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|Share the Dorm or Choose my own Roommate
5 - You seem to have a fair understanding about the essay structure. However, you need to include specific examples in...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 22, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Reliance on Technology to solve problem will deteriorate humans ability to think
4 - ... exactly :) .... this is a well written introduction... The only point I notice is that you...
Writing Feedbackmavericksid - May 22, 2013 / Pahan - May 25, 2013
|IELTS: The development of a coastal village
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - May 21, 2013 / Helio - May 24, 2013
|TOEFL :Which do u prefer living in an apartment or living in a dorm?
Writing FeedbackMax Payne - May 21, 2013 / LAB 328 - May 22, 2013
|"Made in China"; Fake products produced in China
Writing FeedbackFiorella Li - May 21, 2013 / Habib Rastegar - May 21, 2013
|IELTS; In our society child's education have never been a simple task
9 - never need comma Some people argue that, children should be taught to be avaluevaluablemembemembers in their...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - May 21, 2013 / Habib Rastegar - May 27, 2013
|How does rapid economic development affect a country?
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - May 21, 2013 / MisterWandering - May 22, 2013
|Marriage older is more advantageous than marrying at young age!
Writing Feedbacktruongnhunhan - May 21, 2013 / dumi - May 22, 2013
|Which is more advantages? Marrying young or older?
2 - .... is that so? I thought people now tend to postpone marriage compared to older generations. ...
Writing Feedbacktruongnhunhan - May 21, 2013 / Pahan - May 21, 2013
|IELTS; How to reduce traffic in cities? Should it be by reducing the need for travel?
4 - This is much better than what you've written first. I'm sure Pahan too would agree. However, even this...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - May 21, 2013 / dumi - May 21, 2013
|University education is necessary for success in today's world. Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacktruongnhunhan - May 21, 2013 / chrisredfii - Jun 13, 2013
|Which one do you prefer? A student-based class or a lectured-based class.
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 21, 2013 / Habib Rastegar - May 21, 2013
|IELTS :Creativity needs freedom and so do the creative artists; Do you agree?
2 - ... In this sentence, I don't find any relevance to your topic. That's a bit dangerous because everything...
Writing FeedbackSecilia - May 21, 2013 / dumi - May 21, 2013
|Why do crime rates increase? How to arrest this issue?
Writing Feedbackartlife - May 21, 2013 / Pahan - May 22, 2013
|IELTS, the reasons for increasing rubbish, and provide the measures for governments.
Writing Feedbackhomsai - May 21, 2013 / April April - May 27, 2013
|The advantages and disadvantages of study in other country
Writing Feedbackanup80 - May 21, 2013 / dumi - May 21, 2013
|Increasing price of petrol would not help controlling traffic
Writing FeedbackRavLlika - May 20, 2013 / dumi - May 21, 2013
|In my opinion, daily homework is necessary; Reasons & Examples
Writing FeedbackSapodils - May 20, 2013 / Sapodils - May 21, 2013
|What Should People Do To Become Healthier?
Writing FeedbackMuath1987 - May 20, 2013 / Muath1987 - May 20, 2013
|'less stress'; Games are as important for adults as they are for children.
Writing Feedbackgp2013 - May 20, 2013 / dumi - May 20, 2013
|A person's passion and dream cannot be bought by money
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|IELTS; Students from rural areas find difficult to receive higher education
Writing FeedbackNancy Quan - May 19, 2013 / Habib Rastegar - May 22, 2013
|Teacher should relate well with students than having an excellent knowledge.
5 - Put away the thesaurus and rewrite this using words you already know (no matter how simple). Then I'll be...
Writing Feedbackjunisha rai - May 19, 2013 / jkjeremy - May 24, 2013
|Some say that the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together
3 - ....when you say "communication gap" it has a much broader meaning than talking about communication between people. Here...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - May 19, 2013 / dumi - May 24, 2013
|IETLTS; High School programs should include Community Service as a compulsory part
2 - I would argue that it should be made compulsory due to several reasons. First, community service...
Writing Feedbackmaruko_a2609 - May 19, 2013 / dumi - May 19, 2013
|IELTS Task1; percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000
3 - This adds no value. You'd better present this Writing task 1with more formal tone. Avoid personal opinions...
Writing Feedbackrushil1995 - May 19, 2013 / eddies - May 21, 2014
|The most important traits required to achieve mastery.
Writing Feedbackpattrycja - May 19, 2013 / dumi - May 19, 2013
|TOEFL : which on do you prefer? serious movies or amusing movies
Writing FeedbackS0heil - May 19, 2013 / S0heil - May 20, 2013
|IELTS; Changing jobs and living places - Good or Bad?
5 - Well.... your prompt does not ask for reasons for changing jobs...it asks you whether it's a positive or negative...
Writing FeedbackNancy Quan - May 19, 2013 / dumi - May 20, 2013
|IELTS ; My opinion on using fertilizer and machinery for producing food
Writing FeedbackNancy Quan - May 18, 2013 / Nancy Quan - May 19, 2013
|Report on the likely effects of Global warming on the capital city of my country
Writing Feedbackxucoi - May 18, 2013 / xucoi - May 26, 2013
|Life itself is a big recipe- COURAGE; Concept Essay/ Grand Canyon U
Writing FeedbackJeremyofAL - May 18, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 25, 2013
|BARCELONA BEACH (Lake Erie) - observation essay
2 - sanchez On this warm spring day I have decided to visit the beach though the season is not quite...
Writing Feedbacksanchez - May 18, 2013 / JeremyofAL - May 18, 2013
|"Pain is not a pleasant feeling" ; Analyzing the concept "PAIN"
6 - Mt thoughts here were breaking down the essay into first physical pain followed by emotional pain and then going...
Writing Feedbackcarolyn - May 18, 2013 / carolyn - May 19, 2013
|TOEFL;If I am to change something in my hometown,it is to provide more bicycle roads
4 - I would focus on sentence structure. This will help in the flow of your paper. It will help the...
Writing Feedbackflooppy - May 18, 2013 / carolyn - May 19, 2013
|IELTS; Certain professionals are not paid well for their services; Do you agree?
2 - .... this has happened and still continue to happen. So write it in present tense; It is true...
Writing Feedbackerni - May 18, 2013 / Pahan - Jun 16, 2013
|Cracking Down The Laws of Bullying by Pandora Campbell
Writing FeedbackPandora0510 - May 18, 2013 / Pandora0510 - May 27, 2013
|With the assistance of technology, students will learn faster and assimilate more knowledge.
3 - To encapsulate, helping students access necessary information easier than before, and also, many electronic community forums for students...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - May 17, 2013 / S0heil - May 19, 2013
|'private issues, lose feeling and painful exercises' - being a celebrity brings lot of problems
3 - In the first place, they lack privacy because they are famous. Not only them, even their family members...
Writing FeedbackPeterInKingston - May 17, 2013 / Pahan - May 19, 2013
|The same curriculum for all students? disadvantages overweight advantages
2 - Different educational institutions should be allowed to follow diversified directions as long as they share the same goal...
Writing FeedbackDan0912 - May 17, 2013 / Pahan - May 17, 2013
|TOEFL ;Reasons for attending college- Increasing knowledge &preparing for career
8 - Nowadays, with the development of the world, more and more people attend colleges or universities instead of seeking for...
Writing Feedbackvietanhnqbk - May 16, 2013 / kntran1010 - May 17, 2013
|I strongly disagree that money is the most important aspect of a job !
3 - Thanks dumi, I really appreciate your help. honestly, I wanted not to use the word "job" over and...
Writing FeedbackS0heil - May 16, 2013 / S0heil - May 16, 2013
|GPS is small device but there is a big process behind it; How the GPS works
Writing FeedbackFaraj_696 - May 15, 2013 / dumi - May 16, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: UK Acid rain emissions (GRAPH)
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 15, 2013 / dumi - May 16, 2013
|IELTS---Small town-center shops are running out of business because of ...
NEW - Small town-center shops are running out of business because of an increasing number of large out-of-town stores. To what...
Writing FeedbackGretaoto - May 15, 2013 / — -
|Imagine that you have recived some land to use as you wish; What would you do?
4 - Maybe you can try to explore as many factor as possible, home, farm, playgrounds, shopping centre, small societies since...
Writing FeedbackCilos - May 15, 2013 / MiSsiNg - May 17, 2013
|IELTS : Reason of being overweight in children is due to fast food outlets or parents
4 - Thanks guys for the corrections \ suggestions. I was busy with some stuff so couldn't come here earlier....
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 15, 2013 / shaddy - May 27, 2013
|How to select your career ? Status/ Salary or Satisfaction?
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - May 15, 2013 / S0heil - May 17, 2013
|IELTS - COMPARISON of three types of media (advantages & disadvantages)
2 - ... you gain knowledge and gather information. The last part sounds a bit too exaggerated and also...
Writing Feedbackstine yip - May 13, 2013 / dumi - May 14, 2013
|Criticism of Modern Primary Education System
Writing FeedbackTneufy11 - May 13, 2013 / Pahan - May 22, 2013
|Globalisation of trade is beneficial to the economicaly backward countries
3 - .... this is what I suggest; Advancement in technology brought the world together. This globalization has taken place...
Writing Feedbackxyzwithashok - May 13, 2013 / dumi - May 16, 2013
|IELTS: Modern eating habits and lifestyle has had negative effects on children.
3 - Secondly, the modern life-styles too have their own negative effects on children's health and growth. ...very...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 13, 2013 / dumi - May 18, 2013
|IELTS: Some workers are allowed to work at home - Positive or Negative?
2 - .... use words instead of numbers in your essays. Today, many companies allow their workers to work from...
Writing Feedbackmaruko_a2609 - May 13, 2013 / Pahan - May 13, 2013
|increasing weight against declining health.
Writing Feedbacksharmajali - May 13, 2013 / xucoi - May 14, 2013
|CLEP College composition essay "How computers changed the way we work ...
Writing Feedbackprowd - May 12, 2013 / dumi - May 17, 2013
|Describe a person from your past you would like to see again, and explain why
2 - ... Well... I feel you have not introduced your friend enough in this paragraph. Tell the reader about...
Writing FeedbackEffe - May 12, 2013 / dumi - May 12, 2013
|IELTS : Why do you think people attend School or University. Give some reasons.
4 - First, every university offers courses that are designed to equip students with necessary skills and knowledge for their...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 12, 2013 / Pahan - May 13, 2013
|Is Hong Kong a great place?
Writing FeedbackFiorella Li - May 11, 2013 / — -
|TOEFL; The 21st century has begun.What change do you think?
2 - ... For this TOEFL task, you need to first introduce the topic to the reader. This should not...
Writing FeedbackDhan - May 11, 2013 / dumi - May 11, 2013
|IELTS WRITING : students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teacher
5 - I would like to add some points to what dummi mentioned. I think the main reason why you cannot...
Writing Feedbackhahong - May 11, 2013 / ah_zafari - May 16, 2013
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