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|Globalisation of trade is beneficial to the economicaly backward countries
3 - .... this is what I suggest; Advancement in technology brought the world together. This globalization has taken place...
Writing Feedbackxyzwithashok - May 13, 2013 / dumi - May 16, 2013
|IELTS: Modern eating habits and lifestyle has had negative effects on children.
3 - Secondly, the modern life-styles too have their own negative effects on children's health and growth. ...very...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 13, 2013 / dumi - May 18, 2013
|IELTS: Some workers are allowed to work at home - Positive or Negative?
2 - .... use words instead of numbers in your essays. Today, many companies allow their workers to work from...
Writing Feedbackmaruko_a2609 - May 13, 2013 / Pahan - May 13, 2013
|increasing weight against declining health.
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 13, 2013 / xucoi - May 14, 2013
|CLEP College composition essay "How computers changed the way we work ...
Writing Feedbackprowd - May 12, 2013 / dumi - May 17, 2013
|Describe a person from your past you would like to see again, and explain why
2 - ... Well... I feel you have not introduced your friend enough in this paragraph. Tell the reader about...
Writing FeedbackEffe - May 12, 2013 / dumi - May 12, 2013
|IELTS : Why do you think people attend School or University. Give some reasons.
4 - First, every university offers courses that are designed to equip students with necessary skills and knowledge for their...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 12, 2013 / Pahan - May 13, 2013
|Is Hong Kong a great place?
Writing FeedbackFiorella Li - May 11, 2013 / — -
|TOEFL; The 21st century has begun.What change do you think?
2 - ... For this TOEFL task, you need to first introduce the topic to the reader. This should not...
Writing FeedbackDhan - May 11, 2013 / dumi - May 11, 2013
|IELTS WRITING : students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teacher
5 - I would like to add some points to what dummi mentioned. I think the main reason why you cannot...
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 11, 2013 / ah_zafari - May 16, 2013
|Should voluntary community service be compulsory?
Writing FeedbackBessinger - May 11, 2013 / Bessinger - May 12, 2013
|mother tongue threat; its better that children begin to learn a foreign language
Writing FeedbackBessinger - May 11, 2013 / Bessinger - May 13, 2013
|Biography Writing about Geoffrey Rush
Writing FeedbackMuath1987 - May 11, 2013 / Muath1987 - May 18, 2013
|IELTS; How Television impact on cultural development?
Writing Feedbackvalency - May 11, 2013 / dumi - May 11, 2013
|IETLS;What are the causes & solutions for decreasing quality of life in large cities?
2 - Hi, First, I request you to post your IELTS essays under "Writing Feedback" forum. You need to select it...
Writing Feedbackvalency - May 11, 2013 / dumi - May 11, 2013
|IELTS WRITING :What is importance of new types of media ?
3 - My IELTS teacher instructs me to probe deeper and furthur with 2 to sentences at the end of the...
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 11, 2013 / stine yip - May 13, 2013
|IELTS, The radio service disappear in few years.
2 - ... good introduction :) Admittedly, many people have abandoned radio as a source of entertainment due...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - May 10, 2013 / dumi - May 10, 2013
|Formal examinations are the best way to assess students' performance?
NEW - IELTS:- Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as course work,...
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 10, 2013 / — -
|IELTS. Can men and women perform the same jobs?
Writing Feedbacknada english - May 10, 2013 / sharmajali - May 13, 2013
|TOEFL Integrated task; Garlic has beneficial properties
2 - Since I wasn't there for the reading passage and lecture, I won't comment on the accuracy and completeness of...
Writing Feedbackedo walhalla - May 9, 2013 / BachChaconne2 - May 9, 2013
|IELTS: Children spend long time studying in school. What are the effects?
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - May 8, 2013 / xucoi - May 17, 2013
|IELTS; Should players be payed highly or not?
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 8, 2013 / dumi - May 14, 2013
|IELTS ; Convenience food eventually replace traditional foods? No
4 - .... good introduction! However, in my view, traditional food will continue to be preferred by many people who...
Writing Feedbackihedgehog - May 8, 2013 / dumi - May 15, 2013
|Nature and nurture both have influences on early human development
2 - I am little confused here, i think they want to discuss about the effect of nature (environment) on human...
Writing Feedbackkinging123 - May 8, 2013 / sharmajali - May 10, 2013
|How Television impact communication among friends and family?
Writing FeedbackDhan - May 8, 2013 / ningo - May 8, 2013
|CANADIAN History: Defining Moment on D-Day in WW2.
2 - The strategic planners in the military had assigned a major task to Canada; to take control over "Juno"...
Writing Feedbackashleepreiss - May 8, 2013 / dumi - May 14, 2013
|Problems created by widespread use of the Internet
3 - ... this line sounds too crowded with too many key words. It is pretty lengthy too ... Clarity...
Writing Feedbackvspherei - May 8, 2013 / dumi - May 8, 2013
|Men vs women are not equally suited for many tasks
Writing Feedbackmaheshbabu - May 8, 2013 / shaddy - May 15, 2013
|Advantage and disadvantage of 3D printing technology(argumentative, research essay)
Writing FeedbackSnowWolf - May 8, 2013 / dumi - May 15, 2013
|Why should we prefer English language over other language?
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 8, 2013 / sharmajali - May 10, 2013
|It's a good idea to allow students take a long break in order to work or travel
Writing Feedbackhomsai - May 8, 2013 / Muath1987 - May 20, 2013
|IELTS, Education at home VS formal education - Which is better?
4 - You need to be careful about time management. This task you need to perform within a limited time...
Writing Feedbacknada english - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 15, 2013
|Assignment:Euthanasia should be legalized for a number of reasons.What's your opinion
3 - Thanks for your advice! Can you give me the other expressions for words and phrases which you think are...
Writing Feedbackningo - May 7, 2013 / ningo - May 8, 2013
|TOEFL ; DIFFICULTIES of learning a NEW LANGUAGE
8 - ....there are lots of difficulties .... Your introduction sounds better without this because this should reflect...
Writing FeedbackLAB 328 - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 15, 2013
|Why Smoking should be Illegal? Opening paragraph
Writing Feedbackhannabanana - May 7, 2013 / shaddy - May 15, 2013
|Toefl - Classmates are more influential than parents on a child's success in school
Writing FeedbackCamilaTobar95 - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 15, 2013
|TOEFL - People are now able to overcome long distances in a short amount of time
3 - First, people are now able to travel very long distances within short time and this has brought in...
Writing FeedbackRedFire - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 7, 2013
|'my grandfather has diabetes' Young people enjoy more than older people?
Writing FeedbackVinusha - May 7, 2013 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 13, 2015
|IELTS; Advantages and disadvantages of students working or travelling during gap year
Writing FeedbackNazma - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 13, 2013
|IELTS- Using gap year for travel or working is good or bad?
7 - .... not grammatically incorrect. However, it sounds a bit crowded with too many words; Nowadays, the gap year...
Writing Feedbackbomiyo - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 10, 2013
|TOEFL Essay: "Haste makes waste" do you agree with the statement or not ?
Writing FeedbackLAB 328 - May 7, 2013 / LAB 328 - May 7, 2013
|Should voluntary plastic surgery be banned?
Writing FeedbackRichardshu - May 7, 2013 / Richardshu - May 9, 2013
|IELTS, Children should receive formal education from four years
Writing Feedbackhomsai - May 7, 2013 / dumi - May 7, 2013
|Some people think change is good, other not. Explain both points.
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 7, 2013 / sharmajali - May 8, 2013
|TOEFL:Economic growth Vs Environmental Concerns - Which is more important for a Gvt?
3 - 1. capital letters after full stop. 2. some people even government officials - it should be either one of...
Writing FeedbackFlora1991 - May 6, 2013 / sharmajali - May 7, 2013
|Is life better when lived in a small town?
Writing Feedbackamcdaniel - May 6, 2013 / dumi - May 7, 2013
|IELTS Task 1; alteration in types of travel in England from 1985 to 2000
NEW - topic : The Table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000....
Writing Feedbackboooza - May 6, 2013 / — -
|Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communites.TOEFL ESSAY
Writing Feedbacktynguyen - May 6, 2013 / malhamed - May 15, 2013
|TOEFL - NEIGHBORS DEPEND ON EACH OTHER LESS TODAY
3 - You can write well. It is only you don't follow a good essay structure. Dumi has given you the...
Writing Feedbackpulp - May 6, 2013 / Pahan - May 14, 2013
|TOEFL; Should we be completely honest with the friends?
6 - Well .... post this essay again in the same thread with each sentence starting with a capital letter. That's...
Writing FeedbackFlora1991 - May 6, 2013 / dumi - May 7, 2013
|Narrate how did you overcome the challenges to achieve your goal(s) in life
6 - I appreciate your revision. You have changed it more concise. Would it be more appropriate if I am...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - May 6, 2013 / niesaysi - May 20, 2013
|TOEFL; A person's job's has more effects on his happiness
Writing Feedbackpulp - May 6, 2013 / carolyn - May 19, 2013
|Model Minority vindicating the American dream
NEW - The topic I am discussing is this: "...[D]iscuss the manner in which the model minority stereotype "vindicates the American...
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|My first story: Waking up in the Darkness
Writing Feedbackdgc90 - May 5, 2013 / dgc90 - May 5, 2013
|IELTS WRITING: the population is a mix of people from different cultures and ethic
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 5, 2013 / sharmajali - May 8, 2013
|TOEFL: Living with families for a longer time
6 - 1.Well structure essay, with a introduction, body and conclusion. 2. But some where i found you repetitive, which you...
Writing FeedbackGodiva - May 5, 2013 / sharmajali - May 8, 2013
|IELTS WRITING :Countries are becoming similar, what are causes, and effects ?
6 - products as KFC,Ford, which (are able to find) in most contries like American,England,China and so on I think...
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 4, 2013 / nada english - May 7, 2013
|IELTS:Should the government spend money on poor population or hi-tech research?
4 - I think you could make the begining of eassy better. Something like " whether should the money be spent...
Writing Feedbackveronicafy - May 4, 2013 / Godiva - May 5, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2:Whether without satisfying career, the life is meaningless?
4 - Thank you!!!!!!! To varonicafy: I'll look for the charity career and self-affirmation. And, good luck! Your IELTS~ :D To...
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - May 4, 2013 / eileenalien - May 6, 2013
|Child labor - Advantages vs disadvantages
2 - In the first sentence, you said:" The employment, in recent years, has been changing and becoming more sensitive". In...
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