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|IELTS: capital punishment is essential to our society
3 - Great start. I suggest this small alteration ; Practiced in more than 21 countries around the globe, death...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 28, 2012 / dumi - Dec 31, 2012
|City is more convienent than countryside
2 - A big question that boggles people's minds in the modern world is whether children should grow up in the...
Writing FeedbackSardor 77 - Dec 28, 2012 / nounouboo - Dec 28, 2012
|Parents are the best teachers because they are more special than everybody else;TOEFL
8 - Yes... that makes lots of sense. Lastly, children imprint their parents . In other words this...
Writing FeedbackRaviSouza - Dec 28, 2012 / dumi - Jan 1, 2013
|Which should your school choose to buy -computer or books; 'advanced science'
4 - sjmzzz95 thank you I appreciate your feedback. I did the essay revision with your accurate notes....
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 28, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 28, 2012
|Social life rather than job can offer me the true happiness
Writing Feedbackgleam - Dec 28, 2012 / ritared - Jan 22, 2013
|TOEFL TOPIC: Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now.
4 - I would clarify your topic sentence, at first read, I thought you had agreed with "patience is a virtue"....
Writing Feedbackhaikie - Dec 28, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY, couples decide to have children later in their life.
2 - Hai Dev... Nice to read the answer of the latest question... ===> ....financial steability and macturity... ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Dec 28, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 28, 2012
|It's better to have broader knowledge than to specializing in one specific subject
3 - Well, thanks a lot. Would you like to give me some suggestions on how to improve the vocabulary? I...
Writing FeedbackMercury23 - Dec 27, 2012 / Mercury23 - Dec 29, 2012
|Preferred leisure activities of Australian children; IELTS - Task 1
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|A letter to make arrangements for the stay during the weekend at a hotel to hold a seminar at there
Writing Feedbacknhym93 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|Trends on non-cash transactions; IELTS writing tips on Graphs
3 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackfalks405 - Dec 27, 2012 / falks405 - Dec 28, 2012
|Nowadays, radio is being replaced by TV and the Internet.
5 - .... the most appropriate word is "replacing" and not "displacing". ... broadcasting is likely to disappear...
Writing Feedbackfalks405 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|IELTS- Modern person should have several careers or ways of earning money!
Writing Feedbackskynet0512 - Dec 27, 2012 / skynet0512 - Dec 28, 2012
|organization deal with recycling; The one thing you do to improve your community?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 27, 2012
|"How to be a parent"/ What makes a person an adult?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 28, 2012
|I am unsure of my exact future study plans; Cornell Arts and Sciences App
4 - I would come up with a list of your passions do you like to learn about people? create? conduct...
Writing Feedbackelissamardiney - Dec 26, 2012 / melissae - Dec 31, 2014
|Sports & no risky behavior; What do you do for good health ?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 26, 2012
|( IELTS essay) college degree is less valuable now compared to the past?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 26, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 30, 2012
|IELTS - petrol price increment (Traffic and pollution)
3 - Hi, You are really wise in limiting your essay length with just slightly over 250 words, which enables yourself...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Dec 26, 2012 / mcuong01 - Dec 27, 2012
|Changed from being a loner
Writing FeedbackBeza101 - Dec 26, 2012 / luying9682 - Dec 26, 2012
|We need more efficiency and security so the machine work is better
5 - Carefull work! I have learned more from your suggestion! Mix grinder is good example! Astronomy technology? I...
Writing Feedbacklily2012 - Dec 26, 2012 / lily2012 - Jan 1, 2013
|Having children late in life; 'A family without children is not a really family'
Writing FeedbackMorain - Dec 26, 2012 / Morain - Dec 26, 2012
|imagine how our ancestors would have survived without Computers, televisions,internet
4 - .... sounds better without "to" :) Internet instantly connects people across the globe without any time...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Dec 25, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|SAT:"Is it always better to be original than to imitate or use the ideas of others?"
Writing FeedbackObaid Allah - Dec 25, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|American Literature Literary Criticism Unit - "Easy A"
Writing Feedbackcollege13 - Dec 25, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|Changing jobs frequently?I feel it's good to continue at least for six years (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 25, 2012
|Studying abroad or in our own country? Both options have plus and minus results
NEW - Question: The idea of going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. However, while it...
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|You created something using your bare hands, and your takeaway from the experience
3 - Thanks...
Writing FeedbackIkennaBlack - Dec 25, 2012 / IkennaBlack - Dec 25, 2012
|Magical Girl Warrior; Sailor moon essay
7 - I don't watch the show, but you should just bring out more of your personality in your essay if...
Writing Feedbacksailorjupiter - Dec 24, 2012 / NRessay - Dec 24, 2012
|[IELTS] Learning foreign languages is common now. Good or Not? Can prevent drawbacks
Writing Feedbackchristyzhongs - Dec 24, 2012 / devabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013
|IElTS: benefits and drawbacks of urbanization; urbanization is a phenomenon
6 - ...move from countryside to the city due to undeveloped financial and social facilitieslooking for more opportunities for life. ...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 24, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|my perspective on how one should live life to obtain happiness and success!
Writing Feedbackaaldana1 - Dec 24, 2012 / Millin Gabani - Dec 25, 2012
|Shifting large factories to countryside helps solve traffic&housing issues... I agree
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 24, 2012 / dumi - Dec 26, 2012
|Main function of universities; Well-rounded graduates
3 - Hi, I like your conclusion. clear state your ideas. I feel the below sentence is a bit strange....
Writing FeedbackFrenzyzqq - Dec 24, 2012 / christyzhongs - Dec 24, 2012
|Christmas & continuity of traditions; Stanford/ What matter to you and why?
4 - Your Christmas essay was very warm and fuzzy :) Your roommate note, however, felt disorganized and very list-y, if...
Writing Feedbackblondie51295 - Dec 23, 2012 / haneom94 - Dec 27, 2012
|Time & how it passes by; should we blame distance or time?
4 - Hey.. Thanks for your comments... I was actually kind of mad when I wrote it, especially the conclusion... Lol.....
Writing FeedbackSRabia - Dec 23, 2012 / SRabia - Dec 23, 2012
|External/ internal Reasons for School dropouts & possible measures ;IELTS
4 - Hi, I think you can talk about the mesures in the same sequence as the resons you listed external:...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 23, 2012 / christyzhongs - Dec 25, 2012
|IELTS ; Veg or Non Veg? Veg is healthier!
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 23, 2012 / y0_3mma - Dec 24, 2012
|[iels task 2]The government spends about 220 million pounds a year supporting museums
2 - .... what do you mean by "unnecessary to be substantially" ? .... that part sounds a bit confusing...
Writing FeedbackLunate - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Cigarette advertisements should be banned completely?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 23, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 23, 2012
|(IELTS ESSAY) merits and demerits of MNCs in developing countries..
3 - .... the presence of many multinational companies in the developing countries have a mushrooming effect. The...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|IELTS topic. animal experiments have more disadvantages over their advantages
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 23, 2012 / alphy - Dec 23, 2012
|IELTS Topic. the power of advertising and its impact on high sales
2 - ....Very interesting : )... Good introduction ! ....I feel "specialists in advertising" sounds better ...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|Gender and Language in Advertisements
Writing Feedbackalyney - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|why people work? mainly for pride, honor, fame, respect, enjoyment
2 - Hello, please see my edits below. Work isan important part of everyone's life. They feel pride in...
Writing Feedbackadi sharma - Dec 22, 2012 / lynzee22 - Mar 18, 2015
|TOEFL: Children should grow up in a big city!!
5 - It's a good essay, however, I think you should structure your two arguments better. Try to follow a PEEL...
Writing FeedbackRaviSouza - Dec 22, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|GRE-ARGUMENT- Prunty County should undertake the same kind of road improvement
2 - 2-3/6 a lot of grammatical mistakes that is inhibiting the flow that a reading piece establishes, as I try...
Writing Feedbackkettyabc - Dec 22, 2012 / kethsaxena - Dec 30, 2012
|Government should support student's or professional athelets ? Students!
3 - Hai Alphy.. You have some good points.. But it didn't come out nicely..You have lots of spelling mistakes. Careless...
Writing Feedbackalphy - Dec 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 23, 2012
|Ä°ELTS TASK1:children's leisure activities; pie chart illustrations
Writing Feedbacksrns - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 22, 2012
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Video games - positives and negatives
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Dec 22, 2012 / April April - Dec 22, 2012
|Taking a year of break between high school & university
5 - Hai... good attempt... Additional ponits for you.. :It helps to meet the tution of future studies espically...
Writing Feedbackmonaph - Dec 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Jan 15, 2013
|IELTS:best way to make new friends?sports, community activities or travelling?
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 22, 2012 / YanSun - Dec 22, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Computer will diminish the writing skills
3 - ... This is a strong opening statement. It sounds general but it has relevance to your topic. ...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 22, 2012
|'skip the trial and error period and save the time toward a right way'; what future job for a child?
7 - Hi, you do have many clear points in your essay, and as pointed out before, the main problem is...
Writing FeedbackJoyce zhuang - Dec 22, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|GRE- Argument on letter by Central Plaza store owners; Hidden factors
Writing Feedbackkettyabc - Dec 21, 2012 / kettyabc - Dec 22, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Effect of action movies on young children/ Solutions
7 - thanks a lot for correcting my essay. i am always grateful to u guys..dumi, pahan , collin,ozia tessy..etc.....
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 21, 2012 / ash5005 - Dec 23, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Advertisements encourages to buy unwanted things?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 21, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 25, 2012
|Children are very sensitive about what they see or hear from their friends
5 - ????? I don't understand this sentence. Please rephrase it. First and foremost, it is proven psychologically...
Writing FeedbackDibaa - Dec 21, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 22, 2012
|Immigrants should abandon their own ways and adapt to local customs?
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Dec 21, 2012 / devabe2005 - Dec 27, 2012
|IELTS - Technology: taking control our lives or positive developements
3 - Ozia In the modern era, the topic of technological influence is controversial. There is clear divergence of opinions on...
Writing FeedbackOzia - Dec 21, 2012 / Frenzyzqq - Dec 21, 2012
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