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|Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential
8 - .... I agree with ArezuF ... redundancy makes your essay boring. Like every person, children too...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 5, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Talent vs Training - Talent is more important!
5 - Your essay structure definitely needs improvement. Seems like you have two conclusion paragraphs, you have a paragraph with a...
Writing FeedbackAnnaLimetta - Jun 5, 2013 / gmad06 - Jun 24, 2013
|The Mozart Effect - citing references
Writing Feedbackwhitknee - Jun 5, 2013 / cutierlb - Jun 9, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: Heart Attacks by Age & Gender ; Chart information
2 - A glance at the bar graph provided reveals the information about frequency of heart attacks of US. male and...
Writing FeedbackLeeHyoRi89 - Jun 5, 2013 / jole - Jun 10, 2013
|financial preparedness; wealthy nations sharing their wealth with poorer nations
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 5, 2013 / bmtcute - Jun 6, 2013
|The role of teacher in modern society
Writing FeedbackAllinaa - Jun 5, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|Nowadays big cities in many countries become overcrowded. Why? Give some reasons
Writing FeedbackSrikanthan89 - Jun 5, 2013 / Srikanthan89 - Jun 20, 2013
|IELTS: Too much emphasis on examinations
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 5, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|Fast-pace lifestyle makes people pay more attention on making money than maintaining a healthy body
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IMPACT OF VIOLENT MOVIES ON CHILDREN: introduction
4 - First, violent movies can have negative influence on children's behavior. ... this one is too...
Writing Feedbackchrisredfii - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|TOEFL: HOW TO BE A QUALIFIED CO-WORKER?
3 - Great essay! I particularly like your conclusion. Only a few nitpicks: Run-on sentences. Split into two sentences...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Jun 4, 2013 / amorphous1 - Jun 8, 2013
|IELTS: Alternative medicine can be dangerous?
4 - However, there are still people who believe in alternate medicines and also rely on them. .......
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS: Richer nations shoul assist poorer nation in their development efforts?
2 - Yes.... I can see you have excellent writing skills. You only need to pay attention to time management and...
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|IELTS: 65 ages and over population between 1940-2040
6 - The provided line graph delineates the fluctuation about the proportion of population aged 65 and over in-between three countries-...
Writing Feedbacklady G - Jun 3, 2013 / nogonno - Jul 3, 2013
|TOEFL: PEOPLE WHO CANT ACCEPT CRITISISM ARE NOT GOOD TEAM PLAYERS
2 - I wish you started this essay with a more meaningful statement. Get more help from your prompt and Introduce...
Writing Feedbackj0937065063 - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|Students should find the field they are interested in and contribute to it.
4 - .... Start sentences with capital letters. It's difficult for others to identify your sentences when you present...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 18, 2013
|City vs countryside (essay by 8th grader in Norway)
3 - Hi What's the purpose of this writing? Is it a term paper? Or answers to a few questions? .......
Writing FeedbackJeruTheBuilder - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Parents should encourage their children learn a secondary language as soon as possible
3 - ... start sentences with capital letters even during your practice sessions. It's a healthy habit and also less...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Are rich people generally more happy than poor people?
5 - Hi, im new here too. For this topic, I think most religiouses teach mankind the happiness is depend on...
Writing FeedbackPhilosophy Essa - Jun 2, 2013 / Borworn01 - Jun 3, 2013
|A 100 feet walk through a street of India
Writing Feedbacknikhil123 - Jun 2, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|Country has a lot of special things to offer and many of them are reflected in movies
Writing Feedbacklele1987 - Jun 2, 2013 / lele1987 - Jun 4, 2013
|St Augustine was the first individual who read silentlz; A silent force
4 - There was a legend called St Augustine and he was the first individual who read less aloud, as...
Writing FeedbackDHuong - Jun 2, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 16, 2013
|IELTS;It's important to support artists,but important things should get priority
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 2, 2013 / rememberwhen - Jun 2, 2013
|IELTS : Which behaviour of teachers is efficient; Strict or friendly?
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Jun 2, 2013 / JangGemini - Jun 3, 2013
|Minimum Legal Drinking Age 21 & why it should stay there
Writing Feedbackls2ws6 - Jun 1, 2013 / dumi - Jun 17, 2013
|To what extent do you agree with going abroad for university studies?
5 - You shouldn't use abbreviation. In the essay, you merely analyze the 1st opinion and ignore the 2nd one. I...
Writing Feedbackrndxpert - Jun 1, 2013 / nellylovekelly - Jun 3, 2013
|How violent movies impact on young children?
3 - First, you should type a meaningful topic under the subject field when you open a new thread. It's an...
Writing Feedbackduchuy1809 - Jun 1, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|I'm a mechanical engineer; Academic background and work experience
3 - Thank you so much Didgerigoo. Could i ask you one more question? About the sentence " I work in...
Writing Feedbacklespeed - May 31, 2013 / lespeed - Jun 2, 2013
|[Task 1] Graph indicating the composition of transportations
Writing FeedbackAvencast - May 31, 2013 / dumi - Jun 14, 2013
|IELTS: TASK 2: Problems caused by Internet and its solutions.
2 - Some suggestions .. bigger is comparative, bigger than what ?!?! acknowledged as a key source ... ...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 31, 2013 / NewUser - Jun 3, 2013
|Review of the film ''Mongol'' by Sergei Bodrov.
NEW - Please check my essay. I don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you! Not until I watched...
Writing FeedbackAmirr - May 31, 2013 / — -
|Increasing a number of students are choosing to study abroad
6 - On the other hand, studying abroad is not always beneficial. or even you can say; On the other...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - May 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS: Selfsufficiency OR Import Food
3 - You need to pay attention to the essay to the essay structure for this task. I generally recommend the...
Writing Feedbackmahash - May 31, 2013 / dumi - May 31, 2013
|IELTS; Water Cycle/ Life cycle of butterfly/ Letter /Process fo digital photography
3 - For each idea below, continue the sentence or write a follow-on sentence using your own ideas to express Result...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 30, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 31, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/Agree) Establish a large shopping center in our community or not?
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|IELTS ....Fast Food is becoming more popular?
Writing FeedbackNewUser - May 30, 2013 / NewUser - Jun 4, 2013
|Difference between Two Close friends
Writing Feedbackkieulinhbs - May 29, 2013 / JangGemini - Jun 30, 2013
|IELTS; Write a complain letter to manager about mobile phone is not working
Writing Feedbackmraheel - May 29, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 14, 2013
|IELTS: Arranged and love marriages. Discuss both views.
2 - To begin with, one of the biggest advantages of love marriage is that it freesexempt the parents from their...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 29, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|Marketing assistant position - IELTS Letter check Request
4 - I don't think you need to add the last sentence as it makes you sound desperate (anxious part), besides...
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - May 29, 2013 / dragonking88 - May 31, 2013
|Psychological Effects of War on Soldiers
4 - Didgeridoo You might not be a grad student or a professor but you pointed out the mistakes and made...
Writing Feedbackrtyler - May 28, 2013 / rtyler - May 29, 2013
|STOP BULLYING - Argumentive Essay
5 - Yes, it's only you can delete your posts. Since you have already got comments from others including moderators,...
Writing FeedbackAlexRomero - May 28, 2013 / dumi - Jun 15, 2013
|Assignment: Is it best to determine how wise people are by how happy they are?
3 - Really? That encourages me so much xD Thank you thank you!! I thought no one would fix it for...
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - May 28, 2013 / JangGemini - May 29, 2013
|Governments money for artsists; 'Artists have been seen as talented people'
7 - Hi, lilythuy2289. Investing too much resources on artists will have a negative impact on the development of...
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - May 28, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|IELTS: Nature of Holidays is changing, do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 28, 2013 / shaddy - May 29, 2013
|Factors which influence a good movie ( your opinions )
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - May 27, 2013 / shaddy - May 29, 2013
|ARGUMENT ESSAY ON IMPORTANCE OF COMMUNITY SERVICE AMONG STUDENTS AT PLEASANTVILLE
NEW - Q- Several charitable organizations in Pleasant-ville provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. Write a response...
Writing Feedbacktaanyakhare2312 - May 27, 2013 / — -
|GRE; Blogosphere & Social media Vs Quality of political discoure in the US
2 - You did raise some really nice points in your essay and acknowledged both sides of the the argument. However,...
Writing Feedbacktaanyakhare2312 - May 27, 2013 / shadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013
|IELTS ; Letter to Football Team-mate to inform why I leave the team
5 - I hope this letter finds you in good spirit and health. The purpose of this letter is to bring...
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - May 27, 2013 / nicktheB - May 28, 2013
|Computer Addiction (Causes/Effect/Solution )
4 - ... technology has literary influenced everybody's life and therefore you can keep this very general .......
Writing Feedbackyasser - May 27, 2013 / dumi - May 27, 2013
|Ielts: % of Australian men and women with 5-levels of post-school qualifications
2 - Your chart seem to direct in introduction. The horizontal bar chart differentiates Australian men and women on post...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - May 27, 2013 / sophisticated - May 28, 2013
|TOEFL; Some people think that family has more influence on the young adult
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 27, 2013 / April April - May 28, 2013
|IELTS : Nowadays people are producing more and more rubbish. Reasons and actions.
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 27, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 29, 2013
|A story about desert survival; Creative writing
Writing Feedbackstine yip - May 26, 2013 / — -
|Lord Arragorn has returned short story.
2 - It is an engaging read, but it gets kind of confusing after the narrator gets hacked and shot. I...
Writing Feedbackchessman567 - May 26, 2013 / Didgeridoo - May 26, 2013
|IELTS - Report an island before and after construction
Writing Feedbackseabird88 - May 26, 2013 / shaddy - May 28, 2013
|Advantages of living in the dormitory rooms and apartment buildings - COMPARISON
3 - --> Moreover, the dorm buildings are usually close to the class buildings and departments; therefore, students do...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 26, 2013 / April April - May 26, 2013
|The excessive usage of social networkings
3 - There are many more social networks, in fact EF is also one of them. However, Facebook and Twitter...
Writing Feedbackanggittas - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|I plan to retire when I am no longer in healthy ;Retirement / Answers 4 questions
Writing Feedbackfsolano94 - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 7, 2013
|IELTS: Importance of studying History in school.
3 - thanx Habib. I really appreciate ur time and effort. But there are few corrections. Do not put comma after...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 25, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 26, 2013
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