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|Technology is clever - Present Paragraph
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 29, 2012 / dumi - Dec 1, 2012
|Expressing concern : Environmental Damage VS Rise in standard of Living
7 - hai joythblessy, This essay is not for IELTS. I wrote it just out of my interest. Thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackPrem - Nov 29, 2012 / Prem - Dec 1, 2012
|What can we do to save our environment?
3 - hai... As ah_zafari pointed out lots of mistaks..i will give you some ideas.. :Reduce use of plastic and...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Nov 29, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 3, 2012
|Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. Essay Contest: "The Drum Major Instinct"
Writing Feedbackmimilambie77 - Nov 29, 2012 / mimilambie77 - Dec 7, 2012
|IELTS essay, teenagers should encouraged to do unpaid community work
6 - It's easy to follow the ideas that you've given. The topic sentence of each paragraph is quite clear. Good...
Writing Feedbackmy88626 - Nov 29, 2012 / Edna - Dec 4, 2012
|Future Paragraph; Integrated Marketing Communication (IMC) strategy
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 29, 2012 / dumi - Nov 29, 2012
|Marriage partners should similar or not - essay structure check
3 - Thank you so much Dumi. ^^ Thank you for your comment and suggest. Your example it's useful so much...
Writing FeedbackSalikron - Nov 29, 2012 / Salikron - Nov 29, 2012
|Science VS Religion - what is best for the people?
14 - you can also include , "Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind." by Albert Einstein...
Writing FeedbackPahan - Nov 29, 2012 / cheetha - Jan 21, 2013
|IELTS essay: Blood sports should be banned.
Writing Feedbackshirleybouvier - Nov 28, 2012 / dumi - Nov 29, 2012
|Past Paragaph - "sell-as-much-as-we-can" method
5 - From the old days of marketing (before the 1950s)I'd say "Before the 1950s," because as you're talking about marketing...
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 28, 2012 / xamanda - Nov 28, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2: gender discrimination in education
4 - Uneven tends to give a meaning of unbalanced. Unfair seems to sound better because it means simply means unjust....
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 28, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|TOEFL Essay:advantages and disadvantages of building a factory near a community
Writing Feedbackksh - Nov 28, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|'My Sister and I ' - a comparative essay revision
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|IELTS essay, technolgy and traditional ways
7 - I like your revising. I also read your profile too. Also you help me for my essay before, can...
Writing Feedbackmy88626 - Nov 28, 2012 / hamedmas - Dec 1, 2012
|'expressing negative opinions' - my essay about "TV and Radio Censorship"
Writing FeedbackNazaninrp - Nov 27, 2012 / Nazaninrp - Dec 10, 2012
|Virtual: The Evolving Classroom; Peer review
2 - E-learning is a student-centered teaching technique that facilitates new generation to study at any place with internet access. ...
Writing Feedbackkyaungthu - Nov 27, 2012 / dumi - Nov 28, 2012
|Teaching kids to be actively outside and limit the use of electronic devices
2 - Hai... To start off with...? Better = to begin with, to start with... At a young age....lazy...:...
Writing Feedbacklgalea - Nov 27, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 30, 2012
|'Sharing task' -Teaching small kids is the responsibility of both parents and schools
2 - I think you should pay more attention to the structure and organization of an essay. Start the essay with...
Writing Feedbackmahfouzelsawi - Nov 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 27, 2012
|Crime, population, and taxpayer's role - essay
NEW - Can you help with other essay please? Write about the following topic: In many cities crime is increasing. Why...
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|'My town is in Gaya' - IELST exam essay
5 - The best way for improving your writing skills is reading various texts with different subjects. Reading not only...
Writing Feedbacknorza - Nov 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Dec 2, 2012
|'People with great imagination' - analytical GRE essay
3 - I think you have presented a good analysis but make sure you are not overusing commas and are clear...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Nov 27, 2012 / DonnaJm - Nov 27, 2012
|My Biography (a freelance journalist, contributing writer, and activist)
3 - ah_zafari Thank you for your brilliant comments and remarks, hope you continue in future too....
Writing FeedbackMalik Achakzai - Nov 27, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 28, 2012
|'The Nepal Human Development' - the area of global concern essay
2 - Hello pawan457 you chose a great topic and wrote a great essay! Everything is fine--except that this is too...
Writing Feedbackpawan457 - Nov 27, 2012 / luying9682 - Nov 27, 2012
|IELTS- future developments in IT are likely to have more negative than positive
Writing FeedbackSu Nadi - Nov 26, 2012 / Su Nadi - Nov 27, 2012
|herbicide and pesticide use
2 - Hi, I don't find grammar issues here.... but I guess it should be more interesting to follow......
Writing FeedbackAbby5 - Nov 26, 2012 / dumi - Dec 1, 2012
|(IELTS essay) high payment for sports professionals is fair or not
2 - Recently successful sport professionals can earn enormous amount of money than other peoples who contributes their efforts in various...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 26, 2012
|'What Plans Do for Me' - Scholarship essay
NEW - i'll need to make an essay for scholarship application which i should submit before december 10th, the topic should...
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|Gilgit Baldistan the paradise like motherland
6 - Gilgit Baldistan an area inside Pakistan, having the same sample of population on the other side of the border...
Writing FeedbackMalik Achakzai - Nov 26, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 27, 2012
|History Intro paragraph: Do I properly state my argument? *Short*
2 - Well you are having fine hints and a good paragraph just minor changes were needed, as rewritten below. ...
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Nov 26, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 28, 2012
|Keep working or study abroad - must make a decision essay
6 - I have been wondering the same thing for a long time. I haven't started working yet. But I am...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|'experiences for future life and job' - TOEFL:Why people attend university?
4 - "...the most important reason..." "....is to increase knowledge...someone who wants to be a medic..." "...because educated people is more...
Writing Feedbackksh - Nov 26, 2012 / sebastiann436 - Nov 26, 2012
|Differences between the traditional family and the modern one.
Writing Feedbackththnho_tl - Nov 26, 2012 / ththnho_tl - Nov 30, 2012
|Global sales; people buy CDs rather the DVD/video and games - IELTS writing Task practice
2 - As far as I know, your essay should be corrected as follows: - There was a significant feature that...
Writing FeedbackCaco - Nov 26, 2012 / mcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012
|'Pre-Medical Society' -applying to Rice University's Weiss School of Natural Sciences
2 - I like how your essay includes a touching personal anecdote, but I feel it would be a better essay...
Writing Feedbacknicolewong - Nov 25, 2012 / achen - Nov 29, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Better: knowledge for book or experience
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 26, 2012
|'Adapting effective laws' - Tobacco and alcohol should be illegal?
3 - Hai.. Instead of poisonous 'gases' change to substances. Waste of economy... Government is spending a large amount...
Writing Feedbackhongkyanh - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|Essay bout Jeddah, Saudi Arabia city
3 - hai... Bodied Muslims...what you mean..? You can add about some industries and the pleasent climate of the...
Writing Feedbacksaleh Mohammed - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 26, 2012
|'Health budget' - Prevention is better than cure
5 - Well, I understand your idea. Actually, I have been working in the field of marketing for the last ten...
Writing Feedbackimranawan - Nov 25, 2012 / imranawan - Nov 25, 2012
|'The number of personal computers' - IELTS writing Task1 practice
2 - I find it hard to understand the conclusion. because time reference here is the past so you should use...
Writing Feedbacktonzero - Nov 25, 2012 / princedynasty - Nov 25, 2012
|which job do you prefer, university master, being self-employed,politician,research?
Writing Feedbackbehnaz - Nov 25, 2012 / behnaz - Nov 25, 2012
|Informative essay about the evolutions of man and stages of hunting
2 - but began with simple methods, but it began with simple... isn't it what you wanted to say? your introduction...
Writing Feedbackmish1493 - Nov 25, 2012 / programmer - Nov 25, 2012
|Essay about my visit to a friend and his wife's problems
2 - Hai.. You wrote you friend's wife fell down and died.. what about changing the word died..To unconcious.....
Writing Feedbackundidiamaka - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'no authority to tax' - The Founding Fathers essay
4 - Aly91986 Congress didn't want to be similar to a king, since this is what the Radicals had rebeledrebelled against....
Writing FeedbackAly91986 - Nov 24, 2012 / chow95 - Nov 25, 2012
|Public celebrations are a waste of money..?
4 - hai... Your 1st essay you closed before any correction. If it is by mistake, leave it open. You selected...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|success in developed countries/ immigrants adopting a new culture
NEW - hola, soy gisela, quisiera que me corrijan estos essays, cuanto antes mejor, michas gracias Success in Education and...
Writing Feedbackgisela - Nov 24, 2012 / — -
|Gifted by nature women plays a significant role in bringing a new child
3 - Hai... Please add the full question before starting your essay. Even one question can ask in different ways....
Writing FeedbackRedtape - Nov 23, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'Mercedes-Benz E-Klasse and Misogyny ' - My analysis on Gender in commercials
2 - Your paper is very well done, I enjoyed reading about this interesting topic. I cannot find many mistakes, i...
Writing FeedbackChiletran01 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Dec 5, 2012
|'Finding Confidence ' - my essay for COLLEGE
Writing FeedbackAlianicole123 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 23, 2012
|Causes and Effects of Stress; stress affects your health and spirit
NEW - Causes and Effects of Stress of Students Nowadays, the life is becoming hurry and busy, so people have...
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|'architecture or town-planning' - GRE Analytical essay Societies and Cities
4 - However in ancient times, great cities like Angkor in Cambodia, and Borobudur in Indonesia would have reflected the belief-systems...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 25, 2012
|'They read our emails, messages, and look at our private pictures..' - essay
5 - Hai.. It was interesting to read....but... I didn't find the related question and a sufficient conclution......
Writing Feedbacksuad - Nov 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'advice from immature people' - about making decisions
4 - Well... what I mean is that your sentences do not convey the idea clearly. This happens when you include...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Ielts_writing2: poor children better at solving problems than rich children?
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|How TV can affect children? no physical activity, eat unhealthy foods..
2 - I do not know what the topic has exactly asked, but you should pay more attention to an essay's...
Writing Feedbackrgahra - Nov 21, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 21, 2012
|'USA has a lot of international students' - My ILEIST exam essay
Writing Feedbackten - Nov 21, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 24, 2012
|IELTS Essay, leisure activities: physical or mental rest
4 - Hi joythblessy, I think you write very well... Also your essay structure is in well conformity with the...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 24, 2012
|Advantages and diadvantages of examination
Writing Feedbacksaeedmoridi - Nov 21, 2012 / Alicegaga - Nov 29, 2012
|'the precondition of doing research by professors' - Toefl essay
7 - i guess you should come up with more stronger reasoning rather than just stating pros and cons....
Writing FeedbackShirley0426007 - Nov 21, 2012 / pawan457 - Nov 25, 2012
|US government to cease funding the NASA
10 - Thanks Esther...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 20, 2012 / canyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012
|Against Lowering Drinking Age to 18
Writing FeedbackNazaninrp - Nov 20, 2012 / Nazaninrp - Nov 27, 2012
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