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|IELTS ; What is the best way to reduce crime?
3 - 1. Need to improve your grammar & punctuation 2. Try writing simple sentences & make it clear for...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 11, 2013
|One of the characteristics of successful leaders is the sense of responsibility for accept
3 - Well, leadership had always been in demand since the inception of this world, not only among humans, but...
Writing FeedbackHellen - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|Young adults - early independence or living with family for a long time?
4 - Yes, I too agree with greenleaf. Your topic sounds like an IELTS or TOEFL topic. If you prepare...
Writing Feedbackmasoud48 - Dec 10, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 10, 2013
|IELTS essay - role of news editors in broadcasting the news
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Some schools are introducing unpaid community services into their school programmes compulsorily.
Writing Feedbackruilee - Dec 10, 2013 / fatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS WT 2 - Advertisment is more harmful than helpful to humantity. Agree or disagree?
6 - 1. Good essay. 2. Introduction could have been more attractive or catchy ---------------- Help with mine ⇒...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 10, 2013 / CASOON - Dec 10, 2013
|[Toefl ibt-Opinion Essay] Should Attendance Be Required in College?
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|[IELTS - Task 2] Examinations can give a clear picture of students' true ability
7 - That's good news! Please go to the EF Contributors page (you find it at the bottom - click on...
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Every year some languages die out; language as the most important achievment
3 - ..as the most important achievement we have made... ..as many languages have been developed , each language has its...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 9, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 24, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task2 - Causes and solutions in preventing bad influence of adult products
7 - FrankZheng: Yep, thank you, now I find it clearer :D I should rewrite the second paragraph, and focus to...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 9, 2013 / mariali - Dec 9, 2013
|[TOEFL] Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance.
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 9, 2013 / something - Dec 9, 2013
|IELTS; Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
5 - Thanks a lot for helping me guys. It's really very helpful for me. Someone can please also help me...
Writing FeedbackGirishgautams - Dec 8, 2013 / Girishgautams - Dec 10, 2013
|Homework helps teachers to assess students' understanding ; Advantages of homework
6 - Body paragraphs are used to elaborate on reasons. What is the key reason here? It is time management....
Writing FeedbackFofo123 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|TEEN MIAMI; How extracurricular activities have influenced me
Writing Feedbackmj2794 - Dec 8, 2013 / mj2794 - Dec 13, 2013
|Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.
8 - If the hook is so problematic for you, jut forget it and start with the background part of the...
Writing FeedbackBullet32 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 21, 2013
|IELTS: applying community service in schools serving a good purpose
7 - You could rewrite again and again ,and assess according the standards by yourself. Maybe ,in this way ,you can...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 8, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 9, 2013
|[IELTS / TASK 2] The government has to pay for aged care
5 - It's quite clear and I think your essay could hit the 6.5 band score :D Just pay more attention...
Writing Feedbackbellavista0414 - Dec 8, 2013 / mariali - Dec 8, 2013
|[IELTS - Task 2] Trees are essential for the existence of the human race
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 8, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 8, 2013
|It is crucial in mathematics, insight plays an secondary role; Amherst Insight 'Reasoning' Essay
3 - nicely done. I take it that your response agrees with the paragraph at the top (albeit without stating it...
Writing FeedbackLydmeister - Dec 8, 2013 / coolintake - Dec 10, 2013
|Difference between Public and Private School
6 - I'm not sure if your post is looking for help in general or just grammar help, but there seems...
Writing Feedbacklaxmineupane - Dec 7, 2013 / Lydmeister - Dec 8, 2013
|UK economic structure had experienced considerable changes over the last century - the graph
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 7, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 9, 2013
|How do movies or television influence people's behavior? it is part of our lives
Writing Feedbackaoey - Dec 7, 2013 / aoey - Dec 10, 2013
|university students required to attend classes; learn better when attend
3 - .... Secondly followed by Firstly gives a bit of an odd feeling to the reader. You better rephrase...
Writing Feedbackanteros06 - Dec 7, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|IELTS letter- request for a training course to your manager
5 - Many thanks to sigh3508,dumi,pahan. I rewrite this letter to make it more convincing. I am writing to...
Writing FeedbackFrankZheng - Dec 6, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 8, 2013
|TOEFL PRACTICE - I prefer to live in big city - more convenient and appropriate
Writing Feedbackllxcodegeass - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2; Old values have no relevance in the modern world
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|IELTS practice-Government should subsidize traditional arts? by doing what?
Writing Feedbackterry_tian - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 6, 2013
|[IELTS ,Letter] Apply for a housekeeping position
Writing FeedbackFrankZheng - Dec 5, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 6, 2013
|[TOEFL] Agree/Disagree? - Secure job with low pay or job with high pay but easy to lose
4 - ... well, it is not necessarily that lower payment relates to less working time. You need to be...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|'Dorothy: a reflection' - Creative writing about belonging
2 - hi:) I couldn't look away that u had written,i just think its better 2 say i just couldnt take...
Writing Feedbackhaleygrace - Dec 5, 2013 / mika1998 - Dec 15, 2013
|agree that telephones are playing a more effective role than television in people's life
Writing Feedbacksurichen - Dec 5, 2013 / haodiep7640 - Dec 5, 2013
|the one general thing everyone is going to buy is Technology; Persuasive Essay
Writing Feedbackkeikox - Dec 4, 2013 / mj2794 - Dec 8, 2013
|TOEFL: people can communicate faster and more conveniently using phone or e-mail
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Dec 4, 2013 / phuongnam95 - Dec 7, 2013
|IELTS Task 2 - Will the Internet make schools unnecessary in the future?
2 - voldemortlucky [i][i]Hi My first language is not English, may be I'm not good at telling you how to correct...
Writing Feedbackvoldemortlucky - Dec 4, 2013 / buheboljgin - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS; Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together
4 - I think that the second sentence is like a fact and Internet not only touched aspect in the past,...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Dec 4, 2013 / phuongnam95 - Dec 4, 2013
|Toefl. Should countries engage with others or they should isolate from other countries.
Writing Feedbacksanzhar - Dec 4, 2013 / sanzhar - Dec 6, 2013
|In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods.
Writing FeedbackCASOON - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 5, 2013
|GRE - ISSUE/ARGUMENT; All parents should volunteer time to their children's schools
3 - I like if you concluded this introduction with expressing you opinion rather than opening your essay with the opinion....
Writing FeedbackMoralesJ - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|University studies are easier than you think
Writing FeedbackYazale - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 7, 2013
|"Adolescence Stripped Away"
Writing FeedbackGreg Wolf - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|"Never Lose Hope" - Narrative/Descriptive Essay
2 - I really liked the way you have narrated the incident and everything. But i felt that this situation was...
Writing Feedbacktasfia_sultana - Dec 3, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 13, 2013
|Introduction of essay: How to become a doctor
Writing FeedbackPraewa - Dec 3, 2013 / Praewa - Dec 3, 2013
|Toefl ; Independence from parents
2 - First, it is better if you post the prompt together with your essay so that we can understand what...
Writing Feedbacksanzhar - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|IELTS : consumers and advertisements
Writing Feedbackgavin - Dec 3, 2013 / gavin - Dec 4, 2013
|Is the Affordable Care Act a good idea;English1001 Explanatory Paper on Health Care Reform
2 - Yh that's really good.you shouldn't include 'the main sticking point'!try something like the main priority stance is.......
Writing FeedbackRowbear - Dec 3, 2013 / Emerald123 - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Should we judge people by their appearance?
9 - haodiep7640 I'm so sorry, but what essay are you talking about? because there is one more essay above your...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 3, 2013 / mariali - Dec 8, 2013
|GRE argument response--Of the two leading real estate firms in our town Adams is superior
Writing Feedbackbuheboljgin - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 16, 2013
|IELTS (Academic)Task 2- Museums VS. Internet
Writing FeedbackJiaYin - Dec 2, 2013 / MisterWandering - Dec 3, 2013
|IELTS (Academic)Task 2- Is advertisement just a form of entertainment?
2 - Well, I think this introduction of the background of this issue is somewhat deviated from the actual one....
Writing FeedbackRachel26HJ - Dec 2, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|Does Media Violence Cause Violent Behavior?
3 - dumi ty...
Writing FeedbackTiffanye Duthie - Dec 2, 2013 / Tiffanye Duthie - Dec 3, 2013
|IELTS - Reearing a child in strict or no-rules culture. Discuss merits of both
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Dec 2, 2013 / znack - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS essay - Animals should not be exploited or humans must use animals to satisfy them
6 - This tropic sentence is suggested to be rewritten as it is irrelevant to the supporting sentences. When you...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 2, 2013 / Alexielts - Dec 12, 2013
|children in many countries are eating more fast-food and convenience snacks.
5 - "children and adult" should be "children and adults" "Furthermore, children's are more effective by this modern trend of...
Writing FeedbackGirishgautams - Dec 1, 2013 / bonjour - Dec 8, 2013
|Video Games and the American Dream [Help with a Naysayer]
Writing FeedbackDizonl - Dec 1, 2013 / ali ahsan123 - Dec 18, 2013
|Change is a defining moment that brings both positive and negative impacts; Life Changes
2 - Change is a defining moment that can cause both positive and negative impacts on our lives. The...
Writing FeedbackSamuel101 - Dec 1, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 9, 2013
|Ielts ;Does modern technology make life more convenient, or otherwise?
Writing FeedbackLorax - Dec 1, 2013 / gtamani - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 : Water consumption around the world
Writing Feedbackbinhpht - Dec 1, 2013 / binhpht - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; Making sea water drinkable
Writing Feedbackhanasaka - Dec 1, 2013 / khodekhodam - Dec 3, 2013
|Being a foreign language teacher is needed or not
4 - :) That's a good attempt. If you are practicing in view of improving your English writing skills, then IELTS...
Writing FeedbackMandy Chan - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS - Is consumerism a Positive or negative development?
3 - The traditional attire for Indian women is saree. Why yous link it with history? sounds redundant :( You...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
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