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|IETLS; Social media and its impact on my life
3 - .... it is not clear what you mean by "work and societal outcomes".... you better specify that. ...
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 14, 2013
|You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program
NEW - You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of...
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|IELTS; Letter to the course lecturer informing my inability to continue the course
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 11, 2013 / Dreamer84 - Apr 12, 2013
|Co-ed education versus single sex education; Which is better?
Writing Feedbackxu yu cheng - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 16, 2013
|Do you agree that the internet has transformed lives and economies?
Writing Feedbackmaruko_a2609 - Apr 11, 2013 / maruko_a2609 - Apr 22, 2013
|Do you prefer traditional house or live in apartment?
4 - ... this is not a very catchy sentence to open an essay. The sentence would be more effective...
Writing Feedbacksaeed_s_1368 - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Everyone has the right to education irrespective of gender difference
2 - Hi You should include your prompt in your post so that others can give you more relevant feed backs....
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL: What do you want for your major? Specific reasons & Examples
Writing Feedbackgospellover - Apr 11, 2013 / gospellover - Apr 11, 2013
|The advertising and the need of society, IELTS
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 10, 2013 / homsai - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL IBT: Why people want to move to big cities to settle down?
Writing Feedbackluonghao - Apr 10, 2013 / luonghao - Mar 25, 2014
|Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison; Compare & Contrast
2 - Science and technology has contributed immensely to the development of human society. Well.... you are to compare...
Writing Feedbacksushiking - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/agree) spend money as you earn it or not
3 - Well.... It's better you introduce your topic first and then slowly let it flow to the point of expressing...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL; Different cloths get people to behave differently. Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 10, 2013 / student12345 - Apr 11, 2013
|FACE TO FACE COMMUNICATION is a better way to communicate
Writing Feedbackningo - Apr 10, 2013 / ningo - Apr 19, 2013
|Mr. Heng taught me the value of HARDWORKING; My favorite TEACHER
Writing Feedbackpohui88 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places.
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|TOEFL IBT; E-mail or Voice mail Versus Telephone or face to face
3 - Thank you so much Dumi! xD I will remember to link my sentences better next time :X You're greatest...
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Apr 9, 2013 / JangGemini - Apr 9, 2013
|Single world culture; TOEFL; the same internet, television programs and language
5 - ... this sentence does not flow well...It's a bit too long as well. In the introduction you need...
Writing Feedbackstudent12345 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|IELTS;Children are under increasing educational, social, and financial stress
5 - In the modern society, the children undergo sever stress due to study pressure together with social and financial...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL ; Businesses should only concentrate on profit making!
2 - hi aria, corrections from my side. I am providing a line by line correction so that the grammatical errors...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|Comparison of three hostels in Sydney
6 - .... since you started with "although" you cannot have "but" Although Central YHA charges the highest,...
Writing Feedbackproabc123 - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 16, 2013
|"Success is harder to accept than Failure"
Writing Feedbackacepoh - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL; Pros & cons of having presence of a large factory near our community
Writing Feedbacklpsk - Apr 8, 2013 / aria8111 - Apr 8, 2013
|Art, music, and drama should be a part of curriculum
6 - ... people had different psychologies right from the beginning of evolution. So let's say this a bit differently;...
Writing FeedbackMonikamirka - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|The most of high-school studients haven't planned their career when they graduate
4 - Well.... follow the four para structure; Introduction, 2 body paras and Conclusion. Introduction - Introduce the topic +...
Writing FeedbackTsegi - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|Ielst Task 1; Describe a bar chart on trends of International and UK students
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL; School should purchase Books or Computers for the library?
3 - ... you begin with expressing your opinion. I prefer if you introduced your prompt to the reader before...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|Computers usage at school-level studies for children (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Apr 8, 2013 / Redtape - Apr 14, 2013
|Are we always doing things that we enjoy? IELTS
8 - Hi georgege . a copy of Wren and Martin and start practicing your grammar. copy from whom...?????? any way...
Writing Feedbackgyal - Apr 8, 2013 / gyal - Apr 9, 2013
|LIFE IN A CITY IS MUCH BETTER THAN LIFE IN THE COUNTRYSIDE/ TOEFL ESSAY
3 - To begin with, as far as i'm known that if you use "firstly", the next paragraph, you should follow...
Writing Feedbackkretoszczur - Apr 7, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS; Try new things or repeat things we know?
Writing Feedbacknorza - Apr 7, 2013 / homsai - Apr 9, 2013
|Skills from work placement essay; Section of a logbook
3 - can someone help me write these sentences more fluently When I first started placement last month, I feel...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|EVENT MANAGEMENT SKILLS ; LOGBOOK Entries from work placement
5 - .... by changing the order a little bit, you can improve clarity; During the last month I was...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|What are the main threats to public health?
2 - First, it's good to include your prompt in the post. I guess your prompt is what the subject mentions....
Writing Feedbackalisayfoo - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|'bigger market'; Live in small town or live in a big city? ; IELTS
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 7, 2013
|Fathers influence BOYs and Mothers influence GIRLs ; IELTS
3 - ...."affect" is not the most appropriate word here. As per your topic, the ideal word to use here...
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Internet is turning the world into a global village
5 - No.... it does not look too long. However, the most important thing is that you should be able...
Writing Feedbackbluewings1007 - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|TOEFL:(Dis/agree) Most difficult experiences will become valuable lessons
3 - Hi able Person, hi Dumi. I also have some suggestions Firstly, hardships make us understand profoundly many...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 6, 2013
|Persuasive Essay; Aboriginal children adopted into non-Aboriginal home
Writing FeedbackKateybaby - Apr 5, 2013 / Kateybaby - Apr 7, 2013
|Many cities have become less pleasant place to live/ Problem & my suggestions
2 - ... this sentence sounds meaningless... what do you really mean? Your idea is not conveyed properly ...
Writing FeedbackMadina S - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|TOEFL: If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire?
3 - Thank you, dumi, for helping me complete my introductory part! I must carelessly delete some part of my first...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 5, 2013 / able_Person - Apr 6, 2013
|"Only once one has known real sadness can one feel true happiness"
3 - I firmly believe that without having experienced true sadness, one would not really feel what true happiness is....
Writing Feedbackparthasarathy17 - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL WRITING: Why going to university or college
5 - Homescholling In this set of materials, the reading passage describes several disadvantages of homeschooling. The listening passage challenges it...
Writing Feedbackcandy2571 - Apr 5, 2013 / ahmadpashaei - Apr 8, 2013
|IELTS; Why do people work? Reasons/ Examples
Writing Feedbacknorza - Apr 5, 2013 / norza - Apr 6, 2013
|The Traffic Jam In Egypt; Rubbish and Traffic issues
Writing FeedbackMohamed8898 - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Technological innovation is important / Reason
3 - These inventions have significantly contributed to better the living standards of people worldwide. For me,...
Writing Feedbackmadalyalim - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/Agree) Establish a research center for agriculture in your country or not
2 - Good introduction. Only this line, I find needing a bit of improvement; ... you have repetitions there;...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 4, 2013
|IELTS:Government should pay for the medical care
2 - Hi there After reviewing your essay, i like to advise you that, while you are writing agree or...
Writing Feedbackdoris_bobo - Apr 4, 2013 / davesh82 - Apr 4, 2013
|What should children do during their leisure time?
3 - Dear Xiaokai, thank you for your feedback. I agree that my last paragraph should have been more profound. thanks...
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 4, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 5, 2013
|TOEFL; Keep your old friends or form new friends?
Writing Feedbackshack555 - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 9, 2013
|IELTS: Using a computer everyday may affect children negatively
4 - ...develop skills for using computers and their applications. .... very good point. This early and over...
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 9, 2013
|Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support
Writing Feedbacksntchaitu - Apr 3, 2013 / davesh82 - Apr 3, 2013
|Focusing on sports facilities is a very narrow approach and would not achieve the desired results.
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Apr 3, 2013 / davesh82 - Apr 3, 2013
|Young adults should learn to become financially responsibleSECU
4 - High speed transactions and extremely easy/efficient mediums of transaction are acceptable and available everywhere nowadays high speed transactions...
Writing FeedbackLarryHoover - Apr 3, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|Writing IELTS : In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places
Writing Feedbackakbarrrr5 - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|Media has a significant influence on our lives; IELTS
Writing Feedbacklunaa55 - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|TOEFL: We will face a beautiful and peaceful life if we treated each other politely
2 - .... good start :) There is a saying in Arabic, "Good manners mean everything about people. If they...
Writing Feedbackmuhannadmatahen - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|Event Management work experience essay/ Skills I have developed and learned
2 - On my first day in work placement, I attended the meeting which briefed us about the upcoming event...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|IELTS- My opinion on having children engaged in paid work
Writing FeedbackAnnateee - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|Discuss the question of death penalty in general- IETLS
7 - I always search new phrasal Verb or Noun on Oxfordictionary site. And i came across the explaination of...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Apr 3, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 7, 2013
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