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|"Don't confuse money with happiness! "Money and Happiness
4 - Veronicacowen69 thank you. But as a no-native speaker, I could not find some errors in your essays. sogeily...
Writing Feedbackazulrongjie - Jun 10, 2013 / azulrongjie - Jun 14, 2013
|IELTS: Arranged Marriage vs Love Marraige / Discuss both systems
2 - Hi Lady Elle, I think the below essay need minor correction which I have highlighted below. In my...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jun 10, 2013 / davesh82 - Jun 10, 2013
|The eating habits and lifestyle change of the new generation.
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jun 10, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 16, 2013
|When I was younger, I began keeping a journal/ Attitude towards writing
3 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackashleynicole - Jun 10, 2013 / ashleynicole - Jun 12, 2013
|Traveling broadens one's perspectives
Writing Feedbackjole - Jun 10, 2013 / jole - Jun 14, 2013
|Teaching children how to be good members in society is parents or school role ?
Writing FeedbackTareko - Jun 10, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS: Is it fair that sportmen earn far more money than doctors and teachers?
5 - First of all, they need to commit themselves and make many sacrifices, both physically and emotionally, in order...
Writing Feedbackkayo1996 - Jun 10, 2013 / dumi - Jun 11, 2013
|Formal exams and Course Assignments; Which is better to assess students?
6 - Thanks Dummi and all for your correction and your useful feedback! I will take it into account and revise...
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - Jun 9, 2013 / lilythuy2289 - Jun 15, 2013
|Who Am I?The most basic question, but I'm never able to answer!
Writing Feedbacktish1396 - Jun 9, 2013 / tish1396 - Jul 7, 2013
|Learning English through Social Issue - Teen Smoking
Writing Feedbackdavylsc910 - Jun 9, 2013 / dumi - Jun 26, 2013
|GRE Analytical writing; Letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner
2 - This isn't a lower-half response, but I'm afraid that (as is the case with most test takers) you haven't...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|IELTS To what extent should economic planning be influenced by the need of environmen
3 - .... concerning & bothering give a redundant feeling to the reader.; Nowadays, protecting environment is one of the...
Writing Feedbackpatleaxly - Jun 9, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|My dog spoke to me! Essay for a writing contest
2 - that was wonderful MAN... hats off... your age and your narration. vocabulary was more than enough. how excited i...
Writing FeedbackJoanne123 - Jun 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Jun 9, 2013
|Need help in evaluating my Analytical Writing. GRE
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|Compare and Contrast: Two kinds of transportation/ DRIVING & FLYING
Writing Feedbackastuart - Jun 8, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 24, 2013
|'Thank you God for those gifts' - friendship essay
Writing Feedbackjole - Jun 7, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 22, 2013
|"Marshrutka"; FEMALE LOGIC - funny story
Writing FeedbackVyyy96 - Jun 7, 2013 / dumi - Jun 7, 2013
|"No way out?"; Explain what this quote means
2 - Has there ever been a time in your life when you have feltfeel hopeless and vulnerable, experienced the forlorn...
Writing Feedbacklindatong - Jun 7, 2013 / runkirby - Jun 10, 2013
|Event planning is a relatively new career field; Event planning as a career
Writing Feedbackeventzkaze - Jun 7, 2013 / eventzkaze - Jun 10, 2013
|IELTS - It's better to learn how to communicate with opposite sex before entering universities
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 6, 2013 / lilythuy2289 - Jun 8, 2013
|IELTS-Smoking kills and hence should be banned!
5 - ... I wish you said this a bit differently; Furthermore, smoking freely in public places may set a...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 6, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|"fine for driving through the red signal" - FUNNY STORY
Writing FeedbackiBoris96 - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 23, 2013
|SOCIETY;children are to be great fellows or not depend on learning and good idol
2 - ... This is confusing ... It does not convey your idea properly... You need to re-phrase this to...
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 22, 2013
|IELTS; New fashion of doing multiple careers
3 - You should work more on your grammar, like ArezuF stated above. Also, work on the structure of an Ielts...
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 6, 2013 / April April - Jun 7, 2013
|World is like a small village and people, especially students, decide to go abroad for study
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 22, 2013
|Frederick II: Astonishment of the World or Blasphemous Beast of the Apocalypse?
Writing FeedbackRegathion - Jun 6, 2013 / drodriguez_38 - Jun 16, 2013
|IELTS- Languages die every year......... Is this a positive trend?
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential
8 - .... I agree with ArezuF ... redundancy makes your essay boring. Like every person, children too...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 5, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Talent vs Training - Talent is more important!
5 - Your essay structure definitely needs improvement. Seems like you have two conclusion paragraphs, you have a paragraph with a...
Writing FeedbackAnnaLimetta - Jun 5, 2013 / gmad06 - Jun 24, 2013
|The Mozart Effect - citing references
Writing Feedbackwhitknee - Jun 5, 2013 / cutierlb - Jun 9, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: Heart Attacks by Age & Gender ; Chart information
2 - A glance at the bar graph provided reveals the information about frequency of heart attacks of US. male and...
Writing FeedbackLeeHyoRi89 - Jun 5, 2013 / jole - Jun 10, 2013
|financial preparedness; wealthy nations sharing their wealth with poorer nations
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 5, 2013 / bmtcute - Jun 6, 2013
|The role of teacher in modern society
Writing FeedbackAllinaa - Jun 5, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|Nowadays big cities in many countries become overcrowded. Why? Give some reasons
Writing FeedbackSrikanthan89 - Jun 5, 2013 / Srikanthan89 - Jun 20, 2013
|IELTS: Too much emphasis on examinations
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 5, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 13, 2013
|Fast-pace lifestyle makes people pay more attention on making money than maintaining a healthy body
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IMPACT OF VIOLENT MOVIES ON CHILDREN: introduction
4 - First, violent movies can have negative influence on children's behavior. ... this one is too...
Writing Feedbackchrisredfii - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|TOEFL: HOW TO BE A QUALIFIED CO-WORKER?
3 - Great essay! I particularly like your conclusion. Only a few nitpicks: Run-on sentences. Split into two sentences...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Jun 4, 2013 / amorphous1 - Jun 8, 2013
|IELTS: Alternative medicine can be dangerous?
4 - However, there are still people who believe in alternate medicines and also rely on them. .......
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS: Richer nations shoul assist poorer nation in their development efforts?
2 - Yes.... I can see you have excellent writing skills. You only need to pay attention to time management and...
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|IELTS: 65 ages and over population between 1940-2040
6 - The provided line graph delineates the fluctuation about the proportion of population aged 65 and over in-between three countries-...
Writing Feedbacklady G - Jun 3, 2013 / nogonno - Jul 3, 2013
|TOEFL: PEOPLE WHO CANT ACCEPT CRITISISM ARE NOT GOOD TEAM PLAYERS
2 - I wish you started this essay with a more meaningful statement. Get more help from your prompt and Introduce...
Writing Feedbackj0937065063 - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|Students should find the field they are interested in and contribute to it.
4 - .... Start sentences with capital letters. It's difficult for others to identify your sentences when you present...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 18, 2013
|City vs countryside (essay by 8th grader in Norway)
3 - Hi What's the purpose of this writing? Is it a term paper? Or answers to a few questions? .......
Writing FeedbackJeruTheBuilder - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Parents should encourage their children learn a secondary language as soon as possible
3 - ... start sentences with capital letters even during your practice sessions. It's a healthy habit and also less...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Are rich people generally more happy than poor people?
5 - Hi, im new here too. For this topic, I think most religiouses teach mankind the happiness is depend on...
Writing FeedbackPhilosophy Essa - Jun 2, 2013 / Borworn01 - Jun 3, 2013
|A 100 feet walk through a street of India
Writing Feedbacknikhil123 - Jun 2, 2013 / rozha - Jun 14, 2013
|Country has a lot of special things to offer and many of them are reflected in movies
Writing Feedbacklele1987 - Jun 2, 2013 / lele1987 - Jun 4, 2013
|St Augustine was the first individual who read silentlz; A silent force
4 - There was a legend called St Augustine and he was the first individual who read less aloud, as...
Writing FeedbackDHuong - Jun 2, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 16, 2013
|IELTS;It's important to support artists,but important things should get priority
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 2, 2013 / rememberwhen - Jun 2, 2013
|IELTS : Which behaviour of teachers is efficient; Strict or friendly?
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Jun 2, 2013 / JangGemini - Jun 3, 2013
|Minimum Legal Drinking Age 21 & why it should stay there
Writing Feedbackls2ws6 - Jun 1, 2013 / dumi - Jun 17, 2013
|To what extent do you agree with going abroad for university studies?
5 - You shouldn't use abbreviation. In the essay, you merely analyze the 1st opinion and ignore the 2nd one. I...
Writing Feedbackrndxpert - Jun 1, 2013 / nellylovekelly - Jun 3, 2013
|How violent movies impact on young children?
3 - First, you should type a meaningful topic under the subject field when you open a new thread. It's an...
Writing Feedbackduchuy1809 - Jun 1, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|I'm a mechanical engineer; Academic background and work experience
3 - Thank you so much Didgerigoo. Could i ask you one more question? About the sentence " I work in...
Writing Feedbacklespeed - May 31, 2013 / lespeed - Jun 2, 2013
|[Task 1] Graph indicating the composition of transportations
Writing FeedbackAvencast - May 31, 2013 / dumi - Jun 14, 2013
|IELTS: TASK 2: Problems caused by Internet and its solutions.
2 - Some suggestions .. bigger is comparative, bigger than what ?!?! acknowledged as a key source ... ...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 31, 2013 / NewUser - Jun 3, 2013
|Review of the film ''Mongol'' by Sergei Bodrov.
NEW - Please check my essay. I don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you! Not until I watched...
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|Increasing a number of students are choosing to study abroad
6 - On the other hand, studying abroad is not always beneficial. or even you can say; On the other...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - May 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 15, 2013
|IELTS: Selfsufficiency OR Import Food
3 - You need to pay attention to the essay to the essay structure for this task. I generally recommend the...
Writing Feedbackmahash - May 31, 2013 / dumi - May 31, 2013
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