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|The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong
2 - @zandu, your essay has good vocabulary and examples, but Introduction is too long. If you can break it down...
Writing Feedbackzandu - Apr 29, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|Provide examples of solutions to reduce traffic in big cities
2 - Dao, this is a pretty good direct response essay. The prompt that you provided, along with the discussion instructions...
Writing Feedbacklvddqt - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 30, 2018
|Free online download. Positive or negative?
3 - Thank you Holt for your detailed assessment. I will work on the key points that you mentioned. Although with...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 28, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 29, 2018
|Your company organizes a sports event for a local community. LETTER
3 - You need to stop putting a title for your letters. The IELTS test does not require you to give...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 28, 2018 / Holt - Apr 29, 2018
|What is better: work only three days a week for long hours or five days a week for shorter hours?
3 - Ling, the weakness of your TOEFL essay starts with your first paragraph. The introduction of the discussion topic and...
Writing FeedbackMaiya - Apr 27, 2018 / Holt - Apr 28, 2018
|The best of the best inventions for the last decade - PTE writing
2 - Hi Peter, The quality of an academic essay is measured by its complexity; how cogent and concrete are the...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018 / abdo65619 - Apr 28, 2018
|Should animal experiments be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer?
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice! So for this prompt, can i use the following structure: 1. Paraphrase...
Writing FeedbackThisisJanice - Apr 27, 2018 / ThisisJanice - Apr 29, 2018
|IETLS Writing Task 2: The measures to improve waste management through recycling
3 - I noticed that you have missed incidentally some commas Therefore,when substantial ... Also, the question is asking you...
Writing Feedbackkhalit - Apr 27, 2018 / PeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018
|Why so many children work instead of going to school? Child labor
2 - Joze, are you writing this for an English test or just for an English writing class? I am going...
Writing FeedbackJozelearner - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|Animals are being used in medical researchers
2 - There are 2 topics for combined discussion in this essay. These topics are medical research and product safety tests....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|Essay about the fraudulents
Writing Feedbackdd_ee - Apr 26, 2018 / dd_ee - Apr 27, 2018
|What is better: participating in different outdoor activities or just spending time at home?
2 - for me, your essay is well organized. there may be some grammatical errors like: In additions, I stand...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnhHo - Apr 25, 2018 / curiouscat - Apr 26, 2018
|You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Letter
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 25, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 27, 2018
|Ielts Writing task 2 about Married women and teens
2 - Hi so11123, I thought your writing was pretty understandable in this essay. Maybe your thesis statement could have been...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - Apr 25, 2018 / TJLuschen - Apr 25, 2018
|Many students attempt to study abroad in foreign countries - merits and demerits of such decision
4 - @hassonmax some corrections are bellow Studying abroad refers is a lucrative way to studying educate those...
Writing Feedbackhassonmax - Apr 24, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 25, 2018
|Junk Food Is Harmful To Teenagers
4 - You need to make good points of reasoning to support your stand in the topic. "Make local dishes" is...
Writing Feedbackderin - Apr 22, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 27, 2018
|TOEFL writing task 2: Which of the two approaches should busy parents spend with their children?
3 - Sera, when you are asked "Which of the two methods do you prefer?" you are being asked to pick...
Writing Feedbackpepe33 - Apr 22, 2018 / Holt - Apr 23, 2018
|The Earth is facing a huge environmental problem such as climate change
2 - In your essay, you should clearly tell the control measures that government should use to reduce the future impact...
Writing Feedbackgauhar_tem - Apr 22, 2018 / Wanyabanda - Apr 24, 2018
|More advantages than disadvantages of life in a house compared with living in an apartment
6 - Living in house(Bad) : 1.Consume energy E.g. If your house has a side-walk, you have to shovel snow. 2....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 22, 2018 / so11123 - Apr 25, 2018
|Recently many film and music pieces are given online for free. Is it a positive trend?
Writing Feedbacknaz2018 - Apr 22, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 22, 2018
|An ongoing discussion whether boys and girls get benefits more at mixed or single-gender schools
2 - Fiza, your essay is not good at all. You merely provided talking points, discussion topics, if you will, in...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Metal price prediction - Abstract review
NEW - Hi all, here is the abstract for metal price prediction. My supervisor advised me to rewrite for bad grammar....
Writing Feedbackhuangjiaqi12 - Apr 21, 2018 / — -
|Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1
5 - Thank you. if I supplement my essay may you continue correcting my other fault, please. ... rice-producing country...
Writing Feedbackphuonguyen479 - Apr 21, 2018 / phuonguyen479 - Apr 22, 2018
|Ielts - CULTURE AND CHARACTER FROM THE CHOICE OF CLOTHES?
2 - Maryam, you have confused a simple single opinion essay discussion with an extent essay. The instruction question is simple,...
Writing Feedbackmaryam syed - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Is it possible to say a lot about person's culture and character from his/her choice of clothes?
3 - Zainab, you did not understand the task requirement. This is not an emotional extent essay. Rather, this is a...
Writing FeedbackZainab110 - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Funds for building a sophisticated railway network.
Writing Feedbackderekhsu - Apr 20, 2018 / derekhsu - Apr 23, 2018
|Newspaper source (paper or website) - Ielts essay- writing task 2:
2 - Phung, read the prompt instruction sentence. You were asked to agree or disagree. Therefore, your last sentence in the...
Writing FeedbackAmber98 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|Building a large shopping centre in the neighborhood. My vote pro or against.
2 - Shela, there are two mistakes contained in this otherwise acceptably presented opinion essay. The first mistake is that your...
Writing Feedbackxierablind02 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|The charts compare, in percentage terms, five expenditures in a specific British school
2 - .... were the main schooling expense expense of the school in three.... ... with the number numbers of...
Writing FeedbackGiangNguyen - Apr 19, 2018 / haleemasadiq - Apr 21, 2018
|TOEFL. There's a question whether a trip should be taken with the company of a tour guide...
2 - Tess, always stick to the timed practice tests. If you fail to write an essay within the allotted time...
Writing Feedbacktaokyuhyun - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|What is your view on dillema: better life in the city or outside of a rural area?
Writing Feedbackmaya137 - Apr 18, 2018 / Long Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018
|Technology and traditional values coexistence
3 - Personally, i think your essay is really quite good. However, i think you just need to repeat your opinion...
Writing FeedbackLong Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018 / Amber98 - Apr 20, 2018
|A big chunk of people's earnings goes to purchasing material things
5 - Thank you so much for your feedback. I am trying to improve with each practice everyday before the actual...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 18, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 20, 2018
|Movies and television have more positive impact on young people than the negative - TOEFL
2 - Tianyi, you do not need to focus so much on your word usage because you have clearly understandable representations...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|IELTS Academic Discussion Essay - Spending money on improving existing public trasport
3 - Nidaa, unfortunately, I cannot grade your work because you did not provide the complete prompt for my reference in...
Writing Feedbacknidaa91 - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|task 1(LETTER) for IELTS GT
NEW - You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 18, 2018 / — -
|Energy usage in Australia and house gas emissions. IELTS Writing Task 1 - IELTS 10 Test 1
3 - Daofan, the first thing you have to remember is that the opening paraphrase contains a specific number of sentences...
Writing Feedbackdophan - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|Ielts - increasing demand of cosmetic surgery. 354 words
5 - Your body paragraphs should be equally developed so that the examiner will know that you can support your reasoning...
Writing Feedbackmaryam syed - Apr 17, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 18, 2018
|IELTS Academic Negative Development Essay - Cosmetic Surgery
Writing Feedbacknidaa91 - Apr 17, 2018 / nidaa91 - Apr 18, 2018
|A friend keeping an eye on flat during vacation
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 17, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 18, 2018
|In recent society, more and more people are trying to live by their own
3 - Thank you so much. Was really waiting for your feedback. I would really consider your assessment although it is...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 16, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 17, 2018
|Increasing average weight of people has become a matter of great concern nowadays
2 - Jamye, the weakness of your essay lies first, in your overview presentation. Your paragraph restatement contains a run on...
Writing Feedbackthutrang99nt - Apr 16, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Ielts academic discussion essay - the importance of different kind of sports.
5 - Try to develop your ideas in a body paragraph. Currently what I do is (1)Topic Statement, (2) Explain/Restate...
Writing FeedbackZainab110 - Apr 15, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 18, 2018
|Academic IELTS: Writing Task 2: Importance of Planting Trees in Cities and Towns
6 - Serena, you will score a total of 4 with this essay because your response is only minimal. Your response...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Should parents be responsible for teaching their children what polite and good behaviors are?
Writing Feedbackthomas81 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Group members as well as the tour guide both add restrictions to the travel
3 - Tianyi, , this was a pretty good attempt at responding to a direct question essay. However, since you forgot...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|For some attending classes at school is just a waste of time. Reasons for study.
NEW - Why do you think people attend the colleges or university? Each year, they enrolled a thousand students with...
Writing Feedbacklemaitrieugiang - Apr 15, 2018 / — -
|Ielts 8 test 4 task2: heavier weight and less fitness
Writing Feedbackvicki921 - Apr 15, 2018 / vicki921 - Apr 17, 2018
|WE COULD NEVER LEARN TO BE BRAVE AND PATIENT, IF THERE WERE ONLY JOY IN THE WORLD
4 - Chau, the academic focus of your discussion is confusing because you have tried to explain a quote, without really...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Academic IELTS Writing Task 1: Movie Tickets Sales by Genre from 1980 till 2010
3 - Thank you so much. I will be attempting another writing section soon. Hopefully your advice will help me improve...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 14, 2018 / sisi999 - Apr 15, 2018
|The newspapers have a strong effect on an individual's viewpoint and ideas.
3 - Gurpinder, since this is a direct question essay, you are not supposed to indicate your response as a separate...
Writing FeedbackGurpinder - Apr 12, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|The bart graph illustrates information about the performance of travellers using three major airport
2 - "From 1995 to 1999 LaGuardia..." you should change has =>had. you should divide into small paragraphs. you didnt reach...
Writing Feedbackjaspreet8882 - Apr 12, 2018 / chauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018
|Should children always obey their parents' counsel?
3 - I really appreciate all your comments. Actually, that is an exercise I read from an IELTS Preparation book for...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Apr 12, 2018 / cao1km - Apr 14, 2018
|The amount of money consumers use for six different items - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
Writing Feedbackthuyanhnx - Apr 12, 2018 / — -
|SCIENCE Article - How Different Kind of Bias Impact Research
2 - Albert, you have too many topics under discussion in this research paper but not enough in discussion in terms...
Writing FeedbackAlb - Apr 11, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|IELTS Essay about stressful lives of modern-day teenagers.
4 - @Holt Thanks for your valuable and honest feedback. I really appreciate your detailed guidance and will follow your instructions...
Writing Feedbackasefnoor - Apr 10, 2018 / asefnoor - Apr 13, 2018
|Judging book by its cover - reliable opinion or not?
3 - Nyuyen, you will not score very well in the TA section of the scoring because you did not properly...
Writing Feedbackdinhnguyen - Apr 9, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Next career steps for graduate and post-graduate students in the UK
2 - Iksticker, in my opinion, I'd suggest you should work on the main point(which usually comes as the first sentence...
Writing Feedbackiksticker - Apr 8, 2018 / Alao0702 - Apr 16, 2018
|IELTS: ... To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste ?
2 - Minh, you have created a prompt deviation in your discussion which will result in the failure of this essay...
Writing FeedbackNexus54 - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Newspapers are not being read and news on TV is not being watched by young people...
3 - Ngoc, since you did not post the original prompt with the discussion instruction, I cannot advice you regarding the...
Writing Feedbackrubydo - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
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