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|IELTS: 'fish and chips' - Consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers
3 - The given chart illustrates the consumption of pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers of Australian adolescents from 1975...
Writing Feedbackmrabbas - Aug 13, 2013 / MisterWandering - Aug 13, 2013
|TOEFL- UNIVERSITY STUDENTS SHOULD ATTEND CLASSES OR NOT?
6 - I think your content is good and well developed, but you'd better use the topic sentences of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 13, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] The car use will definitely decrease in twenty years
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 12, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 14, 2013
|'Humans are bound to do mistakes' - I prefer machine made items
5 - Another reason is that machine made clothes isare less time consuming. There is lot of time wastage in...
Writing FeedbackLaw - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|'avoiding sorrow' Happiness is considered very important in life.
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 12, 2013 / king jane - Aug 14, 2013
|Teachers' performance evaluation; 'People seldom agree with eachother'
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|The Internet is becoming more and more central to our lives
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|Entrepreuners and Jobs - GRE Issue essay (rate and comment)
3 - External factors have always had an impact on man and history and it shows that many a great or...
Writing Feedbackishas - Aug 11, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|Toefl:Should parents accompany their children to play games?
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 11, 2013 / moonname - Aug 12, 2013
|What role the money plays on health, education and respect.
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|IELTS_should government pay for people's education and health care?
2 - .... Let see how it sounds when the order is changed slightly; First of all, education and medical...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 11, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|writing task 1 IELTS: writing a letter to your friend about a movie
4 - Hi Pooneh, To say the least, you made me smile while reading your letter..:) So about your letter,...
Writing Feedbackpooneh - Aug 11, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 12, 2013
|SAME JOB Vs CHANGING JOBS - Discuss both views
Writing Feedbackpooneh - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1- A letter to a friend about a movie that I am planning to watch
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Aug 10, 2013 / ah_zafari - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2- Doing the same job for whole the life or changing it frequently
18 - Dear ah-zafary I really enjoyed your essay. I learned somany new structures from you. the only thing I saw...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Aug 10, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 14, 2013
|TOEFL:It is important for students to participate in school's leisure activities？
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 10, 2013 / fuqiangang - Aug 13, 2013
|[Proficiency exams ]Argument essay arguing in favour of or against advertising..
4 - ... People include both sellers and buyers. That is to say they represent both advertisers and consumers. So,...
Writing FeedbackDeli52 - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|Think of the most interesting class you have ever taken. Why did you enjoy this class
5 - .... both these sentences mean the same. Therefore one makes the other redundant. Combine both and form one...
Writing FeedbackLaw - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|"Is Legalizing the Right Choice?" - It's the right decision!
3 - Marijuana has been gaining in popularity for many years and its popularity never ceased to grow until to...
Writing FeedbackWilliamProsch - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|Toefl: Treat pets like family members or not? 'it is not a good idea'
7 - I think the biggest problem with your essay is that it is too formal. It follows the traditional essay...
Writing Feedbackeden68 - Aug 10, 2013 / Sybrinth - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS Essay : effects of advertisement on daily life
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|[TOEFL] The characteristics of NEIGHBORS - Specific details and examples
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 10, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 13, 2013
|GRE Analytical writing task - scientific discoveries help in understanding the world.
Writing Feedbackprepbuddy - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|TOEFL _ Should high school students be made wear uniform or not?
5 - .... this has grammar issues; ....prevent them from wasting their time on discussing over what they wear. prevent...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|Popular events like the Football World Cup release patriotic emotions.
6 - no problem :) I tell the guys who post in wrong forums with the intention of correcting the usage...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS: Public Libraries and computer technology
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS - 'slight difference'; The illiteracy rates around the world
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|[TOEFL] Environmental protection V.S Economic developments
3 - They are both important because they are vital to human'sour future and welfare. However, since resources are...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS ; Some people are born with talents while others are not!
4 - While there is some truth in saying that talents can be trained, certain fields such as music and...
Writing Feedbackashupatel67 - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS: How to encourage people to use public transport?
3 - ... well.... I think this is not a fare statement. In many countries, even developed countries in the...
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 10, 2013
|'the life itself'; PARENTS Vs TEACHERS ; Reasons & Examples
5 - .... this is an incomplete sentence. This is alright for your speaking task, but in writing you need...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS Task 2-Some people think that travel helps gaining knowledge
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Aug 9, 2013 / MisterWandering - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS: tourism as source of revenue, disadvantages should not be overlooked.
5 - Okkk.... here's my attempt to do what you are asking :) Tourism, without any doubt, is an important...
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 10, 2013
|IELTS: Non academic subjects should be removed from syllabus - Agree or Disagree?
4 - .... The point here is that syllabus should aim not only developing students' knowledge in various subjects, but...
Writing Feedbackwxhwdf - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 10, 2013
|Should sports and art be removed from curriculum?
Writing Feedbackhunghung1234 - Aug 9, 2013 / givemebrave - Aug 13, 2013
|TOEFL; Gender differences and how they apply on jobs they do?
2 - Well ... you are preparing for TOEFL independent writing task which requires you to write an essay with certain...
Writing Feedbacksepideh_dodaran - Aug 9, 2013 / dumi - Aug 9, 2013
|Studying in a group has a lot of advantages that can promote learning process
4 - ... give more focus to your reason; First, group study provides the opportunity to benefit from each others'...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS: CLIMATE CHANGE ISSUE - Not enough political action!
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 9, 2013 / jflo - Aug 12, 2013
|Fast food Vs Home-Cooked Food; 'mode of preparation and natural ways of cooking'
6 - Thanks so much @gmad06...yes i am for IELTS, thanks for your contribution...i am hoping to improve too. my...
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 9, 2013 / posdream - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS; Gender Vs Career - Why some jobs are done by men and others by women/
5 - ...try to align this more with your topic; From the past to now, we have witnessed the differences...
Writing Feedbackntdang92 - Aug 8, 2013 / dumi - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS_ Why little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out?
3 - ... I'm going to change the order a bit; The most serious issues that cause the extinction of...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 8, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 10, 2013
|TOEFL; Some people treat their pets as members of their family. Is it good or not?
4 - .... Well.... this is certainly true for some people but not for everybody because there are people who...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Aug 8, 2013 / dumi - Aug 10, 2013
|'knowing own culture' - Should all students study the same curriculum?
5 - Consider a country like in india where in the state decides the curriculum untilup to the 12th standard. ...
Writing Feedbackjinx - Aug 8, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 14, 2013
|TOEFL / How teachers can make the subject interesting to students( new)!
Writing Feedbacksepideh_dodaran - Aug 8, 2013 / sepideh_dodaran - Aug 8, 2013
|[TOEFL] Parents can help their children's life by asking them to take a job or not
7 - Maybe you can revise "We live in a world where controversial issues are often simply taken it for...
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 8, 2013 / fuqiangang - Aug 13, 2013
|IELTS Task 2-The rising levels of congestion and air pollution
5 - ... Try to give more emphasis to the core measure; Furthermore, discouraging people to use their personal vehicles...
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Aug 8, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 10, 2013
|IELTS; Governments can ensure all its people are educated by providing free education
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 8, 2013 / sepideh_dodaran - Aug 9, 2013
|IELTS; Will traditional skills and way of life die with technological advancement? No
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 8, 2013 / congchop - Aug 8, 2013
|IELTS - Too much noise in public places; Causes and Measures
5 - ...Education institutes...we say "educational institutes. Also you can not look down upon behaviour...you can "shun" it. ...Teach d...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Aug 8, 2013 / posdream - Aug 10, 2013
|IELTS; Flour consumption in six countries
Writing Feedbacktkp - Aug 7, 2013 / dumi - Aug 8, 2013
|IELTS:Development of transportation has enabled people to travel conveniently
Writing Feedbacksilknguyen - Aug 7, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 12, 2013
|GRE:Development of technology should improve our ability to think for ourselves
Writing Feedbackmilanbuffon - Aug 7, 2013 / milanbuffon - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL- How teachers can make the subject interesting to students!
3 - There are many ways of teaching. Some people believe that strictly and carefully presenting theories in the class is...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 7, 2013 / dumi - Aug 7, 2013
|Ielts Task 1 : % Change in price of houses - Bar graph
4 - My opinions. The introdution. You should not use again too much phrases apprearing in the picture. The...
Writing FeedbackSukhi - Aug 7, 2013 / xucoi - Aug 9, 2013
|American students should be required to learn a second language; CLEP exam
4 - Well, learning a second language helps a student to broaden his perspectives and that has a great value...
Writing Feedbackallikath - Aug 6, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 14, 2013
|IELTS ; Should developing countries concentrate on improving industrial skills?
Writing Feedbackzoha - Aug 6, 2013 / dumi - Aug 7, 2013
|IELTS:TASK 2 - topic - studying at university/college or getting a job straight
2 - I think you should try using other transitional phrases, such as furthermore, moreover, in addition, in contrast, however., etc...
Writing FeedbackTobi - Aug 6, 2013 / jflo - Aug 10, 2013
|The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
Writing Feedbackmrabbas - Aug 6, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS: Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country.
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|IELTS Task 1 - The pie charts below give information about world population ....
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