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|IELTS; WRITING TASK 1 - TELEPHONE CALLS BY CATEGORY
6 - This is report writing. So limit your introduction to introduce the graph title. In this introduction you have...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|The reasons of an increase in social problems involving teenagers
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 6, 2013 / zoha - Sep 15, 2013
|TOEFL; you have enough money to purchase a house or a business. Which one you buy?
5 - Thanks for your recommendations. I greatly appreciate your help. I tried to write the essay under time condition at...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Sep 5, 2013 / holylua - Sep 9, 2013
|IELTS-Write a letter to your friend about a public event
Writing Feedbackredstone804 - Sep 5, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Sharing room with other students or living on one's own?
2 - Overall pretty good essay, just a few grammar problems. Living in a dormitory is a very good opportunity...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 5, 2013 / kaybee - Sep 7, 2013
|[TOEFL] Your job has more effect on your happiness than your living environment does.
11 - Thanks first! But refer to "any" I checked the dictionary and give the following example, I never...
Writing Feedbackewido - Sep 5, 2013 / ewido - Sep 12, 2013
|[TOEFL] Ideas about having university education should be available for all or not
Writing FeedbackJintastic - Sep 5, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS 2:Talents naturally inherited and talents which are taught
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 5, 2013 / muffle - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Students should be organised into groups or study alone
4 - On the other hand, students also need to enhance their individual skills in studying that will help them...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Sep 5, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|My Holiday (quick weekend) essay
Writing Feedbackjohnnynguyen - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|People are not paying attention to environmental protection
3 - For which task you wrote this essay? Is it for IELTS? or TOEFL or some class assignment. It's good...
Writing Feedbackhuyentrang - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS; increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18
4 - Very good, this is very clear. You know, it's important to have clarity in your writing more than...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Ielts-Tables : Students'results in a math test
3 - It can be clearly seen that the point level between 34 and 66 has been achieved by a majority...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 4, 2013 / zoha - Sep 11, 2013
|Opening scenes of God Father 1 & 2 ; NCEA Level 3 English Film Study Essay
3 - I made a lot of punctuation changes, mostly breaking up, lengthy sentences, and clarifying them, with new word choices...
Writing FeedbackNoble - Sep 4, 2013 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2015
|Toefl; Ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 4, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits
6 - Your essay is awesome~there are almost on grammer errors in it. At least I can not find any of...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Sep 4, 2013 / Allen Hu - Sep 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] the ability to relate well to people is more important.
4 - ability to relate well to people and studying===>study i think your writing is not good. the introduction and conclusion...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Sep 4, 2013 / huyentrang - Sep 5, 2013
|IELTS ;Clothes are a necessary part of people's lives
5 - ....people refers to them... For most of us, clothing provides protection from weather. ..or For most people, clothing...
Writing Feedbackkatiequintos - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 12, 2013
|Global world changes rapidly with the influx of technology but cultural heritage never changes
3 - It's always good to include the prompt with your essay so that we know what it expects. Is this...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS Writing task 1: Lonely life by gender profile
Writing Feedbacknhatanh - Sep 3, 2013 / nhatanh - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Studying the past can help us better understand present or not
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|full time university students spend most of time studying or doing other activities
3 - First, it is always better that you mention the purpose (i.e. TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the topic so...
Writing Feedbackhuyentrang - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D students who keep their rooms neat and organized are more successful
2 - .... the first and the second parts are loosely connected. It disturbs your flow. .... "always"makes...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Sep 3, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 21, 2013
|IELTS letter ; Changing the booking of travel abroad
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - Sep 3, 2013 / huyentrang - Sep 3, 2013
|Should we learn about the country & the cultures and lifestyles to learn a language?
7 - i think you should express that understanding culture can help you use this language more exact. You talk about...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Sep 3, 2013 / huyentrang - Sep 5, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think parents should read or tell stories
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Sep 2, 2013 / septem1821 - Sep 3, 2013
|"my worst day in recent memory"; College Essay
2 - forty-fourth president It wasn't clear to me how can this be the worst day? i mean. what makes it...
Writing Feedbacktymack - Sep 2, 2013 / penparker - Sep 2, 2013
|My tears were overflowing; Like the Wind, Like God
Writing Feedbackpenparker - Sep 2, 2013 / chessman567 - Sep 2, 2013
|The proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia
3 - It's good to have your diagram here. Why not upload it? The structure I would follow is that; 1....
Writing FeedbackAmritpal Singh - Sep 2, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|[IELTS] Inner Four Planets of the Solar System
Writing Feedbackalicanunlu - Sep 2, 2013 / alicanunlu - Sep 3, 2013
|technology and its impact, ability of humans to think for themselves will deteriorate
Writing FeedbackfaraNY - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS TASK1:Letter to complain about neighbor
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS 2: Too much exercise is bad for one's health
Writing FeedbackPlank - Sep 2, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 3, 2013
|In some countries, traditional food is being replaced by international fast food.
Writing FeedbackOliviaZeng - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE Analytical: 'fields of study'; everybody has the right to decide for himself
Writing Feedbacksistan - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Benefits of Micro-lending. GRE Analyze an argument, Feel free to comment
4 - I am preparing for toelf and GRE simultaneously too. my gre exam is on 29th september and my GRE...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 1, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 12, 2013
|IELTS-In many countries there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.
Writing Feedbackpuman - Sep 1, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|Shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people.
4 - You need to present this idea better. This is what I suggest; Nowadays many people do shopping as...
Writing Feedbackssv_1368 - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Illegal immigrants return after deportation with reasonable explanations
2 - good job!...
Writing FeedbackLucynore - Aug 31, 2013 / pijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013
|Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some mea
Writing Feedbackprixie - Aug 31, 2013 / ShowMeHow - Aug 31, 2013
|Trying new things and taking risks means to succeed
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 31, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 31, 2013
|Toefl; CITY OR COUNTRY? Which place is more appealing for living?
6 - .... farming includes growing crops and raising livestock (e.g. cattle, chicken etc.) Actually, the reason here...
Writing Feedbacksr005307 - Aug 31, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|GRE: past achievement within a field may consequently lead to more success
3 - Good introduction. The part I highlighted is the only section that is not delivered very clearly. I feel...
Writing Feedbackmirandalau - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Reasons for overweight children in developed countries...
4 - .... you mentionedthis is an issue in developed countries, so the latter part sounds redundant. I ...
Writing FeedbackLorachan - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and develop
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[TOEFL] Whether it is better to have broad knowledge or not
2 - ... I find this is not adding much value to your introduction. Finish it with stating your position....
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[GRE argument task] A newsletter offers advice to invest to a new venture
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 26, 2013
|[GRE Issue task] Sports stars & movie stars have obligation to behave as roll models
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] the portrait of Jane Austen; Integrated Writing
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS 1: A letter to the shop manager - 'it is broken'
11 - Have a separate paragraph for your introduction in which you introduce yourself and introduce your problem.This is what...
Writing Feedbackherzchen85 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 5, 2013
|Artists contributions to society - Music, painting, dancing - make life colorful
3 - This is well written, but a fairly lengthy introduction. If you are preparing for TOEFL or IELTS, this is...
Writing Feedbackfannasster - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Challenges are different from generation to generation
6 - Well, you've already done it in the introduction; This is it and that's fine. I just suggested...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|[GRE Issue] The ability to think will deteriorate as people rely more on technology
NEW - This is my first time post a thread in essayforum.com :). There's a month for the test so I...
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|IELTS-technology will completely teacher in classroom. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Nowadays, technology is presented in everything and everywhere. Classroom is not an exception. I...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS; Students benefit from going to private secondary school?
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 22, 2013
|We look up people who have many unique qualities that make them our role models
Writing FeedbackCathAni - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us
5 - There are some grammatical errors in a few sentences causing problems to convey the exact meaning, however, linking words...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 29, 2013 / ojhel - Aug 30, 2013
|ielts; gender segregation; Women should be allowed to join the armed forces
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 29, 2013 / niesaysi - Sep 2, 2013
|IELTS Bar graph; How people invested money
2 - Hi Where is the graph? Use the "Attach file (s)" feature in your message screen to uplord your graph....
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Making sure that your strengths are known by others leads to success
5 - Excellent hook :) Very good introduction, body para and conclusion. This is a very good essay...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 30, 2013
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