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|History Intro paragraph: Do I properly state my argument? *Short*
2 - Well you are having fine hints and a good paragraph just minor changes were needed, as rewritten below. ...
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Nov 26, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 28, 2012
|Keep working or study abroad - must make a decision essay
6 - I have been wondering the same thing for a long time. I haven't started working yet. But I am...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|'experiences for future life and job' - TOEFL:Why people attend university?
4 - "...the most important reason..." "....is to increase knowledge...someone who wants to be a medic..." "...because educated people is more...
Writing Feedbackksh - Nov 26, 2012 / sebastiann436 - Nov 26, 2012
|Differences between the traditional family and the modern one.
Writing Feedbackththnho_tl - Nov 26, 2012 / ththnho_tl - Nov 30, 2012
|Global sales; people buy CDs rather the DVD/video and games - IELTS writing Task practice
2 - As far as I know, your essay should be corrected as follows: - There was a significant feature that...
Writing FeedbackCaco - Nov 26, 2012 / mcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012
|'Pre-Medical Society' -applying to Rice University's Weiss School of Natural Sciences
2 - I like how your essay includes a touching personal anecdote, but I feel it would be a better essay...
Writing Feedbacknicolewong - Nov 25, 2012 / achen - Nov 29, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Better: knowledge for book or experience
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 26, 2012
|'Adapting effective laws' - Tobacco and alcohol should be illegal?
3 - Hai.. Instead of poisonous 'gases' change to substances. Waste of economy... Government is spending a large amount...
Writing Feedbackhongkyanh - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|Essay bout Jeddah, Saudi Arabia city
3 - hai... Bodied Muslims...what you mean..? You can add about some industries and the pleasent climate of the...
Writing Feedbacksaleh Mohammed - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 26, 2012
|'Health budget' - Prevention is better than cure
5 - Well, I understand your idea. Actually, I have been working in the field of marketing for the last ten...
Writing Feedbackimranawan - Nov 25, 2012 / imranawan - Nov 25, 2012
|'The number of personal computers' - IELTS writing Task1 practice
2 - I find it hard to understand the conclusion. because time reference here is the past so you should use...
Writing Feedbacktonzero - Nov 25, 2012 / princedynasty - Nov 25, 2012
|which job do you prefer, university master, being self-employed,politician,research?
Writing Feedbackbehnaz - Nov 25, 2012 / behnaz - Nov 25, 2012
|Informative essay about the evolutions of man and stages of hunting
2 - but began with simple methods, but it began with simple... isn't it what you wanted to say? your introduction...
Writing Feedbackmish1493 - Nov 25, 2012 / programmer - Nov 25, 2012
|Essay about my visit to a friend and his wife's problems
2 - Hai.. You wrote you friend's wife fell down and died.. what about changing the word died..To unconcious.....
Writing Feedbackundidiamaka - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'no authority to tax' - The Founding Fathers essay
4 - Aly91986 Congress didn't want to be similar to a king, since this is what the Radicals had rebeledrebelled against....
Writing FeedbackAly91986 - Nov 24, 2012 / chow95 - Nov 25, 2012
|Public celebrations are a waste of money..?
4 - hai... Your 1st essay you closed before any correction. If it is by mistake, leave it open. You selected...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|success in developed countries/ immigrants adopting a new culture
NEW - hola, soy gisela, quisiera que me corrijan estos essays, cuanto antes mejor, michas gracias Success in Education and...
Writing Feedbackgisela - Nov 24, 2012 / — -
|Gifted by nature women plays a significant role in bringing a new child
3 - Hai... Please add the full question before starting your essay. Even one question can ask in different ways....
Writing FeedbackRedtape - Nov 23, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'Mercedes-Benz E-Klasse and Misogyny ' - My analysis on Gender in commercials
2 - Your paper is very well done, I enjoyed reading about this interesting topic. I cannot find many mistakes, i...
Writing FeedbackChiletran01 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Dec 5, 2012
|'Finding Confidence ' - my essay for COLLEGE
Writing FeedbackAlianicole123 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 23, 2012
|Causes and Effects of Stress; stress affects your health and spirit
NEW - Causes and Effects of Stress of Students Nowadays, the life is becoming hurry and busy, so people have...
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|'architecture or town-planning' - GRE Analytical essay Societies and Cities
4 - However in ancient times, great cities like Angkor in Cambodia, and Borobudur in Indonesia would have reflected the belief-systems...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 25, 2012
|'They read our emails, messages, and look at our private pictures..' - essay
5 - Hai.. It was interesting to read....but... I didn't find the related question and a sufficient conclution......
Writing Feedbacksuad - Nov 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'advice from immature people' - about making decisions
4 - Well... what I mean is that your sentences do not convey the idea clearly. This happens when you include...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Ielts_writing2: poor children better at solving problems than rich children?
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|How TV can affect children? no physical activity, eat unhealthy foods..
2 - I do not know what the topic has exactly asked, but you should pay more attention to an essay's...
Writing Feedbackrgahra - Nov 21, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 21, 2012
|'USA has a lot of international students' - My ILEIST exam essay
Writing Feedbackten - Nov 21, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 24, 2012
|IELTS Essay, leisure activities: physical or mental rest
4 - Hi joythblessy, I think you write very well... Also your essay structure is in well conformity with the...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 24, 2012
|Advantages and diadvantages of examination
Writing Feedbacksaeedmoridi - Nov 21, 2012 / Alicegaga - Nov 29, 2012
|'the precondition of doing research by professors' - Toefl essay
7 - i guess you should come up with more stronger reasoning rather than just stating pros and cons....
Writing FeedbackShirley0426007 - Nov 21, 2012 / pawan457 - Nov 25, 2012
|US government to cease funding the NASA
10 - Thanks Esther...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 20, 2012 / canyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012
|Against Lowering Drinking Age to 18
Writing FeedbackNazaninrp - Nov 20, 2012 / Nazaninrp - Nov 27, 2012
|'adequate rest and sleep are essential' - IELTS- Writing task 2
5 - Good Introduction : ) ------------ This is not a complete sentence. Look at the suggestion provided by...
Writing Feedbackkurianjoseph1 - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 21, 2012
|'working continuously for hours' - i have written a story
4 - pacers7ind thank you..for your suggestion but I want to know about these lines that i have written " somewhere...
Writing Feedbacklikeapearl - Nov 20, 2012 / likeapearl - Nov 28, 2012
|Government in democratic societies
Writing Feedbackiamtrying - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 28, 2012
|A long line of stopped vehicles extends to the end of the road; CONTROVERSIAL ESSAY
3 - Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackflyingpuma - Nov 20, 2012 / flyingpuma - Nov 20, 2012
|solving environmental problems : international agency instead of state/national govts
8 - hai dumi.. Thanks a lot for the details.. Nice intrduction.. I have no idea about international environmental program. I...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 21, 2012
|Learn to speak English On-line
2 - When you make posts, better you include the topic of your essay.... So that others would give you more...
Writing Feedbacknedaaa - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|IELTS WT2: TV HAS NO VALUE ON CHILDREN. AGREE? DISAGREE?
4 - Hai.. I like your essay.. Some more points.. Foreign channels like BBC, national Geographic and so on...
Writing FeedbackInspired2012 - Nov 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 20, 2012
|Drawbacks of studying abroad can be noticed, but these are temporary in nature..
4 - ------------ hahaha :D .... it does not matter so long as you don't act like an "it" -----------------...
Writing Feedbackpjembernate - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|Random checks for guns,knives & other weapons; PERSUASIVE ESSAY
3 - Thank you for your feedback, I am currently re-writing the whole thing to make it look better, and with...
Writing Feedbackearthstar75 - Nov 20, 2012 / earthstar75 - Nov 20, 2012
|'Guitar is my friend' - Essay on my hobby of playing guitar
4 - It seems like you play guitar as well, cool!! Glad I can have comments from other guitar player....
Writing Feedbackhanksze - Nov 20, 2012 / hanksze - Dec 25, 2012
|Religion Studies 100 - Buddhism and Hinduism; 'concepts of rebirth'
4 - Buddhism and Hinduism is an interesting topic. Do include your topic so that we can review your essay....
Writing Feedbackruthpreciouslam - Nov 20, 2012 / iamtrying - Nov 20, 2012
|Conventional schools are still the right choice for most students - IELTS essay
3 - Hai Dumi... Thank you so much for your correction and guidence. I really liked your introduction which forwading...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|Good teachers set challenging tasks for their students.
2 - Most teachers used to make their class more interesting by employing various strategies to help students to understand their...
Writing Feedbackamd123 - Nov 19, 2012 / kartiprabhu - Dec 6, 2012
|Good and Bad news and factors which influence to news editors.
2 - Hai Orxen... Your introduction is bigger than your body paragraph. Cut it short and make a clear introduction.....
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations.
Writing Feedbackkurianjoseph1 - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|IELTS Writing - Should children learn science in school?
Writing FeedbackMJ_LAU - Nov 18, 2012 / salih - Nov 19, 2012
|'Not just sharing profits' - Should rich countries share wealth among poor countries?
10 - All the suggestions mentioned above are correct. To add, its very important to read sample essays either TOEFL/ IELTS...
Writing Feedbacksidraziaahmad - Nov 18, 2012 / iamtrying - Nov 20, 2012
|Description of a friend - The genius
7 - Salam Alaikon A khay I Have only one suggesten in the intrudoction you shift from I to You and...
Writing FeedbackMatrix student - Nov 18, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 18, 2012
|The role of women - they should not sit at home if they don't want to
7 - ... I think rather than, solving problems, it is the decision making process that earlier women were kept...
Writing Feedbackeynar - Nov 17, 2012 / dumi - Nov 24, 2012
|Alcohol and exercise are particularly important when it comes to balancing a healthy lifestyle
NEW - Here is my rough draft of my research paper on Obesity. Please let me know how I can improve....
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|Human Trafficking is a process that forces people to act against their will!
Writing Feedbackreem19 - Nov 17, 2012 / rozha - Jun 15, 2013
|PHOTOGRAPHY ESSAY, it would take too much time to build a time machine.
Writing Feedbackhelloitsjoi - Nov 16, 2012 / helloitsjoi - Dec 26, 2012
|'Our parents and grandparents may be obstacles to the new world order' - [IELTS]
3 - Hi ah_zafari !!! Please have a look at my recent essay please...:) Really need some final advice......
Writing Feedbackanar_ - Nov 16, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 16, 2012
|By punishing murders with the death penalty.
Writing FeedbackAlicegaga - Nov 16, 2012 / Alicegaga - Nov 18, 2012
|Health safety and budget - how important to the society - Ielts test
7 - I do not know, I am not an examiner. Different examiners would score your differently. I think this...
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 16, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 16, 2012
|IELTS WT2: Library vs. Computer Technology
7 - Thanks Dumi, I started reading introduction tips and surely I have issues with introducing my topic. I recalled some...
Writing FeedbackInspired2012 - Nov 16, 2012 / Inspired2012 - Nov 20, 2012
|IELTS WT2: Preservations of Museums and artworks
2 - Hi Inspired, I'm marking and giving you every little bit that I think a better way of expressing....
Writing FeedbackInspired2012 - Nov 16, 2012 / dumi - Nov 16, 2012
|IELTS_WRITING) What are some important characteristics of a co-worker?
6 - Thank princedynasty and dumi for your proofreading. I want to tell you it is a big help for me....
Writing FeedbackLOMOBOY - Nov 15, 2012 / LOMOBOY - Nov 17, 2012
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