS Task2: Technological developments in the past few decades. Positive ?
4 - Hi Dumi / Pahan, Thanks for your time in correcting my essay. I have noted your points and will...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 15, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS- NECESSITY OF THIRD LEVEL EDUCATION FOR SUCCESS? AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Writing Feedbackblessy - Aug 15, 2013 / blessy - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS_cultural traditions will be destroyed by developing tourism. right/wrong?
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 15, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 19, 2013
|What are some other reasons than money, that people work?
Writing FeedbackRpuiii - Aug 15, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2:Some people argue that the purpose of zoos is only to entertain people.
7 - great advice congchop! :) Your conclusion too needs to be aligned with your prompt. So you need...
Writing Feedbackraulfanc - Aug 15, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|TOEFL-- The inernet is dangerous and unreliable
Writing FeedbackHELLOJOY11 - Aug 14, 2013 / tarbiat - Aug 17, 2013
|Happiness is considered very important in life. 'Defining depends on the ages'
6 - ... Great hook....very impressive :) Most people have the tendency to link happiness with wealth or...
Writing Feedbackjustinjustinlee - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|Which source is more important? experience or books? TOEFL iBT
2 - One source of knowledge is not enough anymore in our rapid changing world.(end) andThe majority of the universities and...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 14, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 15, 2013
|TOEFL topic: STUDYING ABROAD - LIKES AND DISLIKES
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 14, 2013 / tarbiat - Aug 15, 2013
|Gender equality in University Admission
6 - Thaks Dumi, sry for late reply.u r gentle,not rude at all,and the strcture really helps me a lot.and i...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 14, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|GRE ISSUE- A public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards
3 - Read the caption below which is written on how the introduction (GRE Issue) should be constructed. Then compare what...
Writing Feedbackioancelot - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 General training : A friend has agreed to look after your house and pets
5 - Well Arun.... by reading your prompt, I understand your friend has agreed to look after your house and pet...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 14, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS essay topic: Sharing of private information by the media?
3 - First, please open your threads meant for IELTS essays in the Writing Feedback forum. That helps you earn more...
Writing Feedbackmee_na_mee0913 - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|[IELTS] - Fatherhood implies environment provided by father to his children for their growth
8 - Well... I think you need to improve the essay structure. Below is what I generally recommend. You can follow...
Writing FeedbackBivek3 - Aug 13, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|Equal Oppurtunity And Parity in Pay. GRE Analyze an issue
3 - Thanks for the grammar and spell check. Would you like to say anything about the content of the essay...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 13, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013
|Has people's interaction changed because of technology? IELTS
5 - people's .... In fact some have literally almost died down Old ways of communication is fading...
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 13, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|HARD TIMES; My little son's surgery
3 - Dear dumi, tanks for notify me those points. What do you think about coherence and cohesion in my story?...
Writing Feedbackmitu63 - Aug 13, 2013 / mitu63 - Aug 13, 2013
|IELTS;Research suggests characteristics we are born with are stronger than experience
3 - ... this is a pretty simple idea, but you have presented it to sound very complicated. Be more...
Writing Feedbackgivemebrave - Aug 13, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Student's loss interest in teaching profession
2 - .... why you narrow down the scope of your topic to students? Your prompt talks about young generation...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 13, 2013 / dumi - Aug 13, 2013
|A person should be very careful when making a decision - think carefully before any judgement
8 - Think about how each paragraph connects to the previous one. For example, for your third paragraph, you could...
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