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|My tears were overflowing; Like the Wind, Like God
Writing Feedbackpenparker - Sep 2, 2013 / chessman567 - Sep 2, 2013
|The proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia
3 - It's good to have your diagram here. Why not upload it? The structure I would follow is that; 1....
Writing FeedbackAmritpal Singh - Sep 2, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|[IELTS] Inner Four Planets of the Solar System
Writing Feedbackalicanunlu - Sep 2, 2013 / alicanunlu - Sep 3, 2013
|technology and its impact, ability of humans to think for themselves will deteriorate
Writing FeedbackfaraNY - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS TASK1:Letter to complain about neighbor
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS 2: Too much exercise is bad for one's health
Writing FeedbackPlank - Sep 2, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 3, 2013
|In some countries, traditional food is being replaced by international fast food.
Writing FeedbackOliviaZeng - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE Analytical: 'fields of study'; everybody has the right to decide for himself
Writing Feedbacksistan - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Benefits of Micro-lending. GRE Analyze an argument, Feel free to comment
4 - I am preparing for toelf and GRE simultaneously too. my gre exam is on 29th september and my GRE...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 1, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 12, 2013
|IELTS-In many countries there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.
Writing Feedbackpuman - Sep 1, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|Shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people.
4 - You need to present this idea better. This is what I suggest; Nowadays many people do shopping as...
Writing Feedbackssv_1368 - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Illegal immigrants return after deportation with reasonable explanations
2 - good job!...
Writing FeedbackLucynore - Aug 31, 2013 / pijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013
|Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some mea
Writing Feedbackprixie - Aug 31, 2013 / ShowMeHow - Aug 31, 2013
|Trying new things and taking risks means to succeed
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 31, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 31, 2013
|Toefl; CITY OR COUNTRY? Which place is more appealing for living?
6 - .... farming includes growing crops and raising livestock (e.g. cattle, chicken etc.) Actually, the reason here...
Writing Feedbacksr005307 - Aug 31, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|GRE: past achievement within a field may consequently lead to more success
3 - Good introduction. The part I highlighted is the only section that is not delivered very clearly. I feel...
Writing Feedbackmirandalau - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Reasons for overweight children in developed countries...
4 - .... you mentionedthis is an issue in developed countries, so the latter part sounds redundant. I ...
Writing FeedbackLorachan - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and develop
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[TOEFL] Whether it is better to have broad knowledge or not
2 - ... I find this is not adding much value to your introduction. Finish it with stating your position....
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[GRE argument task] A newsletter offers advice to invest to a new venture
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 26, 2013
|[GRE Issue task] Sports stars & movie stars have obligation to behave as roll models
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] the portrait of Jane Austen; Integrated Writing
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS 1: A letter to the shop manager - 'it is broken'
11 - Have a separate paragraph for your introduction in which you introduce yourself and introduce your problem.This is what...
Writing Feedbackherzchen85 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 5, 2013
|Artists contributions to society - Music, painting, dancing - make life colorful
3 - This is well written, but a fairly lengthy introduction. If you are preparing for TOEFL or IELTS, this is...
Writing Feedbackfannasster - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Challenges are different from generation to generation
6 - Well, you've already done it in the introduction; This is it and that's fine. I just suggested...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|[GRE Issue] The ability to think will deteriorate as people rely more on technology
NEW - This is my first time post a thread in essayforum.com :). There's a month for the test so I...
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|IELTS-technology will completely teacher in classroom. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Nowadays, technology is presented in everything and everywhere. Classroom is not an exception. I...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS; Students benefit from going to private secondary school?
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 22, 2013
|We look up people who have many unique qualities that make them our role models
Writing FeedbackCathAni - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us
5 - There are some grammatical errors in a few sentences causing problems to convey the exact meaning, however, linking words...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 29, 2013 / ojhel - Aug 30, 2013
|ielts; gender segregation; Women should be allowed to join the armed forces
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 29, 2013 / niesaysi - Sep 2, 2013
|IELTS Bar graph; How people invested money
2 - Hi Where is the graph? Use the "Attach file (s)" feature in your message screen to uplord your graph....
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Making sure that your strengths are known by others leads to success
5 - Excellent hook :) Very good introduction, body para and conclusion. This is a very good essay...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 30, 2013
|Summary of Alexie's " The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and me" Draft
3 - Sherman Alexie wrote "The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and Me" with the purpose of informing his...
Writing Feedbackmopoohaddict - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|To have my own zoo that exhibits a focus on reptiles ; lifetime goals
2 - Looks good :) But, I would not go on details of test scores,etc. I heard that colleges don't really...
Writing FeedbackDillJone - Aug 28, 2013 / 1365violin - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS:mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life
NEW - Nowadays, mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life and are as popular as the internet. People...
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|IELTS Task 2 (a letter)- Request for a one-day leave
5 - Give more focus to you and your commitment - your manager would be interested to know that and not...
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Aug 28, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 21, 2013
|City living or country living? advantages and disadvantages
4 - I guess youare preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's always good to include the purpose (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.)...
Writing Feedbackshinjitsu - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|Gre essay review Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievement
3 - ...narrowed down to what? need to specify! Technological development alone will not help a nation to...
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Trusting everyone; CBEST/ memorable childhood experience
3 - Well... you talk little about this experience, instead you talk more about your nature of trusting others. Therefore...
Writing Feedbackclau089 - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS;Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 28, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 29, 2013
|[IELTS] CAM9 - WRITING TASK 1 - REPORT AN ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER CONSTRUCTION
Writing Feedbackseabird88 - Aug 27, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS; SUCCESS DEPENDS ON THEORITICAL KNOWLEDGE?
Writing Feedbackgoldv - Aug 27, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS; people prefer to repeat the same things and avoid changes
4 - Life is full of dynamic forces that make the change an inevitable phenomenon. They express that...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people
3 - I definetely support this argument. Well.... you have ahook and you have clearly expressed your opinion. However, you...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Aug 27, 2013 / dumi - Aug 27, 2013
|IELTS; Population control is one of the greatest concerns in this current environment
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 26, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 27, 2013
|host country ought to support cultural difference; local customs and behaviour
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 26, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 21, 2013
|High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study.
2 - Well for one read it aloud like how you think it should be spoken. Then definitely tone it down...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Aug 26, 2013 / DillJone - Aug 28, 2013
|It's not pointless to strive to keep traditional skills and life style alive.
4 - Hi I think you need to pay attention to the essay structure. Your essay should have an introduction, body...
Writing Feedbackalesssiiaa - Aug 26, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|Ielts: Should we ban private education? NO!
4 - All students are not getting opportunities to learn in a normal school.This may be due to several reasons.Sometimes it...
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 26, 2013 / margaretsales - Sep 23, 2013
|Ielts 2: How far do you agree with this latter statement?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 26, 2013 / Shasvat Shukla - Aug 26, 2013
|Improving roads and highways or public transportation? It completely depends on dependency of public
NEW - Should government spend money on improving roads and highways or should government spend more money on improving public transportation...
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|If you could meet a historical figure, who would it be? TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 25, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 30, 2013
|Agree or disagree : Younger school children should study art and music (TOEFL)
4 - this statement is included in your prompt so you should incline your idea on 'why it should be...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Aug 25, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 26, 2013
|Use ipads and mobiles in class or stay with hard copy books?
4 - There is no doubt that teaching methods and learning process have come under the heavy influence of advance...
Writing Feedbackalrashed - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS-TASK1-Describing changes taking place at an island
4 - ==> should not use and 2 times. no building except a few trees distributed in the eastern and...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Aug 25, 2013 / seabird88 - Aug 27, 2013
|[TOEFL]The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual.
4 - This is actually an example. The reason is ; Secondly, there are many things that individuals should be...
Writing FeedbackDYDXY - Aug 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IS DEMOCRACY REALLY RELIABLE - PROFICIENCY ESSAY
3 - Well, there have been similar administrations taken place in India among Lichchavi rulers much earlier than Aristotle's era....
Writing Feedbackonurcanuyar - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|[TOEFL] Do you agree that telephones play more effective role than television?
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 25, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 25, 2013
|Thanks to Technology, quality of life has been greatly enhanced!
2 - However, this also raises a question of whether technology has a good or bad effect on people's relationships nowadays....
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