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|IELTS: Task 1, line graph that shows unemployment rates in US & Japan.
3 - Thanks Ibrahim_Xian for the feedback. next time I will try to improve my mistakes that is mentioned by you....
Writing FeedbackWarlock - Aug 5, 2013 / Warlock - Aug 5, 2013
|Write the short opening chapter to a novel called A Summer Romance.
Writing FeedbackAjia11 - Aug 4, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|'Multitasking teenagers' - ACT Essay Review
4 - ... fully agree sounds better. As dumi suggested, I too feel you need to introduce the topic before...
Writing FeedbackACTPREP - Aug 4, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS:apprehensive mind; learning a foreign language at primary/secondary school
6 - Thank you dumi for that point you mentioned. About conclusion I have a question. would you please...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Aug 4, 2013 / mahgh123 - Aug 6, 2013
|Child Abuse and my Future; How I learned to become a man!
7 - Red: Really appreciate the effort, especially at what time it is! Blue: I really try to put passion,...
Writing FeedbackIvykid96 - Aug 4, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS_writing: should people exploit animals for human purposes?
4 - First, I wish to request you to post your IELTS essays into Writing Feedback forum which is dedicated for...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 4, 2013 / dumi - Aug 4, 2013
|IELTS: Is change good for people or not?
Writing Feedbacksukhjit - Aug 4, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|Can Human nature produce crimes?
Writing Feedbacksilknguyen - Aug 3, 2013 / silknguyen - Aug 5, 2013
|Epilepsy versus Seizures
Writing FeedbackSmartypants101 - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|The advertisements consist of all the shining information about the product
2 - I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's a good practice to include your task in the...
Writing Feedbacksevenauz - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|SCIENTIFIC MYSTERIES; Vaccines and autism
Writing FeedbackHannahbananaess - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|Visiting museums during travel; to become familiar with other cultures & history
4 - ote=ramshah]They may think that in their limited time of residencestay in a foreign land, visiting museums is better and...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 3, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|IELTS-task2: The increase in weight but decrease in health
Writing Feedbackkhanhlinhpham - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|SPORTING CHAMPIONS ARE MOTIVATED BY DESIRE OR MONEY!
3 - Any champion wants to excel his performance. ... tell it was the love for the sport that motivated...
Writing Feedbacka_mesripour - Aug 3, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|Cinema is coming to an end or not?
3 - ...very good point :) .... I'm going to change the order a bit; The exciting atmosphere that the...
Writing FeedbackNguyenanh - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Learning a foreign language early bring additional tension & stress to children
3 - Thank you so much for the detailed analysis and feedback. I will check the other essays and follow the...
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Aug 2, 2013 / bobinv - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS, How immigration change the life in both industrialised and developed countries
4 - Thank you for your comment, could you say me what my score would be approximately in an ielts exam...
Writing Feedbackthereafter - Aug 2, 2013 / thereafter - Aug 3, 2013
|'Children are free birds' - Best times in life; IELTS
2 - Your essay seems to be too short. How many words? As dumi suggests it's always good to state your...
Writing Feedbackanushakorada - Aug 2, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 3, 2013
|Rising level of congestion and air pollution Vs Usage of private cars
2 - Include the purpose of your essay (e.g. IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.) so that others would provide you with more...
Writing Feedbackvahidia - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS: It is essential to have the death penalty to reduce violent crime.
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 2, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|FOOD STANDS Vs EATING AT HOME ; I support the latter!
Writing Feedbacknedkaangelova - Aug 2, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|[IELTS] Tourists should follow local customs or host should welcome differences
4 - This trend has sparkedca concern as to how people should behave when they are in another country where...
Writing Feedbackkayo1996 - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|'No clear illustration' - 2 IELTS What factors contribute to Happiness?
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 2, 2013
|Generation gap between ours and our parents
Writing Feedbackmaryam_f65 - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Today's youth is more knowledgeable about issues than previous generations
4 - Give more prominance to your reason as you have already introduced your tpic and no need in repeating...
Writing FeedbackTonyNguyen - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Continued use of fossil fuels is incompatible with avoiding harmful climatic changes
2 - ... This is an incomplete sentence and we don't get your idea clearly :( Your introduction needs...
Writing Feedbackleadero - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS: Table graph writing, modes of travelling in England.
3 - khanhlinhpham Thanks for the assistance because I was confused that how to make it impressive. But you give me...
Writing Feedbacksukhjit - Aug 1, 2013 / sukhjit - Aug 2, 2013
|Sharing wealth between rich and poorer nations
Writing Feedbackalvanitto - Aug 1, 2013 / temptprovidence - Aug 1, 2013
|ILETS:Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects
Writing Feedbackmonica1515 - Aug 1, 2013 / mahgh123 - Aug 4, 2013
|'Climate change'; Some believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity
3 - ... Why do you narrow the scope of your prompt to one particular type of natural disaster? Your...
Writing Feedbackmaidh91 - Aug 1, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|GRE Issue：Education institution should dissuade students from pursuing area they ...
2 - There is a claim that suggests education institutions persuade students to orient their studies towards the directions which...
Writing FeedbackDan0912 - Jul 31, 2013 / huyenanh1508 - Aug 6, 2013
|Nowadays, technology rules the world - How does it affect relationships?
4 - ... I feel you should improve the link between this line and the hook; As such, human interactions...
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 31, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in
5 - This sentence made me confused in term of its grammar. May you try to illustrate the line graph....
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 31, 2013 / xucoi - Aug 10, 2013
|1.) Prompt: Again and again we hear the complaint that we have no heroes anymore.
4 - examples of people who became can be changed to for instances it is more formal. you used stood many...
Writing FeedbackJOSCONIC - Jul 31, 2013 / hili - Jul 31, 2013
|[ielts task2]Nowadays some people prefer to rebuild or redesign the old houses.....
2 - Okkkkkk.... here I am as you requested in uhnna's thread. Good introduction. You write very well, however, pay attention...
Writing FeedbackDaniel Guo - Jul 31, 2013 / dumi - Jul 31, 2013
|Increasing amount of violence on TV has a negative impact on children's behavior
5 - You were smart to avoid repeating the word "negative." However, you can't just "use another one." No...
Writing FeedbackYami - Jul 31, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 31, 2013
|[TOEFL] People who can't accept others' criticism can't succeed in group working
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Jul 31, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Teenagers encouraged to work part-time.Good or bad?
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS: Nowadays many people do longer work hours and have more stress..
3 - .... The most important thing in writing is clarity. Without clarity of a sentence you cannot impress anybody....
Writing FeedbackDaniel Guo - Jul 30, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 5, 2013
|students' next step: Should they travel or work for a year before university?
Writing Feedbackkhanhlinhpham - Jul 30, 2013 / khanhlinhpham - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS- Best way to improve public health is to improve sports facilities?
2 - a important topic => an important topic are lacking of sports facilities => are lacking in sports facilities accompanied...
Writing Feedbacktiendh - Jul 30, 2013 / khanhlinhpham - Jul 30, 2013
|Describe what responsibilty you think you will face as a GP in other country?
Writing Feedbackhili - Jul 30, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS TASk 2-Many species of animals and plants are in danger of being extinct. What
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Jul 30, 2013 / bobinv - Jul 31, 2013
|The problem of mass migration of workers to urban areas
Writing Feedbackngopolly2002 - Jul 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS: Areas where Computer are more important & where Teachers are more important
6 - ldlsky03: I noticed several grammatical errors but I want to give more emphasis on the task and your...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 31, 2013
|Task 1 IELTS- Acid rain emissions in UK over a period of 17 years
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Jul 30, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 30, 2013
|Truth should be noticed substantially - it's the foundation of any relationship
Writing Feedbackvidaardroudi - Jul 30, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 3, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should we pay professional athletes (entertainers) a high salary?
5 - Wages are set by skill set. All skill sets are different depending on many attributes, level of education, fit...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Jul 30, 2013 / Sacredhoop56 - Aug 1, 2013
|Is it more important to be able to work alone or in group?
4 - Thank you very much for the comments. I will try my best to improve my writing skills. But everyone...
Writing FeedbackChocofun - Jul 29, 2013 / Chocofun - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY : WRITING A RESPONSE LETTER TO A COMPLAIN ABOUT NOISE
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Jul 29, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|Should new editors decide what to broadcast on TV &what to print in the newspapers?
6 - Thanks a lot Pahan. I actually gave examples but before posting the essay here I removed them because I...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Jul 29, 2013 / dolly - Jul 29, 2013
|Advance in the field of Information technology is altering people's lifestyles
5 - I'm confused with "ranging from home to leisure or even at workplace" You can try:. Information technology is...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 29, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 30, 2013
|ILETS: Should Crime be penalized with fixed or variable sentences ?
Writing Feedbackzoha - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS Letter ; Asking a friend to be my partner!
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|Everyone makes 100s of simple,spontaneous decisions daily;2 Most Difficult Options
Writing Feedbackwritingcyh - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS; Social status of man is influenced by education parenting and environment
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 28, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Jul 30, 2013
|City should preserve its old, historic buildings - it's part of city history
6 - .... This sounds like your opinion on the issue. However, in the conclusion you take the other position....
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.
3 - I think your introduction is too long and too detailed. You had better save some ideas for your 2...
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 28, 2013
|Which do you prefer ? To study alone or To study with a group of students?
8 - You need to pay serious attention to essays structure. Follow what dumi suggests. A few other mistakes I found;...
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|IELTS 2; Television's influence on cultures - Negative or Positive?
4 - It seems you can write well... Can you manage time well? If you have a problem with that, limit...
Writing Feedbackdheeraj93 - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 28, 2013
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