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|TOEFL iBT: Integrated Essay, The win-win negotiating
4 - okay... then thats certainly a mistake in my observation. and thats obvious because i myself have no good strength...
Writing FeedbackMisius - Apr 13, 2013 / temptprovidence - Apr 15, 2013
|TOEFL: Students should apply for admission for their first choice or several schools?
3 - Thank you about your opinion! However, I do have some doubts. I am studying BARRON's Toefl ibt and they...
Writing FeedbackMisius - Apr 13, 2013 / Misius - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL iBT: Integrated Essay, The origin of dreams, Freud vs biochemical approach
3 - Thank you for your advice! I completely understand your position about integrated essays so I asked about grammar and...
Writing FeedbackMisius - Apr 13, 2013 / Misius - Apr 13, 2013
|Sapodila, was the name given to me when I was born; Essay on myself
Writing FeedbackSapodils - Apr 13, 2013 / Sapodils - Apr 13, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Bar chart (various flavours of food)
4 - That's just fine.... Those are good key words you can use in report writing. In this task try to...
Writing Feedbackdannydo - Apr 13, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|Will the Internet will bring people of the world closer together?
Writing Feedbackjohnsultanov - Apr 12, 2013 / johnsultanov - Apr 14, 2013
|"Every thing is alive because of water"; Clean Water ESSAY
Writing Feedbackabdullahtrading - Apr 12, 2013 / temptprovidence - Apr 14, 2013
|Reasons for why people attending colleges or universities?
2 - ... This introduction is a bit too short. Introduce your topic with a better entrance to your essay....
Writing FeedbackPATEL RAJ - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS-writing a short essay to express why moves to a new house and how's that place.
Writing Feedbackstormynick - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel before university
Writing Feedbackmsmwarren - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|Describe the heart lung machine -IELTS
6 - No, It isnt. It's not scientific word. I think that word used to describe unoxygenated blood is appropriate....
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Apr 12, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 14, 2013
|The rising levels of congestion and air pollution
2 - This affects negatively on quality of life that people lead. Therefore, governments should take necessary measures to control...
Writing Feedbackassetbai - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|If I have enough money what would I do? Purchase either a house or a business? TOEFL
Writing Feedbackstudent12345 - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL: Television has more bad than good in respect of bonds with family and friends
2 - What are these indirect experiences? Better specify. Good introduction! Thus,Therefore they cannot make appointment or go out with...
Writing Feedbackgospellover - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS General Writing task 1; Letter to John - making arrangements
2 - You are writing to a relative, a known party, and therefore you should show more intimacy in your...
Writing Feedbackirfanafsar - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Participating in games teaches many lessons for life
Writing FeedbackJamieK - Apr 11, 2013 / JamieK - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS-Wealthy nations have an obligation to provide food and education to the poorer?
4 - This should be your introductory paragraph. Don't leave the first line separate. Well ... why you...
Writing FeedbackAntonR - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL:Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
Writing Feedbackxuyue - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|GRE argument: Super Screen Movie Production Company
3 - ... Your prompt does not tell that the production of Super Screen movies had been lowered. As I...
Writing Feedbackhjq1990 - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 18, 2013
|IETLS; Social media and its impact on my life
3 - .... it is not clear what you mean by "work and societal outcomes".... you better specify that. ...
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 14, 2013
|You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program
NEW - You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of...
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|IELTS; Letter to the course lecturer informing my inability to continue the course
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 11, 2013 / Dreamer84 - Apr 12, 2013
|Co-ed education versus single sex education; Which is better?
Writing Feedbackxu yu cheng - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 16, 2013
|Do you agree that the internet has transformed lives and economies?
Writing Feedbackmaruko_a2609 - Apr 11, 2013 / maruko_a2609 - Apr 22, 2013
|Do you prefer traditional house or live in apartment?
4 - ... this is not a very catchy sentence to open an essay. The sentence would be more effective...
Writing Feedbacksaeed_s_1368 - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Everyone has the right to education irrespective of gender difference
2 - Hi You should include your prompt in your post so that others can give you more relevant feed backs....
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL: What do you want for your major? Specific reasons & Examples
Writing Feedbackgospellover - Apr 11, 2013 / gospellover - Apr 11, 2013
|The advertising and the need of society, IELTS
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 10, 2013 / homsai - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL IBT: Why people want to move to big cities to settle down?
Writing Feedbackluonghao - Apr 10, 2013 / luonghao - Mar 25, 2014
|Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison; Compare & Contrast
2 - Science and technology has contributed immensely to the development of human society. Well.... you are to compare...
Writing Feedbacksushiking - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/agree) spend money as you earn it or not
3 - Well.... It's better you introduce your topic first and then slowly let it flow to the point of expressing...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL; Different cloths get people to behave differently. Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 10, 2013 / student12345 - Apr 11, 2013
|FACE TO FACE COMMUNICATION is a better way to communicate
Writing Feedbackningo - Apr 10, 2013 / ningo - Apr 19, 2013
|Mr. Heng taught me the value of HARDWORKING; My favorite TEACHER
Writing Feedbackpohui88 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places.
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|TOEFL IBT; E-mail or Voice mail Versus Telephone or face to face
3 - Thank you so much Dumi! xD I will remember to link my sentences better next time :X You're greatest...
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Apr 9, 2013 / JangGemini - Apr 9, 2013
|Single world culture; TOEFL; the same internet, television programs and language
5 - ... this sentence does not flow well...It's a bit too long as well. In the introduction you need...
Writing Feedbackstudent12345 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|IELTS;Children are under increasing educational, social, and financial stress
5 - In the modern society, the children undergo sever stress due to study pressure together with social and financial...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL ; Businesses should only concentrate on profit making!
2 - hi aria, corrections from my side. I am providing a line by line correction so that the grammatical errors...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|Comparison of three hostels in Sydney
6 - .... since you started with "although" you cannot have "but" Although Central YHA charges the highest,...
Writing Feedbackproabc123 - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 16, 2013
|"Success is harder to accept than Failure"
Writing Feedbackacepoh - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL; Pros & cons of having presence of a large factory near our community
Writing Feedbacklpsk - Apr 8, 2013 / aria8111 - Apr 8, 2013
|Art, music, and drama should be a part of curriculum
6 - ... people had different psychologies right from the beginning of evolution. So let's say this a bit differently;...
Writing FeedbackMonikamirka - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|The most of high-school studients haven't planned their career when they graduate
4 - Well.... follow the four para structure; Introduction, 2 body paras and Conclusion. Introduction - Introduce the topic +...
Writing FeedbackTsegi - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|Ielst Task 1; Describe a bar chart on trends of International and UK students
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL; School should purchase Books or Computers for the library?
3 - ... you begin with expressing your opinion. I prefer if you introduced your prompt to the reader before...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|Computers usage at school-level studies for children (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Apr 8, 2013 / Redtape - Apr 14, 2013
|Are we always doing things that we enjoy? IELTS
8 - Hi georgege . a copy of Wren and Martin and start practicing your grammar. copy from whom...?????? any way...
Writing Feedbackgyal - Apr 8, 2013 / gyal - Apr 9, 2013
|LIFE IN A CITY IS MUCH BETTER THAN LIFE IN THE COUNTRYSIDE/ TOEFL ESSAY
3 - To begin with, as far as i'm known that if you use "firstly", the next paragraph, you should follow...
Writing Feedbackkretoszczur - Apr 7, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS; Try new things or repeat things we know?
Writing Feedbacknorza - Apr 7, 2013 / homsai - Apr 9, 2013
|Skills from work placement essay; Section of a logbook
3 - can someone help me write these sentences more fluently When I first started placement last month, I feel...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|EVENT MANAGEMENT SKILLS ; LOGBOOK Entries from work placement
5 - .... by changing the order a little bit, you can improve clarity; During the last month I was...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|What are the main threats to public health?
2 - First, it's good to include your prompt in the post. I guess your prompt is what the subject mentions....
Writing Feedbackalisayfoo - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|'bigger market'; Live in small town or live in a big city? ; IELTS
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 7, 2013
|Fathers influence BOYs and Mothers influence GIRLs ; IELTS
3 - ...."affect" is not the most appropriate word here. As per your topic, the ideal word to use here...
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Internet is turning the world into a global village
5 - No.... it does not look too long. However, the most important thing is that you should be able...
Writing Feedbackbluewings1007 - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|TOEFL:(Dis/agree) Most difficult experiences will become valuable lessons
3 - Hi able Person, hi Dumi. I also have some suggestions Firstly, hardships make us understand profoundly many...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 6, 2013
|Persuasive Essay; Aboriginal children adopted into non-Aboriginal home
Writing FeedbackKateybaby - Apr 5, 2013 / Kateybaby - Apr 7, 2013
|Many cities have become less pleasant place to live/ Problem & my suggestions
2 - ... this sentence sounds meaningless... what do you really mean? Your idea is not conveyed properly ...
Writing FeedbackMadina S - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|TOEFL: If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire?
3 - Thank you, dumi, for helping me complete my introductory part! I must carelessly delete some part of my first...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 5, 2013 / able_Person - Apr 6, 2013
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