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|GMAT - AWA ESSAYS: Art And Music Therapy
2 - Chang, in the first paragraph, you should completely mention the assumptions being made in the discussion presentation. You accidentally...
Writing Feedbackalicecw - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Prevention is better than treatment?
3 - Hang, your reasons are well developed and presented well in the essay. You have managed to present both supporting...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|Governments spend too much money to protect wildlife, while there are other important problems
Writing FeedbackAmericanCorner - Jul 21, 2018 / AmericanCorner - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTSS2- FREE INTERNET ACCESS FOR EVERYONE - BOTH VIEW
Writing Feedbackvanhkhuyen155 - Jul 21, 2018 / vanhkhuyen155 - Jul 22, 2018
|Should environmental problems be solved on a global scale or better to deal with it nationally?
Writing FeedbackDanielphan - Jul 21, 2018 / Danielphan - Aug 1, 2018
|The breakdown of the figures of commodities which were transported by various vehicles in the UK
3 - Do, in order to get the highest scoring consideration for your analytical report in a Task 1 essay, you...
Writing Feedbackdoda22 - Jul 21, 2018 / Holt - Jul 22, 2018
|Better earning opportunities for those who have an university certificate comparing to less educated
2 - Ho, your prompt paraphrase is totally off the mark. You are not responding to the question being asked at...
Writing FeedbackHo Tran Tien Dun - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: The Development of Tourism Contributed to English Becoming the Most Prominent Language
3 - Thank you for your feedback. since you gave me advice that I have to learn more about developing...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 20, 2018 / dimdim02 - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task2 : share as much information as possible
2 - Lipo, your opening paraphrase is inaccurate because it does not use the proper synonyms to represent the original discussion....
Writing Feedbacklipolipo - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS2 : a number of individuals want to have children later in their life - Reasons and Effects
Writing Feedbackjavidols - Jul 20, 2018 / javidols - Jul 21, 2018
|What do you think schools can do to ensure the health, well-being and safety of their students
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 20, 2018 / ama12321 - Jul 21, 2018
|The media should limit the number of terrible news since it have a large effect on human's lives
3 - Phhuong, you are too focused on showing off your English vocabulary, without considering whether or not it makes sense...
Writing Feedbacktranlamthanh - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|The pie charts below describes how six regions in the world utilized water with unalike purpose
Writing Feedbacklynn1601 - Jul 20, 2018 / lynn1601 - Aug 2, 2018
|Much stricter punishments on traffic driving offenses to decrease the road accidents
3 - @khoipham305 I have a feeling that you are writing this essay as part of a Task 2 response because...
Writing Feedbackkhoipham305 - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some employers prefer formal qualification than life experience
Writing Feedbackiamaminh - Jul 20, 2018 / iamaminh - Jul 20, 2018
|Writing task 1: Bird migration observed in Woodchuck Country
Writing Feedbackminhthu - Jul 20, 2018 / minhthu - Jul 22, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Future plans to design prisons for learning and working
2 - Tran, you did not understand what the discussion method for this topic is. Your response to the original question...
Writing Feedbackawbtbsitw - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays
2 - TA - 6 Vu, you have a slight prompt deviation in your opening paraphrase. The prompt paraphrase should...
Writing Feedbackgiangvu - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|Children should only start formal education after being graduated from an informal school
2 - Juliano, the essay prompt uses the word "either" in the question response instruction. Therefore, you cannot discuss both points...
Writing Feedbackjulianofs - Jul 19, 2018 / Holt - Jul 20, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Is traditional skills and ways of life worthy to be kept alive?
Writing Feedbackas920024 - Jul 19, 2018 / as920024 - Jul 20, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: Internet users as percentage of population 1999 - 2009
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I've just practiced writing essays recently and your advice is truly helpful to me!!!...
Writing FeedbackAlexdangphan - Jul 18, 2018 / Alexdangphan - Jul 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - The most important achievements for any child?
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jul 18, 2018 / NganNguyen - Jul 18, 2018
|Gender equality has become such a hot topic, seen in almost all aspects of life, including education
3 - Tran, your essay is not properly responding to the prompt question. The question posed before you is this: Do...
Writing Feedbacklinhlinh19897 - Jul 17, 2018 / Holt - Jul 18, 2018
|An attempt on IELTS writing for differences on politeness between generations
5 - @Holt Thanks for your comment! I'll try my best next time and your continue supports are always appreciated....
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 17, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 22, 2018
|Robots are dangerous invention to the society.
3 - Thank you very much! I, at least think that I made small progress. No personal opinion should be...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jul 17, 2018 / jalp - Jul 22, 2018
|People in Australia who had a physical exercise in 2010 within six various ages group
2 - "which who had a physical ... "except the first group": It makes me curious, what is "the first...
Writing Feedbackhreg - Jul 17, 2018 / cao1km - Jul 22, 2018
|The main role of museums - they should be enjoyable places to entertain people?
2 - Minh, the essay that you wrote does not completely cover the task requirements. The prompt instructions clearly request you...
Writing Feedbacklukaku123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Should school leavers take a year off before going to university?
4 - Vi, your discussion is only partially correct. Only your third paragraph responds to the prompt in a correct manner....
Writing Feedbackvendetta - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|The business and cultural contact grows more and more widely between countries; pros and cons
Writing FeedbackVivian Clouds - Jul 16, 2018 / Vivian Clouds - Jul 21, 2018
|Should adolescents be obligated to use their spare time for helping their residences without wages?
2 - Thanh, I cannot say that your essay is clearly understandable nor is it cohesive or coherent in presentation. That...
Writing Feedbackkimthanh194 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Eductional achievements - " pen and paper" exams
2 - Hang, your essay suffers from a lack of clarity in explanation. It is not coherent nor cohesive and causes...
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|People were asked if and why they traveled abroad (1994-98)
4 - Hoang, you did right by reviewing the sample essay before you entered into writing your own analytical report. It...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|There is one activity that teenagers recently prefer, and it is purchasing goods
2 - Dimas, this essay shows that you have a problem when it comes to properly developing the sentence structure, punctuation,...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|In my opinion people should prepare meal and eat at home rather than going out to restaurants
5 - Hi Lam, the essay is asking you for your personal preference or choice in this instance, as to whether...
Writing FeedbackLam Tran - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: formal academic qualifications VS life experience or personal qualities.
2 - Hey Thai, I'd like to tell you not to worry about your score. I have thoroughly reviewed your essay...
Writing Feedbackthaihoang613 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|'We get educated only in school.' What are your views?
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought?
2 - Anastasia, your grammar is not perfect and your timeline in the presentation is off. However, you still managed to...
Writing FeedbackNasteaMischevca - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Young people should spend more time on cultural activities and less time on sport.
2 - Hang, In the discussion prompt, you stated that the opinion to be discussed is only the extent by which...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|Ielts Task 2 writing: Government is wasting money on the arts
2 - Hi @kmc, Your essay was so well-written with a wide range of complex lexical resources. I was like wow...
Writing Feedbackkmc - Jul 15, 2018 / hlt306 - Jul 15, 2018
|The population at the age of at least 65 in some parts of the world
3 - Linh, the comparison chart would have been far more efficient with the addition of the 2 sets of overlapping...
Writing Feedbackhlt306 - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|Face to face communication with an increasing Internet connection and text messages in use?
4 - For me, your essay is poor about idea for the second paragraph which need to 2 ideas. Construction of...
Writing Feedbackbaljit2108 - Jul 15, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
|Some of the celebrities are younger than others, and believe this is a positive development
5 - Thank you all for spending time on my essay! I did not see these problems when I was revising,...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jul 14, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 16, 2018
|[Ielts task 1] 2 line graphs about expense on children's sport and the number of participants
3 - Tran, you did a very good job of developing this analytical report. If there is one observation about your...
Writing FeedbackMai Tran 1201 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 15, 2018
|Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays
Writing Feedbacktryhardboy - Jul 13, 2018 / tryhardboy - Jul 14, 2018
|Some parents are unwilling to let their children work during their studies, better focus on school
2 - Su, the reference point in your essay is off. You need make various references within the paragraphs to the...
Writing FeedbackIELTS123 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 14, 2018
|The given table demonstrates the expense on a monthly basis of a typical household in Australia
3 - Duc, you missed presenting a 4th paragraph in relation to other expenses presented in the chart. A task 1...
Writing Feedbackducanhdo22 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 14, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - A mandatory parents training course is necessary
4 - @Tran Minh Hien Sorry, look like I made a mistake. If your subject is "bad solutions" then it is...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Jul 12, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 26, 2018
|The line graph illustrates how many crime-related incidents occurred in the inner Newport city
3 - @DuongYen The chart is a nice way to explain your research, but I do not completely understand what you...
Writing FeedbackDuongYen - Jul 12, 2018 / jsmith0513 - Jul 13, 2018
|Topic: universities should only offer to young students with high marks,...
Writing FeedbackDUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 11, 2018 / DUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 12, 2018
|Happiness is extremely crucial to people's life, there are several methods to increase it
4 - Hi Okapi99, Overall, I think that your essay is quite well-written with a wide range of vocabulary related to...
Writing FeedbackOkapi99 - Jul 11, 2018 / hlt306 - Jul 15, 2018
|Money plays an important role in deciding on a career. Salary importance.
3 - Nguyen, this is an extent essay that requires a measurement of response or emotional response to the prompt. This...
Writing Feedbacknhihoai - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|Ielts 1: Pie charts. The online sale section in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
3 - thank you so much for spending time to read my essay. Your review helped me improve my skill....
Writing FeedbackMinh Thu - Jul 11, 2018 / Minh Thu - Jul 13, 2018
|Should children be banned from playing computer games?
5 - you should built your ideas clearly following by: Main idea No.1.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main idea No.2.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main...
Writing FeedbackTemuulen - Jul 11, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
|The number of students at university in the UK from 1991 to 2001
3 - Yen, this is a very well developed and clearly presented analysis of the pie chart, line graph, and chart...
Writing Feedbackmaxwellfriend - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|Writing task 2: It is better to live in vertical city than horizontal city.
3 - Huyen, there is no way of putting this gently. My observation is that you are capable of understanding the...
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|The line chart illustrates the rate of smoking among males and females in Someland from 1960 to 2000
6 - I have some recommendations for your essay. Firstly, it is vital to have a sturdy structure, you should have...
Writing Feedbackmainhn - Jul 11, 2018 / DUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 11, 2018
|Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture
2 - Truong, this essay is only partially correct in responding to the prompt requirements. The main problems your presentation has...
Writing FeedbackTrang2810 - Jul 10, 2018 / Holt - Jul 11, 2018
|Some people were born with their special talent, others must be trained to gain such skills
4 - Tuong, you have not written the appropriate amount of words for this essay to be a completely developed and...
Writing Feedbackvyle10 - Jul 10, 2018 / Holt - Jul 11, 2018
|Convenience foods and people's health
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 9, 2018 / Maithanhhang - Jul 10, 2018
|The bar graph shows the global sales of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.
4 - Tapir, the overview summary needs to be at least 3 sentences long. You do not have a complete prompt...
Writing FeedbackOkapi99 - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
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