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|IELTS TASK 2: RURAL DEPOPULATION: Discuss the effects and suggest some ways
2 - rephrase this sentence. Always avoid' Over-Generalization' in any essay. e.g; I will discuss consequences of depopulation and some...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 20, 2013 / Shumaila86 - Jul 20, 2013
|IELTS essay: Should the government pay the tuition fees for students?
Writing FeedbackHelinkway - Jul 20, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2013
|Unbalanced approach, does not hold true in all situation - Praise positive actions, ignore negative
4 - Yep.... it's always better to indicate the purpose of your writing as your responses need to be aligned...
Writing FeedbackKashifa - Jul 20, 2013 / dumi - Jul 20, 2013
|Teaching the Facts after students have studied concepts; CLEP English Composition
4 - I feel you need to improve your essay structure. Your body paragraphs are somewhat disorganized. I like the structure...
Writing Feedbackdarshanpatel123 - Jul 19, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 20, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; Reasons for Adult Studying (Charts)
2 - hi... writing task 1 is quite easy if you just remember few rules. there ere few sentences that you...
Writing Feedbackremzy - Jul 19, 2013 / Shumaila86 - Jul 19, 2013
|IELTS: some people argue modern works of art are not really art, people are being led
3 - ... this is not grammatically correct, plus it fails to deliver your idea clearly. Modern works of art...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 19, 2013 / dumi - Jul 19, 2013
|"a fish new to water"; educational institutions should guide the students
2 - .... I think this sounds too harsh. You better say that uneducated people are not well recognized in...
Writing Feedbackbangaram - Jul 19, 2013 / dumi - Jul 19, 2013
|Will technology deteriorates our ability to think?
4 - First, I wish to request you to post this type of essays into "Writing Feedback" forum. Also, try to...
Writing Feedbackharsha138 - Jul 19, 2013 / dumi - Jul 19, 2013
|The Effects of Using Cell phone in school
12 - Hello dumi, Pahan, and ldlsky03 I am very grateful for your attendance and giving me beneficial comments. I...
Writing FeedbackRasam - Jul 19, 2013 / Rasam - Jul 20, 2013
|"Practice makes you perfect"; Opinion Essay/ Classroom Assignment
2 - well... your opening statement looks a bit too crowded and complicated. Present it more clearly with a punch....
Writing Feedbackningo - Jul 18, 2013 / dumi - Jul 19, 2013
|Explain how the internet is being used successfully by students nowadays.
4 - ... it should be students .... you need to rephrase this sentence ...it's grammatically wrong; People...
Writing Feedbackminhvupt - Jul 18, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 21, 2013
|globalization and its advatages and disadvantages
2 - You need another background sentence for your intro..Many countries have considered globalization as a primary solution for economic problems....
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 18, 2013
|GRE - 'Correlation between monitoring and productivity of the employees'
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jul 18, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 19, 2013
|IELTS T 2:A large number of death are caused by road accidents. Why do so many....?
4 - Please post this type of essays into Writing Feedback forum. .... despite of so many attempts being...
Writing FeedbackParsalove - Jul 18, 2013 / dumi - Jul 19, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: What factors are important in achieving happiness?Depend on individuals
Writing Feedbacknancy07 - Jul 18, 2013 / Shumaila86 - Jul 19, 2013
|IETLS; A Claim Letter against Insurance Company
4 - .... You have adopted the correct formal tone for this type of a letter. However, I feel this...
Writing Feedbacktuhin_75 - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|Increasing petrol prices- immediate solution, but temporary!
3 - As a result of increasing population and development of transportation technologies, the world today is faced with new...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 20, 2013
|Individuals can do nothing on environmental issues, Agree or disagree?(TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Jul 17, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 23, 2013
|Why study? 'career preparation, gaining experiences, and increasing knowledge'
3 - jkjeremy has provided you with very good feedback as to improve your writing and I hope you pay enough...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS: How can income generated by tourism benefit the poor?
2 - You've discussed the importance and the impact of tourism, but... You haven't really told me what could...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 17, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 17, 2013
|IELTS: Task 1: Quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002
2 - .... illustrates is a better word.... Also I wish if you changed the this slightly; The line graph...
Writing FeedbackImaaan - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 17, 2013
|Living individual or staying in apartments is better
5 - Hi Naveen, I would like to help you! First pay attention to your essay structure. Have a clear understanding...
Writing FeedbackNaveen 54 - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 17, 2013
|We can't claim that scandals are useful just because of the ability of getting attention (GRE)
Writing FeedbackTian - Jul 17, 2013 / robert589 - Jul 21, 2013
|IELTS Task2 - people relationship has changed because of technology
3 - Overall, I am not happy with the introduction. In the introduction you have two tasks to perform; First...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Jul 16, 2013 / dumi - Jul 17, 2013
|Parents vs classmates child's education; child copy each other's habits
4 - Thank you..:) i did TOEFL test ...the writing was about ( parents always worried about their children s future...children...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 16, 2013 / rozha - Jul 21, 2013
|TOEFL; GRADES ARE A GOOD INDICATOR FOR ASSESSING STUDENTS
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 16, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 16, 2013
|avoid routine; Dormitory rooms at your university must be shared by two students
2 - One of the most important things for students in their student lives is their roommates. It is important because...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jul 16, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 16, 2013
|Bearing arms and violence in a country - GRE Analyze an issue
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jul 16, 2013 / bepe5n - Jul 18, 2013
|IELTS:All teenagers should engage in voluntary community service; Agree or Not?
Writing FeedbackSiderri - Jul 16, 2013 / dumi - Jul 21, 2013
|GRE ISSUE: People most respect the powerful not when they exercise their power, .....
Writing Feedbackmorning - Jul 16, 2013 / Naveen 54 - Jul 16, 2013
|Traditional Foods Vs International Fast- Foods; Discuss
Writing FeedbackEKA350 - Jul 16, 2013 / EKA350 - Jul 20, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:HOME-COOKED VS BUYING FOODS - which is better?
13 - I perfectly get your point on these statements and I am totally in favor about what you said....
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 16, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 17, 2013
|IELTS; Relationship of Personal Happiness and Economic Success
7 - But, I personally believe that happiness differ from one person to others . To reach the ladder of...
Writing FeedbackSiderri - Jul 15, 2013 / fred123 - Jul 17, 2013
|Have we harmed the Earth or made it a better place?
6 - A piece advice. Go for your straight opinion on your intro. For me no need to state (Before identifying...
Writing Feedbackpearpear017 - Jul 15, 2013 / Siderri - Jul 16, 2013
|Using consultansy or listening to the own people; GRE analyze & issue
4 - ]While I believe that it is necessary to appreciate and incorporate the views of one's ownthe employees, I...
Writing Feedbacktherajendraadhi - Jul 15, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|"Only the academically able can be the elite of society." Do you agree?
4 - ... well.... here you do not clearly present your reason for taking your position to the reader ......
Writing Feedbackrobert589 - Jul 15, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 21, 2013
|Continuous developments of zoo required towards a more comfortable and habitable for animals to live
5 - Your ideas sometimes don't flow well. Avoid writing very lengthy sentences. .... Well, zoo is not...
Writing Feedbackdrifter702 - Jul 15, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 30, 2013
|understand the most important characteristics of a society = study of major cities
Writing Feedbackatabati - Jul 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS: should government support creative artists?
3 - .... yes, he's right. For this task,you need to support your reasons with examples that make the reader...
Writing Feedbackuzzle - Jul 14, 2013 / dumi - Jul 15, 2013
|TOEFL Essay Money is the best way to motivate people
10 - .... why do you say money is an effortless motivator.... The employer may have to put lots of...
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 14, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 16, 2013
|TOEFL Essay "There is too much violence in movies"
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 14, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 20, 2013
|People do many different things to stay healthy. 'not skip our breakfast'
6 - This essay (along with the well-intended comments that accompany it) is a mess. Reread the prompt. Unless I'm...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 14, 2013
|Describe a museum in Iraq
Writing Feedbackmelectric - Jul 14, 2013 / melectric - Jul 15, 2013
|Is it important that young people should know about history of their country?
2 - You need to express your view on this statement .Do you think it's importantfor them to learn history?...
Writing FeedbackChristen - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|Teachers should not encourage the children to think in the same way
4 - Thanks a lot...
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 13, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS; Technology Vs Survival of Traditional Cultures - Are they incompatible?
6 - Although in some exceptional circumstances there seems to be some levels of compatibility Basically, internet have led to...
Writing FeedbackParsalove - Jul 13, 2013 / fred123 - Jul 20, 2013
|In this materialistic world only people who earn a lot of money are considered succesful
Writing FeedbackLakshani08 - Jul 13, 2013 / rozha - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: GOVERNMENTS SHOULD BAN CIGARETTES AND OTHER TOBACCO PRODUCTS
5 - I guess there is no harm in including your position in the introduction. It affirms which stance you...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 14, 2013
|GRE Analyze Issue;Best way to teach- praise positive actions and ignore negative ones
7 - ... Well... I think you need to strengthen the link between the first two lines with the latter....
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 16, 2013
|Children's work at a early age - beneficial or a threat ?
3 - .... don't open your essay with sentences like these. Try to introduce your topic with more meaningful sentences....
Writing Feedbackninaaxtopol - Jul 13, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 14, 2013
|IELTS: Money for: successful sports professionals vs other important professions
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 13, 2013 / KamilG - Jul 14, 2013
|What sort of knowledge and skills that universities should provide?
3 - State your opinion here in the introduction. That helps you navigate the reader in your desired direction. Here you...
Writing Feedbackorxan88 - Jul 13, 2013 / dumi - Jul 20, 2013
|TOEFL - Do you like comfortable living or large amount of money?
4 - .... by changing the order, you can improve its flow and align your writing better with your topic;...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 12, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 12, 2013
|International and traditional music should be treasured and respected equally.
Writing Feedbackyucky - Jul 12, 2013 / shirazu - Jul 22, 2013
|TOEFL Essay about value life experience
6 - Thank you...
Writing FeedbackSemehenM - Jul 12, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 12, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Shopping as a replacement of hobbies and other leisure activities.
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 12, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 14, 2013
|TOEFL Essay-Movies should present positive values. Y or N ?
7 - It is better to use First,... and in the next passage - Second,... or Firstly and Secondly but not...
Writing Feedbackguy2010 - Jul 12, 2013 / SemehenM - Jul 13, 2013
|TOEFL/ Do you agree that professional athletes deserve high salaries ?
8 - .... "show up" or "appear". As April April suggested, "appear" sounds better. get involved with many...
Writing Feedbackelan - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|IELTS T2: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make?
5 - On the other hand, technology can impact negatively on relationships between people. The rapid growth of...
Writing Feedbacknancy07 - Jul 11, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 12, 2013
|Benefit of supermarket and how it affects on small buisness
4 - In conclusion., supermarkets and small shops collectively have a great role in our daily life, government should have such...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 11, 2013 / rozha - Jul 12, 2013
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