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|Should new editors decide what to broadcast on TV &what to print in the newspapers?
6 - Thanks a lot Pahan. I actually gave examples but before posting the essay here I removed them because I...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Jul 29, 2013 / dolly - Jul 29, 2013
|Advance in the field of Information technology is altering people's lifestyles
5 - I'm confused with "ranging from home to leisure or even at workplace" You can try:. Information technology is...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 29, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 30, 2013
|ILETS: Should Crime be penalized with fixed or variable sentences ?
Writing Feedbackzoha - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS Letter ; Asking a friend to be my partner!
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|Everyone makes 100s of simple,spontaneous decisions daily;2 Most Difficult Options
Writing Feedbackwritingcyh - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS; Social status of man is influenced by education parenting and environment
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 28, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Jul 30, 2013
|City should preserve its old, historic buildings - it's part of city history
6 - .... This sounds like your opinion on the issue. However, in the conclusion you take the other position....
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.
3 - I think your introduction is too long and too detailed. You had better save some ideas for your 2...
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 28, 2013
|Which do you prefer ? To study alone or To study with a group of students?
8 - You need to pay serious attention to essays structure. Follow what dumi suggests. A few other mistakes I found;...
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|IELTS 2; Television's influence on cultures - Negative or Positive?
4 - It seems you can write well... Can you manage time well? If you have a problem with that, limit...
Writing Feedbackdheeraj93 - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 28, 2013
|While the unpaid community service is useful for our society, we should not force students to do it
4 - Thanks everyone for your feedback. I always find it difficult to get ideas for any topics. I tried to...
Writing Feedbacktiendh - Jul 28, 2013 / tiendh - Jul 29, 2013
|IELTS - old buildings should be preserved; 'contribute to our sense of culture'
5 - yucky Thanks for your feedback "the preservation is very expensive because all components of old buildings have historical values"...
Writing Feedbackhieptv - Jul 27, 2013 / hieptv - Jul 28, 2013
|What distinguishs Art from Design?
6 - Contemporary art galleries are the greatest art works of all time.These works are done by the highly recognized and...
Writing FeedbackWangQi - Jul 27, 2013 / thomascarlson - Aug 20, 2013
|Firstly by participating in community service , one becomes more responsible and independent.
8 - I think you should replace the second 'people' by 'employers'. I'm quite confused when I read to there...
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Jul 27, 2013 / kayo1996 - Aug 2, 2013
|When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems.
2 - The problem with your reasoning is that most schools have sports year round that almost anyone can participate in....
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 27, 2013 / USNAGoal - Jul 27, 2013
|Which is more important to you?A Business Or A House
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 27, 2013 / Sara Elmessiry - Jul 27, 2013
|Team Work Vs Working Independently ; Which is better?
Writing FeedbackRAJAN44 - Jul 27, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|IELTS ; Should we not pay tax to the authorities?
Writing Feedbackivyzqq - Jul 26, 2013 / ivyzqq - Aug 1, 2013
|Kubbar island ; Trip to Island ...4 paragraph essay
4 - Well.... I don't find mistakes in your essay. However, my suggestions were intended to improve your writing more...
Writing Feedbackleadero - Jul 26, 2013 / dumi - Jul 27, 2013
|IELTS essay: Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of living off-campus?
Writing FeedbackHelinkway - Jul 25, 2013 / Harneet Kaur - Jul 31, 2013
|GRE essay.....will technology deteriorate our thinking abilities?
5 - ... this is my suggestion; Another revolutionary invention had been the Sensor. .... I capitalized the word to...
Writing Feedbackharsha138 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|Some people want to be independent from their families as soon as possible and some other not
Writing Feedbackramshah - Jul 25, 2013 / ramshah - Jul 27, 2013
|Claim & Reason: Surest indicator of great nation is wellfare of people
Writing FeedbackSdas - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Aug 11, 2013
|Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team?
Writing FeedbackMaheshkushwaha - Jul 25, 2013 / Maheshkushwaha - Jul 27, 2013
|TOEFL;Should parents limit their children watching TV to make them do well in shcool?
4 - Good introduction :) Recently,more and more children got into the habit of smoke because they imitated...
Writing Feedbackdreamer77 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|Compare and contrast: home-cooked food vs fast food
3 - Please try and use comparison adjectives in your work. E.g While, whereas,meanwhile,also,on the contrary,in contrast etc. "Lastly" was used...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Jul 25, 2013 / posdream - Aug 9, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Popularity of mobile phones to young people
7 - you have strong sentences :) very good:) Similarly, the phones with internet capability influence young children...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 25, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2013
|'all round education is vital to a studen' - GRE Issue Essay
Writing Feedbackishas - Jul 25, 2013 / ishas - Jul 26, 2013
|Are you in favour of exams being abolished?
Writing Feedbackfureit1998 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|'everything has its good and bad sides' - Food has become easier to prepare
Writing FeedbackAbrorjon_20 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: UK Youth who are vegetarian - Line Graph
2 - In 20 years from 1960, there washad been a gradually upward trend in the percentage of young people...
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 24, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|What makes small businesses successful?
4 - .... well.... you don't have to apologize because this is a forum where people can discuss and share...
Writing FeedbackYAS20 - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|Surest indicator of great nation is wellfare of people: Claim n Reason
NEW - Question: Claim: The surest indicator of great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Reason:...
Writing FeedbackSdas - Jul 24, 2013 / — -
|GRE; Educational inst are responsible for guiding students in their study fields
6 - Thanks a lot for the help dumi... Yes this is not the complete essay.. I will write another essay...
Writing FeedbackAakash13 - Jul 24, 2013 / Aakash13 - Aug 18, 2013
|Some people are of the opinion that looking back the past is waste of time
4 - waste of time ....while others claim that studying history brings great benefits to people, especially to...
Writing Feedbackthe gunner - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS:Children can learn efficiently by watching television
3 - Hi, First, you should post all IELTS essays into Writing Feedback forum. (I moved your essay from "Undgraduate" to...
Writing Feedbackgivemebrave - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|CITY&GUILDS: Human beings do not need to eat meat in order to maintain good health...
5 - ... You better have a stronger hook. This is something too obvious and hence not interesting. ...
Writing Feedbackbrtsnck - Jul 24, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS:Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime type
6 - Hi Talwinder, I feel that the first two paragraphs look similar and it better to make it one ....
Writing Feedbacktalwinder - Jul 24, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|TOEFL Children should learn to manage their own money; views differ considerably
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Jul 24, 2013 / hanyoojung - Jul 28, 2013
|[TOEFL]All schoold teachers should be required to take the courses in every five year
Writing Feedbackbiryne - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: The problems created by unlimited use of cars
4 - .... You can use direct speech to tell this idea more interestingly and clearly; Driving in traffic congestions...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 23, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|Teenagers and jobs paragraph - it is my blog for writing
6 - Are you talking about the gap year? It's difficult to provide you with relevant comments when we don't know...
Writing FeedbackYuliak - Jul 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; % of money spent on food, drinks & tobacco by people in Europe
5 - I would suggest to add variety to your vocabulary. For example, you have used " spent; country; education; leisure;...
Writing FeedbackEnid - Jul 23, 2013 / zoha - Aug 6, 2013
|University entrance exam should no longer be mandatory
5 - University entrance exams are a common feature in the education system in some Asian countries such as Japan,...
Writing FeedbackLittleCat264 - Jul 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 5, 2013
|An introduction for capital punishment
18 - maybe I should have written:decreased considerably in number(instead of decreased in number considerably) to emphasize on considerably.what do you...
Writing Feedbackmehdi1 - Jul 23, 2013 / mehdi1 - Jul 24, 2013
|People have so many possibilities. We can learn new things by only writing the term in Google Search
7 - As others have xpressed it's important to include your prompt so that others know how to align their feed...
Writing Feedbacktiha - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 24, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Young people becoming less respectful and polite these days
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 22, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 6, 2013
|Physical exercises do not mean only to maintain good shape
6 - Hi What's the purpose of this essay? IELTS/ TOEFL/ GRE ? Include the purpose in your topic (in the...
Writing FeedbackMariProvi - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|IELTS:Good members of society - Who's Responsible?
4 - ... keep it in present tense. ... educational organizations ... educated person ---------- now you get the difference!...
Writing Feedbackvananhnguyen - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS:Cheap air travel should be encouraged?
4 - I think you write well . Your writing is clear and well presented. There are small grammar issues here...
Writing Feedbackgnam6174 - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 27, 2013
|"Watching TV is bad for children" agree or disagree? / Use Specific Reasons
Writing Feedbackbrtsnck - Jul 22, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 22, 2013
|IELST Writing Task 1 - Water use worldwide and water consumption
Writing Feedbackjeawon_198x - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 22, 2013
|IELTS;Talents with which people are born or practice is more beneficial.
Writing Feedbacktalwinder - Jul 22, 2013 / abderrahim - Jul 25, 2013
|When to start formal education for children?
Writing Feedbackhosseinrooh2010 - Jul 22, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2013
|Arguments in favor of Animal Testing? Yes or No?
5 - Maybe you should decide on what side to agree with in your conclusion. You sound undecided. The rest of...
Writing Feedbackmingyu - Jul 21, 2013 / hanyoojung - Jul 27, 2013
|IELTS:Competition or Co-operation should children learn? 'future career'
7 - I think a good way for you to start is reading valuable articles on the internet. You could also...
Writing Feedbackgehan - Jul 21, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 23, 2013
|Whether the power of advertisement or the real need of people?
7 - I understand your comments. Thanks for your feedback. I will send my essay as quick as possible....
Writing Feedbackvananhnguyen - Jul 21, 2013 / vananhnguyen - Jul 22, 2013
|IETLS; In China, all the kids have to learn English when they are very young.
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Jul 21, 2013 / littlekid 986 - Jul 21, 2013
|scientists researches; average weight of people is increasing, health decreasing
5 - ... well, you need to be careful with expressing your ideas... you tend to include irrelevant phrases that...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Jul 21, 2013 / dumi - Jul 21, 2013
|What you have learned about a country from its movies - 'culture & attractions'
6 - .... better than what you said above .... or else you can say something like this; By watching American...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Jul 21, 2013 / dumi - Jul 22, 2013
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